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1、故事续写教学研讨题型分析 写作技能 基础夯实 冲刺提高题型分析高考故事续写发展历程时间：日夜日夜日地点：森林人物：夫妻事件：迷路始于2016年10月2017年6月时间：日地点：野外人物：朋友事件：遇狼2017年11月时间：日夜日地点：户外人物：家人事件：旅行2018年6月时间：日夜地点：草原森林人物：父子事件：迷路Future ?总结故事续写常考察有矛盾、有危机的事件。故事续写时间日夜兼有户外室内？地点夫妻朋友家人 师生?人物情节矛盾（人 & 人）(人 & 动物)(人 & 自然)输入文本输入文本文本70%题型分析：提示与结构续写原文 Para.1首句Para.2首句十个关键词确定主题根据Par

2、a.1与Para.2开头语的提示内容以及原文最后一段的情节，确定Para.1开头与结束可能出现的情节根据Para.2开头语的提示内容以及文章的主题，确定第二段开头可能出现的情节以及结尾部分内容10个关键词在一定程度上确定了情节发展的一些主要因素，包括了主要人物(main character)、主要地点(place)、主要事件(event)以及主要场景(scene)等。所以，我们可以通过分析10个划线关键词预测续写部分可能出现的情节，根据需要选择关键词A Vacation with My Mother （2017. 06） I had an interesting childhood. It w

3、as filled with surprise and amusement, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was elven tells a lot about her. My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving

4、to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said goodbye to all of our friends. Who knew if we would ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, b

5、ooks, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and travelers checks Mom had forgotten. David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathroom if Mom was driving while

6、 Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh I thought they were being awfully quite.” We were never actually left in a strang

7、e city, but we were not about to take any chance. On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and

8、 I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections(反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town. 注意：

9、1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.Paragraph 2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.主题：A vacation with my loving, sweet, y

10、et absent-minded and forgetful mum.第一段情节：the brand-new tent，forget, solve the problem第二段情节：great sights in different states关键词分类：关键词分布：第一段：mom, dad, David， forget, tent 第二段： trip, nicewhohowwhatMomabsent-minded; forgetful;nicecampingDadtroubleDavidtenttrip写作技能Plots & Language01问题链推进时间推进情感推进Plots | 情

11、节推进问题链推进通过故事“六要素”设计问题链教学案例 以人教版高中英语必修教材第三模块Unit 1 Using Language：A SAD LOVE STORY为例，该文本是一篇典型的叙事类文本。上课教师根据“六要素”（5W1H）梳理已知文本情节，即：When did the story happen? 2. Where did the story happen? 3. Who were the main characters? 4. What happened on that day? 5. Why did he do so? 6. How could Li Fang solve the

12、problem? 最后一个问题，How could Li Fang solve the problem?其实是对下文未知情节的推断。但是，问题6的切口比较大，学生常常不知道该如何回答。因此，可以按照上文中对第二轮问题链设计的思路，将疏导未知情节的问题6再细化成： 1. What would he say to Hu Jin? (How would he explain the situation to Hu Jin?) 2. What would Hu Jin say after hearing the news? 3. What would Li Fang and Hu Jin do nex

13、t? 4. How did they feel?这些问题更细化且切口更小，更容易回答。 根据这样的问题链和讨论的结果，学生撰写了故事的结局。以下为学生习作： “Em” Li Fang faltered with embarrassment. “To be honest, I made a mistake. I thought we were supposed to meet at the coffee shop.” “Are you serious?” Said Hu Jin, “How careless you are! Did you pay any attention to this d

14、ate? It was a waste of time waiting for you! “Its all my fault.” Said Li Fang, “Im so sorry, I was always complaining that you didnt turn up, but I had never managed to think that it was I that mixed up with the coffee and tea. However, I bought a gift for you. Though it was thrown by me. Can I buy

15、something else as an apology for you? After all, I love you!” After hearing his words, Hu Jin did not annoy any more. In fact, she knew that they loved each other, so she said:” Your apology is accepted. I should have called you just now. And way, I love you, too.” After a conversation, they broke d

16、own the barriers between them, and they lead a happy life forever.时间推进 In the morning, they awoke outside another Howard Johnsons, and this time Vingo went in. The girl insisted that he join them. He seemed very shy, and ordered black coffee and smoked nervously as the young people chattered about s

17、leeping on beaches. When they returned to the bus, the girl sat with Vingo again, and after a while, slowly and painfully, he told his story. He had been in jail in New York for the past four years, and now he was going home. - Going Home情感推进分析各个角色的“情感线”2016年11月高考续写典型案例(段二)It was daybreak when Jane

18、woke up. Sunshine embraced the forest plain. In her sleepy eyes, a helicopter was right in the sky. Wild with joy, she jumped up, grabbing the blouse and flourishing it while crying. The helicopter spotted her and began to land on the grass. “Its Tom! I know he will he will come!” A pair of quiverin

19、g hand reached Janes cheek. “Thank God! If anything happened to you, Ill never forgive myself. They hugged more tightly. Im sorry. Jane said. 情感可以是：adjectives, verbs, repetitions, conversations02Language头发：1. sth make ones hair rise 使头发竖起来（怒 惧 惊 激） 2. run ones finger through ones hair 撩头发 3. comb 梳头

20、发 眉毛：1.sb frown 皱眉 2.raise/cock ones eyebrows（表惊讶）/eyebrow（表怀疑） 翘起眉毛/挑眉 耳朵：1.ones ears perk/prick up / sb perk/prick up ones ears at the sound of 竖起耳朵听 眼睛：1.a flash of cross ones eyes 眼中闪过一阵 2. blink 眨眼 3. roll ones eyes 翻白眼 4. meet ones gaze 迎着/迎视某人目光 5. eyes dart towards眼睛扫向 6. stare at 凝视 7. glar

21、e at 怒视脸颊：sb wince at a sudden pain畏缩，脸部肌肉的抽搐（疼痛/不安）动作描写范例（头部描写范例）2017年6月高考故事续写习作范例 “Hop in!” Paul roared at Mac. Sensing a ray of hope, Mac jumped of the bike and flung it at the wolf with all his might! Instantly he stormed towards the car at his desperate effort. But the bike didnt make a big dif

22、ference. The beast chased him and plunged at him, biting his ankle the moment he flung open the door. A surge of pain piercing his body, Mac tightened his grip on the door handle. “Go to hell!” He gave a heavy kick at its head and flung himself into the car. Right before he could slam the door, Paul

23、 stepped hard on the pedal and the car whizzed off, leaving the beast howling behind. “Damn it!” Mac, with all the breath knocked out of him, lay where he fell, “Jesus Christ! Thank you!”对话描写：简短+地道+量少 Mom and I, a surge of fragrance sweeping over, trod lightly through daisies, lilies and a couple of

24、 unknown flowers. “Wow!” I murmured to myself, “I wish I had been here earlier!” Picking a flower, I dashed to mom. “Here!” I reached out my hand, “This is for you.” Mom, with her face cracking/broadening into a bright/big smile, took it over, “Thank you, sweetheart!” Mom bent down, sweeping me into

25、 a hug. Looking up at the sky, we saw sunlight filtering through overlapped clouds.环境描写：烘托气氛、画龙点睛 从视觉角度描写环境可以分类为社会环境和自然环境的描写。其中，社会环境是指能反映社会、时代特征的建筑、场所、陈设等景物以及民俗民风等。自然环境是指自然界的景物，如季节变化、风霜雨雪、山川湖海、森林原野等，对表现人物身份、地位、行动，表达人物心情，渲染气氛都具有重要作用。在故事续写中，自然环境的描写更加易用，并且，一般来说，故事续写中的场景主要发生在户外的大自然中，这也为自然环境的描写提供了充分机会。20

26、16年10月高考一篇高分作文的开头首句：Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky, weakly shining in the moon-eclipsed darkness.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Sunshine embraced the forest plain.声音描写飞禽走兽花鸟鱼虫，金木水火土风雷电声音描写例句一、单独成句，加感叹号或

27、者省略号 Crack! The stick broke in two.二、拟声词可以做动词/名词 1.The cock in the yard crowed its first round. 2. He felt as if he must shout and sing, he seemed to hear about him the rustle of unceasing and innumerable wings.三、拟声词做副词 The logs were burning briskly in the fire. 夯实基础Input & Output01教材课外素材Input教材的使用A

28、 Sad StoryHealthy EatingPower of Nature.必修三课文拓展范例： “Em” Li Fang faltered with embarrassment. “To be honest, I made a mistake. I thought we were supposed to meet at the coffee shop.” “Are you serious?” Said Hu Jin, “How careless you are! Did you pay any attention to this date? It was a waste of time

29、waiting for you! “Its all my fault.” Said Li Fang, “Im so sorry, I was always complaining that you didnt turn up, but I had never managed to think that it was I that mixed up with the coffee and tea. However, I bought a gift for you. Though it was thrown by me. Can I buy something else as an apology for you? After all, I love yo