2020高考英语作文讲评课件

作文讲评作文讲评TeachingAimsAttheendoftheclass,thestudentsaresupposedto

1.bemoreawareofmistakesmadeintheirarticles2.knowmoreabouttherightwaysofwriting3.beabletopolishuptheirwritingsTeachingAimsAttheendoftheLead-in1.Whatcanbecalledagoodarticle?【评分标准】内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。2.Whatarethedifficultiesyoumeetinwritingarticles?1).加强基础词汇和基本句子结构学习。2).提高综合运用复合句的能力。3).注意句子间的过渡和衔接。4).仿写、背诵、熟读话题范文。Lead-in1.WhatcanbecalledaCommentsonthewritingsStrongpoints:Ifso,wewillbuildanenvironmentallyfriendlysociety.(省略句)(邢臻)Lastbutnotleast,whenridingbikes,wewillfeelmorerelaxedafterthewholeday’shardwork.(省略句)(邓雪怡)Usebike-sharing,andyouwillfindthatitisuseful.（祈使句+and+陈述句）(张子莹)CommentsonthewritingsStrongAsfarasthepromotingofthebike-sharingisconcerned,Ithink...(活用句型)(吴雨欣)Abovearemyopinions.（倒装）(吴雨欣)Ican’tbeinmorefavorofit.（can’t...more句型）(胡慧月)....bicycleridingistheleastexpensivewayoftravelingapartfromwalking.(adj最高级用于否定表达)(吕露露、程亚玮)AsfarasthepromotingoftheWearesupposedtoachieveabalancebetweendevelopmentandnature.（achieveabalancebetween...高级词汇）(陶敏)However,it’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironmentwhichwerelyon.(it作形式主语，relyon高级词汇,复杂结构)(陶敏)Itcanalsobuildsocialbondsbetweenpeople.(高级词汇)(陈楚乔)Thisisoneofthegreatestinvitationstotrafficaccidents.(高级词汇)(吕梦娟)WearesupposedtoachieveabNotice:Theyhaveachievedmuchinadvancedphrasesandsentencestructures.Weshouldlearnfromthem.Notice:Weakpoints:错误统计：高二13（41人）错误类型数量搭配错误50单复数错误35单词拼写31动词运用19词性14句首大小写14Weakpoints:错误统计：高二13（41人）错误类1.Collocation搭配错误...becausebikesarealmostdistributedtoeverywhere.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.good1.Collocation搭配错误goodyoucanfinditeasilyandonlypayforalittlemoney.so,weshouldencouragepeopletorideBike-sharingquiteoftenthandriving.butthebike-sharingservicestillexistssomeproblem.bicyclesbutsomeproblemswithbike-sharingservicestillexist.youcanfinditeasilyandonl2.Singularandplural单复数错误1）单复数InChina,manyvehicleslikebusandcarspolluteenvironmentbadly.What’smore,thedestructionofbike-sharingisabigproblems.buses2.Singularandplural单复数错误1）单复2）Agreement主谓一致itseemsthatBike-sharinggiveawaypeople’sinformation.What’smore,itbringabigconveniencetopeople.ss2）Agreement主谓一致itseemsthatB3.Spelling单词拼写错误weshouldhelpintroductthebike-sharingtoeveryone.Besides,ifcityiscrowedwithcarsduringrushhours,thecitizencanusethosebikestotheircompaniesassoonaspossible.First,withthedevelopingofsociaty,therearemoreandmorecarsontheroad.

introducecrowdedsociety3.Spelling单词拼写错误weshouldhelp4.Usageofverbs动词处理不当,thenewservicenamedbike-sharingisappeared.However,therehasbeensomeproblemsappeared.appearsHowever,someproblemsexist.4.Usageofverbs动词处理不当,thene5.Partofspeech词性错误First,itisveryconveniencefortravelerstotravelinthecity.Ridingbikesisagoodwaytokeephealth.convenienthealthy5.Partofspeech词性错误First,iti6.Capitalizedletters大小写错误Ontheonehand,Itisveryconvenientforustouseabike-sharing.Inconclusion,Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisofbeneficialtous.itthe6.Capitalizedletters大小写错误itthNotice:MoreattentionmustbepaidtothesemistakesinyourdailyEnglishstudy.Notice:task-basedwriting读写类作文

1.用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；考查阅读及概括能力，以及语言组织能力。2.用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：（1）支持成反对共享单车的推广；（2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。考查分析问题、解决问题的能力，内容组织能力。task-basedwriting读写类作文

1.审题：读出信息，进行概括。Bike-sharinghastakenoffinChinafarfasterthaninanyothermarket.Themarkethasbecomefloodedwithnewcompaniesinrecentmonths.Thebike-sharingcompaniesoperateinasimilarway.Theyuseappsthatallowusers,afterpayingadeposit,tounlockthewheelswiththeirsmartphones.

Afterthejourney,userscanleavebikesanywhereinpublicandpayalittlemoneyfortheuse.Theserviceisverypopularasitprovidesaneffective

solutionto“thelastkilometer”problem.Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisalsoraisingquestions

aboutprofitability,wide-spreadbikevandalism(破坏)andtheft,andgrowinggovernmentregulation.AHongKongmanwhowasarrestedforthrowingseveralsharedbikesintoriverssaidhehadnoregretdestroyingthembecause”theGPSdevicesinthebikesgiveawayusers'personalinformation,suchastheirlocations.”现象好处问题1.审题：读出信息，进行概括。Bike-sharingh2.把握第一段:

比较哪个开头好1.Bike-sharing,claimingtobeuser-friendlyandaffordable,hasrecentlycaughtonthroughoutChina.However,lackofregulationgivesbirthtovarioussocialproblems,suchasbikevandalismandtheft.2.Bike-sharingisverypopularinChinanowadays.Thecompaniesproductitthatinasimilarway.However,someonetheftitforwhichindicatespersonalinformation.现象好处问题现象问题好处?2.把握第一段:

比较哪个开头好现象好处问题现象问题好处?3.Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,bike-sharingisturningup.Becauseofit’stooshort,therearealotofproblemsexists.Bike-sharingasanewwayoftraffic,turningupourlife.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.Forexample,it’sconvenientforus...

要点重复，杂乱3.WiththedevelopmentoftecNotice:1.coverthemainpoints.2.(1).现象(2).好处(3).问题3.三个要点，5分，每点2分.Notice:3.充实第二段：argumentstosupportyouridea.要求：用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：（1）支持成反对共享单车的推广；（2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。

3.充实第二段：argumentstosupporty不足分析：

IarguewithBike-sharingservice.First,itisveryconvenientfortravelerstotravelinthecity.Whenyouinanunfamiliarcity,youcanusethebiketogoaround.What’smore,Bike-sharingservicehelpusliveinbetterenvironment.Whenyourideabikeinsteadoftakingataxi,theairpollutionwillreduceandtheairinthecitywillbecomemorefresh.Thelastbutnotleast,theBike-sharingservicehelpcitylifeinahealthierway.Manypeopleinthecitybenefitfromtheservice.topicsentence?supportingsentences不足分析：IarguewithBike-sharinNotice:1.主题句Topicsentence3分，很重要！！！赞成或反对，观点要明确，不能骑墙！！！2.2-3论据，每个5分,共10分。3.衔接手段,3分。4.中间段内容要充实，说理要有条理性和层次性。

Notice:试与下文比较2.Undoubtedly,Iaminfavorofthepromotingofthebike-sharingservice.Thereasonsaccountingformyopinionlieintwoaspectscomingfromindividualandsocietyrespectively.Ononehand,soconvenientisbike-sharingthatitsavesthetimewhichcouldhavebeenwastedontraffic.Ontheotherhand,intermsofsocialbenefits,bike-sharingcangraduallyreducetheuseofprivatecars,thusprovidingcitizenswithamoresatisfyingenvironment.topicsentence!Supportingsentences试与下文比较2.Undoubtedly,Iamin4.不忘结论：Whichofthefollowingpassagescanbeused?1.Inaddition,usingbike-sharingcanbenefitforairpollution,becausewhenwegoforaplacewhichisfromashortdistance,wecanchoosebike-sharinginsteadofprivatecars.2.Therefore,inordertohelpbike-sharingdevelopbetter,weusersshouldbeartheresponsibilitytoputthebikeinplace.Moreover,governmentoughttopublishlawstoregulateit.Onlywhenjointeffortsaremadecanbike-sharingenjoyabrightfuture.还在论证4.不忘结论：Whichofthefollowing3.Ithinkyoucanagreewithme.4.Therefore,Isupportthewidespreaduseofit,Ithinkitwillmakeourlifemorepeacefulandharmonious.5.Thebike-sharinghassomanycreativeeffectsthatofferachancetomakepeoplegoonatriporgoworkinginafasterway,andalsocanmakeuserskeephealth.SoitispopularinthewholeChina.一厢情愿还在描述3.IthinkyoucanagreewithNotice:Don'tforgetyourconclusion.结论：重申自己的观点，呼应前文。结论部分，4分。Notice:范文欣赏

Recently,bike-sharingservicehasgainedconsiderablepopularity,allowinguserstoconvenientlytravelwithbicyclesprovided.However,issueslikevandalism,theftandsoonhasalsoarisen.Frommyperspective,Iamabsolutelyforthiswiseidea.Tobeginwith,bike-sharingserviceoffersatime-savingwaytothosewhoarehurryingtotheirdestinationsorhavingtroublefinishingkilometersofjourneysentirelyonfoot,provingaconvenienceorevennecessitywithoutmuchexpensesconsequently.Butforthisbrilliantservice,manycitizenswouldhavestruggledtheirwayhomeortowork.范文欣赏Recently,bike-sharingseMoreover,inagesturetokeepthisbike-sharingsysteminorder,individualsmaypayextraattentiontotheregulationandprotectionofthebikes.Therefore,people’sawarenessofsocialresponsibilitycanbesignificantlyraised,enhancingpeople’sself-disciplinelevelandshapingtheirmoralvalues.Takingthefactorsaboveintoconsideration,wecansafelydrawtheconclusionthatbike-sharingisareasonableservice.Moreover,inagesturetokeep出彩词汇gainconsiderablepopularity;inagesturetodosth.;keep...inorder;oconsideration所用句型和手法butfor…,…wouldhavedone;tothosewhoare;besignificantlyraised;drawtheconclusionthat;allowing;proving;enhancing;shaping;taking衔接手段however;frommyperspective;tobeginwith;moreover;therefore.出彩词汇gainconsiderablepopulariSuggestions:Practicemakesperfect!Studyhardeverydayandimproveyourwritingstepbystep:1.加强基础词汇和基本句子结构学习。2.提高综合运用复合句的能力。3.注意句子间的过渡和衔接。4.仿写、背诵、熟读话题范文。Suggestions:PracticemakesperHomework1.Rewriteyourarticles2.AndfinishtheexercisesinthepapersHomework1.RewriteyourarticleThankYou!ThankYou!附录（高二）错误类型数量搭配错误50单复数错误35单词拼写31动词运用19词性14句首大小写14（高三）错误类型数量搭配错误52单复数错误40单词拼写35动词运用27词性28句首大小写5附录（高二）错误类型数量搭配错误50单复数错误35单词拼写3定语从句高二(数量)高三(数量)Which1917That98Who59Whose10Why10As114---21定语从句高二(数量)高三(数量)Which1917That名词性从句高二（数量）高三（数量）主语从句what18形式主语it33宾语从句2223形式宾语01表语从句33同位语从句Problem1Problem2;convenience1;debate1;view2;fact1question1Requirement1;basis1;Tendency1;doubt1;Saying1;suggestion1名词性从句高二（数量）高三（数量）主语从句what18形式主状语从句高二（数量）高三（数量）条件If10;solongas1If15;onlyif1;providing1;onconditionthat1;省略2时间When10;while3;assoonas1;省略5when9;

while3;省略1地点where20结果Sothat8Sothat4原因Because7;since1Because3;as2;since1比较as1Than2;what2;as3让步Although7;wherever2Although1;nomatterwhere1状语从句高二（数量）高三（数量）条件If10;solong其他高二（数量）高三（数量）并列句And14;And10;but4;while2Notonly…butalso2Notonly…butalso3倒装Above3;notonly…butalso1;only12Above1;only9虚拟12强调03存在27Can’t…more10祈使+and+陈述10其他高二（数量）高三（数量）并列句And14;And10;b23分23分23分23分

20分20分16分16分12分12分9分9分6分6分作文讲评作文讲评TeachingAimsAttheendoftheclass,thestudentsaresupposedto

1.bemoreawareofmistakesmadeintheirarticles2.knowmoreabouttherightwaysofwriting3.beabletopolishuptheirwritingsTeachingAimsAttheendoftheLead-in1.Whatcanbecalledagoodarticle?【评分标准】内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。2.Whatarethedifficultiesyoumeetinwritingarticles?1).加强基础词汇和基本句子结构学习。2).提高综合运用复合句的能力。3).注意句子间的过渡和衔接。4).仿写、背诵、熟读话题范文。Lead-in1.WhatcanbecalledaCommentsonthewritingsStrongpoints:Ifso,wewillbuildanenvironmentallyfriendlysociety.(省略句)(邢臻)Lastbutnotleast,whenridingbikes,wewillfeelmorerelaxedafterthewholeday’shardwork.(省略句)(邓雪怡)Usebike-sharing,andyouwillfindthatitisuseful.（祈使句+and+陈述句）(张子莹)CommentsonthewritingsStrongAsfarasthepromotingofthebike-sharingisconcerned,Ithink...(活用句型)(吴雨欣)Abovearemyopinions.（倒装）(吴雨欣)Ican’tbeinmorefavorofit.（can’t...more句型）(胡慧月)....bicycleridingistheleastexpensivewayoftravelingapartfromwalking.(adj最高级用于否定表达)(吕露露、程亚玮)AsfarasthepromotingoftheWearesupposedtoachieveabalancebetweendevelopmentandnature.（achieveabalancebetween...高级词汇）(陶敏)However,it’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironmentwhichwerelyon.(it作形式主语，relyon高级词汇,复杂结构)(陶敏)Itcanalsobuildsocialbondsbetweenpeople.(高级词汇)(陈楚乔)Thisisoneofthegreatestinvitationstotrafficaccidents.(高级词汇)(吕梦娟)WearesupposedtoachieveabNotice:Theyhaveachievedmuchinadvancedphrasesandsentencestructures.Weshouldlearnfromthem.Notice:Weakpoints:错误统计：高二13（41人）错误类型数量搭配错误50单复数错误35单词拼写31动词运用19词性14句首大小写14Weakpoints:错误统计：高二13（41人）错误类1.Collocation搭配错误...becausebikesarealmostdistributedtoeverywhere.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.good1.Collocation搭配错误goodyoucanfinditeasilyandonlypayforalittlemoney.so,weshouldencouragepeopletorideBike-sharingquiteoftenthandriving.butthebike-sharingservicestillexistssomeproblem.bicyclesbutsomeproblemswithbike-sharingservicestillexist.youcanfinditeasilyandonl2.Singularandplural单复数错误1）单复数InChina,manyvehicleslikebusandcarspolluteenvironmentbadly.What’smore,thedestructionofbike-sharingisabigproblems.buses2.Singularandplural单复数错误1）单复2）Agreement主谓一致itseemsthatBike-sharinggiveawaypeople’sinformation.What’smore,itbringabigconveniencetopeople.ss2）Agreement主谓一致itseemsthatB3.Spelling单词拼写错误weshouldhelpintroductthebike-sharingtoeveryone.Besides,ifcityiscrowedwithcarsduringrushhours,thecitizencanusethosebikestotheircompaniesassoonaspossible.First,withthedevelopingofsociaty,therearemoreandmorecarsontheroad.

introducecrowdedsociety3.Spelling单词拼写错误weshouldhelp4.Usageofverbs动词处理不当,thenewservicenamedbike-sharingisappeared.However,therehasbeensomeproblemsappeared.appearsHowever,someproblemsexist.4.Usageofverbs动词处理不当,thene5.Partofspeech词性错误First,itisveryconveniencefortravelerstotravelinthecity.Ridingbikesisagoodwaytokeephealth.convenienthealthy5.Partofspeech词性错误First,iti6.Capitalizedletters大小写错误Ontheonehand,Itisveryconvenientforustouseabike-sharing.Inconclusion,Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisofbeneficialtous.itthe6.Capitalizedletters大小写错误itthNotice:MoreattentionmustbepaidtothesemistakesinyourdailyEnglishstudy.Notice:task-basedwriting读写类作文

1.用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；考查阅读及概括能力，以及语言组织能力。2.用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：（1）支持成反对共享单车的推广；（2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。考查分析问题、解决问题的能力，内容组织能力。task-basedwriting读写类作文

1.审题：读出信息，进行概括。Bike-sharinghastakenoffinChinafarfasterthaninanyothermarket.Themarkethasbecomefloodedwithnewcompaniesinrecentmonths.Thebike-sharingcompaniesoperateinasimilarway.Theyuseappsthatallowusers,afterpayingadeposit,tounlockthewheelswiththeirsmartphones.

Afterthejourney,userscanleavebikesanywhereinpublicandpayalittlemoneyfortheuse.Theserviceisverypopularasitprovidesaneffective

solutionto“thelastkilometer”problem.Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisalsoraisingquestions

aboutprofitability,wide-spreadbikevandalism(破坏)andtheft,andgrowinggovernmentregulation.AHongKongmanwhowasarrestedforthrowingseveralsharedbikesintoriverssaidhehadnoregretdestroyingthembecause”theGPSdevicesinthebikesgiveawayusers'personalinformation,suchastheirlocations.”现象好处问题1.审题：读出信息，进行概括。Bike-sharingh2.把握第一段:

比较哪个开头好1.Bike-sharing,claimingtobeuser-friendlyandaffordable,hasrecentlycaughtonthroughoutChina.However,lackofregulationgivesbirthtovarioussocialproblems,suchasbikevandalismandtheft.2.Bike-sharingisverypopularinChinanowadays.Thecompaniesproductitthatinasimilarway.However,someonetheftitforwhichindicatespersonalinformation.现象好处问题现象问题好处?2.把握第一段:

比较哪个开头好现象好处问题现象问题好处?3.Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,bike-sharingisturningup.Becauseofit’stooshort,therearealotofproblemsexists.Bike-sharingasanewwayoftraffic,turningupourlife.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.Forexample,it’sconvenientforus...

要点重复，杂乱3.WiththedevelopmentoftecNotice:1.coverthemainpoints.2.(1).现象(2).好处(3).问题3.三个要点，5分，每点2分.Notice:3.充实第二段：argumentstosupportyouridea.要求：用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：（1）支持成反对共享单车的推广；（2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。

3.充实第二段：argumentstosupporty不足分析：

IarguewithBike-sharingservice.First,itisveryconvenientfortravelerstotravelinthecity.Whenyouinanunfamiliarcity,youcanusethebiketogoaround.What’smore,Bike-sharingservicehelpusliveinbetterenvironment.Whenyourideabikeinsteadoftakingataxi,theairpollutionwillreduceandtheairinthecitywillbecomemorefresh.Thelastbutnotleast,theBike-sharingservicehelpcitylifeinahealthierway.Manypeopleinthecitybenefitfromtheservice.topicsentence?supportingsentences不足分析：IarguewithBike-sharinNotice:1.主题句Topicsentence3分，很重要！！！赞成或反对，观点要明确，不能骑墙！！！2.2-3论据，每个5分,共10分。3.衔接手段,3分。4.中间段内容要充实，说理要有条理性和层次性。

Notice:试与下文比较2.Undoubtedly,Iaminfavorofthepromotingofthebike-sharingservice.Thereasonsaccountingformyopinionlieintwoaspectscomingfromindividualandsocietyrespectively.Ononehand,soconvenientisbike-sharingthatitsavesthetimewhichcouldhavebeenwastedontraffic.Ontheotherhand,intermsofsocialbenefits,bike-sharingcangraduallyreducetheuseofprivatecars,thusprovidingcitizenswithamoresatisfyingenvironment.topicsentence!Supportingsentences试与下文比较2.Undoubtedly,Iamin4.不忘结论：Whichofthefollowingpassagescanbeused?1.Inaddition,usingbike-sharingcanbenefitforairpollution,becausewhenwegoforaplacewhichisfromashortdistance,wecanchoosebike-sharinginsteadofprivatecars.2.Therefore,inordertohelpbike-sharingdevelopbetter,weusersshouldbeartheresponsibilitytoputthebikeinplace.Moreover,governmentoughttopublishlawstoregulateit.Onlywhenjointeffortsaremadecanbike-sharingenjoyabrightfuture.还在论证4.不忘结论：Whichofthefollowing3.Ithinkyoucanagreewithme.4.Therefore,Isupportthewidespreaduseofit,Ithinkitwillmakeourlifemorepeacefulandharmonious.5.Thebike-sharinghassomanycreativeeffectsthatofferachancetomakepeoplegoonatriporgoworkinginafasterway,andalsocanmakeuserskeephealth.SoitispopularinthewholeChina.一厢情愿还在描述3.IthinkyoucanagreewithNotice:Don'tforgetyourconclusion.结论：重申自己的观点，呼应前文。结论部分，4分。Notice:范文欣赏

Recently,bike-sharingservicehasgainedconsiderablepopularity,allowinguserstoconvenientlytravelwithbicyclesprovided.However,issueslikevandalism,theftandsoonhasalsoarisen.Frommyperspective,Iamabsolutelyforthiswiseidea.Tobeginwith,bike-sharingserviceoffersatime-savingwaytothosewhoarehurryingtotheirdestinationsorhavingtroublefinishingkilometersofjourneysentirelyonfoot,provingaconvenienceorevennecessitywithoutmuchexpensesconsequently.Butforthisbrilliantservice,manycitizenswouldhavestruggledtheirwayhomeortowork.范文欣赏Recently,bike-sharingseMoreover,inagesturetokeepthisbike-sharingsysteminorder,indiv