江苏新材料作文指导

新材料作文---概括指导Howtowriteasummaryofnarration?Learningaim:TofurthermasterthemethodsandskillsofwritingsummariesofnarrativepassagesDifficultpoint:Howtowriteanexactsummarywithoutleavingoutkeypoints学生习作常见错误：概括内容要点不完整使用太多细节内容而不是用概括的语言过多引用原文词句词数过多用第一人称而不是第三人称转述时态错误LastSundayIwentfishing.Aftersettingupmyfishingrodwithbait,Isatdownonthebankofthelake.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Ifeltafishtouchthebait,butIdidn’tmoveandwaitedfortherightmomenttoreelitin.Atlast,Icaughtit.Thismademeveryhappy.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Onmywayhome,Ithoughtwhathadhappenedonthebank.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

学生习作常见错误1:

ThepassagetellsusthatlastSundayamanwentfishingbuthedidn’tcatchanyfishintwohours.Atthistimehesawanoldmansittingnearhim.Themanaskedthemanhowtocatchfishes.Theoldmansaidthatyoushouldbepatient.使用太多细节，语言不够概括概括内容要：精，准，全学生习作常见错误2:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishinganddidn’tcatchanyfish.Whenhepreparedtogobackhome,hefoundanoldmansittingthereandhis

basketwasfulloffish.Intheend,hecaughtmanyfish.引用原文词句不得直接引用原文的句子学生习作常见错误3:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishingbutmadenoachievementsandpreparedtogobackhome.Whileanoldmanwhosebasketwasfulloffishtoldhimthatfishisveryimportanttobepatient.Theauthorlearnedtobepatient.Atlast,theauthorcaughtfishandrealizedthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.(共60词)词数过多词数:约30词（小于20词或大于40词，扣2分）学生习作常见错误4:

Thewritertellsusthathewentfishingbutdidn’tcatchanyfishafterwaiting2hours.Thenanoldmansittingnearme

toldmehissecretoffishingwaspatience.Finallythewritersucceeded.人称用错，应该用第三人称一般以第三人称来表述

学生习作常见错误5:

Thepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterdidn’tcatchanyfishbecauseofhisimpatience.Hebecomehappywhenheunderstandthepatienceisthekeytosuccess.时态错误与原文时态一致(1)概括内容要点要：精，准，全

写概括时应满足的5个条件(4)一般以第三人称来表述

(2)不得直接引用原文的句子（同义词组替换法；正话反说法；语态变换；简单句变复合句……）(3)词数:约30词（小于20词或大于40词，扣2分）(5)与原文时态一致（正文和结尾除外）记叙文概括的方法---串联要素法第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素who→谁what→何事when→何时where→何地why→原因asaresult/consequence/finally→结果…….,whichledto第二步：用自己的话串联起来

万能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/eventually……开头套用句式：Thestory/passageisabout……Thewriter/authortellsusabout….Thestory/passagemainlytellsusthat…Thepassagedescribes….LastSundayIwentfishing.Aftersettingupmyfishingrodwithbait,Isatdownonthebankofthelake.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Ifeltafishtouchthebait,butIdidn’tmoveandwaitedfortherightmomenttoreelitin.Atlast,Icaughtit.Thismademeveryhappy.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Onmywayhome,Ithoughtwhathadhappenedonthebank.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

hadnopatience第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素：

who→谁①_______________②________________what→何事①____________________________②__________________________when→何时where→何地why→原因①______________________________________

②______________________________________

asaresult→结果______________________________________________________I(thewriter)didn’tcatchanyfishanoldmanhisbasketwasfulloffishgotveryangryIt’svery

importanttobepatientlearntobepatient;caughtit.

第二步：用自己的话串联起来

万能公式：sb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto…/finally/eventually……

ThewritercaughtalotoffishafterbecomingpatientwhohadnopatienceatfirstbecauseofbeinginfluencedbyanoldmanhimrealizingpatienceisthekeytosuccessOnepossibleversionThepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterwhohadnopatienceatfirstcaughtalotoffishafterbecomingpatientbecauseofbeinginfluencedbyanoldman.Finally,herealizedpatienceisthekeytosuccess.hadintendedtogiveupintendedtohavegivenupGroupWork

阅读下面的短文，然后以约30个词概括这篇短文的主要内容。Hi,IamMike.Ijustwentthroughmyfirstyearofcollege.Thetoughestpartonmeatfirstwasthegeneraladjustment.Iwenttoaverysmallhighschoolwheremymomwasateacherandshedidpracticallyeverythingforme.ButatthecollegeIneedtoknowsomebasiclifeskills,suchasbalancingacheck-book,laundry,andthethingsyouhavetobeabletohandlethatIneverthoughtofinthehighschool!ItwasreallytoughformeatfirstandIgotbadlyhomesick.OncethatfirstsemesterwasoverandIgotusedtothecollegelife,Iloveit—goodfacilities,helpfulinstructors,andagoodlibrary.Thestudent’sUnionorganizesvariouspartieseveryweek.Ialsogotocinemasandconcerts,andoftenspendSaturdaynightsinpubsandclubs.OnethingIthinkisimportantistogetyourselfactiveinthings.Iwasondanceteamincollegeandmetatonofpeoplethatway—itwassomucheasiertomakefriendswhenyouhadacommonground.第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素：who→谁_______________when→何时①____________what→_________________②__________________________________where→何地why→原因______________________________________asaresult→结果__________________________________________________第二步：用自己的话串联起来(根据万能公式)

万能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/eventually……Presentation&EvaluationGroupWork

阅读下面的短文，然后以约30个词概括这篇短文的主要内容。Hi,IamMike.Ijustwentthroughmyfirstyearofcollege.Thetoughestpartonmeatfirstwasthegeneraladjustment.Iwenttoaverysmallhighschoolwheremymomwasateacherandshedidpracticallyeverythingforme.ButatthecollegeIneedtoknowsomebasiclifeskills,suchasbalancingacheck-book,laundry,andthethingsyouhavetobeabletohandlethatIneverthoughtofinthehighschool!ItwasreallytoughformeatfirstandIgotbadlyhomesick.OncethatfirstsemesterwasoverandIgotusedtothecollegelife,Iloveit—goodfacilities,helpfulinstructors,andagoodlibrary.Thestudent’sUnionorganizesvariouspartieseveryweek.Ialsogotocinemasandconcerts,andoftenspendSaturdaynightsinpubsandclubs.OnethingIthinkisimportantistogetyourselfactiveinthings.Iwasondanceteamincollegeandmetatonofpeoplethatway—itwassomucheasiertomakefriendswhenyouhadacommonground.Onepossibleversion:Groupwork1范文：ThepassagemainlytellsusthatMike,(whohaddifficultyinadjustingtothefirst-yearcollegelife)got

accustomedtoit

onesemesterlater

becauseofthecolurfulactivitiesandenjoyedhimself.sbdidsth.whenbecauseofIndividualWorkGoodmorning,ladiesandgentlemen.ThisisLiHuafromSeniorThree.I'mheretodaytosharewithyouagoodlessonfromanoverseasChinesestudentlivinginGermany.Itisatruestory.Afteryearsofhardwork,thisChinesestudentgraduatedwithamazingacademicachievements.Everyonethoughthewasgoingtogetagoodjobeasilyandhaveabrightfuture.Buttohisdisappointment,hewasnotevenallowedthechanceforaninterview!Thethirdtimehewasturneddown,hecouldn'thelptelephoningthecompanytoaskwhytheydidn'twanthim.Theanswerwassimple,"Wedon'thiredishonestpeopleinGermany.Whatwaswrongyoumightwonder?Thetruthis,shortlyafterhearrivedinGermany,thiscleverstudentfoundthatitwaseasytoskipbuyingsubwaytickets.So,tosavemoney,heoftenwentwithoutaticket.Asaresult,hehadbeencaughtwithoutaticketinthesubwaythreetimes.Fromthisstory,welearnthatwemaygetshort-termbenefitsbydishonestmeans,butthetruthwillcomeoutsoonerorlaterandthecostishigh.Soremember,honestyisthebestpolicy.That'sallformyspeech.Thankyou!Presentation&EvaluationIndividualWorkGoodmorning,ladiesandgentlemen.ThisisLiHuafromSeniorThree.I'mheretodaytosharewithyouagoodlessonfromanoverseasChinesestudentlivinginGermany.Itisatruestory.Afteryearsofhardwork,thisChinesestudentgraduatedwithamazingacademicachievements.Everyonethoughthewasgoingtogetagoodjobeasilyandhaveabrightfuture.Buttohisdisappointment,hewasnotevenallowedthechanceforaninterview!Thethirdtimehewasturneddown,hecouldn'thelptelephoningthecompanytoaskwhytheydidn'twanthim.Theanswerwassimple,"Wedon'thiredishonestpeopleinGermany.Whatwaswrongyoumightwonder?Thetruthis,shortlyafterhearrivedinGermany,thiscleverstudentfoundthatitwaseasytoskipbuyingsubwaytickets.So,tosavemoney,heoftenwentwithoutaticket.Asaresult,hehadbeencaughtwithoutaticketinthesubwaythreetimes.Fromthisstory,welearnthatwemaygetshort-termbenefitsbydishonestmeans,butthetruthwillcomeoutsoonerorlaterandthecostishigh.Soremember,honestyisthebestpolicy.That'sallformyspeech.Thankyou!用自己的话串联起来(根据万能公式)

Onepossibleversion:_________________tellsusthat_____________________________________didn’t_______________onpurposewhen_________________,whichledto_________________________dueto_____________.ThepassagemainlyanexcellentChinesestudent

buythesubwaytickets

studyinginGermanyhimnotbeingabletofindajobhisdishonestyReviewthestepsofwritingasummary第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素who→谁what→什么when→何时where→何地why→原因asaresult/consequence/finally→结果…….,whichleadsto第二步：用自己的话串联起来

万能公式：Thepassagemainlytellsusthatsb.(who……)didsth.(atsomeplaceatsometime)becauseof/asaresultof/dueto……,whichledto……finally/even