高中语文一模读后续写指导课件

广州一模读后续写指导：撒谎的男孩这篇文章关于孩子撒谎，最后承认错误。文章主题是非常好的。希望我写的对读者有些启发，同时非常欢迎读者提出改进的建议。题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ittookplaceinateachersfamily.Oneday,Benwasplayingbasketballinthelivingroomafterschool,whenheaccidentallythrewtheballatavasesittingontheshelf.Thevasedroppedtothefloorandalargepiecebrokeoff.WhatmadeBenmoreupsetwasthatthevasewasnotacommondecorationbutanantique,whichwashandeddownthroughgenerationsfromthe18thcentury.Itwasalsohismother'sfavouritepossession.Tocoverhisterribleaction,theterrifiedboygluedthepiecestogetherhastilyandputthevasebacktoitsplace.Asthemotherherselfdustedthevaseeveryday,shenaturallynoticedthecracks(裂纹)thatevening.Tohersurprise,therepairworkwasactuallyverygood.Atdinnertime,sheaskedherboyifhebrokethevase.Fearingpunishment,thesuddenlyinspiredboysaidthataneighbour’scatjumpedinfromthewindowandhecouldn’tdriveitawaynomatterhowhardhetried.Itracedaroundthelivingroomandfinallyknockedthevaseoffitsshelf.Hismotherwasquiteclearthathersonwaslying,forallthewindowswereclosedbeforesheleftforworkeachmorningandopenedaftershereturned.However,inthefaceofherson’snervouseyesandthesuspiciouslooksoftheotherfamilymembers.Ben’smotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshouldn’tjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.Beforegoingtobed,theboyfoundanotefromhismotherinhisroom,askinghimtogotothestudyatonce.Theboythoughthewouldnowbepunishedbut,ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhowangryhismumbecame.Inthestudy,calmlybathedinthelight,hismothersfaceshowednosignofanger.Onseeinghersonpushopenthedoorandcautiouslyenter,shetookachocolateboxoutofadrawerandgavehimone.1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Themothersaid,"Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!"Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy'sbadattitudedisappeared.写作指导写作指导：第一步：在搞懂文章的characters,plot,setting的基础上，把所有可能的线索全部列出来：inateacher'sfamilynotacommondecorationbutanantiquehismother'sfavouritepossessiongluedthepiecestogetherhastilythecracks（裂纹）therepairworkwasactuallyverygoodFearingpunishmentaneighbour'scatHismotherwasquiteclearHowever,inthefaceofherson'snervouseyesandthesuspiciouslooksoftheotherfamilymembers,Ben'smotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshouldn'tjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhowangryhismumbecame.Inthestudy,calmlybathedinthelighthismother'sfaceshowednosignofanger.achocolateboxoutofadrawer第二步：大概确定场景。本文主题毫无疑问是属于change类，即：男孩从撒谎变成诚实的孩子。我们要续写的就是：到底妈妈做了什么让孩子改变的？我的想法是：妈妈先奖励他，然后惩罚他。先奖励，是消除他的警戒和抵抗心理；后惩罚他的撒谎。这样就是奖惩分明，让孩子明白他要为他的所有行为负责，而且真实意识到诚实的重要性。Themothersaid,"Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!"场景一：theboy’spuzzleandembarrassment场景二：themother’ssmileandexplanation(是否可以照应线索：thecracks,goodrepair,closethedoor,why?Needmoreimagination)场景三：theboyfeltshameful衔接句:givehimmorechocolatesNowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy'sbadattitudedisappeared.场景一：boy’sregretandconfess场景二：mother’sresponse场景三：theme;theboygotthechocolatesandunderstandwhatmothersaid下水作文Themothersaid,"Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!"Scratchinghisheadinconfusion,theboyfeltthechocolatewasahotpotato.Didshefindsomeholesinmyexcuse?“Youknow,allthewindowswereshutclose.”Motherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmethatcat’samazingability?”Theboyhunghisheadinshame.Howhewishedthegroundtoopenupandswallowhim!Themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedtwochocolatesintohishands,“Thesearearewardforyourgluing.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy'sbadattitudedisappeared.Hisconscienceforcedhimtomakeadecision.“Mom,itwasIwhobrokethevase....”hestammeredoutthetruthbutsuddenlyfeltlikebeingrelievedoftonsofburden.“Good.Butyoudeservedpunishingforlying.”Themothersaidascalmlyasusual,“Justgivemethethreechocolates.”Theboydidit.“Now,myboy.Thisboxofchocolatesareaawardforyourhonesty.”Themotherstaredathimwithadmiration,“Honestyisthebestpolicy.”（186words)说明：这篇文章我综合用到了前面文章说道地技巧：1.如何表示内心地想法疑问句：Didshefindsomeholesinmyexcuse?虚拟句：Howhewishedthegroundtoopenupandswallowhim!2.如何在结尾表达主题在对话里把主题凸显：Themotherstaredathimwithadmiration,“Honestyisthebestpolicy.”3.对人物性格刻画地统一原文：However,inthefaceofherson'snervouseyesandthesuspiciouslooksoftheotherfamilymembers,Ben'smotherremainedcalm.我地照应：Motherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,Themothersaidascalmasusual...好词好句：scratchinghishead挠头ahotpotato烫手的山芋beshutclos