高中英语m5教学课件-2019-书面表达

Alltheclassmates,themajorityofwhom

participatedinthesingingcontest,werethankfultoLiYueforgoingoutofherwaytofindtherightcostumes.Wewouldbecompetinginthesingingcontestnextweekandsoweneededcostumesfortheactivity.

3.Thesettlementishometonearly1,000people,manyofwhomlefttheirvillagehomesforabetterlifeinthecity.5.Ifyouplantwatermelonseedsinthespring,youwillbeeatingfreshwatermeloninthefall.审话题：个人情况、人际关系、语言学习、日常活动、周围环境、文娱体育、校园生活LastSaturdaymorningwhenLiYuewokeup,itwasadayjustlikeanyotherday.Thesunwasshining,thebirdsweresingingandtherewasstillalittlehomeworktodo.Whileherhomeworkwasveryimportant,shedidn’tforgetthatshewouldhavetobuycostumesforthesingingcontest.认真；满意，感动，感谢；训练用功，更有信心，比赛成绩好，大家很开心；乐于助人，热心班级活动，工作负责，学习用功，与人为善。是大家学习的楷模。表达祝贺。名至实归。审功能意念：感谢、道歉、祝愿、祝贺、劝告、建议、希望、征允、介绍、邀请、同意、喜好、意愿、反对、表扬、鼓励、评价、抱怨、情感、时空、特征、因果、比较、施惠、观点、求职、推荐感谢:appreciate;gratitude…祝贺:congratulate…表扬:keepupthegoodwork,proud…评价:awesome,sweet,trustworthy,rolemodel,akindgesture,betherefor…情感:impressed;…因果:as,because,thanksto…Trustworthy:…canbetrustedanddependedon审文体：新闻报道、讨论议论、情况对比、事件记叙、通告发言、图表说明Thankyouforreading.ABCD人称时态审结构：要点整合扩展、段落归属、首句如何续话StarStudentoftheWeekLiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleofthestarforwhatshedidforourclass.（第一段先进事迹50字45%，过去时态）上周六，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛的服装。出于自愿，反复选择，大家满意（对同学影响20字20%，过去时态）深受感动，表达感谢，训练用功，更有信心。比赛成绩好。大家很开心。（第二段你的评论40字35%，现在时态）乐于助人，热心班级活动，工作负责，学习用功，与人为善。是大家学习的楷模。表达祝贺。名至实归。审全卷manyofwhom,willbeeating…审话题人际关系、校园生活审功能感谢、祝贺、表扬、评价、情感、因果、审文体新闻报道、事件记叙（过去时态）、短评（现在时态）审结构（第一段先进事迹50字45%）上周六，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛的服装。出于自愿，反复选择，大家满意（对同学影响20字20%）深受感动，表达感谢，训练用功，更有信心。比赛成绩好。大家很开心。（第二段你的评论40字35%）乐于助人，热心班级活动，工作负责，学习用功，与人为善。是大家学习的楷模。名至实归。阅卷数据均分和得分分布02.8311.89

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3000.6全省平均分12.16自评监控（不同时间自批同一份卷分差在5分以内）三评评卷速度：48.83秒5A1A.规范字母匀称大小适宜间距合理连笔规范标点正确修改无痕字数达标段落明晰academic书写书写2A.正确accurate句构屈折时态单复冠词拼写语法错误，且句首即错拼写词性ALLiswellthatisspeltwell.3A.适切appropriate风格明显要点到位用词适度语气适当表述中立用词不贴切Sheisalwaysdescribedasapersonofgoodpersonality.Sheisreallyapleasantperson,possessingadmirablequalitiesoffriendlinessandhonesty.SheshouldhavetheawardoftheStarStudent.

LiYuesetsagoodexamplewithheractofkindness.Youneedtochangetheway:learnfrommistakes,failure,yourexperienceLiYuehasinfluencedthewholeclasspositivelyandheisreallyourrolemodel.Shedeservestobeawardedthehonor.

用词不贴切Togiveallyoureffortortimetosomethingyoubelievein.Hedevoteshimselftohelpingthoseinneed.Weweredeeplymovedbyhercontributionstoourclass.Weweregreatlyimpressedbyherkindgesture.或：Hisactofkindnesswasappreciated.Tobefrank,IapplaudthedecisionthatLiwaschosenthestaroftheweek.when

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to:Youstarttotalkaboutsomething.Whenitcomestospeakingforeignlanguages,Marthabeatsmehandsdown.Shecanspeakmorethanfivelanguagesfluently!Ican‘tthinkofeverythingrightnow,butwhenitcomestomeI’lladdmorelater.(honestevenwhenthismightbeawkwardormakeotherpeopleuncomfortable:Tobefrankwithyou,Idon'tthinkshedeservedthetitle.

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nevercareaboutschoolactivities.SomestudentstendtobelessactiveinHelpothers,andtheywillhelpothers.Ifyoureachouttohelpothers,mostlikelytheywillpayforward.语气不恰当4A.表达地道authentic降低调门减少比喻间接翻译观点合理政治正确IwishpeoplewouldcaremoreaboutourclasslikeLiYueandgetinvolvedtomakeitabetterplace.Wheninteviewed,theelderlysaid,“WearegreatlygratefultoourParty!”

Theelderlysaid,“Wereallylovekeepingyoucompany.Itwasreallysweetofyoutobeherewithus.”

不地道调高Youngpeoplearetotheelderlywhatthefishtothewater.Manyyoungpeoplearebroughtupbytheirgrandparents.Theyshouldlearntopaytheloveforward.不地道比喻Theybroughtsomefruit,whichtheyhadnochancetoeat.Theybroughtsomefruit,butmostimportantly,theybroughtloveandkindness.5A.流畅连接副词思维严谨逻辑严密accessibleLiYuetoldustocalmdown.Tooursurprise,wedidatlast.________theelderlyneedourhelp.A.Withthedevelopmentofindustry,B.Beingphysicallyweakandlonely,

Someofusfeltnervousatthethoughtofstandinginfrontoftheaudience,buthopefully,LiYuewasabletohelpthemhandlethestress.LiYueisalwayswarm-heartedandcaresalotabouttheclass.Inaddition,sheoftendevoteshersparetimetohelpingothers.Shehassetagoodexampleforus.Therefore,shedeservesthehonor.Theelderlywereveryexcited.Theelderlywereveryexcitedbecausethetwovolunteersdecidedtodothisonaweeklybasis.Studentsshoulddotheserviceforsociety.Studentsshouldbeencouragedtodonatesometimeforcommunityservice教师范文A（教师创作1）LiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleofthestarstudentoftheweekforwhatshedidforourclass.LastSaturday,theschoolhelditsannualsingingcontest.LiYuehadvolunteeredtobuythecostumesforourclass.Inspiteofthesummerheat,shewentbackandforthbetweenthestoresandtheclassuntileveryonewassatisfiedwiththechoiceofcostumes.Thankstoherefforts,ourclass’performanceturnedouttobehugelysuccessful.Thewholeclasswasimpressedbyhersweetactandgratefulforherpatienceandenthusiasm.LiYuehasalwaysbeentherolemodelformanyofusbecausesheisresponsibleandalwaysreadytohelpothers.HavingaStarStudentlikeherreallystrengthensthecommunityofourclassroom.(110words)B（教师创作2）LiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleofthestarstudentoftheweekforwhatshedidforourclass.Shewasselectedforbeingveryhelpfulandconsiderateofothersinourpreparationfortheschoolsingingcompetition.LastSaturday,regardlessofthehotweather,LiYuetoureddifferentstoresbeforeshefoundtherightcostumesforourclass.Weallagreedthatthegorgeouscostumesmadeeveryparticipantmoreconfidentandthecompetitionwasmoreafunactivitythanastressfulcompetitionbecauseofhereffort.Shedeservesthetitleforheroutstandingbehaviorduringthepreviousweekandforbeingsuchatremendousrolemodel.SocongratulationstoLiYueonachievingthetitleofstarstudent.Keepupthegoodwork!Andwereallywanttoseemorestudentscompeteforthetitle.(115words)C（外教范文）LiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleofthestarstudentoftheweekforwhatshedidforourclass.LastSaturdaymorningLiYuethoughttoherselfabouthowimportanttheupcomingsongcompetitionwasfortheclass.Disregardingthehotweather,shedecidedtomakeherwaytotheshops.Shecarefullychosetheidealcostumefortheactivity.Andwithgreatmaturity,responsibilityandmotivationshefoundwhatshewaslookingfor.Weweredeeplyimpressedandtrulyfeltthankfultoherforgoingoutofherwaytohelpusenjoyourimportantday.LiYueisreallyourrolemodelforbeingsothoughtfulandhelpful.IwishIcouldalsohavewonderfulwaystobekindjustlikehim.(110words)D（高考范文）

LiYuehasbeenawardedthetitleof"StarStudentoftheWeek"forwhatshedidforourclass.OnthehotafternoonoflastSaturday,LiYuewentdowntownandwalkedfromonestoretoanother,lookingforthecostumeswewouldwearinthesingingcontest.Whiletherestofuswereenjoyingourleisuretimeincoolandcomfortablerooms,shespentthewholeafternoonsearchingandselecting.Finally,shefoundtherightclothes.Deeplymovedbyherefforts,wetriedourbestandwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.LiYueisalwayswarm-heartedandcaresalot