读后续写之海啸何珊珊 优质课比赛一等奖

读后续写之海啸阅读下面短文根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成个完整的故事

Ten-year-oldJason

lovedtovisithisgrandfather’shouse.Thehousewasnearthebeautifulbluesea.Attheseasidestoodthickandtallpalmtreeswithgreencoconutshangingfromthem.Whenthecoconutsfelldown,Jason

wouldbreakthemopenanddrinkthecoconutwater.Jasonlikedtoplayunderthetrees.ItwasalwaysgreatfuntospendtheholidaysatGrandpa’splace.Jasonwassurprisedwhenhecametohisgrandfather’svillage.Therewerehardlyanytreesleft.Hesawhousesbuiltnearthesea.Peoplehadcutdownmanypalmtreesandtherewashardlyanygreeneryleft.Grandpa’shousewasdifferent.Heneverallowedhistreestobecut.Hehadplantedthemwithhisownhandsandtodaytheyhadbecomelarge,massivetreeswiththicktrunks.暗示Tree将会在后续的故事中发挥着重要作用，人与自然和谐相处

阅读下面短文根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成个完整的故事

Onenight,Jason

wasawakenedbyastrangesound.Theearthwasnotsplittingbuttheseawasroaring.Peoplewereshouting,screamingandcrying,“Theseaisrising!Theseaisrising.”Thevillagersstartedrunningawayfromthebeach.Samiwatcheddumbstruck(呆若木鸡).

Thewaveswererisinghigherandhigher.Jasonthought,“Howbigthewavesare!”Hewentintothehouseagainandsawwatercominginfromallsides.Hewasscared.

HeranoutsidethehousewithGrandpa.Butthewatercamesurging(汹涌)in.

Wavesabouttwelvemetershighcamerushingin,drowningeverything.Waterwasallaroundandeverywhere.Readforplot通过阅读所给文章可知，十岁的Jason喜欢去祖父家，房子靠近美丽的蓝色大海。祖父的前门门附近有两棵大树，被祖父保护的很好。一天晚上发生了地震，地震引发了海啸，大约12米高的海浪冲了进来，淹没了一切。到处都是水。Para.1GrandpaheldJason’shandtightlybutahugewaveseparatedthem.Thewaytosurviveinthetsunami:holdaboard/climbthetreeortothehigherplacesSami和爷爷被巨浪分开后的事情Theproblemswemet:tiredness/fiercewaves/...howJasonandhisgrandfatherstruggledinthewavesReadfordevelopmentOurfeelings:Frightened/desperate…Para2.“Sami,Sami!”Grandpacried.“Don’tbescared,littleone,comeheretothetreequickly.”1.说明爷爷已经在椰子树附近或者在椰子树上了，那么第一段可以写爷爷怎么发现这个逃生办法的2.爷爷和Jason最终如何找到彼此度过困境。重点描写Jason怎么爬上树的3.劫后余生的欣喜和如释重负情感可以一两句4.最后可以一句话写下树的重要性，突出人与自然和谐相处这个主题。Readfordevelopment自然环境描写——描写波涛汹涌1.AsIfloatedon,______________(一个巨浪)_________(呼啸而来)andapproachedus.ahugewavewhistled2.Thebigwind____________________(在耳边咆哮),andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.roaredthroughourears3.Thefiercewaves_________________________(没有消退的迹象).showednosignofdyingdown人物描写——描写疲倦1.Timepassingus,tiredness_______________(包围了)uswithmyfeet__________(僵硬/麻木)andshivering.engulfedstiff/numb2.___________________(尽管很累),wedidn’tstop.Grittingoutteeth,wekeptswimming.

Exhaustedaswewere——描写害怕1.Itookadeepbreathand_____________(害怕地咽了口吐沫).swallowedhard2.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffear______________________________.(在身体涌动)

surgingthroughmywholebody人物描写3.Iwas_________________________(被恐惧感淹没).floodedwithasenseofhorror4.Ifelt________________(一阵焦虑)_________________(袭来).awaveofanxietysweptovermybodysweep——描写挣扎努力人物描写1....,Weswam____________(全力以赴地).toothandnail2.We__________________(不遗余力地)toswimtowardstheshore.sparednoeffortto3.We_________________________(互换了坚定的神情),then

ploughedon(继续前行)

__________________(难以置信的速度).exchangedadeterminedlookatanincrediblespeed人物描写——描写如释重负1.Ensuringtheirsafety,I__________________.(感到一阵胜利的喜悦)feltasurgeoftriumph

2.Onhearingthegoodnews,I_________________(如释重负地叹了口气),grinningmerrilyateachother.sighedingreatrelief

Onepossibleversion:GrandpaheldJason'shandtightlybutahugewaveseparatedthem.HefoughtthewavesandstrivedtocatchJason,butfailed,Jasonwasdriftedaway!Grandpastruggledtokeephisheadabovethewater.Thewaterpushedhimahead.Fortunately,hecaughtapalmtreeinhiscourtyard.HepanickedandscreamedouttoJasonbutcouldnotseehim.Heclungtotreetightlywhiletheseawasallaround.InhopeofseeingJason,Grandpaclimbedhigherupthetree.ThewatercarriedJasonroundandround.(79words)“Jason,Jason!”Grandpacried."Don'tbescared;comeheretothetree,quickly.""ButGrandpa,Ican'tswim!"Anotherwavecamewithterrifyingspeedandforce.Jasoncriedindespair.Suddenly,Jasonfelthimselfthrownontothetopofatree.Heimmediatelyheldit!Lookingaround,he