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提供一篇350词以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。读后续写：

Warming-upHaveyoueversharedsomechocolatewithothersWhatifsomeoneeatyourchocolatewithoutasingforyourissionHowdoyoufeelwhensharingbasicinformation体裁时态人称5w1hquestionsWhenWhereWhoWhatWhyHowReading记叙文一般过去时第一人称lastfridaythestationcoffeeshopself-serviceplacewithlongtablestheteenagerboyTheteenageratemychocolateandIwasangrywithhimBecauseIwantedarestbeforecatchingthetrainWild-looing,withdarglasses,tornclothes,redhair,Iwriterangry,beforecatchingmytrain,Iwentto________________forrestIboughta__andsome,onthetableandwenttogetacuAtlast,hewentaway,leavinge,whichmademefeel____________Tiainideawiththehelpof5w1hquestionssumuainideaatemychocolateangryembarrassedLastfridaythestationcoffeeshopnewspaperchocolateReading阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Myhusbandhasn’tstoeItisfunny

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afunnything,newsychocolate,annoyed,too,madeamistae,embarrassingTiostimation,themaincharacterandthemainobjectshouldbechoseninyourwriting关键词有助于推导故事情节发展人、物

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YESNOHowdidIfindtheboyeasyordifficultWhereWhatwouldIsay\doWhatwouldtheboysay\doWhat’smyfeelingHappyendingWhycouldn’tIfindtheboyWhatwouldIfeelWhatwouldtheboythinofmeanalyethegivensentencesLogicalplottingQuestionsforthecontinuedplotspara1para2HowdidIfindthechocolate？WouldIfindtheboy?yesorno?What’smyfeeling?How\wheredidIfindhim?WhatwouldIsay/do?WhatwouldIdo/think?Whatwouldtheboysay?do?What’stheending?Myfeeling?TientbyraisingquetionsLogicalplottingHowtoenrichthecontent

经过分析推导确定好每段写作要点后，怎么写？ycoffeeandgotreadytoleaveIfoundthechocolateIfeltembarrassedIwantedtoloofortheboyHowtoenrichthecontentWriting在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。可以通过对于人物动作、神态的扩充来丰富文章。ycoffeeandgotreadytoleave1IfoundthechocolateHowpicupthebaggatherthenewspaperseethechocolateWhereisthechocolateThechocolateisunderthenewspaperHowisthechocolateunopened原文Iyheavybagdownonthefloor,putthenewspaperandchocolateonthetableto

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aplaceyunopenedchocolate,IleftthestationcoffeeshoptoloofortheboyWritingaddmoredetails动作链描写，围绕着一个中心展开，丰富细节内容，增强可读性Iybagfromthefloor,gatheredthenewspaperandsawthechocolateIybagfromthefloor,gatheredthenewsychocolateunderthenewspaperIybagfromthefloorandgatheredthenewsychocolateunderthenewspaperItwasunopened!使用衔接词2IfeltembarrassedHowembarrassedWhy？BecauseIhadmadeamistaeWhat’sthemistaeTheboywaseatinghisownchocolateItwasIwhowasgreedytoeathischocolate如何描写尴尬？Writingaddmoredetails神态描写（adj,verb,比喻，环境烘托，对话）Myfacewentred—asredastheteenager’shairMyfacewentred—asredastheteenager’shairwhenI

realied

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