应用文写作对对碰(七)

应用文写作对对碰(七)写人记叙文

记事记叙文

一、“写人记叙文”写作增分指导

[写作题目]

(2023·全国甲卷改编)你们学校正举办主题为“用英文讲中国故事”的征文活动。请你以一位中国历史人物为题写一篇短文投稿。内容包括：1．人物简介及事迹；2.意义或启示。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式作答。TheHistoricalFigureinChina

[悟满分作文·厚写作功底]TheHistoricalFigureinChinaAmongtheChinesehistoricalfiguresthatarewidelyacknowledged,FanZhongyanisthemostinfluentialinmyopinion.Herearethereasons.KnownasaChinesewriterandpoliticianintheSongDynasty,FanZhongyanwashighlyappreciatedbecausehemadegreatcontributionstosociety.Hesparednoefforttocarryoutaseriesofreformstomakehiscountryprosperous.Besides,heproposedtheestablishmentofanationalschoolsystem,whichhadafar-reachinginfluenceontheChineseeducationalsystem.Whatimpressesmemostishisfamousphilosophyoflife：“Bethefirsttoworryaboutthetroublesacrosstheland,thelasttoenjoyuniversalhappiness.”FanZhongyanissucharolemodelthathealwaysencouragesmetobeamanofnoblecharacter.学亮点写法1．学亮丽开头

作者在本文首段开门见山，直奔主题：引出对自己最有影响力的历史人物——范仲淹。2．学高级表达(1)使用高级词汇和词块，如：bewidelyacknowledged,influential,knownas,behighlyappreciated,madegreatcontributionsto,sparenoeffort等。(2)准确运用高级句式，如：定语从句thatarewidelyacknowledged,whichhadafar-reaching...；倒装句Hereare...；状语从句such...thathealwaysencouragesme...；主语从句Whatimpressesmemost...；非谓语动词短语作宾补encouragesmetobe...等。3．学精彩结尾

结尾巧妙引用大家熟知的范仲淹的人生哲学“先天下之忧而忧，后天下之乐而乐”来表明该历史人物对自己的人生启示，说服力强，很容易引起读者的共鸣。4．学行文逻辑

本文首段中Herearethereasons.有承上启下的作用。第二段的首句为本段的主旨概括句，Besides进一步对范仲淹做出的重大贡献进行列举。尾段第一句起到承上启下的作用。总之，本文思路严谨，句与句之间、段落与段落之间合理衔接过渡，全文连贯流畅，传达意义完整且具有启迪性。[积写作素材·造吸睛亮点]Ⅰ.开头部分：引出所要介绍的人物并简要描述1．ThepersonIadmiremostis...,afamous/greatscientistknownas...2．Myrolemodelis...,a(n)outstanding/distinguished/talentedscientisttitled...3．Throughouthis/herlife,...demonstratedincrediblecourage,whichallowedhim/hertoaccomplishgreatthings.4．Onthejourneyofmygrowth,therearemanypeoplewhohavecaredaboutmeandhelpedmewhenI'mintrouble.Amongthem,themostimportantoneismygrandma.5．AsformyfavouritefigureinChinesehistory,itmustbeWeiYuan,agreatthinkerinthelateQingDynasty.6．AmongtheoutstandingfiguresinChinesehistory,CaoCaoismyfavorite,whosestoriesfullydisplayhisgiftandstrategyinmilitary.7．ConfuciuslivedintheSpringandAutumnPeriodandhewasthefirstaswellasthemostrespectededucatorinChinaaccordingtotherecordeddocuments.8．IwouldreallyliketointerviewhimbecauseheisnotonlythefirstChinesetoenterspacebutalsooneofthegreatestastronautsintheworld.9．Iintendtorecommendhimbecausewhatheimpressesonusisnotonlyhisexpertiseinteachingbuthiscareforus.10....isconsideredtobeoneofthemostinfluentialfiguresinhistoryduetohisaccomplishments.Ⅱ.主体部分：详细介绍此人的事迹、个人经历、贡献等1．Heexpressedhisemotionsinpoemsdirectlyeverytimehewasfrustratedbyhisunsuccessfulcareer,whichformedhisuniquestyleofwriting.2．Besidestakingcareofmylife,shealsotaughtmealotofusefulknowledgewhichwillcontributetomysuccessinlife.3．SheisaChineseteacher.Owingtoherhelp,mywritingskillisbetterthanmoststudentsinmyclass.4．Itwasmygrandmawhogavemeahappyandrichchildhood.AsIamgrowingup,IfeelsogratefultoherthatIwillliveuptoherexpectations.5．ItgoeswithoutsayingthatConfuciushasagreateffectonthevaluesoflatergenerations.6．Herspiritsinspiremeandmillionsofothergirlstoliveanindependentlifeandtoberesponsibleforourowndecisions.7....isknownforhavingaccomplishedmajorbreakthroughsinthefieldof...8....leftalastingimpacton...byintroducingtechnology,whichcontinuestoinfluence...today.Ⅲ.结尾部分：点明被介绍人的品质，表达作者内心的启示等1．Havingsetagreatexampletousstudents,shefullydeservesmyrespect.2．Shewasquiteoptimisticandenergetic.Shebroughtmealotofhappinessandcourage.Ilearnedsomethingpreciousfromherbeliefinlife.3．Heissuchalearnedpersonthatwealladmirehimverymuch.4．Heisaconfidentandindependentyoungmanwithapositiveattitudetowardslife.5．Heisfamousasapopularteacherforhisinterestingteachingmethod.6．Heisrespectedforhisgreatdeterminationinthecontributiontotheteaching.7．Heiswellthoughtofbyallthestudentsandparents.8．Iamgreatlyinfluenced/movedbyhisselflessnessanddevotiontothecountry.Ialsowanttobeamanofvalue.9....servesasasourceofinspirationforfuturegenerations,remindingusofwhatispossibleandmotivatingustoachievegreatness.10....canserveasrolemodels,illustratingtheimportanceofhardwork,perseverance,anddedicationinachievingsuccess.[建写作模型·展规范形体]Thepersonwhoimpressesmemostis

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二、“记事记叙文”写作增分指导

[写作题目](2023·全国乙卷改编)学校英文报组织同学们分享自己在假期中学到的新技能，请你以此为主题写一篇短文投稿。内容包括：1．简要描述；2.体验和感受。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式作答。LearningaNewSkill

[悟满分作文·厚写作功底]LearningaNewSkillItisimportantforustomastersomebasiclivingskillstoprepareusforourfuturelife.ThatiswhyIlearnedhowtocookduringtheMayDayholiday.Sincemymotherisskilledatcooking,Idecidedtolearnfromher.Earlyinthemorningweboughtsomeingredients,includingsomevegetables,meatandafishinthelocalmarket.Oncewegotbackhome,Ibegantowashandcutthemcarefully.Undertheguidanceofmymother,Iturnedonthegascooker.Ifirststir-friedtwovegetables.ThenIcookedmeatwithpotatoes.Themostdifficulttasktodowascookfishwithtomatoes.However,Ifinallydidit.ThemomentIputthedishesonthetable,myparentsgavemethethumbs-up.IfeltsoproudthatIsharedhouseworkwithmyparents,whichalsoshowedIhadgrownup.

学亮点写法1．学亮丽开头

首段第一句把新技能赋予了深刻的含义，暗示作者即将介绍自己学习到的生活新技能。从第二句中的cookduringtheMayDayholiday可知作者在劳动节学习了做饭这一生活技能。劳动节这一背景的设置很巧妙，丰富了做饭这一技能的含义。2．学高级表达(1)使用高级词汇和词块，如：isskilledat,earlyinthemorning,including,undertheguidanceof,stir-fried,themostdifficulttasktodo,thumbs-up等。(2)准确运用高级句式，如：It作形式主语Itisimportantforus...；表语从句ThatiswhyIlearned...；状语从句Sincemymotherisskilledatcooking...Oncewegotback...ThemomentIput...；宾语从句soproudthat...；定语从句whichalsoshowedIhad...等。3．学精彩结尾

结尾叙述作者学会了做饭，受到了父母的赞扬，内心感到自豪，感觉自己长大了。本段自然升华了文章主旨：做饭是一种家务劳动技能，这种技能的获得会让人喜悦与自豪。4．学行文逻辑

本文首段中两句话之间存在因果关系，cookduringtheMayDayholiday引出第二段内容。第二段的首句为背景铺垫，Earlyinthemorning...Oncewegotbackhome...first...Then...finally...等表达的运用把作者学习做饭的整个过程衔接起来。尾段情感自然升华。[积写作素材·造吸睛亮点]Ⅰ.开头部分：引出事件/交代背景1．Earlyinthemorningwearrivedat.../Uponourarrival,wewerewarmlywelcomedby...2．Thissummer,Itookadivingtriptotheunderseaworld,whichturnedtobeextremelyfantastic.3．ItwastheNationalDayholidayandIhadsevendaysoff，soIwenttovisitmygrandmainthecountryside.4．IwaswalkingalongtheparkyesterdaywhenIcaughtsightofanoldmanpushingawheelchairwithdifficulty.5．Asitbecamehotterandhotter,Iwenttogetherwithmybrothertomyuncle'shouse，asmallfarmhousehandeddownfromourforefathers,tospendthesummer.6．Therearemanymeaningfulcollectiveactivitiesinmymind,amongwhichthemostunforgettableoneisthefootballmatchIattendedlastyear.7．Duringtherecentvacation,Ilearnedanewskill—videoediting.8．WhenIwasinmyprimaryschool,Ihadanopportunitytoattendamusicalcontestheldinmyschool.Ⅱ.主体部分：介绍事件经过1．Atfirst，IdidfeelalittlebitnervousbutsoonIcalmeddown.2．Wewereonceagainamazedby...andcouldn'thelptakingpicturesfromtimetotime.3．Duringthewhole...,whatamusedusmostwastheperformanceby...,whichwasreallyfunny.4．Intheafternoon,wewentto...tohandoutleafletsinordertoraisepeople'sawarenessof...5．Takingadeepbreath，Igreetedtheaudienceandbeganmyspeech.Sincefullypreparedforit，Isucceededingivingfullplaytomyskills.6．Facedwiththeirexcellentskills,wewerenotdiscouraged.Instead,everymemberofourteamtookeverychancetocatchtheballandpassitontotheotherteammates.7．Atfirst,Ifounditchallengingtonavigatethesoftwareandunderstandthevariouseditingtoolsandtechniques.However...8．Iwatched,memorizedthestepsofcooking,andpracticeditbymyself.9．Inthebeginning,itwasquitedifficultto...However,itdidnotdemoralizeme.10．Earlyinthemorningwebought...Oncewegotbackhome,Ibegantowashandcutthemcarefully.Ⅲ.结尾部分：介绍事件结果/表达个人感受1．Aslongaswebelieveinourselves,we'resuretosucceedintheend.2．Throughthisactivity,wenotonlypassedourlovetoothers,butalsobenefitedalot.3．Fromthisexperience,I'velearnedthatwheneverwefacechallenges,weshouldfighthard.4．Itwasanimportantstepforme.Igainedtheconfidenceandhadthefaithtobecomestronger.5．ItwasthroughthiscompetitionthatItrulyunderstoodthemeaningof“Chancefavorsonlythepreparedmind”．6．Howwonderfultheactivitywas!Itnotonlybroughtanamazingexperiencetomebutalsobroadenedmyhorizons.7．IfeltsoproudthatI...,whichalsoshowedIhadgrown