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韩炳华新高考写作题型：应用文概要写作读后续写《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》概要写作：提供一篇350词以内的短文，要求考生基于该短文写出一篇60词左右的内容概要。（满分25分）评分原则1、本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2、评分时，先根据所写概要的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。3、词数少于40的和多于80的，从总分中减去2分。评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：

(1)对原文要点的理解和呈现情况； (2)应用语法结构和词汇的准确性； (3)上下文的连贯性； (4)对各要点表达的独立性情况；档次描述第五档(21-25)—理解准确，涵盖全部要点。—能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇。—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。—完全使用自己的语言。第四档(16-20)—理解准确，涵盖绝大部分要点。—使用语法结构和词汇可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。—比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。—有个别整句抄自原文。各档次的给分范围和要求第三档(11-15)—理解较为准确，涵盖大部分要点。—所使用的语法结构和词汇虽有些错误，但不影响意义表达。—应用简单的语句间连接成分，使上下文内容连贯。—出现两句以上整句抄自原文现象。第二档(6-10)—理解有误差，仅涵盖半数要点。—有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。—较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。—出现两句以上整句抄自原文现象。第一档(1-5)—没有理解原文，造成概要内容与原文主题不符。—有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。—缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。—多个句子抄自原文。0—白卷、内容太少无法判断或所写内容与所提供内容无关。Narration（记叙文）Exposition（说明文）FormsofLiteratureArgumentation(议论文）Argumentation(议论文）TopicSupportingideasConclusion概要写作（满分25分）

阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。(Para1)Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,

thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.(Para2)Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardanger

wasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.So

didthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirt

inafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakena

bath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.

(Para3)Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighbor

eversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshave

movedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?

(Para4)Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,an

Americanimmunologist(免疫学家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmune

system.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.ThereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirtStep1:Read①topicsentence:②structure③supportingideasFindoutthetopicsentenceofeachparagraphthink,believe,consider,regard,argue,support,beconvincedthat,inone’sopinion,fromone’spointofviewYoumayneedtopayattentiontosomewordslike:

Para2:Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardanger

wasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.So

didthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirt

inafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakena

bath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.

Aparticulardanger

ExamplesofsomeEuropeancountries(Para3)Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighbor

eversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshave

movedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?

(Para4)Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,an

Americanimmunologist(免疫学家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmune

system.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.Step2:Makeanoutline

Topic:Thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirtsuppor-tingIdeas(Para2)(Para3)nowadays(Para4)

Inthe16thcenturysince18thcenturyPeoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease…hasnolongerbeenregardedas…cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth…encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmune

system

Step3:Rewritethesentencesinotherways

①Thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.different,mixed,various反义转换opinions,views,ideas同义词替换▲People’sattitudestodirtvaryindifferenttimes.towards句型转换▲Peopleholddifferentopinionstowardsdirtovertime.

▲Theattitudestodirtisnotalwaysthesame.②Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease.Haveatry!②Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease.think:believe,hold,consider,insist,argue,areconvinced….同义词替换blockoutdisease:prevent/protect/keepaway…fromillness;Onepossibleversion:②Inthe16thcentury,peoplebelievedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.③….dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.washoff,getridofbenefits,isbeneficialto,doesgoodto,contributesto…Onepossibleversion:③Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.④Nowadays,…encouragespeopletoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmune

system.④Onepossibleversion:Nowadays,somescientistsbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.Peopleareencouragedto…语态转换beexposedto..believe,support,agree,approve….①Peopleholdmixedopinions

towardsdirtonourskin.②Inthe16thcentury,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.③Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtmorethan200yearsago.Theyhavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.④Nowadays,somescientistsbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.However,Nevertheless/But/however③people

AddtwolinkingwordstomakethepassagecoherentStep4:Makethesummarycoherent④nowadays,

Step5:Revise(67words)Peopleholdmixedopinions

towardsdirtonourskin.Inthe16thcentury,peopleofsomeEuropeancountriesbelievedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Theyhavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.Butnowadays,somescientistsbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.4“C”:complete,correct,concise,coherentStep6:ClearlycopyyourdrafttothepaperHowtowriteasummary(argumentation)1.Read2.Makeanoutline

3.Rewrite4.Makeitcoherent5.Revise6.neatlycopy-Topic,structure,keysupportingsentences读后续写考试要求与评分标准一、考试要求提供一篇350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。读后续写或概要写作，两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用。二、评分标准（一）评分原则1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。3.所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分）。4.阅卷评分时，主要从以下四个方面考虑：（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）故事发展的合理性和上下文的连贯性。档次描述第五档(21-25)—与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。—内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。—所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20)—与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。—内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。—所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。—比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。（二）各档次给分范围及要求第三档(11-15)—与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。—写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义的表达。—应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10)—与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。—写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。—语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。—较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5)—与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差。—产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。—语法结构单调、词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。—缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。0—白卷、内容太少无法判断或所写内容与所提供内容无关。读后续写（一）HowtoTackleaContinuationTask江苏省邗江中学韩炳华Inthisclass,we’lllearnhowtoreadastory(theme,plot&feelings);howtodesigntheplotofacontinuation.Ausualdayathomeformeinvolvesusingmultipledigitaldevices—Iusemyphonetosendmessagestofriendsandreadthenews,andIusemylaptoptodomyhomeworkandwatchvideos.IalsohaveanMP3player,whichIusetolistentomusicandrockmusicismyfavorite.Ican’timaginemylifewithoutthesedigitaldevices.Mybrother,whoisalsomybestfriend,onceaskedaboutthisquestion,“ifwewenttoaplacewithoutelectricity,whatwouldwedo?”“Thatcan’tbetrue!Itwouldbeboring”Itoldhim.LastweekmybrotherandIwenttostaywithourgrandparents,bothlivingandworkingonafarmwhereisquiteremotely,withnothingnearbyformiles.Itisnicetoseethem,andithasbeenespeciallygreatrecentlybecauseIhavemanagedtopickupamobilesignal.MybrotherandIenjoyedourlivingtherewiththecompanyofourdigitaldevices.However,afewdaysago,weweresittinginthekitchenwhentherewasasuddenBANG!Thehousesuddenlysunkintodarkness.Weallgotupandgrabbedcandles,andimmediately,grandfatherwenttosearchforwhathappened.“It’snotonlyourhouse’sproblem.”saidgrandfather,“Thewholeareahaslostpower.”Oh,thequestionmybrotheronceaskedmecametrue!Ourgrandparentsdecidedtogotobed,asitwassodarkandit’stheirhabittogetasleepearly.MybrotherandIwantedtostayupalittlelonger,sowetriedtowatchaprogrammeonmylaptop,butthebatteryquicklydied.Ithentriedtousemyphone,butIcouldnolongergetasignal.Iguessedthatthepowercuthadalsoaffectedthemobilephonemast(天线塔).“Itdoesn’tmatter,”Isaidtomybrother,“WecanlistentomusiconmyMP3player.”But,ofcourse,thebatteriesdiedonthatsoonaswell.So,therewasnothingelsetodo,weturnedonourgrandparents’oldradio.Ihadnotactuallylistenedtoaradioforalongtime.Iusuallychoosemyownmusic.Initially,wewereabitrestless(坐立不安的).续写：Paragraph1:Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.

Paragraph2:Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.评分标准：优秀（21-25）内容丰富合理，逻辑性强，续写完整，与原文情境融恰度高词汇和语法结构运用多元、恰当，表达流畅，语言错误少且完全不影响理解段落与语句间衔接自然有效，全文结构清晰，上下文呼应且意义连贯内容语言表达篇章结构读是基础。读有”四要求”：一、提炼主题二、梳理情节三、探究情感四、把握风格写是主体。写要与原文“四一致”：一、主题一致二、情节一致三、情感一致四、风格一致读后续写一、背景人物事件，提炼主题意义二、开端发展高潮，梳理情节进程三、人物环境行为，探究情感变化四、遣词造句谋篇，把握文体风格一、基于原文结局，深化主题意义二、确立叙事顺序，确定情节走向三、设计矛盾冲突，符合情感逻辑四、模仿语言语气，保持风格一致SettingsImplicationAusualdayathomeformeinvolvesusingmultipledigitaldevicesIcan’timaginemylifewithoutthesedigitaldevices.aheavydependenceondigitaldevicesCharactersme,mybrother,mygrandparentsReadingfortheme:

EventOpeningsentenceswenttostaywithourgrandparentsandmetwithpowerfailure;afterthebatteriesofdigitaldevicesdied,theyhadtolistentotheoldradio.Para.1:Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Para.2:Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Readingfortheme:Theme：Ireliedondigitaldevicesheavily,butonenightwithoutpowerinmygrandparents’housechangedmydependenceondigitaldevices.Readingfortheme:EventsPlotBeginning(起)wenttostaywithourgrandparentsDevelopment(承)weenjoyedlivingtherewithourdigitaldevices

Conflict(转)thewholearealostpowerthebatteriesofthedigitaldevicesdiedmyphonecouldnolongergetasignalwehadtoturnontheoldradioPara.1Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Para.2Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Ending(合)pleaseddisappointedrestlesswelearnedtoappreciatelifewithouttoomuchdependenceondigitaldevicesReadingforplot:ElementsDetailsImplication

Characters

Dialogue:“ifwewenttoaplacewithoutelectricity,whatwouldwedo?”“Thatcan’tbetrue!Itwouldbeboring”

Innerthoughts:Ican’timaginemylifewithoutthesedigitaldevices.

Environ-mentTheylivequiteremotely,withnothingnearbyformiles.

BehaviorMybrotherandIenjoyedourlivingherewiththeaccompanyofourdigitaldevices.wantedtostayupalittlelonger,so…,butthebatteryquicklydied.Ihadnotactuallylistenedtoaradioforalongtime.Initially,wewereabitrestless

dependentdependentlifewouldbeboringw/o…restlesspleaseddisappointedReadingforfeelings:主题、情节和情感theme,plot&feelings主题线：mydependenceondigitaldevices.情节线---情感线reliedondigitaldevices,couldn’timagineadaywithoutthem(dependent)---stillenjoyedmyselfwiththecompanyofdigitaldevices(pleased)---powerfailure,

batteries

died(disappointed)---hadtoturnontheoldradio(restless)654312Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Initially,wewereabitrestless.主题线：Ireliedondigitaldevicesheavily,butonenightwithoutpoweratmygrandparents’housechangedmydependenceondigitaldevices.情节发展与情感变化同步进行根据提供的段首句深化主题：Value?Attitude?Para.11.Dothewriterlikethefolkmusic?Ifnot,Howdidhefeelandwhatwouldhedo?2.Whatwouldhisbrotherdo?4.Whatmightbethesolution?5.Howdidtheyfeelatlast?6.Didtheyfallasleepwithmusiconornot?Para.21.Whatdidthewriterdoafterbeingwakenup?2.Wouldheandhisbrotherstillplaywithdigitaldeviceslikebefore?Ifso,howdidtheyfeel?3.Wouldtheydosomethingforachange?Ifso,thenwhat?4.Wouldtheytotallygetridoftheirdependenceonthedigitaldevices?Ifnot,thenhowtoexpress?Designyourplotbyaskingquestions日新修能蓄德Thanks！读后续写（二）HowtoTackleaContinuationTask江苏省邗江中学韩炳华Inthisclass,we’lllearnhowtogivea(n)accurate/detaileddescriptionofsettings,apersonandanaction;howtofollowthestyleofthegivenstory.读是基础。读有四要：一、提炼主题二、梳理情节三、探究情感四、把握风格写是主体。写要与原文“四一致”：一、主题一致二、情节一致三、情感一致四、风格一致读后续写一、背景人物事件，提炼主题意义二、开端发展高潮，梳理情节进程三、人物环境行为，探究情感变化四、遣词造句谋篇，把握文体风格一、基于原文结局，深化主题意义二、确立叙事顺序，确定情节走向三、设计矛盾冲突，符合情感逻辑四、模仿语言语气，保持风格一致Rereadthepassagetofindouthowthewriterdescribeshisdepedenceonthedigitaldevices.---Iusemyphonetosendmessagestofriendsandreadthenews,andIusemylaptoptodomyhomeworkandwatchvideos.IalsohaveanMP3player,whichIusetolistentomusicandrockmusicismyfavorite.--Ican’timaginemylifewithoutthesedigitaldevices.---andithasbeenespeciallygreatrecentlybecauseIhavemanagedtopickupamobilesignal.MybrotherandIenjoyedourlivingherewiththecompanyofourdigitaldevices.--sowetriedtowatchaprogram,butthebatteryquicklydied.Ithentriedtousemyphone,butIcouldnolongergetasignal“Itdoesn’tmatter,”Isaidtomybrother,“WecanlistentomusiconmyMP3player.”But,ofcourse,thebatteriesdiedonthatsoonaswell.Oh,thequestionmybrotheronceaskedmecametrue!Rereadthepassagetofindouthowthewriterdescribeshisdepedenceonthedigitaldevices.Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.

Atthebeginning,wedidn’tlikeitatall.Weturnedtheradioonandoffimpatiently.However,afterlisteningforawhile,webegantogetverydifferentfeelings.Itseemedasifwewerelisteningtosomebodytellingustheirstoriesandtheiremotionslongago.Itmadeusrelaxedandgraduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(61词)前文rockmusicismyfavoriteThemusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Atthebeginning,wedidn’tlike

itatall.Weturnedtheradioonandoffimpatiently.However,afterlisteningforawhile,webegantogetverydifferentfeelings.Itseemedasifwewerelisteningtosomebodytellingustheirstoriesandtheiremotionslongago.Itmadeusrelaxedandgraduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(61词)情感变化与情节发展同步Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Atthebeginning,wedidn’tlikeitatall.Weturnedtheradioonandoff

impatiently.However,afterlisteningforawhile,webegantogetverydifferentfeelings.Itseemedasifwewerelisteningtosomebodytellingustheirstoriesandtheiremotionslongago.Itmadeusrelaxedandgraduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(61词)精心选词表达准确Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Atthebeginning,wedidn’tlikeitatall.Weturnedtheradioonandoffimpatiently.However,afterlisteningforawhile,webegantogetverydifferentfeelings.Itseemedasifwewerelisteningtosomebodytellingustheirstoriesandtheiremotionslongago.Itmadeusrelaxedandgraduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(61词)细节描写使内容丰满Themusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Atthebeginning,wedidn’tlikeitatall.Weturnedtheradioonandoffimpatiently.However,afterlisteningforawhile,webegantogetverydifferentfeelings.Itseemedasifwewerelisteningtosomebodytellingustheirstoriesandtheiremotionslongago.Itmadeusrelaxedandgraduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(61词)与下段衔接自然Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.

Isprangoutofbedinaflashandcouldn’twaittopoweronthelaptopforgames.Strangely,playingcomputergamesseemedkindofboringtous,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkwiththeradioon,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn’tfeelbored.Grandpabeamedatuswithsatisfaction.Thesunwaspouringbrightly,abreezebrushinggently,andbirdssingingmerrily.Lifewithoutdigitaldevicesshouldbesobeautifulthatitseemedlikeasweetdream.(101)符合人设Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Isprangoutofbedinaflashandcouldn’twaittopoweronthelaptopforgames.Strangely,playingcomputergamesseemedkindofboringtous,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkwiththeradioon,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn’tfeelbored.Grandpabeamedatuswithsatisfaction.Thesunwaspouringbrightly,abreezebrushinggently,andbirdssingingmerrily.Lifewithoutdigitaldevicesshouldbesobeautifulthatitseemedlikeasweetdream.(101)准确，温和的变化Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Isprangoutofbedinaflashandcouldn’twaittopoweronthelaptopforgames.Strangely,playingcomputergamesseemedkindofboringtous,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkwiththeradioon,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn’tfeelbored.Grandpabeamedatuswithsatisfaction.Thesunwaspouringbrightly,abreezebrushinggently,andbirdssingingmerrily.Lifewithoutdigitaldevicesshouldbesobeautifulthatitseemedlikeasweetdream.(101)准确，温和的变化描写次要人物进一步刻画主要人物Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Isprangoutofbedinaflashandcouldn’twaittopoweronthelaptopforgames.Strangely,playingcomputergamesseemedkindofboringtous,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkwiththeradioon,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn’tfeelbored.Grandpabeamedatuswithsatisfaction.Thesunwaspouringbrightly,abreezebrushinggently,andbirdssingingmerrily.Lifewithoutdigitaldevicesshouldbesobeautifulthatitseemedlikeasweetdream.(101)环境描写符合主人公心情享受没有电子设备的快乐Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Isprangoutofbedinaflashandcouldn’twaittopoweronthelaptopforgames.Strangely,playingcomputergamesseemedkindofboringtous,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkwiththeradioon,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn’tfeelbored.Grandpabeamedatuswithsatisfaction.Thesunwaspouringbrightly,abreezebrushinggently,andbirdssingingmerrily.Lifewithoutdigitaldevicesshouldbesobeautifulthatitseemedlikeasweetdream.(101)深化主题意义Evaluatethestudents’thirddraftsThemusicthatwasbeingplayedwastraditionalfolkmusic.Ididn’tlikeitandquicklyturnedtheradiooff.“HowIwishIcouldescapefromhere.”Icomplainedtomybrother.“Whynothaveanothergoatfolkmusic?”mybrothersuggested.Sincetherewasnootherchoice,IreluctantlyturneditonagainbutlaterIfounditrelaxingandsortofinteresting.Graduallywefellasleepwiththemusicon.(64词)对话符合人设，推动故事发展Inthemorning,ourgrandmotherwokeusupandtoldusthatthepowerhadreturned,andIwassosurprisedIsleptwellwithoutdigitaldevices.Iimmediatelychargedmydeaddevicesandcouldn’twaittoplaygames.Buttomysurprise,Ididn’tfeelasexcitedasbeforebutalittlebored,soafterbreakfastwedecidedtohelpdosomefarmworkforachange,whichsurprisedgrandparentsalittlebit.Withthefolkmusicflowingaround,weweededonthefarm,sweatedalotbutdidn'tfeelboredatall.“Ican’timaginehavinganexcitingholidaywithoutdigitaldevices.”Isaidtomybrotheronourwaybackhome.“Absolutely!Therearesomanyinterestingthingsbesidesdigitaldevices.”respondedmybrother.(100词)与上文照应合理、深化主题Tips:1.Thethemeofthecontinuationshouldagreewiththatofthegivenpartofthestorythewritertriestoconveytous.主题一致2.Theemotionalchangesshouldgohandinhandwiththedevelopingplot.情节一致、情感一致3.Thecontinuationshouldfollowthestyleofthegivenstory.续写部分与前文风格一致4.Settingdescriptionswillhelpmirrortheemotionofthecharacters.环境描写表现人物情感5.Wisechoicesofadjectives,adverbsorverbswillhelpaccuratelyexpressthetheme.精心选择形容词、副词或动词6.Focusonthemaincharactersfirstbutalittlebitdescriptiononthesupportingcharacterswillhelphighlighttheimageofthemaincharacters.聚焦主要人物，刻画次要人物也可以为主要人物添彩日新修能蓄德Thanks！四、读写一体化教学的学习活动设计（一）活动目标核心化——对话主题意义（二）活动内容整合化——构建关联系统（三）活动过程递进化——推动意义建构（四）活动推进问题化——提升思维品质（五）活动实施操作化——聚焦学会学习（六）活动共享表达化——保障以评促学（一）活动目标核心化——对话主题意义

主题意义是指主题呈现的核心思想或深层含义。对主题意义的探究是语篇教学的核心。要达成深化理解主题意义的目标，就要精心设计学习活动，制定清晰可量的目标，做到每个学习活动都为最终达成目标而设，每一次对话、每一次合作都要以外显的表达作为评价促学的手段，整合学习内容，引领学生语言能力、文化意识、思维品质和学习能力的融合发展。（一）活动目标核心化——对话主题意义

语篇分析一般从what，why和how三个维度展开。What关注语篇的事实性内容，通过理解文章的主旨大意和主要内容，形成语篇的概念意义。Why通过分析作者的写作意图，推断出文本传递的人际意义。How通过研究语篇的组织结构、语言风格等，掌握语篇意义。WHATHOWWHY从探索到的中心思想出发，研究作者围绕中心选材组材、布局谋篇、遣词造句等衔接与连贯手段，这是从思想到语言、从内容到形式、从内部到外表、从整体到部分的心理过程。二读——深入语篇从感知语言文字人手，由词到句，由句到段，逐步理解，从而把握课文的中心思想，这是一个从语言到思想、从形式到内容、从外表到内部、从部分到整体的心理过程。一读——基于语篇在语篇解读中，与其说是读者与文本对话，不如说是读者与文本的作者对话。既然是对话，那么作者与读者总是以一定的社会角色进行对话。作者的交流手段、视角、态度怎样？分析语气、情感表达和言语功能。三读——超越语篇（一）活动目标核心化——对话主题意义

设计学习活动时，教师要紧紧围绕深化语篇主题意义的目标，设计读后续写学习情境，即在学生读懂、读通、读透语篇主题意义后，运用所学解决实际问题。引导学生通过对话、合作活动，例如，分类、概括信息，建构新的概念，分析、推断信息的逻辑关系，正确评判各种思想观点，辨析语言和文化表现的各种现象，学会使用在语篇中获取写作任务所需的语言、内容、语篇结构等信息，理性地表达自己的思想。教学案例1：UnitWelcometotheunitReadingGrammarandusageIntegratedskillsExtendedreadingProject

BacktoschoolAvideoRealizingyourpotentialImportanceofsettinggoalsTipsonsettinggoalsStartinganewschoolclubSchoollifeintheUKMakingabookletaboutyourschool（二）活动内容整合化——构建关联系统在设计活动内容时，教师首先要以文本分析为一切活动的起点，然后分析学生相关话题的已知经验、能力水平以及心理状况，他们在理解该语篇可能存在的障碍，确定已知与未知之间的信息差，确定其“最近发展区”，即i+1，制定适合学生发展的教学目标和教学重难点。（二）活动内容整合化——构建关联系统

深化主题意义的读写活动可以丰富写作素材，写作促进阅读需求，阅读的数量和质量决定写作的宽度和深度，两者相互促进，相得益彰。然而，阅读、写作分属于输入、输出过程，二者客观上相对独立。寻找读写过程的衔接点并构建关联系统成为优化读写协同过程的重要问题。阅读学写作练概括主题意义分段、概括段意区分内容主次捕捉中心段品评词句怎样表达中心思想怎样拟写作提纲怎样安排详略怎样突出中心怎样遣词造句（二）活动内容整合化——构建关联系统（二）活动内容整合化——构建关联系统输主入题语语篇境思想观点语言材料语篇结构表达技巧文化知识思维方式主输题出语语境篇思想观点语言材料语篇结构表达技巧文化知识思维方式协同阅读（理解）写作（表达）教学案例2：第一册第一单元教学案例3：第一册第二单元Cause1:Teenagers’physicalgrowthmayresultinsuchfamilytensions.Cause2:Teenagers’developingmentalneedscanalsoinfluenceparent-childrelationships.Solution:Teenagersshouldhaveregularandhonestcommunicationwiththeirparents.Conclusion:Everything