2024届高考英语作文复习专项：读后续写遇险类-帮助冻伤男子脱险 讲义素材

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使其构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasjustbefore

8

am,

October

17.PamBalessteppedontothesnow⁃coveredJewellTrail

(小路).Sheplannedasix⁃hourclimbinghikethroughNewHampshiresMountWashingtonStatePark.Shehadpackedforalmosteveryaccident,

includingclothes,

heatpacks,

abottleofhotchocolate...

(装备,伏笔)

Andsheintendedtowalkalone.Apieceofpaperonthedashboardofhercardetailedhertrip:

startupJewellTrailandreturntohercarbeforesomeforecastedbadweatherarrives.Pamalwaysleftherhikingplansinhercar.

ShewasavolunteeronthePemigewassetValleySearchandRescueTeam.(说明身份,伏笔)

At

10:30

am,

theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.(天气,伏笔)

Pamaddedevenmoreclothestoprotectherselffromthecoldwindsandfog.

(加衣)

Thenshenoticedsomething:

asinglesetoffootprintsinthesnowaheadofher.

(一个人的脚印,伏笔)

Shedbeenfollowingfainttracksalldayandhadntgiventhemmuchthought,

becausesomanypeopleclimbedJewellTrail.Butthese,

sherealised,

hadbeenmadebyapairoftrainers.

By

11

am,

Pamwasgettingcold,

despitemovingfast.Sheputonanextratop.

(再次加衣)

GoodthingIpackedheavy,

shethought.Shedecidedtoabandonherplan.Returningtohercarwasarequirement.

StronggustsofwindattackedherbackandleftsideandtheonlythingkeepingheronGulfsideTrailwasthetracksinthesnow.

(天气,伏笔)

Asshefoughtthewindandheavysleet,

hereyessearchingforsometypeofshelter,

thetracksmadeahardleft⁃handturnoffthetrail.

Allofasudden,

shefeltalarmed.ShewassurethehikercouldlosehiswayandwasheadingstraighttowardthechallengingtrailsoftheGreatGulf.Pamfollowedthetrackscarefully.Sheroundedacornerandsawaman

sitting

motionlessbesideastone.HestaredinthedirectionofGreatGulf.She

approachedhim.

Hisheadwasbare.Helookedsoakingwet.Thickfrostcoveredhisjacket.Ashiseyestrackedherslowly,

hebarelyturnedhishead.(故事高潮,远足者出事)

注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.________________________________________________________________Theyhadtogetoutofthere.______________________________________________________________ExampleanalysisTipsforContinuingWritingAfterReading11:"EmotionalandSceneryIntegration"toEnhancetheEmotionsofCharactersinScenery"Allsceniclanguageisemotionallanguage,"andappropriatedescriptionofenvironmentaldetailscanachievetheeffectof"blendingemotionsandscenes,"highlightingtheemotionsofcharactersandeffectivelypromotingthedevelopmentofthestoryplotExpressingjoyandjoy:Itcandescribewarmsunshine,blueskyandwhiteclouds,orgentlebreeze,orusecomprehensivescenessuchasspringmorningsunshine,bloomingflowersinthebreeze,etc.,toenhancethejoyfulemotionsofthecharacters;②Expressingsadnessandoppression:candescribedarkclouds,stormyweather,oremptyandlonelyscenestohighlightthecharacter'soppression;③Expressingimpatienceandhelplessness:Describinghotweatherorstunningscenerythatfailstocapturethecharacter'sattention,contrastingwiththecharacter'sinneranxietyandanxiety;④Showfearandtension:Renderthestorm,darknessorusestaticcontrast,andusethestaticoftheenvironmenttocontrastthetensionandfearofthecharacters.TopiclinkThethemefeaturesofrescuingpeoplefromdifficultieswillinvolve:①steppingforwardtohelpothersintimesofcrisis,suchasusinglearnedfirstaidknowledgeorskillstosuccessfullysavepeoplefromlife-threateningsituations;②Asuddenfirebrokeoutinthebuilding,andthepolice/publicsacrificedthemselvestosavelives;③Someoneunfortunatelydrowned,andthecrowd/passersbygatheredtheircouragetojumpintothewatertorescuethem.Thefirststepofthethree-stepmethod:describingthefamilyenvironmentoratmosphere+emotionssuchasdissatisfaction,worry,orexclusion;Step2:Conflictprocess+actionsandemotions;Step3:Conflictresolution,parent-childcommunication+joy/relief+harmoniousrelationship(+sublimation).ThefirststepistograspthemainideaandtwolinesoftheoriginaltextAfterarrangingeverything,PamBales,avolunteerofthesearchandrescueteam,wenthikingalone.Duetothebadweather,shegaveupthehikeandfoundafrostbittenpersononherwayback.Theplotlineoftheoriginaltextisasfollows:mountaineeringandhiking→gettingcoldandwearingclothes,discoveringfootprintsofhikersalone→gettingcolderandgivinguphiking→discoveringfrostbiteofhikers;Emotionalline:thoughtful→wellorganized→determined→alarmed.Narrativeintention:HowPamBalessafelyescapedwithafrostbittenman.Step2:DeterminethedirectionofcontinuationbasedontheinformationfromthefirsttwosentencesFirstsentenceoftwoparagraphsFrame1:Basedonthekeyinformation"turnedintorescuingtheman"atthebeginningoftheparagraph,itcanbeinferredthattheparagraphcandescribetheconditionofaman'sfrostbite,howtorescuehim,andtheresultsoftherescue;2Theendingsentencecancreateastoryconflict,suchasamanbeingunabletowalkduetofrostbite.TwoboxesandtwoheadsPositiveenergy①Accordingtothefirstsentenceoftheparagraph,"Theyhadtogetoutofthere",itcanbedescribedhowtotakethemanwhowasfrozenoutandsafelyescapethedanger.Thisparagraphcancreateanotherconflict,suchasiftheweatherbecomesworse;②Thelastsentencecanexpressaman'sgratitude.ThethirdstepistoadddetailsthatarehighlyharmoniousandreasonableintheoriginalcontinuationThedevelopmentofthetwoemotionallinesinthehighlyharmoniouscontinuationsectionshouldbeconsistentwiththetwoemotionallinesintheoriginaltext,inordertomakethetwoemotionsmutuallypleasing.Theplotlineis:theman'scondition→rescue→rescueresult→badweather→difficultreturn→safeescape;Theemotionallinecanbesharp→decisive→worded→struggling→relieved→gradient.Adddetailedactiondetails:Thefirstparagraphinvolveshowtorescueandcandescribetherescueactionindetail;Environmentaldetails:Therearemanydescriptionsoftheenvironmentintheoriginaltext,andinthecontinuationsection,descriptionsofadverseweathercanbeaddedtocreateconflictsbetweenpeopleandtheenvironment,whichisalsoinlinewiththeoriginaltext.Step4:PerfectlycoherentexpressionalongthecharacteristicsoftheoriginallanguageTheoriginaltextutilizedalargenumberofsimplesentences,nonfiniteverbs,coordinatesentences,andtimeadverbialclauses.ThecontinuationsectionshouldcontinuetousethisfeaturetodescribetheactionsandenvironmentofPamBales.参考答案：Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.Shefoundhewassufferingfromfrostbiteonhisfeet.Hecouldhardlymoveanythingexcepthiseyes.Withouthesitation,shecleanedthefrostfromhisjacketandquicklywarmedhisheadwithhiswarmclothes.Shepulledouttheheatpacksshehadpreparedforherselfbeforeshelefttowarmtheman’sstifflegsandpouredhimsomehotchocolate.Slowly,themanwasabletomoveslightlybuthewastooweaktospeak.Hewassobadlyhurtthathecouldn’twalk.Theyhadtogetoutofthere.Thewindwashowling.Itwasgettingcolderandcolder,andiftheydidn’tgetoutofthere,theywouldsoondie.Shecarriedthemanonherbackandwalkedslowlyalongthepath,notdaringtorest,notdaringtostay,forwalkingalsobroughtwarmth.Withalotofeffort,Pamfinallyreachedhercarandsavedtheman’slife.Shewasexhaustedanditwasallworthit.Themanwasevenmoregrateful.默写版：Her