备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材9遇险救援

热考话题9遇险救援[2020浙江改编]Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside"thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld"—thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes，butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（吼叫），thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.人物主要角色"I"和mywifeElli：从文中的描述"yelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshells""radioedthecampmanagerforhelp""Makingthebestof...tooksomepicturesofthebear"可知，"我"和妻子在面对熊时沉着冷静、勇敢，续写时可以通过动作描写凸显人物的这一特征。主要角色apolarbear：从文中的描述"pulledandbitthewire""tryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）""angryroar（吼叫）""loudnoises...willscarebearsoff"表明，熊凶猛但害怕大的响声，这也为续写第二段直升机到来时的巨大声音暂时吓退熊埋下了伏笔。情节及情感线"我"和妻子到一个研究营地拍北极熊的照片（感到兴奋、刺激）→一只饥饿的北极熊被"我们"的食物吸引过来（感到害怕）→尝试各种驱赶方法无果后，"我"用无线电向营地经理寻求帮助（感到放松了一些）→听从建议，用胡椒喷剂驱赶熊（担心围栏支撑不到救援到来）主题根据原文中的"ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew""Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp"以及"usepepperspray"可知，本文主要体现面对危险要沉着冷静，充分利用资源逃脱危险的主题。续写第一段根据原文和本段的提示语可知，熊被胡椒喷剂刺痛眼睛，被激怒，洗眼睛后返回营地，紧接着就该讲述熊发动更猛烈的攻击以及"我们"的反应和反击。尾句衔接第二段提示语："我们"与熊的斗争到了千钧一发之际。本段侧重通过动作和感受描写体现人熊大战的激烈场面。续写第二段本段首句提到直升机的到来，接着该讲述直升机到达后"我们"安全撤离，交代熊的去向，并讲述"我们"的感受等。1.Thebearlookedatusangrilyandranforward.①用glareat代替句中的lookatangrily，更加简练、形象地描述"熊怒视我们"的状态。Thebearglaredatusandranforward.②为句①增加熊龇牙的面部表情，并用现在分词短语作状语，进一步凸显熊的愤怒和狂躁。Thebearglaredatusexposinghissharpteeth，andranforward.③用时间状语从句改写句②，营造出一种熊边跑边龇牙和怒视的恐怖氛围。Thebearglaredatusexposinghissharpteethasheranforward.2.Wewerefrightened.①用具体的感受描写表现"我"的害怕，用肢体动作描写表现Elli的恐惧，体现用词的丰富性，也使人物形象更丰满。IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear.②为句①Elli增加面部表情描写，并用独立主格结构，更进一步体现Elli的恐惧。IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear，hermouthwideopen.③为句②补充原因状语（seesuchaterriblesight），并用现在分词短语作状语，使上下文衔接更紧密、行文更流畅。Seeingsuchaterriblesight，IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear，hermouthwideopen.3.Werantothehelicopter.①增加"我们"逃离熊时的动作细节，使句子更有画面感。Westeppedawayandrantothehelicopter.②为句①的动作增加副词，体现"我们"逃脱困境时的急切和敏捷。Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterfast.③用as...assb.can句式升级句②中跑向直升机的动作，将紧迫感进一步具象化，让表达更高级。Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterasfastaswecould.Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Heglaredatusexposinghissharpteethasheranforward.Andagainthebearstoodonhisbacklegs，wantingtobitethefencelikeamonster.Seeingsuchaterriblesight，Icouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommyback（感到后背一阵冷意）andElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear（吓得呆住了），hermouthwideopen.Ihadtotakeaction.Igatheredupmycourage（鼓起勇气）andtriedtofrightenthebearawaywiththepeppersprayagain，butfailed.Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.Itlandednearourcampanditsloudnoisesscaredthebear.Hebackedupafewsteps.Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterasfast