2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写 一次难忘的远足讲义-

读后续写：一次难忘的远足阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Mr.Taylorcheckedagain:water,food,bandage,medicines,acompass,andamapwrappedinplastic…Bingo!Heputallthathepreparedforthecominghikingintohisbackpack.Mr.Taylorwasfondofhiking,thistimeinparticular,foritwasthefirsttimeforhimtohikewithhistwosons,HarryandJoel.JoellikedreadingbooksaboutexplorersandHarryjoinedthehikingclubinhisschoolthisterm.“Itwillbeanunforgettableexperience,definitely.”hewhisperedtohimself,unconsciouslyasmilespreadingoverhisface.

HarryandJoel,however,arguedforthefirstthreemilesoftheirhikingtrip.HarryaccusedJoelofwearingsmellyoldshoes.JoelblamedHarryforusingallofthebugspray(喷雾防虫剂).HarrytoldJoelhesmelledterrible,JoelcalledHarryacoward(懦夫).

“Willthetwoofyoujustquietdownandenjoyourhiketogether?”theirfathersaid.“You’remissingallofthebeautifulscenery!”Itwastrue.NeitherJoelnorHarryhadtakennoticeofthebeartheirfatherhadspiedatthestartoftheirtrip.Theyhadn’tlookedupattheeaglehepointedoutoverhead.Worstofall,theyhadn’tpaidanyattentiontotheturnsandtwistsalongthewaywhiletheycontinuedtheirargument.

“Joelthrewastickatme!”Harryscreamed.

“That’snottrue!”Joelshoutedback.

Mr.Taylorcouldnolongercontainhisanger.“Andbothofyouneedtostoparguing!”heerupted.Asheturnedtofacethem,hisleftfootcaughtonaroot.Heslippedbackwardanddownmuddybank,fallingintotheriverthatranalongsidethepath.

HarryandJoelracedtotheirfather’sassistance.Theyhelpedhimupoutofthewater,andthendraggedhiswetbackpackupontoland.Fortunately,theirwet-throughfatherfoundhimselfjustslightlyinjured.注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右。Paragraph1:Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.Paragraph2:“Justcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”审题：读前文：人物、性格、背景、情节、冲突、道具、伏笔。读衔接句：圈出人物、场景、衔接等信息。对各个信息自我追问（why,how,what为什么/怎么样/怎么办）并回答。续写：作用：推动情节发展，形成与前文首尾相应/有始有终的故事，并凸显主题（明+暗）。考虑：主人公所看、听、想、说、做。情节合理：符合人物性格、符合常识、符合伏笔、符合主题。细节设置：comment+action+response+conflict+solution+echo/theme主题：明：完成一次远足暗：克服困难（父亲落水，眼镜丢了，无法看清地图），两个儿子合作成长伏笔：指南针、地图、争吵不休、美丽的风景等常用的写作技巧：现在/过去分词作状语独立主格结构形容词（短语）做状语with+n.做方式状语无灵主语动作链角色切换，多角度叙事表情+动作+情绪描写时间/动作衔接每段的对话尽量不超过一处非限定从补充说明思想+行动+（预期的）结果哲理感悟式/定格动作式/景色画面式结尾范文：Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.Mr.Taylorsighedbeforehequicklytookoffhiswetclothesandsqueezedthewaterout.WhileHarrywasspreadingtheclothesonahugestone,Joelwalkedtheirhalf-nakedfathertoanopening.Seeinghisfatherwrappingthewoundwiththebandage,Joelfeltstrange.泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。Athoughtwentthroughhismindlikeanelectricshock.HowcouldtheycontinuehikingifDadwasunabletoseeclearly?一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？“IfonlyHarrystoppedarguingearlierwithme!”hegrumbled,hisbrowsrisingintohisforehead.“Iheardyou!”Harryyelled,glaringathimwithburningeyes.“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。写作手法：Seeinghisfather...动作衔接；Athoughtwentthroughhismind无灵主语；hisbrowsrisingintohisforehead.独立主格结构；glaringathim现在分词做伴随状语 “Justcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”Hementionedthemapandcompassbeforetheboysapproachedreluctantlyandfumbledfortheminhisbackpack.Itwasnotlongbeforetheylocatedwheretheywereandheadedoff.他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。JoelsoonfoundhimselfanexpertatusingacompasswhileHarrylearnttobeanexcellentmapreader.Nowandthen,prettybirdssingingmerrysongsandflowersbloomingwithsmilesmadethekidsgasp.乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。Laterthatday,theymanagedtocatchsightofsomemountaingoatsandevenagrizzlybearandaneagle.Itwasthehighlightofthedayandtheytalkedaboutitforhours,grinningfromeartoear.那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。写作手法：...mentioned...approached...fumbled动作链；Itwasnotlongbefore..时间衔接；Seeinghisfather...动作衔接；prettybirds...andflowers...景色描写；grinningfromeartoear.现在分词做伴随状语最终自测：Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.但当他掉在水里时，眼镜掉了。泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。“Justcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”“冷静下来！“泰勒先生吼道：“我没了眼镜，我们需要一起努力才能找到路。”他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。语料默写：脱下湿衣服_______________________把水挤了出来______________________把衣服铺在一块大石头上______________________用绷带包扎伤口______________________一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海______________________抱怨v.______________________眉毛皱到额头______________________用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他______________________摸索______________________没过多久______________________漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌______________________怒放的鲜花______________________让孩子们屏气赞叹______________________看到______________________一天中的亮点______________________开怀大笑______________________答案：takeoffhiswetclothessqueezethewateroutspreadtheclothesonahugestonewrapthewoundwiththebandag