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读后续写真题呈现：Self-Portrait

Aliawasdisappointedtofindherselfinthe

drawingstudio.Shehadbeensickwiththefluduringtheweekwheneveryoneelsegottopicktheirclasses.ShehadhopedforAstronomyorMarineBiology,buttheywerefullbythetimeshegottochoose.Shelovedeverythingaboutscience,fromthewayit

usedfactsandformulas

tohowit

revealedthebasicnatureofthings.Butartwasso..un-scientific.

Thefirstclassprojectwasself-portraits.Somestudentswere

drawingself-portraitsusingmirrors.Otherswereworkingfromphotographs.Aliaglancedattheincomplete

sketches,feelinglikeacatinadogshow.Butshehadnochoice.Hesitantly,sheliftedapencil,onlytopausebeforethecanvas.Confusionandreluctancewereevidentlywrittenonherface;shehadnoideahowtoproceedwithher

strokes.

TheteachercameuptoAlia's

easel(画架).Seeminglyhavingnoticedhertrouble,hesatnexttoher.

"Everyportraitbeginswitha

circle,"hesaid."Thenyou

create

aseriesof

lines.”

老师展示Todemonstrate,hedrewagroupofsmall,quickportraits.Hebeganeachonewithacircle,some

straightlines,anda

triangle

todeterminewheretheeyes,nose,andchinshouldgo.ToAlia'samazement,

eachportrait

onthepaper

tookform.Aliahadneverthoughtaboutit,butthe

features

ofeveryone'sfacewere

inthesamespots."Goaheadandgiveitatry."Theteacherhandedthepencilbacktoher.

Takingadeepbreath,Aliabeganherownself-portrait.She

drewthebasicform

ofahead,thewayshehadbeenshown.Fromthere,she

usedlinestoplotthefeaturesofherface.Shehadtotakenoteofeachdetail,with

eachstroke,lineandcurve

demandinghercloseattention.Onewrong

measurement

couldthrowoffthewholeportrait.注意：1.

所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Theprocesstookpatienceandprecision._____________________________________________________________________Admiringherwork,Aliasuddenlyrealizeddrawingwasjustwhatshehadhopedfor.

_____________________________________________________________________文本分析：考场上估计很多学生会苦恼素描相关的描写性语言。每当没有相关积累的时候一定要向原文去提取语料，例如文章中出现的feature,sketch,plot,stroke，line,curve

等等都可以直接利用起来。文本简析主题语境：人与社会之个人成长本文的聚焦于三个方面：

Alia因生病错过了选科学课的机会，勉强选了画画课；

体验画画的过程，老师的展示，让Alia在体验中去感受画画的魅力；

最终体验出成果，画成了她的自画像，由此改变了自己对画画的看法。主要内容：所给文章共六段：分成三部分Part1:（para1）Alia因病不得已选了画画课；自画像艾丽娅失望地发现自己在画室里。在每个人都要去选课的那个星期里，她得了流感。她本来希望选天文学或海洋生物学，但等她选择的时候，这两门课已经满了。她热爱科学的一切，从它使用事实和公式的方式，到它如何揭示事物的基本本质。但艺术是如此……与科学无关。Part2:(para2-5)Alia的亲身体验：第一节画画课+老师演示如何画画+鼓励第一节课的课主题是自画像。一些学生正在用镜子画自画像。其他人则利用照片来画画。艾丽娅瞥了一眼那些不完整的草图，感觉自己就像一只参加狗展的猫。但她别无选择。她犹豫地举起一支铅笔，但在画布前停了下来。她的脸上显然写着困惑和不情愿;她不知道如何继续画一笔一划。老师走到Alia的画架前(画架)。他似乎注意到了她的麻烦，坐在她旁边。“每幅肖像都以一个圆圈开头，”他说。“然后你创造一系列的线条。”为了证明这一点，他画了一组小而快速的肖像。他先画了一个圆圈、几条直线和一个三角形，以确定眼睛、鼻子和下巴的位置。令阿丽亚惊讶的是，纸上的每一幅肖像都成形了。艾丽娅从来没有想过这个问题，但每个人脸上的五官都在同一个地方。“去吧，试一试。”老师把铅笔还给了她。Part3(para6.)Alia专注地开始画自画像深吸一口气，艾丽娅开始了她的自画像。她按照别人给她看的样子，画出了一个头的基本形状。从那里，她用线条画出她脸部的特征。她必须注意到每一个细节，每一个笔画、线条和曲线都要求她密切关注。一个错误的测量可能会使整个图像失真。读后续写情节发展：带领学生去体验此类续写文本类型的特点：内心冲突---体验—解决冲突---个人成长与转变；文本难度大，可以利用原文的内容进行回扣创作。利用所给首句的信息名词，进行平行主语的叙述，交叉主语的叙述，或直接回扣原文进行叙述。3.本文人物比较单一：主角Alia是整个故事冲突的产生者，解决冲突也是主动在体验中去进行。配角老师起到辅助作用，引导Alia让体验顺利进行。所以老师可再写，也可不写。笔者的第二段基本都是平行主语

Alia的感受和体验。范文

Theprocesstookpatienceandprecision.Itwasmuchlikethe

scientificexperiments

Aliaadored.She

closelyobservedtheproportions

ofherface,thewayascientistmight

studyacomplexformula.Eachfeaturedemandedher

undividedfocus,asshecarefully

translatedthethree-dimensionalrealityontothetwo-dimensionalplane.Therhythmofherdrawingmirroredthe

methodicalstepsofascientificprocedure.Slowly,theinitialresistanceandconfusiongavewaytoa

meditativeabsorption

inthetaskathand.Asherself-portraitemergedfrom

aseriesofgeometricguidelines,Aliadiscoveredasenseofachievementinthe

deliberateandthoughtful

applicationofpenciltopaper.

Admiringherwork,Aliafoundthatdrawingwassurprisinglywhatshehadhopedfor.Theself-portraitbeforeherwasnotjust

acollectionoflinesandshapes

but

adeepexploration

ofherownface,

ameticulousexamination

ofherownfeatures.Sherealizedthatartandsciencewerenotsodistinct;both

requiredakeeneye,asteadyhand,andanopenmind.Herinitialskepticismhadbeentransformedintoaquietappreciationfortheunexpectedjoyfound

inthestrokesofherpencil.

Suddenlyitoccurredtoher:Don'tassumeyouwon'tlikesomethinguntilyoutryit.Thisnewfoundappreciationforartwouldforeverintertwinewithherloveforscience,shapingherjourneyofself-discoveryandenablinghertoperceivetheworldthrougharicher,morevibrantlens.

这个过程需要耐心和精确。这很像阿丽亚喜欢的科学实验。她仔细观察自己脸部的比例，就像科学家研究复杂的公式一样。每个特征都要求她全神贯注，因为她小心翼翼地将三维现实转化为二维平面。她绘画的节奏反映了科学程序的有条不紊的步骤。慢慢地，最初的抗拒和困惑让位于对手头工作的沉思和专注。当她的自画像从一系列几何指南中浮现出来时，Alia发现了一种成就感，这种成就感来自于铅笔和纸的深思熟虑的应用。在欣赏自己的作品时，阿丽亚发现绘画出乎她的意料。她面前的自画像不仅仅是线条和形状的集合，而是对自己脸部的深入探索，对自己五官的细致检查。她意识到艺术和科学并不是那么泾渭分明;两者都需要敏锐的眼睛，稳健的手和开放的思想。她最初的怀疑已经转变为一种安静的欣赏，因为她在铅笔的笔触中发现了意想不到的快乐。她突然想到:在你尝试之前，不要假设你不会喜欢它。这种对艺术的新发现将永远与她对科学的热爱交织在一起，塑造了她的自我发现之旅，使她能够通过更丰富、更有活力的镜头来感知世界。

范文升级

Patienceandprecisionwerethekeytotheprocess,resemblingthescientificexperimentsthatAliaheldinhighregard.Sheobservedherfacewithmeticulousattention,akintoascientiststudyingacomplexformula.Eachfeaturecommandedhercompletefocusassheskillfullytranslatedthethree-dimensionalrealityontothetwo-dimensionalplane.Themethodicalstepsofascientificproceduremirroredtherhythmofherdrawing.Gradually,initialresistanceandconfusiondissolved,replacedbyameditativeabsorptioninthetaskathand.Fromaseriesofgeometricguidelines,herself-portraitemerged,bestowinguponAliaasenseofachievementderivedfromthedeliberateandthoughtfulapplicationofpenciltopaper.

Assheadmiredherwork,Aliadiscoveredthatdrawinghadsurprisingqualitiesshehadlongedfor.Theself-portraitbeforehertranscendedmerelinesandshapes,delvingdeepintoanexplorationofherownface,ameticulousexaminationofherownfeatures.Sherealizedthatartandsciencewerenotmutuallyexclusive;bothnecessitatedakeeneye,asteadyhand,andanopenmind.Initialskepticismtransformedintoaquietappreciationfortheunanticipatedjoyfoundinthestrokesofherpencil.Asuddenrealizationstruckher:oneshouldnotassumedisdainforsomethinguntilitisgivenafairtry.Thisnewfoundappreciationforartwouldforeverintertwinewithherloveforscience,shapingherjourneyofself-discoveryandgrantingheraricher,morevibrantlensthroughwhichtoperceivetheworld.下水文1Theprocesstookpatienceandprecision.Lookingintothemirror,Aliacarefullystudiedthesubtlecurvesandanglesofherfaceallthewhilebusycalculatingtheproportionsandmeasuringthegapsbetweenthefeatures.Itseemedasifshewasdealingwithamathproblemsincetheeyes,nose,andmouthshouldbeaccuratelyplacedintherightplace.Withteacher'sguidanceechoinginhermind,eachtimeshestartedwithacircleandbuiltfromthere.AssheproceededAliafoundherselfbecomingmoreengrossedinthetask,forgettingherinitialreluctancetowardsart.Witheachstrokeofthepencil,shedelicatelycapturedtheessenceofheroutline,andherself-portraitslowl