题型精析18.读后续写之故事开头设计4法

18.读后续写之故事开头设计4法【策略突破】突破策略1开头巧用形容词/副词(短语)[真题示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Unexpectedly,Ibeatalotofparticipantsandwonthefirstprize.[典例剖析]根据该段首句内容“几个星期后,当我几乎忘记比赛的时候,传来了消息。”可知,开始可以写作者得知这个消息时的感受,可以写兴奋、吃惊或意外,本句用了副词unexpectedly描述当时的意外的心情。[真题示例2](2021·浙江高考·6月卷)IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Excitedandoverjoyed,Irushedintomyroomandlayinbedthinkingabouthowtospendthemoney.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“我很惊讶,我爸爸允许我按照我的意愿使用这笔钱。”可知,本段可描写作者兴奋的心情,开始用excitedandoverjoyed准确地描写了作者的这种心情。突破策略2开头巧用非谓语动词(短语)、with复合结构或独立主格结构[真题示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Withexcitedtearsinmyeyes,Ithankedhimagain,addingthatitwashewholetmegetatasteforwriting.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“颁奖典礼结束后,我去了我老师的办公室。”可知,该段可描写作者到办公室感谢老师的表现以及老师的鼓励,with复合结构和现在分词短语表示伴随,增加了文章表达的简洁性和语言表达的丰富性。[真题示例2](2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Droppinghishead,hewasinlowspirits.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“我们坐在一起,但大卫不看我。”以及上文可知,该段可描写大卫不愿意参加比赛,作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛,大卫经过强烈的心理斗争,最终决定参加比赛,这里开头用了分词充当时间状语,不仅使行文简洁,而且突出动作,惟妙惟肖。突破策略3开头巧用名词性从句、状语从句或定语从句等从句[真题示例1](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.HowIwishedIhadnotactedsofoolishly,makingmyselfalaughingstockofmyfamily![典例剖析]由该段首句内容“我被困了五六分钟,但感觉要长得多。”可知,该段开始可描写作者是多么后悔把头插入南瓜中,此处用了感叹句,且wished后加了宾语从句。[真题示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathathecouldcutthepumpkinwithaknife.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“我被困了五六分钟,但感觉要长得多了。”可知,接下来可以写怎么营救。该句idea后面that引导同位语从句,对idea进行解析,同位语使文章更加紧凑,同时增加了文章表达的高级性。突破策略4开头巧用倒装句、强调句等句型[真题示例1](2022·浙江高考·6月卷)Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.NervousasIfelt,Ididmyutmosttokeepmyselfcalmandhandoutthedelicatelywrappedmealtothoseinneed,withmyhandstrembling.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“当他们朝我走来的时候,我露出了最灿烂、最幸福的笑容。”可知,该段可描写作者是怎么为无家可归的人施粥,这里“NervousasIfelt”用了倒装句,提高了文章表达的质量。[真题示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.Itwasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.[典例剖析]由该段首句内容“这段视频是在万圣节前一天发布的。”可知,该段续写开始部分可以补充说明谁发的,这里用了强调句,突出发视频之人。【题型精练】1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。9yearoldIgorlivedinahugeforestinthenorthofRussia.Hisfatherwasawoodcutterandhismotheratailor.Theboylikedplayingwithanimalsintheforest,andknewthenamesofdifferentbirdsandtheirsongs.OnefreezingwinterIgorwasseriouslyillandthedoctorfrombigcitiestoldhisparentsthatonlysurprisecouldsavehim.Lyingalldayinbed,Igoronlywantedhisfathertocatchabirdandplayedwithit.Butinwintertherewerenobirdsintheforest.“Youcouldmakehimabirdoutofwood,”suggestedtheanxiousmother.Thefirstfinishedbirdswerefatandtooheavytofly.Hethrewthemintothefire,headinhands.Itwassnowingheavily,andhereallydidn’tknowwheretofindabird.Thenanideaoccurredtohim,“Thebirdneedstwopiecesofwood.”Eventually,hemadeitandshowedittohiswife.“Beautiful!”shesaid,takinganeedleandsomethread(细线)andsewingthetwoendstogether,likearealbird.Shetiedalongthreadtothebird’sback.AnditcouldbehungaboveIgor’sbed.Quietly,thewoodcutterhungthebirdabovetheboy’sbed.Atdaybreak,hissonwaswatchingthebirdcarefully.Therewasalightinhiseyesforthefirsttimeinmanyweeks.“Beautiful!”saidIgor.“I’veneverseenitbeforeintheforest.What’sitsname?”“That’sagoodquestion.I’llfindoutandtellyou.”Thenextmorning,whenthefatherenteredIgor’sroom,hefoundtheboysittingupinbed,tryingtotouchthebird.ThelasttimeIgorsatupinbedwasmanyweeksbefore.“What’sitcalled?”theboyasked.“Oh,dear,I’mstillnotsure.”Lateonthatnight,Igor’sfatherwentintohisson’sroomquietlyandmadethethreadalittleshorter.ThenthebirdwashangingalittlehigheraboveIgor’shead.Threedayslater,hefoundIgorkneelingonthebed,tryingtotouchthebird.Hishandwasverynearit.“Haveyoudecidedonthename?”“Notyet.Myson.”hisfatherreplied.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式作答。Paragraph1:Again,atnightthefatherwentintohisson’sroom.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Severaldayslater,Igor’sfatherwascuttingwoodwhenheheardascreamfromthehouse.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Again,atnightthefatherwentintohisson’sroom.SeeingIgorwasasleep,heputthebirdalittlehigherandleft.Tohisjoy,Igorwasabletostandonthebedandnearlytouchthebirdthesecondday.Hewantedtomakeitgoroundinperson.Thewoodcutterencouragedhissontogoontrying,tellinghimitwasnotashighashethought.However,Igorstillwantedtoknowthenameofthebird.Thefathersaidhewastryingtofigureoutthekindofthebird.Severaldayslater,Igor’sfatherwascuttingwoodwhenheheardascreamfromthehouse.Heranquicklytohisson’sbedroom.Hecouldn’tbelievewhathesaw.Igorwasjumpingupanddownexcitedlyonhisbed.Itwasabovehisheadthatthebirdwasgoingroundveryfast.Heshowedoffhisperformancetohisfather.“Pleasetellme,what’sitsname?”“It’scalledthebirdofsurprise,”hisfatherrepliedexcitedly.Andhismother,standingatthedoor,criedtearsofjoytoseeheryoungsonfulloflifeonceagain.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了住在俄罗斯北部森林的9岁男孩伊戈尔病得很重，医生告诉他的父母，只有惊喜才能救他。伊戈尔只想让他的父亲抓一只鸟，和它一起玩耍。但是冬天的森林里没有鸟。父亲和母亲只能用木头和针线做了一只假鸟挂于伊戈尔床头。伊戈尔眼中重燃光芒，对鸟产生浓厚兴趣，每天都想要摸它。父亲每晚缩短挂鸟的细线，让鸟逐渐升高。三天后，伊戈尔跪在床上，手已经离鸟很近了。伊戈尔病情已有好转，他想知道鸟的名字。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“晚上，父亲又一次走进儿子的房间。”可知，第一段可描写父亲再次调高鸟的位置。伊戈尔第二天站了起来，父亲十分高兴并鼓励儿子继续努力。然而，伊戈尔仍然想知道这只鸟的名字。②由第二段首句内容“几天后，伊戈尔的父亲正在砍柴，突然听到房子里传来一声尖叫。”可知，第二段可描写父亲发现伊戈尔在床上跳上跳下，完全康复。父亲激动万分并给木鸟取名“惊喜鸟”。2.续写线索：再次调高鸟的位置——伊戈尔第二天站了起来——鼓励儿子继续努力——伊戈尔完全康复——取名“惊喜鸟”——妈妈感动落泪3.词汇激活：行为类①进入：gointo/enter②上下跳跃：jumpupanddown/leapupanddown③回答：reply/answer情绪类①让他高兴的是：tohisjoy/tohisdelight②快乐：joy/happiness[高分句型1]SeeingIgorwasasleep,heputthebirdalittlehigherandleft.(运用了现在分词作状语)[高分句型2]Thefathersaidhewastryingtofigureoutthekindofthebird.(运用了省略连词that的宾语从句)[高分句型3]Hecouldn’tbelievewhathesaw.(运用了连接代词what引导宾语从句)2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AnOutdoorTripThatSpeaksLouderThanARegularClassOneday,asJack,ascienceteacher,stressedthepressingneedforprotectingTangerineDarters,akindoffish,studentsinhisclassseemeduninterestedandbored.Jackcontinued,buthisstudentsshowedlittleenthusiasm.Hepausedforamoment,allowingthesilencetosettleintheclassroom.Thenhewentoninadifferentway.“Imagine,”Jackbegan,hisvoicefilledwithpassion,“thefeelingofwading(趟水)throughtheclearshallowwatersofPigeonRiver,surroundedbythegentlesunlight.PicturethecolorsoftheTangerineDartersastheygracefullyswimthroughthecurrents,theirorangebellies(肚子)shininglikeraysofsunshine,orinthatmoment,aTangerineDarterinyourhands,itsorangebellyshininginthesunlight.”Hepaintedavividpicturewithhiswords.Curiositylitinhisstudents’eyesastheybentforward,eagertoknowmore.Jackcontinued,“Thedartersareverypickyabouttheirhabitats.Theplacewheretheyliveshouldbeveryclean,andslightpollutioncoulddrivethemawayorevenendangertheirveryexistence.”AsJackspoke,hispassionspreadquicklyamonghisstudents,whostartedtoaskquestions,wantingtoknowmoreabouttheTangerineDarters.Inspiredbytheirnewfoundinterest,Jackhadanidea.WhynottakestudentstothePigeonRiver,wheretheycanwitnessthebeautyoftheTangerineDartersfirsthand?Aweeklater,theywereonthetriptothePigeonRiverinCanton,NorthCarolina,wheretheenvironmentwaswellpreservedinparisonwithotherindustrialareas.SunshinebouncedoffthePigeonRiver,andcoolwaterflowedoverrocksandboulders(卵石)—thepreferredhabitatofTangerineDarters.WithJack,itwasthefirsttimethatthestudentshadstoodintheshallowwater,eagertoseetheirtargetofthisfishecologyclassfieldtrip.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Seeingthestudents’interestedlooks,Jackraisedaquestion.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.Curious,thestudentscrowdedhimaround,eagerforacloserlook.Inthesun,thefish’sorangebellywasshininglikeraysofsunshine.“ATangerineDarter!”studentsexclaimedcheerfully.“Beautiful,isn’tit?”Jackasked.Adirectobservationofthewonderfulcreatureinthefleshstimulatedthestudents’interest.Inthenaturalclassroom,thePigeonRiver,thestudentslistenedattentivelytoJack’sintroductionofthefish,suchaswhattheyeatandhowtheyliveandmultiply.AsJackspoke,thestudents’enthusiasmgrewstronger.Seeingthestudentsinterestedlooks,Jackbegantoraiseaquestion.“Whycan’tthisfishliveinotherrivers?”Jackasked,lookingintotheirburningeyes.Then,likeinaregularlesson,hepaused,allowinghisstudentstoreflect.Onestudentresponded,“They’repickyabouttheirhabitats.”Jacknoddedsmilingly.“So?”Jackcontinued.“Ifwepolluteriversatwill,clearwaterlikethiswilldisappear,sowillthisbeautifulfish,”anotherstudentansweredthoughtfully.Seeingstudentstrulyinvolved,Jackfeltasenseofsatisfaction.Theoutdoortripdidprovetospeaklouderthanaregularclass.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了杰克老师在课堂上强调迫切需要保护一种叫桔色似鲈的鱼，他的热情很快在学生中传播开来，他们开始问问题，想要更多地了解桔色似鲈。受到他们新发现的兴趣的启发，杰克有了一个主意：带学生去鸽子河实地考察，最后直接观察这个活生生的奇妙生物激发了学生们的兴趣，事实证明，户外考察确实比普通课程更有说服力。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“突然，杰克弯下腰，迅速抓住了一条鱼”可知，第一段可描写杰克抓住鱼展示给同学看，同学也被激起了兴趣。②由第二段首句内容“看到学生们感兴趣的表情，杰克开始提出一个问题”可知，第二段可描写杰克老师开始讲授鱼的相关知识，学生们真正参与进来。2.续写线索：抓住鱼——近距离观察——激发兴趣——专心听讲——提出问题——引起反思——考察感悟3.词汇激活行为类①提出问题：raiseaquestion/poseaquestion②反思：reflect/rethink③消失：disappear/vanish情绪类①满足：satisfaction/content②挑剔：picky/captious[高分句型1]Inthenaturalclassroom,thePigeonRiver,thestudentslistenedattentivelytoJack’sintroductionofthefish,suchaswhattheyeatandhowtheyliveandmultiply.(运用了what引导宾语从句)[高分句型2]AsJackspoke,thestudents’enthusiasmgrewstronger.(运用了as引导时间状语从句)3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Iwaseightyearsoldandwasn’tawareofallthearrangementsbeingmadeforourjourneyasafamilytoLondonin1950.MymotherwasingreatpainandwishedtovisitspecialistsinLondon.MyfatherreluctantlyhadtosellourpropertyinQueensland.Thedaybeforeweboardedtheship,Fatherunwillinglysaidgoodbyetohisfiveyearoldcattledog,Spider,whowaslovedbyusall.Father’sfriendSandywastobehisguardianwhilewewereoverseas,ashehadbeengettingtoknowSpiderformanyweeks.Sixweekslater,anairletterarrivedfromSandy,givingmyfatherthenewsthatSpiderhadrunawayjusttwoweeksafterwehadsailed.SandyhadadvertisedconstantlyonABCandotherregionalnewspapers.Despitemany“sightings”,thedogwasneverfound.ItseemsSpiderjustkeptrunningandsearchingforus.Ashewascattledog,myfatherthoughthewouldshoeordingotrapped,becauseofhisappearance.ButourfamilythoughtthatFatherheldasecretshopethatSpiderwasstillalive.WesailedbacktoAustraliatwoyearslaterandreestablishedourhome.MyfatherimmediatelybeganhisownsearchforSpider.Onecoldwinter’sSaturdaymorningeightmonthsafterourreturn,myfatherhadacallfromanelderlyladylivingonherownontheoutskirtsofthetown.Asshetoldmyfatheronthetelephone,itwas“justglimpsesofadingotypedogintheshadows”ofherdisusedtenniscourt.Thatwasenoughformyfathertointerruptmyhomework.

WesetoffinhisblueandblackJensencarwhichhehadbroughtbackfromEngland.Itwashardlytherightvehiclefortheroughroadswetravelledthatday.Fiveandahalfhourslater,wefoundtherundownoldproperty.Sadly,shetoldmyfatherthatthe“dingodog”hadn’tbeenaroundforafewdays.Myfatherhadastrangelookinhiseye.HeputtwofingerstohislipsanddidhisspecialwhistleforSpider.注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Suddenlytherewasasoundinthebush._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Oncehomewehadthetaskofgettingalltheprickles(刺)offhim._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Suddenlytherewasasoundinthebush.Outofthegrowthflewthisbatt