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Unit8Detectivestories单元写作指导与演练近三年考情分析话题考查热度推理故事侦探故事一、话题分析

本节课属于人与社会主题下的主题群“历史、社会与文化”,子话题为“公共秩序与法律法规,个人信息安全与国家安全意识”。主要是让学生学写侦探故事,培养学生写作的能力。教育学生遵纪守法,不做违法的事。该板块的活动主题是“创作我的推理故事”,话题是“如何编写一则侦探小故事”。以Millie参加写作比赛为背景,呈现了Millie发挥想象力和逻辑思维能力创作自己的推理故事的文章。在写作过程中要注意所写故事的细节,如案发时间和地点、目击者的证词、嫌疑人的特征等。同时也要求同学们能写出各种场合下的安全防范措施。二、教学目标通过本课时的学习,学生能够:1.通过讨论分析范文,总结归纳侦探故事的文章结构。2.正确使用所学结构和表达编写一则侦探故事或续写故事的结尾。3.分析与评价自己和同伴的作品。4.感知逻辑推理能力的重要性,提升推理能力的同时感受侦探推理写作的趣味性和严谨性,培养写作兴趣。(以思维导图的形式呈现)Part1:(introduction)Introducethebackgroundandmaincharactersofthestory.Part1:(introduction)Introducethebackgroundandmaincharactersofthestory.Part2:(Mainbody)Part2:(Mainbody)1.Thetimeandlocationoftheincident;2.Informationonthevictim'sgender,age,occupation,etc;3.Caseanalysis;4.Policeupdates.DetectivestoryPart3:(Ending)Part3:(Ending)Hopethepolicecansolvethecase.【词汇积累】重点单词1.stealvt.偷;窃取2.necklacen.项链3.diamondn.钻石4.adiamondnecklace5.shockedadj.震惊的6.jewelleryn.珠宝;首饰7.lotsofjewellery许多珠宝二、重点短语1.getalong/onwith与......和睦相处2.getalongbadlywith与......相处不好3.dosthforalivingmakealiving做某事谋生4.beunderarrestformurder因谋杀罪被捕5.beunderarrest=bearrested被捕三、重点句型1.Brucegetsalongwithallofhisneighboursexceptthemanwholivednextdoor.布鲁斯和邻居相处和睦除了住在隔壁的那个男人。2.Nooneknowswhathedoesforaliving.没有人知道他靠做什么为生。3.Thepolicetoldhimthatsomevaluablejewelleryhadbeenstolen警察告诉他一些价值连城的珠宝被盗了。四、侦探福尔摩斯五十句名言1.我追求精神上的兴奋。Ipursuespiritualexcitement.2.许多被绞死的人死得冤枉。Manyofthehangedmanisdeadwrong.3.嫉妒是性格的奇异转换器。Jealousyisasingularconvertercharacter.4.感情作用会影响清醒的理智。Theemotionalqualitieswillaffecttoclearreasoning.5.不用动脑筋,我就活不下去。Don'tthink,Ican'tlive.6.谦虚和骄傲都是与事实相悖而行的。Modestyandpridearebackanddonewithfacts.7.除去其他的因素,剩下的必是事实了。Togetridofotherfactors,therestmustbethetruth.8.我向来不作任何例外。定律没有例外。Inevermakeanyexception.Lawisnoexception.9.对于装病,我认为我有能力写个专论。Forfakingit,IthinkIhavetheabilitytowriteamonograph.10.生活之谜是任何大脑也发明不出来的。Theriddleoflifeisbeyondthecontrivanceofanybrainalso.11.这是一个要抽足三斗烟才能解决的问题。Thisisasmokefootthreemeasurestosolvetheproblem.12.再也没有比显而易见的事实更虚伪的了。Nomorehypocriticalthanobviousfact.13.世上的事都是前人做过的,没什么新鲜的。Thereispredecessorsdid,nothingnew.14.生活之谜是任何聪明的大脑也发明不了的。Anycleverbrainmysteriesoflifeisalsoinvented.15.探案过程中,我是最后的最高的上诉法庭。Thecrimeintheprocess,Iisthehighestcourtofappealinthefinal.16.我决定站在犯人这一边,不站在死者那一边。Idecidedtostandintheprisoner'sside,notonthesideofthedead.17.即使是最好的女人,也决不能完全信赖她们。Eventhebestwoman,neverentirelytrustthem.18.探案过程中,我是最后的,最高的上诉法庭。Thecrimeintheprocess,Iamthelast,thehighestcourtofappeal.19.对于伟大的心灵来说,世界上没有微小的事情。Forgreatminds,thereisnosmallthingintheworld.20.不论案件如何复杂,人们总能寻求出一个解释。Nomatterhowcomplexcases,peoplecanalwaysseekoutanexplanation.21.奇怪的是,打字机也像手写一般能表现出一个人的性格。Oddly,typewriterisalsolikeahandwritingcanshowaperson'spersonality.22.我好动不好静,一遇无事可做的时候,我就会心绪不宁起来。Ican'tactivestatic,oncehadnothingtodo,Iwillberestless.23.只要你懂得怎样使用报纸,华生,报纸便是非常宝贵的工具。Ifyouknowhowtousenewspaper,Watson,newspaperisaveryvaluabletool.24.世界上最危险的一种人,福尔摩斯说,就是漂泊孤独的女人。Oneofthemostdangerousmanintheworld,SherlockHolmessaid,iswanderinglonelywoman.25.我向来不猜想。猜想是很不好的习惯,它有害于作逻辑的推理。Ineverguess.Guessisabadhabit,itisbadforlogicalreasoning.26.你有保持缄默的了不起的天赋,华生,有你做伙伴真是太难得了。Youhavegreattalents,toremainsilentWatson,haveyourpartnerisreallybad.27.不论多么天衣无缝的犯罪,只要是人做的,就没有解不开的道理。Nomatterhowperfectthecrime,aslongaspeopledo,thereisnosolutiondon'topen.28.自从莫里亚蒂教授新近死了以后,句子大全伦敦变成了一座极度乏味的城市。SinceprofessorMoriartydiedrecentlybecameanextremelyboringcityofLondon.29.华生,这不属于你的职业范围,不是生理上的问题,而是心理上的。Watson,thisdoesnotfallwithinthescopeofyourcareer,notphysical,butpsychological.30.我决定永远不要有任何偏见,事实指向哪里,我就会乖乖地跟到哪里。Idecidedtonevertohaveanyprejudice,factspointtowhere,whereIwouldobedientlyfollow.31.她本身无害,而且往往是很有用的人,但却总是引起别人犯罪的因素。Sheitselfisharmless,andtendtobeveryuseful,butitalwayscausesotherstocommitacrime.32.一个医生误入歧途,他就是一流的罪犯,因为他既有胆识,又有知识。Ledastraybyadoctor,heisafirst-classcriminals,becausehehavecourage,andknowledge.33.不要让一个人的外表影响你的判断力,这是最重要的。感情会影响理智的。Don'tletaperson'sappearanceaffectyourjudgment,thisisthemostimportant.Feelingswillaffecttherational.34.除非两台打字机下载文档都相当新,否则没有哪两台打字机打出的字一键下载全文是一模一样的。Unlesstwotypewritersarenew,notwotypewriterstypewordsarethesame.35.生活枯燥乏味。大胆和浪漫似乎在这个充满邪恶的世界里消失了。Lifedull,boringpaper.Boldandromanceseemstohavevanishedinthisfullofevilintheworld.36.一个为艺术而艺术的人,常常从最不重要和最平凡的形象中获得最大的乐趣。Amanofartforart'ssake,oftenfromtheleastimportantandthemostordinaryintheimageofthegreatestpleasure.37.命运知识难以捉摸啊,如果来世没有报应,那么这个世界就是一场残酷的玩笑。Fateelusiveknowledgeah,andiftheworldshouldnot,thentheworldisacrueljoke.38.人不要在说明事实的理论上打圈圈,应该配合理论的说明,慢慢解开事实的真相。Peopledon'ttellyouthefactonthetheoryofcircle,shouldcoordinatetheoryshowsthatslowlyunravelthetruth.39.在没有得到任何证据的情况下是不能进行推理的,那样的话,只能是误入歧途。Undertheconditionofwithoutanyevidenceisnotreasoning,inthatcase,onlyismisguided.40.教育是没有止境的,华生。课程一门接一门,精益求精,这件案子很有启发性。Educationisanever-ending,Watson.Coursedoorafterdoor,excellence,thecaseisinstructive.41.不寻常的现象总能给人提供一些线索,而没有什么特征的案子却是难以侦破的。Unusualphenomenonalwayscanprovidecluestotheperson,andnocaseisdifficulttosolve.42.所谓事件,只要没有解决方案,就很容易解决。看起来没有犯罪的普通特征真的很棘手。Theso-calledevent,aslongasthereisnosolution,itiseasytosolve.Lookordinarycharacteristicsofnocrimewasreallytricky.43.我完全没有虚度此生,如果我生命的旅程到今夜为止,我也可以问心无愧地欣然接受。Ihavenoworth-while,ifthejourneyofmylifeuntiltonight,Ialsocanhaveaclearconsciencetoembrace.44.一般来说,越是好奇的事情,越是熟悉的真相,越是平常和那些很平常的情况,令人困惑。Generallyspeaking,themorecuriousthings,afterthetruth,familiarwiththemoreusualandthoseveryordinarycaseisconfusing.45.我的体质非常特别。工作的时候一点儿也不觉得累,如果闲着无事反而会使我委顿不堪了。Mybodyisveryspecial.WorkIdon'tfeeltired,ifidlenothingwouldmakemefaint.46.生活很枯燥。我的生活就是不要在平庸中消磨时间。让我祝福这些小箱子。Lifeisverydull.Mylifeistodon'tidleawayourtimeinmediocrity.Letmethewishestheselittlecases.47.她无依无靠,到处为家。她有足够的钱供她从一个国家到另一个国家,从一家旅馆到另一个旅馆。Herhelpless,forthehomeeverywhere.Shehasenoughmoneyforherfromonecountrytoanother,fromonehoteltoanotherhotel.48.我们必须深入生活,只有如此才能获得新奇的效果和非同寻常的配合,而这本身比任何想象都有刺激性。Wemustdeepintolife,onlythencanobtaintheeffectofthenovelandextraordinary,andthisitselfstimulatingthananyimagined.49.有一句老格言说道,当你排除了不可能的情况后,其余的情况,不管是如何的不可能,却必定是真实的。Thereisanoldadagesays,whenyoueliminatetheimpossible,therestofthesituation,nomatterhowimpossible,butitmustbetrue.50.由于我的存在,伦敦的空气得以清新。在我办的一千多件案子里,我相信,我从未把握的力量用错地方。BecauseofI,inLondontofreshair.Inholdingmorethanonethousandcases,IbelievethatI'mneversure.五、通用开头1.MrWangwasanoldman.Helivedaloneandwenttotheparkeverydaytopractiset'aichi.2.I'mwritingtoreportarobberytoyou.3.Ataboutninelastnight,IwasonthewaybackhomefromthecinemawhensuddenlyIheardsomeonecryingforhelpfrombehind.4.Someonefoundadeadbodyinafactorythismorning.Thevictimwasamanwhowasanengineerandhewas40yearsold.5.Lastnight,amurdertookplacebetweenelevenandtwelveonRenminRoad.六、通用中间段

1.MrandMrsZhangcalledthepolice.DetectiveLi

arrivedinfiveminutes.He

askedtheMrsZhangwhethertheyhadseenanythingunusualthenightbefore.Theysaidthattheyhadnotbecausetheywerehavingaparty.2.Atthecrimescene,DetectiveLifoundaknifeandagun.Henoticedthattherewassomewhitepowderonthegun.DetectiveLicheckedtheknifeandthegunforfingerprints.Thepowderonthegun

turnedout

tobecookingflour,andthefingerprintswereleftbyZhouMing.DetectiveLireturnedtotheflatsand

arrested

thecook

formurder.3.Iturnedaroundandfoundatallmanwithapairofdarkglassesandashortmanrobbingayoungwomanatthestreetcornernearthecinema.Thewomanworeagoldnecklaceandagoldwatch.Sheputupagoodfightwiththem.七、通用结尾1.Ihopetheinformationwillhelpyoucatchtherobbers.2.Yes,that'strue.Itwasthenecklacethatmyauntlost.Myauntwasverythankful.Shetoldhernewneighbourthattheycouldbegoodfriendslater.3.Thepoliceareofferingarewardof100,000yuanforanycluethatleadstothearrestofthemurderer.【写作模板】模板①DearSir/MadamI'mwritingtoreportarobberytoyou.Ataboutninelastnight,Iwasonthewaybackhomefromthe______whensuddenlyIheardsomeonecryingforhelpfrombehind.Iturnedaroundandfounda_____manwithapairof_______andashortmanrobbinga______womanatthestreetcornernearthe______.Thewomanworea_______necklaceanda_____watch.Sheputupagoodfightwiththem.IrantowardsthembutwhenIarrived,thetworobbershadriddentheirbikesaway.Theyrobbedthewomanofher_____watch,butluckily,thewomanwasn'thurt.Ihopetheinformationwillhelpyoucatchtherobbers.YoursfaithfullyLiHua.模板②Lastnight,amurdertookplacebetween_______on______Road.Adriverwasmurdered.Hewasinhis______.Atthetimeofthecrime,someoneheardhimshoutingforhelp.Thevictimwasattackedwitha______and______asaresult.Sofar,thepolicehaveofferedarewardof______yuanforimportantclues.Ifyouhaveanyinformation,pleasecall/contactthepoliceon110.写作要求:Tips●

Adescriptionofthecrime●

Anyobjectsorcluesfoundatthesceneofthecrime●

Adescriptionofthesuspect●

Howthedetectivefindsthecriminal【满分作文】MrWangwasanoldman.Helivedaloneandwenttotheparkeverydaytopractiset'aichi.

Oneday,MrWang'sneighbours,MrandMrsZhang,noticedthatMrWanghadnotgonetotheparkthatmorningasusual.MrsZhangbecameworried.

Sotogetherwithherhusband,she

wenttoknockonMrWang'sdoor.Astheyknocked,theynoticedthedoorwasnotlocked.They

pushedthedooropenandsaw

MrWang.He

wasdeadontheground.

MrandMrsZhangcalledthepolice.DetectiveLi

arrivedinfiveminutes.He

askedtheMrsZhangwhethertheyhadseenanythingunusualthenightbefore.Theysaidthattheyhadnotbecausetheywerehavingaparty.DetectiveLialsointerviewedanotherneighbour,ZhouMing.Hewasacook.Hesaidthathewasworkingathisrestaurantthenightbeforeand

didnotknowanythingaboutthecase.Atthecrimescene,DetectiveLifoundaknifeandagun.Henoticedthattherewassomewhitepowderonthegun.DetectiveLicheckedtheknifeandthegunforfingerprints.Thepowderonthegun

turnedout

tobecookingflour,andthefingerprintswereleftbyZhouMing.DetectiveLireturnedtotheflatsand

arrested

thecook

formurder.Later,ZhouMingadmittedthathekilledMrWang

sothat

hecould

steal

200,000

yuan

from

him.【解题思路】在写作过程中要注意所写故事的细节,如案发时间和地点、目击者的证词、嫌疑人的特征等。同时也要求同学们能写出各种场合下的安全防范措施。【写作步骤】第一步:引出人物,介绍王先生是一个孤独的老人,每天去公园练习太极拳。第二步:描述事件背景,王先生的邻居张先生和夫人发现王先生当天没有像往常一样去公园,引起他们的担忧。第三步:展开情节,详细描述侦探李的调查过程,包括询问邻居、检查犯罪现场等,并通过这些线索揭示出周明是罪犯。第四步:揭示真相和结局,通过侦探李的调查,进一步揭示出周明杀害王先生的动机和计划,最终周明被逮捕。【亮点词汇】arrivedin;fiveminutes;

arrivedinfiveminutes;atthecrimescene;turnedout;arrested

for;murder;steal

from.

【高分句型】1.Sotogetherwithherhusband,shewenttoknockonMrWang’sdoor.(主从复合句,主从句作为状语)2.MrandMrsZhangcalledthepolice.DetectiveLiarrivedinfiveminutes.(并列句主谓结构)3.HeaskedtheMrsZhangwhethertheyhadseenanythingunusualthenightbefore.(由whether引导的宾语从句)4.Hesaidthathewasworkingathisrestaurantthenightbeforeand

didnotknowanythingaboutthecase.(由that引导的宾语从句)一、完成句子1.结果是那个嫌疑犯与本次谋杀案无关。Itturnedoutthatthesuspectthemurder.【答案】hadnothingtodowith【详解】havenothingtodowith“与……无关”,根据turned可知,从句也用一般过去时,故填hadnothingtodowith。2.前几天有人闯入他们房子,所以他们得防范任何危险。Theirhousebysomeonetheotherday,sotheyhavetoanydanger.【答案】wasbrokenintoguardagainst【详解】breakinto“闯入”,为固定短语,和主语之间是被动关系,结合句意可知应用一般过去时的被动语态,主语是单数,be动词用was;guardagainst“防范”,haveto后加动词原形。故填wasbrokeninto;guardagainst。3.事实证明,杰克是在外面被刀所伤,回家后失血过多死亡。ItthatJackwaswoundedwithaknifeoutsideandafterhegotbackhome.【答案】turnedoutbledtodeath【详解】turnout表示“证明是,结果是”,为固定短语。根据句意可知本句是一般过去时;bleedtodeath表示“失血过多死亡”,bleed的过去式bled。故填turnedout;bledtodeath。4.他宁可被误认为是凶手,也不愿意说出真相。Hewouldrather.【答案】bemistakenforamurdererthantellthetruth【详解】根据句子可知空处应填“被误认为是凶手,也不愿意说出真相”。wouldratherdothandosth.“宁愿做某事也不做某事”;mistake动词,“误解”,bemistaken“被误解”;murderer名词,“凶手”;tellthetruth“说出真相”,故填bemistakenforamurdererthantellthetruth。5.汤姆相信星座与性格的形成无关。Tombelievesstarsignstheformationofpersonalities.【答案】havenothingtodowith【详解】根据中英文对照可知,此处缺少“与……无关”,其英文表达为“havenothingtodowith”,而“starsigns...theformationofpersonalities”为宾语从句,时态应是一般现在时,从句的主语是名词复数starsigns,此时动词have用原形。故填havenothingtodowith。6.电脑系统将再不会被轻易闯入。Computersystems.【答案】won’tbebrokenintoeasilyanymore【详解】分析句意可知此句是一般将来时,且是否定句,应用won’t+动词原形。breakinto“闯入”,主语是动词之间是被动关系,所以此处应用一般将来时的被动语态willbedone;easily“容易地”,副词修饰动词;not...anymore“不再”。故填won’tbebrokenintoeasilyanymore。7.安迪急于回到工作岗位,把手机的事情抛诸脑后。Andygetbacktoworkthatheforgotabouthismobilephone.【答案】wasinsuchahurryto【详解】beinahurrytodosth“急忙做某事”,根据forgot可知,此句是一般过去时,根据Andy可知,be动词用was,such……that构成结果状语从句“如此……以至于”。故填wasinsuchahurryto。8.我昨天看见彼得时,他正匆忙地赶地铁。PeterwastocatchthesubwaywhenIsawhimyesterday.【答案】inahurry【详解】inahurry“匆忙”;beinahurrytodosth“匆忙做某事”,是固定短语。故填inahurry。9.警方证实这对夫妇的独子已失踪超过一个月。Thepoliceconfirmthatthecouple’sonlysonforoveramonth.【答案】hasbeenmissing【详解】根据中文提示,空白处应填入表示“已失踪”的英文表达,且动词时态应搭配时间状语“foroveramonth”,选用现在完成时,表示状态的持续。missing丢失的,thecouple’sonlyson这对夫妇唯一的孩子,是第三人称单数。故填hasbeenmissing。10.事实证明,受害者是在外面某个地方受伤,回家后失血过多死亡。Itthatthevictimwaswoundedsomewhereoutsideandafterhegotbackhome.【答案】turnedoutbledtodeath【详解】根据句意可知用一般过去时。“事实证明”itturnedoutthat;“失血过多死亡”bleedtodeath,bleed的过去式bled。故填turnedout;bledtodeath。补全对话7选5W:Nick,DidyouhearaboutthemurderinJuneinNanjing?M:No,Ididn’t.1.,Nancy?W:Oneevening,amankilledhiswife,anoldmanandanotherman.M:Oh,dear!Hemustbecrazy.2.?W:Yes,hewasarrestedinAnhuiProvinceamonthlater.M:3..Themurderwastooterrible.W:4..Butthemanhasa13-year-oldsoninamiddleschool.M:5.!Theboyhasnoparentsanylonger.What’sitaboutDoeshehaveacriminalrecordYouarerightHashebeenarrestedIdon’tthinksoWhatapityHemustbechargedtodeath【答案】【小题1】A【小题2】D【小题3】G【小题4】C【小题5】F【分析】本文主要谈论一起谋杀案。【小题1】句意:它是关于什么的?考查情景交际题。根据下文Oneevening,amankilledhiswife,anoldmanandanotherman.(一天晚上,一个男人杀了他的妻子,一个老人和另一个男人。)结合句意可知选A。【小题2】句意:他被捕了吗?考查情景交际题。根据下文回答Yes,hewasarrestedinAnhuiProvinceamonthlater.(是的,他一个月后在安徽省被捕。)可知问句是一般疑问句,结合句意和语境可知选D。【小题3】句意:他必须被处死。考查情景交际题。根据下文Themurderwastooterrible.(谋杀危害极大的。)结合句意可知选G。【小题4】句意:你是对的。考查情景交际题。根据上文“他必须被处死。谋杀危害极大的。”结合句意可知选C。【小题5】句意:太遗憾了!考查情景交际题。根据上文Butthemanhasa13-year-oldsoninamiddleschool.(但是他有一个13岁的儿子在上中学。)和下文Theboyhasnoparentsanylonger.(这个男孩再也没有父母了。)结合句意和语境可知选F。(一)(2018上·江苏·九年级统考期末)假设你叫李华,昨天晚上你看完电影在回家途中目击了一起抢劫案.请就以下信息,以李华的名义写一份给警方的书面材料,要求词数100左右.材料的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数.案发时间昨天晚上大约九点案发地点电影院附近的一条街道拐角处作案人情况两个男子,一个戴着墨镜的高个子,一个矮个子受害人情况一位年轻的女士,戴着一条金项链和一块金手表案发经过你正在街道上走着,突然听到身后有人呼救.你看到两个男子正抢劫一名女子.女子和他们进行了激烈的搏斗.当你赶到时,两个劫匪已各自骑着自行车逃跑.女子的金表被抢走了,但幸运的是女子没有受伤.DearSir/MadamI'mwritingtoreportarobberytoyou.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ihopetheinformationwillhelpyoucatchtherobbers.YoursfaithfullyLiHua.【满分作文】DearSir/MadamI'mwritingtoreportarobberytoyou.Ataboutninelastnight,IwasonthewaybackhomefromthecinemawhensuddenlyIheardsomeonecryingforhelpfrombehind.Iturnedaroundandfoundatallmanwithapairofdarkglassesandashortmanrobbingayoungwomanatthestreetcornernearthecinema.Thewomanworeagoldnecklaceandagoldwatch.Sheputupagoodfightwiththem.IrantowardsthembutwhenIarrived,thetworobbershadriddentheirbikesaway.Theyrobbedthewomanofhergoldwatch,butluckily,thewomanwasn'thurt.Ihopetheinformationwillhelpyoucatchtherobbers.YoursfaithfullyLiHua.【解题思路】题目要求写一份书面材料,向警方报告昨晚在电影院附近发生的抢劫案。本文属于材料作文,为警察提供一份目击证明。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑,可适当增加内容。这是一篇优秀的作文,很好地完成了试题规定的任务,语言表达符合英语习惯,准确运用时态、主谓一致,特别适用一些亮点词句,增强逻辑关系,增加上下文意思连贯,用词准确,句子通顺,行文连贯。【写作步骤】第一步:说明写信的意图。第二步:说明事件发生的时间,所看见的事情的经过,包括受害人财物的损失和嫌疑人的情况,长相等信息。第三步:告别语,希望早日抓到嫌疑人。【亮点词汇】reportarobberyto...;cryingforhelp;turnedaround;ridden...away;catchtherobbers.【高分句型】Ataboutninelastnight,IwasonthewaybackhomefromthecinemawhensuddenlyIheardsomeonecryingforhelpfrombehind.”(when引导的时间状语从句)(二)(2018·九年级单元测试)根据下面提示,写一篇90词左右的短文,描述一起谋杀案件。1.昨晚11点到12点之间,人民路上发生了一起谋杀案,被害者是一名司机,四十多岁2.案发时,有人听到被害者求救。受害人受了刀伤,流血过多而死。3.警方已经悬赏五万元,以获取重要线索。4.如果你有任何信息,请拨打110和警方联系。【满分作文】Lastnight,amurdertookplacebetweenelevenandtwelveonRenminRoad.Adriverwasmurdered.Hewasinhisforties.Atthetimeofthecrime,someoneheardhimshoutingforhelp.Thevictimwasattackedwithaknifeandbledtodeathasaresult.Sofar,thepolicehaveofferedarewardof50,000yuanforimportantclues.Ifyouhaveanyinformation,pleasecall/contactthepoliceon110.【写作思路】本文属于材料作文,描述一起谋杀案件。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑,可适当增加内容。【写作步骤】写作时可以从以下几个方面做起:第一步:认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求,抓住要点,词数符合要求。构思提纲。有了提纲,我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的,而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥,因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。第二步:初写短文。一切都准备就绪,就可以动笔写作了,在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词,使句子衔接自然。第三步:修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外,还要检查语法结构是否合理,有无重复、啰嗦的语言,大小写是否正确,格式是否正确,词数是否符合要求等。【亮点词语】takeplace,atthetimeof,victim,asaresult,sofar,clue以及contact。【高分句型】Lastnight,amurdertookplacebetweenelevenandtwelveonRenminRoad.Adriverwasmurdered.Hewasinhisforties.Atthetimeofthecrime,someoneheardhimshoutingforhelp.Thevictimwasattackedwithaknifeandbledtodeathasaresult.Sofar,thepolicehaveofferedarewardof50,000yuanforimportantclues.Ifyouhaveanyinformation,pleasecall/contactthepoliceon110.(三)(2017上·九年级单元测试)请根据以下线索写一篇句意连贯的小故事。1.我婶婶一直和她的一个新邻居相处得不好,婶婶说他看起来很不友好;2.一天,我婶婶回到家,发现她昨天刚买的项链不见了;3.她回想自己去过哪儿,觉得可能是那个邻居偷了她的项链,因此她决定立刻报警;4.突然有人敲门,原来是她的新邻居;5.他手里拿着项链,说昨天在门口发现的;6.婶婶很感激他,并愿意和他交朋友。【满分作文】Myauntgotalongwellwithallherneighboursexceptthemanwholivednextdoor.

Myauntsaidhedidn'tlookfriendlyatall.Oneday,whenmyauntcamehomefromwork,sherealizedthatshehadlosthernewnecklacewhichshehadboughtthedaybefore.Shewasveryworried.Sherecalledwhereshehadbeenjustthen.Shethoughtthatperhapsthemanwholivednextdoorhadstolenhernecklace.Sosheplannedtocallthepoliceatonce.Justthen,someoneknockedatthedoor.Itwastheyoungman,hernewneighbour.Shewasshockedthathernecklacewasinhishand.

Hetoldherthathefounditatthedoorway.Andhethoughtitmustbemyaunt's,sohecametoreturnit.Yes,that'strue.Itwasthenecklacethatmyauntlost.Myauntwasverythankful.Shetoldhernewneighbourthattheycouldbegoodfriendslater.【解题思路】点睛:这是一篇材料作文,根据提示内容可知用一般过去时,可把提示的内容逐条翻译并拓展成不同的句子,最后把这些句子连在一起即可。这篇习作的层次清晰,内容饱满,表达流畅。【解题步骤】第一步:首先介绍故事的背景和主要人物。第二步:详细描述事件,阿姨在回家的时候意识到她丢失了项链,她怎么想的,她打算怎么做,等等。第三步:构建情节:可以先写阿姨丢失了项链并怀疑是邻居偷的,然后写她打算报警,接着写邻居来归还项链,最后写阿姨对邻居的感激和愿意成为朋友。【亮点词汇】getalongwellwith,nextdoor,atall,thedaybefore,justthen,atonce,knock

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