读后续写志愿者们帮助89岁老人ronald讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习

24年4月19日云南省高三统测读后续写LauraMulvihill

felttheridewasprobablyveryunusualwhenshepickedup89-year-old

RonaldDembner

fromthe

Veteran’sHospital

inHenryCounty,Georgia.Itwasobviousthathewasstrugglingand

inbadshape.Butitwasn’tuntiltheyarrivedathishomethatherworstdoubtswereconfirmed.Expectingtobegreetedbyfamilymembers,shewasgreetedbysomethingoutofanightmare(噩梦)episodeofHoardersinstead.Mr.Ronald’shomewascoveredwith

rubbish.Thecounters,

carpets,andwallslooked

dirty.Theroomsmeltabsolutelyterrible.BecauseallofRonald’sfamilymembershadpassedaway,hehadnoonetoassisthim.Eventhehomecarenurseshadstoppedcomingtovisitasaresultoftheextremely

awfullivingconditions.Hewascompletelyalone,exceptforhisdog,

Homer,whohadtakentopoopinginthehouse.UnabletocleanupafterhimselforHomerbutterrifiedoflosinghishomeandhisdog,Mr.Ronaldwastooafraidtoreachoutforhelp.Mulvihill,however,wasnot.Horrifiedbywhatshewitnessed,shedecidedtotakemattersintoherownhands.Shespenthoursonthephone,contactingthefiredepartment,adultservices,theChamberofCommerceandHabitatforHumanity.Noonecouldofferanyhelp.“Everyonesaid,mentallyhe’sfine,he’sjustolder.Sonobodywillhelp,”shesaid.Finally,withallotherresourcesrunningout,shepostedacalltoarmsonsocialmedia,creatingthe

group,

HelpingMr.Ronald.Sheexplainedthesituation.Shewroteinpart,“Idrovehimhomeandheaskedmetohelphiminside.Helivesaloneandcannotkeepupwithhispet.Thehouseisterrible.”Shewentontoexplainthat“themainissuesaredogpoop(1dog)andgeneraldisrepair(norailingonthestairs,soiledcarpetandfurniture,etc)”.Sheknewitwouldtakeanarmytomakethingsright.Luckily,shehadfoundone,2000strong.Thearmywasformed.

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Dozensofvolunteerscameforwardtohelp,withadesiretomakeadifference.

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Mr.RonaldwasdeeplymovedbywhatMulvihillandthevolunteershaddone.________________________________________________________________________________________________________

注：考卷中并没有任何下划线词汇。我们刻意标出这些词汇是想展现续写和原文概念的互动。故事中文梗概LauraMulvihill从乔治亚州亨利县的退伍军人医院接到89岁的RonaldDembner后，送他回家。到Ronald家后，Laura才发现他家里堆满了垃圾，气味难闻，生活条件极其恶劣以至于家庭护理护士都不再来访。Laura决定采取行动帮助Ronald。尽管她联系了多个官方机构，但无人提供帮助。Laura最后在社交媒体上呼吁，创建了“HelpingMr.Ronald”的群组。不久，志愿者们开始汇聚到一起…

主要人物：

Ronald

Laura

次要人物：

Homer（Ronald的狗）

志愿者们（volunteersofthegroupnamedHelpingMr.Ronald）

文本主题分类：慈善之举（助人为乐）

续写思路建议据题目给出的续写第一段首句信息，该段落的续写主线应该是志愿者们具体的工作（打扫房屋、清理垃圾、维修设施…）。为了实现和第二段开头句的顺利衔接，第一段的末尾处应该明确表示在志愿者们的努力下，Ronald的居住环境有了很大改观。第二段续写，重点应该放在Ronald在接受了帮助之后的心理活动上（感激、快乐、感到被关心…）。文章的结尾处，考生如能适度提炼一下主题（人间有爱）就更好了。写作示范Paragraph1:Dozensofvolunteerscameforwardtohelp,withadesiretomakeadifference.

Equippedwithbrooms,mops,andboundlessenergy,theysettowork,readytotackletheneglectthathadovertaken

Mr.Ronald's

home.Thevolunteerssplitintoteams,tacklingdifferentareasofthehouse.Witheachpassinghour,thepilesof

rubbish

grewsmaller,andthestainsonthe

carpet

begantofade.Laughterandasenseofsharedpurposefilledtheairasthe

dirty

spacetransformedbeforetheireyes.Thehomewasnotonlytidiedbutalsorestoredtoaplaceofdignityandwarmth.Itwasatestamenttowhatcouldbeaccomplishedwhenagroupofpeoplecomestogether.

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Paragraph2:Mr.RonaldwasdeeplymovedbywhatMulvihillandthevolunteershaddone.

Theirkindnessandthedramaticchangeinhishomeliftedhisspiritsinawayhehadn'tfeltinyears.Thevolunteersof

HelpingMr.Ronald

committedtonotjustleavinghimwithacleanhouse,butalsowithaplanforongoingsupport.Asthedaydrewtoaclose,Ronaldlookedaroundatthecleanedhouse,thewaggingtailofhisdog

Homer,andthesmilingfacesaroundhim.Herealizedthathewasn'tjustgivenacleanhome,buthewasalsoremindedofthekindnessthatstillexistedintheworld.（95words）

写作细节分析Paragraph1:Dozensofvolunteerscameforwardtohelp,withadesiretomakeadifference.

Equippedwithbrooms,mops,andboundlessenergy,theysettowork,readytotackletheneglectthathadovertaken

Mr.Ronald's

home.（必要的细节描写：志愿者们打扫房屋的必要工具）Thevolunteerssplitintoteams,tacklingdifferentareasofthehouse.Witheachpassinghour,thepilesof

rubbish

grewsmaller,andthestainsonthe

carpet

begantofade.（rubbish和carpet展现和原文概念互动）Laughterandasenseofsharedpurposefilledtheairasthe

dirty

spacetransformedbeforetheireyes.Thehomewasnotonlytidiedbutalsorestoredtoaplaceofdignityandwarmth.（房屋打扫前后对比）Itwasatestamenttowhatcouldbeaccomplishedwhenagroupofpeoplecomestogether.（强调集体的力量）

Paragraph2:Mr.RonaldwasdeeplymovedbywhatMulvihillandthevolunteershaddone.

Theirkindnessandthedramaticchangeinhishomeliftedhisspiritsinawayhehadn'tfeltinyears.（精神振奋和原文一开始提到的inbadshape形成互动和对比）Thevolunteersof

HelpingMr.Ronald

committedtonotjustleavinghimwithacleanhouse,butalsowithaplanforongoingsupport.Asthedaydrewtoaclose,Ronaldlookedaroundatthecleanedhouse,thewaggingtailofhisdog

Homer,andthesmilingfacesaroundhim.（别忘了适度提及次要人物：陪伴Ronald的宠