读后续写中拓展策略的运用（解析版）

读后续写中拓展策略的运用

【要点释义】

续写段落的首句拓展

如何写好读后续写在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球获得梦寐以求的高分？如何让学生的

作品在高考中脱颖而出获得高分？这是很多老师和学生一直在不懈努力的课题。那么，读后

续写的开头如何写呢？可以使用哪些写作技能和手法？我们知道，一个好的故事开头就好比

是一堂成功的课的导入，能够迅速抓住学生和老师们的兴趣，并且愿意听下去，跟着授课老

师的思路走。一个好的故事开头就好比是■个带着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有

趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定会让读者大倒胃口，恢恢欲睡。"wellbegunishalf

done!”可见，写好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么，在时间紧迫的考场上如何写

出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从语法手段和写作涉及的内容来探索。

【续写段落的8种首句接话技巧】

1.用副词显现做出动作反应时的时间特征等

例如：

（2016.10浙江卷）Paral：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.

【分析】用时间时间副词承接所给首句中的“itgettingdarkagain”，同时衔接后文的环境描

写“thedarknessruledtheforest”。副词衔接自然、顺畅。

2.用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪

例如：

（1）（2016.10浙江卷）Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.

【分析】用形容词短语“Desperateandhopeless”凸显了人物的情绪状态,与后面的动作“knelt

down”一起再现了情境中的人物的精神状态。

（2）（2016.10浙江卷）Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,she

struggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.

【分析】用“状态形容词+as/though引导的倒装句”结构体现了人物早上起来后的精神状态。

（3）（2018.06浙江卷）Para1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Afraid

thatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.

【分析】用“情绪形容词+从句”结构阐释了人物见到兔子后的心理反应。

（4）（2018.06浙江卷）Para2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedand

hungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.

【分析】用并列的表示心理状态的形容词，体现了人物心力交瘁的状态。

3.用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化等

例如：

（1）（2016.10浙江卷）Paral:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.

【分析】用“现在分词+情绪形容词”结构体现了人物失望的心理状态。

（2）（2016.10浙江卷）Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,she

continuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.

【分析】用“现在分词+状态形容词”结构传递了人物早上醒来后的精神状态。

4.用直接引语增强情境效果

例如：

（2017.06浙江卷）Para1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."Paulshouted

atMac.

【分析】用含有祈使句的直接引语与首句提示中的“abruptlystopped”形成呼应，进一步烘

托了紧张的情境。

5.添加背景描写以烘托场景

例如：

（2017.11浙江卷）Para2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongthe

way.Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeep

valleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.

【分析】用“视觉+环境描写+拟人修辞”结构与首句提示语中的“lotsofgreatsights”遥相

呼应，再现了美丽风景对视觉的冲击效果。

6.引入新动作创造新的情境

例如：

（2017.11浙江卷）Para1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?

【分析】用“动作描写+问句衔接”结构承接首句提示语创造了一个新的情境，即“露营”。

7.借助声音效果增强描写功效

例如：

BOOM,CRASH!Thewindwashowlingoutsideofmyhouse.Wewerehavingaterriblethunder

storm.Iwasveryscared.

【分析】用“howling”这一声效进一步拓展了首句所设定的情境效果。

8.用疑问句引出新的话题或对事件的新的看法

例如：

Whydoestroublealwaysfollowmearound?DoIhavea“kickme”sigoonmybackor

something?

【分析】用一般疑问句承接首句的特殊疑问句，进一步凸显了作者对“trouble”的看法。

故事冲突的预设与解决

读后续写首先力争读懂原文，找出记叙文的几要素，找到故事情节中到底有什么冲突或

问题。然后读懂需要续写的两段的首句，根据首句推测故事发展的走向和两段的大致内容。

读后续写的文章属于叙事类文体，大部分故事都是围绕conflict（冲突）和solution（问题解

决）来运转的，因此矛盾冲突在叙事类读后续写语篇中尤为重要。矛盾冲突的解决能推动故

事情节的发展。矛盾冲突分预设与解决技巧，可以帮助学生在基于篇章主题意义下更好地发

散思维，做到有话可说，有事可写。同时，在学生创设矛盾冲突进行续写的过程中，可以

联系上文已有的故事冲突，提高故事的完整性和连贯性。学生掌握了矛盾冲突的基本写作技

巧，有利于在续写的故事创作中打开思路，提高语言的综合运用能力。

【故事冲突的预设与解决的7个技巧】

技巧1：面对问题，人物产生的消极或积极情绪

【技巧举例】

（2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.l）Thepaydayarrivedatlast!wasdelightedtofinallyget

thepaymentafterIworkedhardfortwoweeks.Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithought

abouthowtomakeuseofthe"huge"sumofmoney.6<Ineededanewfootballinthefuture.9,I

whisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheold

truckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Itseemedasifsomethingwronghadhappened......

【分析】续写第一段中的"Onthewayhomefullofexcitement表明了故事主人公心情非

常好，但是当面对新的问题“mydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,

lookingsad”时，故事主人公内心开始出现冲突与疑问，这就反映在"somethingwrong上

面。两种心态的冲突描写前后衔接自然、且恰到好处。

【用语储备】

“感至U一阵”：feelaflushof...=feelawaveof...=feelafeeling/senseof...[joy（高兴）,

excitement（兴奋）,pride（骄傲）,anger（愤怒）,rage（狂怒）,panic（惊慌）,alarm（惊慌）,terror（恐惧）,

horror（恐惧）,fear（恐惧）,unease（不安），sorrow（悲伤）,sadness（悲伤）,grief（悲伤）,

embarrassment（尴尬）,disappointment（失望）,shame（羞愧）,guilt（愧疚）]。

例如：Shefeltawaveofpanic,butforcedherselftoleavetheroomcalmly.

她感到一阵惊慌，但是强迫自己镇静地离开了房间。

技巧2：面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理

【技巧举例】

（2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2）ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybefore

Halloween.llookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomy

room,butMomstoppedme."Youhaven'treadthecommentsyet.^^Iscrolleddownthescreenand

marveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.

【分析】续写第二段首句提示语提供了一个新的情境，即“Thevideowaspostedonline”,

这让故事主人公内心冲突加剧（Embarrassedandalittleannoyed）,但当听力母亲的话之后，

主人公开始阅读网上的评论，这又将主人公引向另一情境，结果主人公内心又起了变化

（marveled）。情境的不断变换，加剧了故事主人公内心的矛盾冲突的不断变换。

【用语储备】

（1）心里想：think/saytooneself

（2）害怕；恐'慌：withfear/panic/terror;tremble;shiver;shake;quake;tremblewithfear;be

seizedwithpanic;screamwithpanic/terror;freeze/shakewithterror

（3）生气；‘愤怒：withrage;bered-cheekedwithrage;tremble/shakewithrage;feellikecrying

withrage;bespeechlesswithrage;beboilingwithrage

（4）兴奋；激动：withexcitement;yellwithexcitement;jumpupanddownwithexcitement;

screamwithexcitement;gowildwithexcitement

（5）悲伤；流泪：Tearsblurredone'seyes.泪水模糊了她的双眼。/One'seyesgotmisty.一个

人的眼睛都模糊了。/One'seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.泪眼模糊。/tearsrolldownone'seyes

/cheeks/face泪水落下

技巧3：面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为

【技巧举例】

(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2)77zetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmother

up.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasvery

surprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.

Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaid

loudly,“HappyMother，sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

【分析】续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲(woketheirmotherup)后，母亲的动作首先有

“saw”和“wasverysurprised”,之后在双胞胎发出节日问候“HappyMother'sDay”时，母

亲的动作有“hugged”和“kissed”。这种“动作主动应对”模式在休息的故事情节冲突拓展

过程中是比较重要的，因为动作上的变化往往承载了人物对情节中的矛盾冲突的回应模式及

态度。

【用语储备】

(1)常用词语：openone'smouth;widenone'seyes;risetoone'sfeet;jumptoone'sfeet;shoutat

thetopofone'slung;reachout(伸出手)

(2)常用句式：如：Havingpassedtheexam,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.通

过考试后，他非常高兴，不知所措。

Sheopenedthegiftwithherhandsshakingslightly.她用轻微颤抖的手打开了礼物。

技巧4：人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出现了新问题

【技巧举例】

(2018年6月,浙江高考,Para.lySuddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.My

horseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmy

dadturnedaroundandshouted,"'Holdon!^^Allofasuddenthehorsebegantonm.Mydadtriedto

keepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesidea

river.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.

【分析】续写第一段首句承接源语篇提供了一个新的情境，即"rabbitjumpedout",从而引

发了马与人的一系列的避险动作，并且马由于受惊而奔跑起来，最终将主人公带入了另一个

困境，即“wewerewayoffthetrack”。

【用语储备】

(1)不幸的是(unfortunately)

Butbadluckforsb,...但是某人真不走运

Shetriedherbest,butinvain.她尽力了，但没有成功。

(2)某人做了某事，不知道下一步该做什么。

Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext.

Sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.

技巧5：情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法

【技巧举例】

(2020年7月，浙江高考,Para.2)Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Myheartleaped

withjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.EUiusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.

Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,

sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewere

climbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeand

sound.

【分析】续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境“thehelicopterarrived"，于是故事主人公的心

情好转(Myheartleapedwithjoy),并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公就又有了新的想法

(wethrowallthefoodwehave),这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救

后，主人公又开始感谢(Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeand

sound)o可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件的回应过程中的

特写镜头。

【用语储备】

“某人突然想到...”：Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat...=Ithitsbthat...二Itstrucksbthat...=It

dawnedonsbthat...

技巧6：面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法

【技巧举例】

(2017年6月，浙江高考,Para.2)Afewminuteslater,theother加。cyclistsarrived.They

foundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedoff

theirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstook

outthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthe

meanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,

itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.

【分析】续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人(theothertwocyclistsarrived),之后又

不断有人加入(Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicycles/Moreandmorecarsstopped),故事

中的人物有了一系列与狼对抗的动作，如“circledthewolf”“tookoutthesticksfromthecars”

“tookouttheknives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步推向高潮。

【用语储备】

(1)鼓起勇气(做某事):take/gather/one'scourage(todosth)

(2)毫不犹豫/选择：withoutasecondthought/withoutdelay/withouthesitation/havingnochoice

技巧7：获得新的成长，人物开始总结、点题并呼应前文

【技巧举例】

(2022年1月，浙江卷，Para.2)OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalfora

seriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.Hewasa

littlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodo

therestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkas

afineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Henderson's

wasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificance

ofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravel

farther.

【分析】续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了项目(Webeganto

workasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime),这引发了主人公的反响，并且主

人公的这种体验不断地深入(从“wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates”到"agroupof

personscantravelfarther")，充分展现了主人公内心的矛盾冲突从不断激化到出现转机、再

到一步步迎刃而解的过程。

【用语储备】

(1)直到……才意识到……

倒装句：Notuntil...didsbrealize/noticethat...

强调句：Itwasonly...thatsbrealizedthat...

(2)表达经历与教训

WhatavaluablelessonIhavelearnedfrom...!我从...中得到了宝贵的教训。

Whatanunforgettableexperience!多么难忘的经历啊！

(3)结尾点题

Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.天助自助者。

Everyoneisthearchitectofhisownfate.每个人都是自己命运的建筑师。

Lifeisfulloflaughterandtears.Onlybyacceptingbothcanweenjoylife.生命就是充满欢

笑和泪水的。只有同时接受两者，我们才能享受生活。

Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouraction.永远不要低估你的行为的力量。

【提升练习】

1.（2024.黑龙江哈尔滨.模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，

使之构成一篇完整的短文。

ItwasabrightandsunnySaturdaywhenMr.Jonesmovedinnextdoor.Heisanold

gentlemanwiththick-framedglassesandawirybeard.Icouldseehismanybelongings:antique

chests,alargeandtattered（破败的）paintingofarainforest,andboxesandboxesofoldbooks.

Thelineofmoversbringingitemsintothehousewasendless!However,therewasoneitemthat

Mr.Jonesrefusedtoletthemoverstouch.Itwascoveredinaredvelvetclothandhecarefully

carrieditinsidehimself.

Thatnight,IheardanoddnoisecomingfromMr.Jones9shouse.Itwassuchastrangenoise

thatIcouldnotsleepatall!Tomyastonishmentandanxiety,everynightthestrangesoundwould

comeup.Aftermuchconsideration,Idecidedtoinvestigatethismystery.Iwonderedwhaton

earthMr.Joneswas?Whatcouldthisstrangenoisebe?Whatcouldhebehiding?Manydoubts

alwaysechoedinmymind.

Thenextday,toconfirmmyguess,Islidintohishouse.Mr.Joneshadleftthewindowof

hisbasementunlockedandIcrawledinsidewithoutpermission.Makingseveralattempts,Imade

it!IfeltaroundthewallsforalightswitchandwhenIfinallyturnedthelighton,Iwasamazed!

Thebasementwaslikeamuseum.Thereweremanyexquisitejunglesandanimals'models

whichwereoftenseeninmuseums.Onthebookshelfweresomeacademicbooksaboutzoo

animals.Ialsonoticedsomeremainingcornsinthecomer.WhenIglancedatthetable,therewas

afirst-aidkitonit!Determinedtofindoutthetruth,IwasmakingmywayacrosstheroomwhenI

heardthatstrangenoiseagain,comingfromupstairs!Nervously,Iwalkedupthestairsasquietly

asIcouldbutthenonthelaststep...thefloorbeneathmyfootcreaked（嘎吱作口向）！Ipaused,

hopingnoonewashometohearme.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Suddenly,thedooropenedandtherestoodMr.Jonesstaringrightatme.

AndthenintheotherroomIsawit-alargecuteparrotinadelicategoldcage!

【参考范文】

Suddenly,thedooropenedandtherestoodMr.Jonesstaringrightatme.Hiseyeswerewide

withsurprise,buttherewasatwinkleofamusementinthem."Ah,mynewneighbor,“hesaid,his

voicewarmandinviting.waswonderingwhenwe'dmeet.^^Hegesturedformetofollowhim,

andIhesitantlysteppedinside.a4Iapologizefortheintrusion,1stammered,feelingabit

embarrassed.t6Iwasjust...curiousaboutthenoise.^^

Andthen,intheadjacentroom,1sawit-amagnificentparrotwithfeathersofemeraldand

gold.Itsquawkedandfluttered,thesoundechoingthroughthehouse."Thisisthemystery,9,Mr.

Jonessaid,atwinkleinhiseye."Myparrot,wholovestosingatnight.^^Reliefwashedovermeas

Irealizedthestrangenoisewasjustabird,andMr.Joneswasjustamanwithafondnessforthe

unusual.

【写作分析】本文以Mr.Jones的神秘行为为线索，讲述了作者对新邻居的好奇和探索。Mr.

Jones在搬家时带来了许多古董和书籍，并且有一个被红绒布覆盖的物品引起了作者的注意。

晚上，作者听到了Mr.Jones家中传来的奇怪噪音，这激发了作者的好奇心，决定去调查这

个谜团。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“突然，门开了，Mr.Jones站在那里直视着我。”可知，第一段可以描

写作者在Mr.Jones家中被逮个正着的尴尬场景，以及Mr.Jones对作者的友好反应。

②由第二段首句内容“然后，在另一个房间里我看到了它一一只在精美金笼里的大而可爱

的鹦鹉！”可知，第二段可以描写作者在Mr.Jones家中发现了噪音的来源，即一只美丽的鹦

鹉。这解开了作者心中的谜团。

2.续写线索：被逮个正着——友好反应——发现鹦鹉——噪音来源

3.词汇激活：

行为类

①逮个正着：caughtred-handed/caughtintheact

②发现：discover/find

③友好反应：friendlyresponse/warmreaction

④闯入：intrude/breakin

情绪类

①吃惊：surprise/astonishment

②尴尬的：embarrassed/awkward

③好奇的：curious/inquisitive

④宽慰：relief/comfort

［高分句型1】"Ah,mynewneighbor,9,hesaid,hisvoicewarmandinviting.（运用了独立主格

结构）

【高分句型2】“Iapologizefortheintrusion,9,1stammered,feelingabitembarrassed.（运用了现

在分词作状语）

［高分句型3】Itsquawkedandfluttered,thesoundechoingthroughthehouse.（运用了独立主

格结构）

2.（2024.山东济宁.三模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构

成一篇完整的短文。

Centeringmyselfontheiceoftheskatingrink（溜冰场），Ipreparedformyskating

performance.Aconfidentsmilespreadacrossmyface.ThiswasthedayI'dperformmybest

skatinginayear,attemptingachallengingjumpknownastheaxel（前外一周半跳）.Myfriend

Calebyelledfromthestands,atYoucandoit,Harper!Myotherfriendscrossedtheirfingers.My

dadalsoshouted,4tYoulookbeautiful!?,

Asthemusicstarted,Iwasfullyprepared.Withagracefulcircle,spins,andabroadsmile,I

beganmyperformance.EverythingprogressedsmoothlyuntilIreachedthecrucialaxeljump.AsI

preparedtojump,suddenlyamixofexcitementandnervesfilledme.Tobefrank,Icoulddoit

whenIpracticedoff-ice,butI'donlylandediton-iceseveraltimesinmyentirelife.Mycoach

hadstrategicallyplaceditatthestartofmyroutinetoensuremylegswereattheirpeakforthis

demandingmove.

Itooktheleap,butperformedadistinctjump.Itwasamerehalf-circle,fallingshortofthe

axel'soneandahalf.Iheardmyfriendssighandsawmycoachraiseaneyebrow.

Determined,Iattemptedtheaxelagain,butfailed.Irepeatedlytriedandfailed,spendingso

muchtimeontheice.Whenmyroutineended,mydresswaswetandIwasfarbehindthebeat.

Thesilencewasdeafening,markingthemostembarrassingmomentsofmyskatingcareer.AsI

skatedaway,Icouldsensetheweightofeveryone'sstareuponme.

AsImademywaytomycoachanddad,IheardthecrowdcheeringforMarlo,acharming

eight-year-old,whowasgracefullyskatingpastme,leavingmewithanintensesensethatmy

skatingcareerhadcometoanend.

Mycoachhandedmemyskateguards,askingifIwasimprovising（即兴创作）myroutine.

Ididn'tknowhowtoreply.Myfriendswereembarrassedforme,avoidingmyeyes.Theyseemed

todiscussmeexceptCaleb,myclosefriend.Hebroughtmehotchocolateandapologizedbefore

skatinghisownroutine.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Ifeltanurgetogohome,butmydadinsistedwewaitfortheresults.

WithdoubtIreturnedontotheskatingrinkthenextmorning.

【参考范文】

Ifeltanurgetogohome,butmydadinsistedwewaitfortheresults.Heremindedmethat

everyskaterhastheirupsanddowns,andthatifsthecouragetocontinuethatdefinesus.Despite

thedisappointment,Istayed,andwhentheresultswereannounced,Ihadplacedthird.Itwasn't

thevictoryIhadenvisioned,butitwasavictorynonetheless-atestamenttoperseveranceand

hardwork.

Withdoubt,Ireturnedontotheskatingrinkthenextmorning.Theicewascoldand

unforgiving,mirroringmyemotions.ButasIlacedupmyskates,Ifeltarenewedsenseof

determination.Istartedwiththebasics,focusingonmybalanceandthestrengthofmylegs.Each

timeIfell,Igotbackupandtriedagain.Mycoachwasthere,offeringwordsofencouragement

andtechnicaladvice.Bytheendofthesession,Iwasn'tperfect,butIwasbetter.Iknewtheroad

tomasteringtheaxelwasstilllong,butIwasreadytofacethechallengehead-on.

【写作分析】本文是一篇读后续写，以人物为线索展开，讲述了哈珀在溜冰场上准备进行一

场重要的滑冰表演，尝试完成一个高难度的阿克塞尔跳。尽管在表演中多次尝试失败，感到

尴尬和沮丧，但在朋友和家人的鼓励下，她决定不放弃，第二天回到溜冰场继续练习，决心

克服挑战。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“我有一种想要回家的冲动，但我爸爸坚持让我们等待结果。”可知，第

一段可以描写哈珀在父亲的鼓励下坚持等待比赛结果，以及最终获奖的感受。

②由第二段首句内容“带着怀疑，第二天早晨我回到了溜冰场。”可知，第二段可以描写哈珀

第二天回到溜冰场，尽管心中充满怀疑，但仍然决心继续努力，从基础开始练习。

2.续写线索：想要回家——父亲鼓励——等待结果——获奖—第二天回到溜冰场——决

心练习——从基础开始——逐步提高

3.词汇激活

行为类

①回家：gohome/retumhome

②等待：waitfor/await

③练习：practice/exercise/train

④尝试：attempt/try/endeavor

情绪类

①失望：disappointment/letdown

②怀疑：doubt/skepticism/hesitation

③决心、：determination/resolve/decision

④激动：excited/thrilled/elated

[高分句型1]Heremindedmethateveryskaterhastheirupsanddowns,andthatit'sthecourage

tocontinuethatdefinesus.（运用了that引导的宾语从句作reminded的宾语）

[高分句型2]Istartedwiththebasics,focusingonmybalanceandthestrengthofmylegs.（运用

了现在分词短语focusingon...作状语）

[高分句型3]Mycoachwasthere,offeringwordsofencouragementandtechnicaladvice.（运用

了现在分词作伴随状语）

3.（2024.江西南昌.三模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构

成一篇完整的短文。

SamanthaandJakehadalwaysbeenclosetonature.Growingupinasmallcottagesituated

deepwithinathrivingforest,theyfoundcomfortandwonderinthebeautyofthenaturalworld.

Theirdailyadventuresincludedexploringthewoods,listeningtothebirdsong,andgazingatthe

starrynightsky.However,astheyearspassed,theycouldn'thelpbutnoticethegradualchanges

intheirbelovedforest.

BythetimeSamanthaturnedsixteenandJakewasthirteen,theybegantowitnessthe

effectsofdeforestationontheirwonderland.Thesoundofchainsaws（电锯）andthesightoffallen

treesbecameincreasinglycommon.Thesiblingswerefeelingextremelyshockedandsadbythe

lossoftheforesttheyhadcherishedsincechildhood.

Oneday,afteraparticularlydishearteningwalkthroughthedecreasingwoods,Samantha

cameacrossabookaboutenvironmentalheroes.Theseindividualshaddevotedtheirlivesto

preservingthenaturalworld,andtheirstoriesofresilience（'恢复力）andimpactlightedaspark

withinSamantha'sheart.Shebelievedthatiftheycouldmakeadifference,socouldsheandJake.

Samanthacouldn'twaittosharehernew-foundinspirationwithherbrother.Sherushed

home,hermindfilledwithideasofhowtheycouldprotecttheirforest.Whensheexplainedher

thoughtstoJake,henoddedinagreement.ctOurforestislikefamilytous,“hesaid,“Wecan'tjust

standbyandwatchitdisappear.46

Withfirmdetermination,SamanthaandJakedecidedtotakeaction.Theybeganby

organizingtree-plantingeventsintheircommunity,enlisting（征募）thehelpoffriendsand

neighbors.Eachsaplingtheyplantedwasasymbolofhopeforthefutureoftheirforest.

Soon,theireffortsgainedfavor.Thelocalschoolsjoinedtheircause,incorporating

environmentaleducationintothecurriculumandthecommunityunitedbehindthem.Samantha

andJake'sforestrestorationprojecthadbecomeamovementthatunitedpeopleofallages.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Monthspassed,andtheonce-thinningforestbegantoshowsignsofrecovery.

Oneday,alocalnewsstationreachedouttoSamanthaandJake.

【参考范文】

Monthspassed,andtheonce-thinningforestbegantoshowsignsofrecovery.Thetreesthey

hadplantedgrewstrongerandtaller.SamanthaandJakeinitiatededucationalprograms,inviting

localschoolsandnatureenthusiaststoexploretheforestandlearnaboutitsfragileecosystem.The

morepeopleunderstoodthesignificanceoftheforest,themoretheyjoinedthecause.Thelocal

governmenttookconservationmeasures,too.Onesunnyafternoonafterseveralmonths,tears

welledupinSamantha'seyesassheturnedtoJakeandsaid,“Lookatwhatwe'veaccomplished,

Jake.Ourforestisthrivingonceagain.”

Oneday,alocalnewsstationreachedouttoSamanthaaandJake.Theywereinvitedforan

interviewtosharetheirstory,thechallengestheyfaced,andtheiradviceforyoungpeople

wantingtoprotecttheenvironment.6tIfsthepowerofunityandsharedlovefornaturethatkeep

usgoing,“Samanthasaidduringtheinterview,withJakenoddinginagreementbesideher.

SamanthaandJakehadbecometheheroesoftheirforest,provingthatdeterminationandadeep

bondtonaturecouldinspirepositivechange,abondworthprotectingforgenerationstocome.

【写作分析】本文以Samantha和Jake保护森林为线索展开，讲述了他们从小亲近自然，

目睹森林遭破坏后，受环保英雄事迹启发决定行动起来，通过组织植树活动等努力让森林逐

渐恢复的故事。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“几个月过去了，曾经逐渐稀疏的森林开始显示出恢复的迹象。”可知，

第一段可描写森林在他们的努力下逐渐恢复生机，以及他们开展的教育项目和取得的更多成

果。

②由第二段首句“有一天，当地一家新闻电视台联系上了Samantha和Jake。”可知，第二

段可描写他们接受采访，分享经历和感悟，以及他们最终成为森林的英雄。

2.续写线索：森林恢复一开展教育活动一政府参与一接受采访一分享故事一成为

英雄

3.词汇激活

行为类

①开始显示：begintoshow/starttodisplay

②邀请：invite/extendaninvitation

③点头同意：nodinagreement/giveconsentbynodding

情绪类

①感动得流泪：tearswellup/bemovedtotears

②爱：love/fondness/affection

[高分句型1]SamanthaandJakeinitiatededucationalprograms,invitinglocalschoolsandnature

enthusiaststoexploretheforestandlearnaboutitsfragileecosystem.（运用了现在分词短语作状

语、动词不定式短语做目的状语）

[高分句型2]It'sthepowerofunityandsharedlovefornaturethatkeepusgoing（运用了强调句

结构）

4.（2024.湖南长沙.模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使

之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ninnygrewupwithhergrandparents.Hergrandmotherworkedasahousekeeper,andher

grandfatherwastooweaktomove.Inhiswheelchair,Grandfathertoldherstoriesaboutflowers,

princessesandsunrises.Thosestoriesalwaysendedwiththesamemessage:Asimpleactof

kindnesscreatesanendlessripple（涟漪）thatcomesbacktoyou.

Oneday,Ninnywasatthesupermarketwithhergrandmother.Theyonlyboughtthebare

minimum.tcOh!^^Ninnyjumpedwhenshespottedachocolatecake.Shepulledhergrandmother's

sleeve."Grandfather'sbirthdayisaroundthecomer!Canweplease,please,pleasehaveit?”The

oldladyeyedthechocolatecake.Therewerebeautifuldecorationsonthetopwithfancydesigns

ontheside.Pickingupthecake,Grandmothertookacloselookatthepriceandsighed,“Ninny,

wecan'taffordit.Ifs$40!”

Ninnypouted（喷嘴），tryingtoconvincehergrandmother.Yetsheknewthather

grandmotherwouldnotbend,evenifshebeggedwithherpuppyeyes.Nomatterwhat,moneydid

notgrowontrees.Ninnysighedandturnedaround.Grandmothergaveherasadsmileandturned

towardsthecashier.

Almostoutofnowhere,amanwitha50dollarbillandthechocolatecakeapproachedher

andhandedthesethingstoNinny."Havethem,dear.^^

Ninnytookacloserlookattheman.Hewasaverage.Averageface,averageclothes,and

averageeverything.Hewasjustarandomman.

ThemanbentdownandmaintainedeyecontactwithNinny.4tDoyouknowwhyI'mgiving

youthese?”Ninnyshookherhead.t4WhenIwasalittleboy,amanboughtmeachocolatecake.

HejustoverheardaconversationIhadwithmymother.Nothingelse.Hegavemesomemoney

andasmallslipofpaper.ThenheThemanreachedintohispocketandtookoutadog-eared

pieceofpaper.Lookingatthewordswritten,Ninnyworeasmileonherface,forshewasso

familiarwiththemessage.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Ninnyhuggedthedollarbill,cakeandthepieceofpapertoherchest.

Grandfather^eyeswidened,ctYouwon'tbelieveit!^^

【参考范文】

Ninnyhuggedthedollarbill,cakeandthepieceofpapertoherchest.Astheywalkedback

home,shecouldn'thelpbutreadthemessageonthepaperagainandagain:"