成长故事与微场景描写2022年高考脑瘫男孩赛跑为例课件-高三英语一轮复习

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微场景训练(鼓励)Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”

Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.

Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.划关键:关键事、态度和情感全文梳理：who/what/how/whywho:what:why:David(aboywithabraindisease)I(aspecialeducationteacher)Davidhesitatedtotakepartintherace.Dwasafraidofbeinglaughedatbyotherschools.Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline（起点线）withtheotherrunners.conflict?torunornottorunItwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”

Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.

Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.划关键:关键事、态度和情感全文梳理：who/what/how/whyPara1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline（起点线）withtheotherrunners.conflict?torunornottorun◎evidence:Healwaysworebigtoothysmile(表情描写).Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability.

Healwaysfinishedhisrunlongafterotherchildren,andhedidalwaysfinish.Iwasproudofhisdetermination(主题).

Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability.

Healwaysfinishedhisrunlongafterotherchildren,andhedidalwaysfinish.resultPara1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavid

wouldn'tlookatme.衔接1：主要情节：衔接2：Para2:IwatchedasDavid

moved

uptothe

startingline（起点线）withtheotherrunners.衔接3：正文：结局：升华：情节设计：文末+P1P2给定句三衔一句一升华Myresponse?(askingreasons)Dchangedhisideaandmadeadetermination（D的表情变化）(cheers+)gunshotDfinishedhisrunning.Hisbigtoothysmilewasback.IpersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.(语言/动作描写)TheprocessofD’srunning(动作描写)D’sresponse:answers+feelingsad(害怕被嘲笑/辜负了“我”的期望)(鼓励/责备)Determinationwasthekeytoovercomingdifficulties.先主干再补充Evaluation(Peer’sEvaluation)存在的问题：1.内容上不合理：第一段就在跑步；第二段写跑步得了第一名；跑步过程几乎没有。2.语言上：间接引语的人称不会转换；中式英语3.书写差4.时态乱用Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Withdeepsorrowwrittenalloverhisface,hisglancerestedontheground.Understanding,Igentlyplacedmyhandonhisshoulder,"You'vetrainedsohardforthis,"I

saidsoftly.Upset,Davidwhisperedthathewasafraidofbeingmadefunof.Isqueezedhisshoulder."Finishyourrun,andyou'llalreadybethewinner."Hesitatingforawhile,he

pluckeduphiscourage

andstoodup

withafirmlook,asifdepressiongavewaytodetermination.Para2:‌IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

Thegunshotfired,alltherunnersranlikewindexceptDavid.Thoughhefellbehind,his

determination

neverfadedaway.Hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetoside,hestillranforward.Insteadoflaughingathim,thecrowdcheeredhimon.

Nosoonerhadhecrossedthefinishinglinethanallthepeopleburstoutclappingandcheering.David’sbigtoothysmilewasback,

aproofthatvictoryisn'tspeed,buteverystepofdetermination.IpersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.TheprocessofD’srunning微场景语言积累(鼓励)EYE:lookedatsbgentlyintheeyes温柔地看着某人的眼睛castanencouraginglookatsb.

向某人投以鼓励的眼光sb’seyeswerebrimmedwithencouragement某人的眼睛充满了鼓励withfocusedeyes专注的眼神eyessparklinglikestars眼睛像星星般闪烁FACE:woreawarm/shiningsmileonone’sface脸上带着温暖/灿烂的微笑squeezedasmile挤出一个微笑Abrightsmilespreadacrossherface.她脸上洋溢着灿烂的笑容Smilebloomedlikeaflower.笑容像花朵一样绽放wipedouttearsfromone’scheek擦去脸上的泪水noddedwithencouragement鼓励地点点头微场景语言积累(鼓励)GESTURE:pattedsb.ontheshoulder/backgently温柔地拍某人的背/肩膀hold/hugsbinone’sarmsgentlyheldherinawarmembrace温暖地拥抱着她

thumbedupathim向他竖起大拇指gavemeathumbs-upsign给我竖起大拇指Hesteppedforward,pattedhimontheshoulder,andremindedhimsoftly.他走上前，轻轻拍了拍他的肩膀，轻声提醒道Shegentlyplacedahandonmyshoulder,herwarmtouchinstantlycalmingmynerves.她轻轻地把手放在我的肩上，温暖的触感立刻安抚了我紧张的情绪whisperedsoftly,“It’sOK.We’llfigureitouttogether”轻声说"没关系，我们一起想办法"）Application:微场景写作1Tom即将和队友参加篮球决赛，在赛前你们紧张并且担心对手太强大。请用刚刚学的短语写一段话描写教练鼓励他们。Thecoachedplacedareassuri