高中英语作文读后续写入门课件2

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门（2）1.Tolearnhowtomakeupnewplotswithamoremeaningfulending.2.Tolearnsomeusefulexpressions.LearningaimsLeadin1.Whatdoyouthinkhappeninthe4thand5thpicture?2.Canyougiveitamoremeaningfulending?Step1Reviewwhatiscontinuationwriting1.读一篇350词左右短文，掌握文章大意。2.根据所给两段的第一句续写故事。3.要求只写两段、分布均匀、每段70-80词左右，最好5-6句话，长短句相间，时态以一般过去时为主。4.可根据十句五定法。Step2Howtomakeupnewplots?Para1:1.衔接①（根据所给首句进行恰当衔接）2.负：情绪/场景（创造负面的情绪或场景）3.转：个人：想到/看到/听到...（当这一段只有一个角色时）

互动：动作（拍摸抱）+语言（当这一段两个或以上角色时）4.正：心理5.正：行为/衔接②（与第二段首句进行衔接）Para2:1.衔接③（与第二段首句进行衔接）2.情绪3.动作4.结局：正能量结局5.升华（根据故事走向提炼主题升华）情节自然发展（情绪，动作，语言）Step3PractiseLilywaswaitingoutsideherclass.Shewasfeelingsick.Shehadtwoexamsthatdayandphysicswasfirst.Shereallyhatedphysics.Itwasherworstsubject.Amylookedbackather,andthenlookedawayquickly.Lilythoughtshelookedguilty(惭愧的).Shedidn’thaveaproblemwithphysics;shedidn’thaveaproblemwithanything...MissPerfect!“Hi,Lily,it’syourfavouriteexamtoday,”saidNinaasshejoinedher.“Sowhat’swrongwithAmy?”askedNina.“Ithoughtyouwerefriends.”“Yes,sodidI,”saidLily.“Butshehasn’tspokentomefortwoweeksnow.Shepromisedtohelpmereviseforthephysicsexamtoo,butsheignoredallmycallsandtexts.”saidLilyangrily.Atthattime,Mr.

Reedaskedallthestudentsintotheexamroom.Lilycouldn’tanswerquestionnumberfive.ShelookedupandsawAmysittingtworowsinfrontofher.Lilycouldn’tbelieveit!Amywasholdingherphoneonherkneesunderthetableandreadingfromit.IsthathowAmyalwaysgotsuchgoodgrades?Shefeltreallyangryather,butshedidn’tknowwhattodo.“Stopwritingandputyourpensdown.”saidMr.Reedashestartedtocollecttheexampapers.LilywantedtotalktoAmyatlunchtime,butshecouldn’tfindheranywhere.Thenextexamwashistory.ThatwasLily’sfavouritesubjectbutshewasn’tfeelinggood.“Itwasn’tfair”shethought.“Amywasgettinggoodgradesbycheatingallthattime,”thoughtLily.Justthen,Mr.Reedwalkedpasthertable.“Mr.Reed.”Asshespoketohim,shenoticedAmythroughthewindow,standingaloneinthecourtyard,hershouldersslumped(下垂)asifcarryingaheavyweight.ButLilywastooangrytocare.LilywassittingbehindAmyagaininthehistoryexamthatafternoon.Lilywasfeelingterrible.WhyhadshetoldMr.Reed?Butitwastoolatenow.Mr.ReedwantedhertolookathimandnodifshesawthatAmywascheatingintheexam.ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatAmyhadherphoneunderthetable.___________________Lilywaswalkingtowardstheschoolgate,whenshesawAmy.“Lily,Iwanttotalktoyou.”_____________________1.衔接①和③（根据所给首句进行恰当衔接）找出所给句子的关键词（人物、名词、动词或形容词1）对名词进行解释2）承接之前动作，或者写他人会有什么反应（情动语）3）形容词解释原因ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatAmyhadherphoneunderthetable._____________________________________LilynoddedtoMr.Reed,tryingtosignalhim.①看到Amy考试看手机Lily会有什么反应？结合前面文中与老师的约定，在考试时候比较合适的反应。③Lilywaswalkingtowardstheschoolgate,whenshesawAmy.“Lily,Iwanttotalktoyou.”________________________________________________________________________Amy想跟Lily聊一聊，那么聊什么呢？Amy先说话，怎么说，说什么？说话时状态如何？

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正负：看到Amy考试的时候拿着手机，Lily以为她在作弊很愤怒。转：想到Amy，独自一人站在courtyard的状态，不知道她经历了什么。正：看到Amy手机被拿走，而且离开试场，心里开始有些愧疚。WhenMr.ReedtookAmy’sphoneawayandaskedhertoleavetheroom,LilyfeltamixofreliefandguiltwashoverherPartofherfeltangrythatAmywascheating,butanotherpartfeltatwingeofsympathy.Afterall,shedidn’tknowwhatAmywasgoingthrough.与后文Amy找我聊天，告诉我实情衔接，且为后文解开心结做铺垫。para2.情绪+动作+结局：正能量结局+升华（根据故事走向提炼主题升华）1.Amy很伤心。2.Amy向我解释带手机原因，我也因误解向Amy致歉。3.友谊修复4.升华主题：信任是友谊的基石Amy’svoicewasshaky,andhereyeswerered.Today,Icheckedmyphoneduringexamsbecausemydadsaidhe’dsendupdatesabouthersurgery.”Thetwogirlsstoodthere,smilingthroughtears,theirfriendshipmended.Trustisthefoundationoffriendship.ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatAmyhadherphoneunderthetable.

LilynoddedtoMr.Reed,tryingtosignalhim.HerheartpoundedasshewatchedMr.ReedwalktowardsAmyquietly.PartofherfeltangrythatAmywascheating,butanotherpartfeltatwingeofsympathy.Afterall,shedidn’tknowwhatAmywasgoingthrough.WhenMr.ReedtookAmy’sphoneawayandaskedhertoleavetheroom,Lilyfeltamixofreliefandguiltwashoverher.Lilywaswalkingtowardstheschoolgate,whenshesawAmy.“Lily,Iwanttotalktoyou.”Amy’svoicewasshaky,andhereyeswerered.“I’msosorryIignoredyou,”shesaid.“Mymomhadaheartproblemtwoweeksago.I’vebeengoingtothehospitalafterschooleveryday,andIwastooscaredtotellyou—Ididn’twanttobotheryouwithmyworries.Today,Icheckedmyphoneduringexamsbecausemydadsaidhe’dsendupdatesabouthersurgery.”Lilyfeltarushofguilt.“I’msorryIthoughtyouwerecheating,”shesaid,huggingAmy.“Ishould’vetrustedyou.”Thetwogirlsstoodthere,smilingthroughtears,theirfriendshipmended.Itwasthenthatsherealizedtrustisthefoundationoffriendship.OnepossibleversionStep4SummaryPara1:衔接后

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正能量结局+升华主题续写情节构建Step5Homework阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Friendshipistrulyagreatthing,andIhaveafriendshipwithmydearfriendLilythatmeansalottome.ImetLilyinhighschool.Wewereinthesameclass.Becausewebothlikedmusicandart,wequicklybecamefriends.Wespentalotoftimetogether,havingfunandtalkingaboutallkindsofthings.Herlaughtersoundedsonicetomyears,andhersmilecouldbrightenupanyplace.Wewouldwalkhomearminarmafterschool,sharingoursecretsandhopes.Oneday,there