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I外刊输入——悟语言之道

AllOvertheWorld

ThevastAmazonRainforest,theItaliancityofVeniceandaMediterraneandietoffreshfruit

andvegetables...Whatdothesethreethingshaveincommon?Theyarcallitemsofworldheritage.

Worldheritagemeanstheinvaluablethingsweinheritfromthepast.Itisarichtapestry（织锦）

ofmemories,bothnaturalandman-made.Likealimemachine,heritagenotonlytakesusbackto

ourancestorsandevenearlier,butalsoenablesustowonderatthenaturalworld,traditionsand

humancivilisation.

Thisyearmarksthe45thanniversaryofthefirstWorldHeritageListmadebytheUnited

NationsEducational,ScientificandCulturalOrganization（UNESCO）,andtheadoptionofthe

WorldHeritageConvention（WHC）.

ThegoaloftheWHCistoencouragetheglobalcommunity（社区）ofnationstoidentifyand

protectnaturalandculturalsitesof^outstandinguniversalvalue”.ChinatookpartintheWHCin

December1985.Bythisyear,55culturalandnaturalpropertiesinChinahadbeenaddedtothe

UNESCOlisttopreventthemfromdamage.Andrelatedcommitteewasestablishedtofurtherits

efforts.

UNESCOseparatesheritageitemsintothreecategories（类另ij）:natural,culturalandintangible

（非物质的）.

Naturalheritageusuallymeansnaturallyoccurringwondersoftheworld,liketheGreatBarrier

ReefinAustraliaortheAmazoninBrazil.Theseplacesrecordtheongoingdevelopmentprocessof

thenaturalworldandareimponanthabitatsformanycreatures.

Culturalheritagereferstoman-madeexamplesofnational,ethnicorculturalheritage.Places

likeMoscow'sRedSquarecanstandforaparticularmomentinthecivilisationofhumankind.

KnownasoneofthehistoricancientbuildingsinChina,seeingtheTempleofHeavenhaslongbeen

amustwhentravellinginBeijing.Theyarevaluablecultuialresourcestellingasmuchastoryofthe

pastasahistorybook.

Intangibleheritageoftenincludesculturalpracticesthatareimportanttoexplainthehistoryof

theworld.Chinesecalligraphy,forexample,canrevealmanythingsaboutcivilisation,justasthe

cityofVenicecan.Forthisreason,intangibleheritageisprotectedasmuchasphysical（culturaland

natural）heritageis.

Whateverformittakes,itisworthwhiletocareandpreserveeveryworldheritageitem.Great

contributionshavebeenmadeaccordinglysofar.Andmoreareonthewaytopromotethiscause.

Therefore,thissummer,joinusonajourneyasweexploresomeofourworldheritage.Getreadyto

beamazed!

1.重点词汇再现

(1)hcritagen.遗产

(2)traditionn.传统

(3)UNESCO联合国教科文组织

(4)idcntifyv.找到

(5)takepartin参加

(6)preventv.阻止

(7)committeen.委员会

(8)establishv.创立

(9)furtherv.促进

(10)processn.过程

(11)Moscow莫斯科

(12)historicadj.历史上著名的

(13)templen.寺庙

(14)worthwhileadj.值得的

(15)preservev.保护

(16)contributionn.贡献

(17)promotev.提升

2.重点句型再现：“notonly・・・butalso...''意

为“不但……而且

Likeatimemachine,heritagenotonlytakesusbacktoourancestorsandevenearlier,butalso

enablesustowonderatthenaturalworld,traditionsandhumancivilisation.

历史遗产就像一台时光机，不仅让我们回到我们祖先所在的时代甚至更早，而且使我们能

够对自然世界、传统和人类文明产生好奇。

II迷你语料库(MiniCorpus)

序号佳句呈现赏析

1Therecomesatimewhentheoldmust描写在发展过程中，新旧交替

givewaytothenewanditisnot出现的问题。①when引导定

possibletopreserveeverythingfromour语从句，修饰先行词atime；

pastaswemovetowardsthefuture.类似的句型还有therewasa

timewhen,表示“曾经有一

段……的时光"；②it此处充

当形式主语，真正的主语是t。

preserveeverythingfromcur

past；③as引导时间状语从句。

本句用来描述两者之间保持

Findingandkeepingtherightbalance平衡的困难，可以适当仿写。

2betweenprogressandtheprotectionof其中Findingandkeeping为

culturalsitescanbeabigchallenge.动词-ing短语作主语，使句子

的描写更有动态感。

Bigchallenges,however,cansometimes

3描写挑战与机遇并存。

leadtogreatsolutions.

句中作目的

Inthe1950s,theEgyptiangovernmentinordertodosth.

wantedtobuildanewdamacrosstheNile状语，相当丁soastodosth.。

4inordertocontrolfloods,produce此处有三个并列的iodo不定

electricity,andsupplywatertomore式：tocontrolstoproduce和

farmersinthearea.tosupplyo

续表

序号佳句呈现赏析

描写提议遭到反对。leadto意

为“导致”；两个高级词汇构

5Buttheproposalledtoprotests.成亮点：proposal意为“提

议”和protest意为“抗

议”。

Thegroupaskedforcontributionsfrom描写求助的两个方面：askfor

6differentdepartmentsandraisedfundscontributions（请求帮助）和

withintheinternationalcommunity.raisefunds（筹集资金）。后面分

别用两个不同的介词短语表

示求助的不同途径：from

differentdepartments（从不同

的部门）和withinthe

internationalcommunity（在国

际社会范围内）。

描写寻求解决问题的具体过

程。特别注意动词的联动用

法：investigatedtheissue（调查

研究）,conductedseveral

Expertsinvestigatedtheissue,conducted

tests（实施/做实验）andthen

7severaltests,andthenmadeaproposalfor

madeaproposal（提出建议）...

howdiebuildingscouldbesaved.

既可以精确地描绘出具体的

过程，也可以形象地说明为了

快速解决问题，大家行动的迅

速性。

Theprojectbroughttogethergovernments描写合作和团结的场景。特别

8andenvironmentalistsfromaroundthe注意bringtogether,意为“团

world.结”。

Overthenext20years,thousandsof描写拯救文化遗迹的成就。特

9engineersandworkersrescued22temples别注意形容词countless,意、为

andcountlessculturalrelics.“无数的”。

概括描述最终的成功。词组be

considered（as）意为“被看作:

Whentheprojectendedin1980,itwas

10被视作"；agreatsuccess是抽

consideredagreatsuccess.

象名词具体化，表示“一件成

功的事”。

Notonly1hadthecountriesfoundapathto属于概括总结性描述，适合描

11

thefuturethatdidnotrunovertherelicsof写合作共赢；发展与保护文化

thepast",buttheyhadalsolearntthatit遗迹并进。①“notonly...but

waspossibleforcountriestoworktogetheralso...”意为“不但……而

tobuildabettertomorrow.且...；当notonly置于句

首时，notonly分句需要用部

分倒装；②that引导定语从句

修饰先行词apath；③itwas

possibleforsb.todosth.意为

“某人有可能做某事”，其中

il作形式主语•，真正的主语是

todo不定式。

ThespiritoftheAswanDamprojectisstill

12概括描述“精神长存”。

alivetoday.

Ifaproblemseemstoodifficultforasingle

描写合作能够找到解决问题

13nation,theglobalcommunitycan

的方法。

sometimesprovideasolution.

Agroupofresearchersandscientistsfrom

句中“tohelpincrease...cultural

Chinaandothercountriesarcworking

heritage”表示“旨在力口强人们

14togethertohelpincreaseknowledgeand

对中国古代文化遗产方面的

appreciationofChina'sancientcultural

认识和鉴赏力”。

heritage.

本句用以描写丝绸之路的情

Theyarerecordingandcollectingdigital

imagesofculturalrelicsfromtheMogao况。which引导非限制性定语

15

Caves,whichwereakeystopalongtheSilk从句，修饰先行词Mogao

RoadthroughoutChina'sancienthistory.Caveso

续表

序号佳句呈现赏析

TheMogaoCaveshavelongbeenameeting

本句用以描写莫高窟或丝绸

16pointfordifferentculturesandarepartof

之路的情况。

thehistoryofmanycountries.

Bysharingsomanydigitalphotosoverthe本句描写通过努力，促进人们

17

Internet\thegrouphopestopromoteeven对中国传统文化的兴趣。①

widerinterestaroundtheworldinChina's“bydoingsth.”作方式状语;

ancienthistory,culture,andtraditions2.②表示“促进人们对中国古

代历史、文化和习俗产生更广

泛的兴趣”。特别注意高级词

汇promote,属于亮点表达。

Theyalsohopetofurthereducatepeople

abouttheimportanceofsafeguarding本句描写保护传统及历史遗

18

historicandculturalrelicsforfuture迹。

generationstounderstandandappreciate.

本句从本国历史角度，描写尊

重和欣赏历史的重要性。

Appreciatingone'sownculturalheritageis

19Appreciatingone'sowncultural

veryimportantforunderstandingoneself.

heritage为动词-ing短语作

主语，谓语动词用单数形式。

本句从世界历史角度，描写尊

重和欣赏历史的重要性。和句

Appreciatingtheculturalheritageofother19连用，构成递进关系。

20countriesisveryimportantforinternationalAppreciatingthecultural

uoininunicciliuiimidundeistanding.heritageofothercountries为动

词-ing短语作主语，谓语动词

用单数形式。

in读后续写入门篇：关注衔接

一篇好的文章不仅需要丰富的内容、巧妙的构思和规范的表达，还需要能够把这些内容联

系起来的语篇衔接手段。衔接包括两个方面：字句连贯性(Coherence)和语意连贯性(Cohesion)。

1.字句连贯性是指顺畅、合理地把文章里的单词、短语和句子连贯起来的技巧。首先要

确保每个段落只会表达一个信息或思想；然后将多个段落有序地排列起来。在续写中，尤其是

在续写的两个段落之间，每段结构紧凑，内容有序；两个段落和原文一起构成逻辑性排列。

2.语意连贯性是指句子之间前后连贯、互相呼应的程度。语意连贯性越强，越容易展示

文本内容及想要传递的信息。最佳的选择就是善用连接词，连接句子并引出下文信息。

读后续写需要关注的衔接有四个方面：

〃续写内容和原文的衔接；

I续写第一段和段首句的衔接；

I续写第一段段末和第二段段首句的衔接；

、续写第二段和段首句的衔接

【典题精析】

阅读下面的材料，完成以下任务。

Mostyoungkidsarcveryself-centredmostofthetime.It'sliketheirbrainmetresarcstuckon

“selfish".Thiscertainlydescribedme,untilImetmydeargrandmother.

MyfatherhadbeenborninJapan,andhehadmanyoldphotographsofthepalatial（宫殿般的）

estatethathadbelongedtohisfamilythroughmanygenerations.Hetoldmestoriesofgorgeous

roomsfullofgoldenfurnitureandsilkwallpapers.Healsodescribedmagnificentgardens,fullofthe

sweetscentsofexoticflowersandthegentlethinstreamofgracefulfountains.

Fromallthese,Ifiguredmygrandmothermustberich.Ihadnevermetherbeforeshecame

fromJapan,butateight,IreasonedthatifIwerenicetoher,shewouldtakemebacktoJapantolive

inluxury.Itwasagoodplan,Ithought,andIvowedtospendtimewithmygrandmothersoshe

wouldgrowtolovemeandwantmetoaccompanyheruponherreturn.

Wewenttopickherupattheairport."Theresheis!”myfathercalled.Iexpectedtosee

someroyalkimono-clad（穿着和月艮的）creaturelikeI'dseeninpictures.Instead,Isawatinywoman

withsilverhair,wearinganordinarybluesuit.Shedidnotlookwealthytome.Still,Ivowedtobe

attentive,tomakemyselfindispensabletoherduringherstay.

Togetclosertoher,IflatteredherintotellingmestoriesaboutoldJapan.Sheenjoyedmaking

needlecraftwithdelicatedesigns,andassheworked,shewovetalcsofJapaneselegendsandhistory

asdelicateandbeautifulasthedesignsshecreated.1listened,fascinated.Herwordswereamixof

thetwolanguages,soIdidn'tcompletelyunderstandeverythingatfirst.Interestingly,however,asher

Englishimproved,sodidmyunderstandingofJapanese.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

Noonespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslikeanantonahotpot.

Mydreamsofaluxurious;lifehadbeenbroken.

1.通读全文，本文文体为:

^^Narration记叙文

□Argumem议论文

^Exposition说明文

2.一审——审要素

时态一1月殳过去时

WhenuntilImetmydeargrandmother:ateight

WheremyhomeoutsideJapan

WhoI.myfather;mygrandmother

Myfathertoldmestoriesofgorgeousroomsanddescribed

magnificentgardens.Ifigured

mygrandmothermustberich.

Ivowedtospendtimewithmygrandmothersoshewould

growtolovvmeandwantme

What

六要toaccompanyheruponhnrreturn.

素Togelclosertoher,Iflatteredherintotellingmestoriesabout

oldJapan.

Interestingly,however,asherEnglishimproved,

sodid_myundccsiaadingofJapanese.

第一段段首句:Noonespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslike

Whyanantonahotpot.

Whydidn'tmygrandmotherreturntoJapan?

第二段段首句：Mydreamsofaluxuriouslifehadbeenbroken.

How

Howdid]leamthelesson?

3.二定——定主题

主题：Ilearnedthetruemeaningofwealth-notthegorgeousroomsormagnificentgardensblit

Iheloveamongfamilymembersandtheunderstandingofone'srootculture.

4.三推测——关注衔接，尤其是段首句定基调

(1)续写内容和原文的衔接

根据原文段首：Mostyoungkidsareveryself-centredmostofthetime.It'sliketheirbrain

metresarestuckon“selfish”.Thiscertainlydescribedme,untilImetmydeargrandmother.可知

“我”是self-centred,selfish（形容词）,但是祖母的到来改变了“我”。

所以续写的内容应该集中于“我”改变的过程。

⑵续写第一段和段首句的衔接

首先标出第一段段首句的关键词。

Noonespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslikeanamonahoi.

anantonahotpol意为“热锅上的蚂蚁”。根据此处可知，“我”非常迫切想去日本过奢

侈的生活。因此，“我”会主动问祖母的归期,并得到祖母的回应。

(3)续写第一段段末和第二段段首句的衔接

首先标出第二段段首句的关键词。

Mydreamsofaluxuriouslifehadbeenbroken.

根据此句可知，“我”的梦想破灭了。由此可知，第一段的段末将会提及梦想破灭的原因。

结合预测的第一段的内容可知，应该是祖母的回应使“我”的梦想破灭，此处就是第一段段末

和第二段段首句的衔接之处。

(4)续写第二段和段首句的衔接

根据第二段段首句可知，“我”的梦想破灭之后，作为一个小孩，“我”的反应是感到失

望和痛苦,甚至用行为表现出来。但是结合文章中心，“我”的态度应该发生了积极的改变。

“我”的价值观也从关注wealth转变为关注love。

名校模拟演练:

I，(2022•全国•高三专题练习)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整

的短文。

Gettingtowatchsurgeryshouldbeexcitingforanymedicalstudent.Butinmycase,whiletwo

doctorsweredoingtheoperation,Iwascheckingmyphoneevery20secondstoseehowmuch

longeritwouldbeuntilIcouldleave.Ididn'tbelongthere;Iwasonlypretendingtobethere.The

truthwasthat,halfwaythroughuniversity,IknewIdidn'twanttobeadoctor.AndIhadtodecide

whethertokeeplyingtomyself,orchangemymajor.

Beforeuniversity,IhadnoideawhatIwantedtodowithmylife.Pdalwayswantediostudy

Englishbutmyparentsdidn'tapprove,sayingtherewasnomoneyinit.SoIfiguredrdjustpicka

careerthatlookedwell-paid,satisfying,andwouldmakemyparentsproud."Doctor“isthefirst

choice,soIdecidedtostudymedicine.Iknewallthecourseworkwouldn'tbeeasy,butIdidn't

expecttofinditashardasIdid.Ispentmanylatenightsandweekendsstudying,butstilldidiftget

goodgrades.Ijustcouldn'tkeepthematerialinmind.Byexamtime,mygradeswereterribleandI

fehlikeafool.Ithoughtmaybeamedicalinternship（实习医生的工作）wouldhelpraisemyspirits.

Absurdly,myinternshipwaswhereIrealizedhowlittleIwantedtobeadoctor.

EverydayrdjustgointoworkanddoexactlywhatIwastold,gowhereIwastoldtogo,and

watchwhatIwastoldtowatch.AndthenI'dgohome.ItwasfunwheneverIgottoplaywith

expensivemicroscopesorwatchcrazysurgery,buttherestofthetimeIstruggledtogetthroughthe

day.Theotherinterns,however,practicallyworkedsohard.Theyweresodriven.Ithought,“Wow,

theseinternsreallywanttobedoctors.Iobviouslydon't."Itwasasadrealizationthatsadder,scarier

question:IfIdidn'twanttobeadoctor,whatdid1wanttodo?

注意：续写词数应为150左右;请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Itwasn'taneasydecision.

Eventually,IchangedmymajortoEnglishwritingandsuddenlyIfounduniversityenjoyable.

2,（2022・湖南师大附中高二期中）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇

完整的短文。

Thebusranalongthewindingmountainroad.Tryingnottolookattheroad,Istaredoutthe

largewindowatthetropicalgreenery（绿色植物）thatcoveredthemountain.

Nexttome,mymotherwasasabsorbedbytheviewasIwas.ShehadwonthetriptoCostaRica

asanawardforherhighperformanceatherjob.Shehaddecidedtotakemewithhersothatwe

couldhavesome“girltime''togetherinanewplace,andIcouldn'tbehappiertobeinsucha

beautifulplace.

Ourbuscametoasmallparkinglotsurroundedbyforest.Ourguidehadtoldthetourgroupthat

itv/asacloudforestwcwerevisiting.Peoplestartedtorisefromtheirseatsandmovedtowardthe

door.MymomandIpickedupourbagsandstarteddownthenarrowpassage,excitedtofinallyget

togoonahikeafterthehour-longbusride.

Whentheentiregrouphadgatheredoutside,theguidesmiledatus."Thisisanactivevolcano

wearestandingontopofnow,“hesaid."Youhavetheopportunitytoexplorewithoutaguide.There

aretwopathsyoucanfollowwhenwegetintothewoods:thefirstisashorterloop（环线）andwill

takeyoubackhereinfortyminutesorso;thesecondwilltakeyoualongerway,andyoushouldbe

backhereinanhourandtwentyminutes.Thelongerloopisverysteep,butcertainlydoable.AHof

youshouldbebackhereintwohours,whichshouldgiveyouplentyoftimetoadmirethebeautiful

wildlifeofCostaRica!Goaheadandgetstarted

Momlookedatmeuncertainly.assumeyouwouldliketodothelongerloop,“shesaidaftera

moment.Inodded.Weonlyhadfivedayshere,andIwantedtoseeasmuchasIcouldduringihal

time.Momfinallyagreed.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Wesetoutonthetrailthatledfurtherintothedarkcloudforest.

Graduallybothofusrealizedtheroadgotsteeperandsteeper.

【答案】

1,Onepossibleversion:

〃was，?7easydecision.1hadtwochoices-eitherkeeplyingtomyselfordoadifferent

degree.Changingmymajorwouldmakethepasttwoyearsofuniversityawasteoftimeandmoney.

ButIrealizedthatthoughI'dhatemyselfforquitting,TdhatemyselfmoreifIendedupbeinga

terribledoctor.Iwasgladtomoveontosomethingnew,butIhadtodealwithmyparents*constant

disappointmentandcomplainingaboutmyfuture.

Eventually,IchangedmvmajortoEnglishwritinsandsuddenlyIfounduniversityenjoyable.I

wasstillstudyinglateandthroughtheweekend,but,thistime,enjoyingthepain.Tdspendhours

perfectingasingleparagraphuntilIwassatisfiedwithit.Fivehoursfeltlike20secondsbecauseI

washavingsomuchfunburyingmyselfinwritinguntilgoodwordscameout.Istartedlookingfor

internshipsthatwouldgivemeexperienceinprofessionalwriting.Fortunately,Imadeitasan

editorialassistantatanewspaper.

【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者从一开始的学医学专业而感到没有兴趣，然后做

出换专业的选择，并且在之后的新专业努力学习并投入很大的热情和兴趣，最终实现人生蜕变

的故事。

【详解】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“这不是一个容易的决定。”可知，第一段可描写作者面临着两难选择的

痛苦。

②由第二段首句内容“最终，我把我的专业换成了英语写作，突然间我发现大学生活很愉快J'

可知，第二段可描写作者终于找到了自己喜欢的专业，并且很享受其中的努力过程。

2.续写线索：这不是一个容易的决定——两难选择的权衡一最后的决定一换专业后的心态