2024年北师大版高考英语总复习写作进阶指导第二部分读后续写

第二部分读后续写

一、感悟真题

（2023.新高考I、II卷）

阅读下面材料.根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.I

saidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonly

mysecondlanguage.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmeto

presentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplaywhereIplayedalltheparts.No

onelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?His

reply:t4BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,!thinkyouhaveagoodshotat

this."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

1chosePaulReveredhorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（银匠）inBostonwho

rodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswere

coming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;and

unlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhe

wanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.!gottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevered

horse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling!askedmyoldersistertocorrectmy

grammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewof

them.

When1handedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,

writeitagain."Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtof

winninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.

注意:续写词数应为150个左右。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

【写作详解】

L段落续与‘：

①续写第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖，在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对老师的感激,

②续写第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作启此作者坚持写作取得了成功作者将这一切归

功于自己的老师。

2,续写线索:

比赛消息传来T作者获奖―高兴―颁奖典礼上感谢老师T颁奖后来到老师办公室T老师告诉

作者坚持写作T作者表达了对写作的喜爱一作者写作取得了成功T感激老师

3.词汇激活：

①行为类:告知:inform,tell

成功做至U：makeit,succeed

表达:express,convey

②情绪类:高兴的:happy/glad

激动地:exciledly,withexcitement

【靓句点睛】

高分句型1：IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbe

anawardpresentationintwodays.（由连接词that引导的宾语从句）

高分句型2:Ifsyouwhomakemefallinlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.（强调句）

高分句型3:1owemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadto

wriling.（who弓|导的限制性定语从句）

【参考范文】

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatI

wonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthaltherewouldbeanawardpresenlationintwodays.I

wassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher."knewyou'dwin!I

amproudofyou.Youmadeit!”hesaidexcitedly.Thencamethebigday.WhenIwasinvitedtothe

stagetoreceivetheaward,Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.Isaid,"It'syouwhomakemefall

inlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.Withoutyourrecognitionandguidance,Icouldn't

havewrittenthisarticle.Againthankyouverymuch!”

Iwenttomyteacher*sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Myteacherwaswaitingfor

me.Holdingmyhands,hesaid,^Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”“You

knowIdidn'tlikewritingbefore,butnowIamcrazyaboutit!Iwilltrymybesttocreategood

works.M1saidseriously.Sincethen,IhavewrittenmanygoodworksandnowIamafamouswriter.I

owemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadtowriting.

二、写作高分技法示例

（2021.新高考I卷）

AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningfor

Mother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.

TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthe

kitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothe

kitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftitto

boilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.

Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstove

burnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.

Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothe

sinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,

theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmand

turnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycould

continuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacry

ofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!

Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

注意:续写词数应为150个左右。

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

Step1:厘清写作主题把握写作走向

要素描述主题

whenMother'sDay

本文以母亲节为线索展开,讲述了双胞胎

whereAthome

Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐,

whoThetwins—JeffandJenna

Thepairpreparedbreakfastfortheir自己动手做起早餐来，但不幸的是，他们接连

what

mother.

失败，后来在父亲的帮助下获得成功,他们把

Theywantedtogivetheirmothera

v/hy早餐献给亲爰的母亲，母亲非常感动的故事。

surprise.

Step2:寻找两条主线深拾续写要点

文段线索文脉线索

情感线excited—>disappointed

First,theyboiledtheporridge.—>Next,theymadetheFrenchtoast.—>Asliceofbread

故事线

turnedblack.—>Thcntheyfoundtheporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.—>Thc

otherpieceofbreadturnedblack,too.

1.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.

要点2.TheirmotherwassurprisedtofindthebreakfastcookedbyJeffandJenna.

Step3:精研每段首句做好起承转合

根据所给续文段落首句产生问题链接，形成续写思路，采用G-N(Given-New)和

Q-A(Question-Answer)策略,做好起承转合创造新的情节。

Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

QI:WhatwasFather'sfirstinstinctwhenfacedwiththemess?

Q2:Howdidthetwinsexplaintheirplantotheirfather?

Q3:WhatdidFatherdotohelpthetwinstomakedeliciousFrenchtoastandchickenporridge?

Paragraph2:Thetwinscarried(hebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

QI:WhatwasMother'sfirstinstinctwhenthetwinswokeherup?

Q2:WouldthetwinsgiveMotherabigsurprise?HowdidtheyexpresstheirbestwishestoMother?

Q3:HowdidMotherfeel?Howcanyoudesigntheendingmoreappealingandmeaningful?

续与第一Theirfatherhelpedthemadjustthefireandtheypreparedbreakfastsuccessfully.How

段梗概happytheywere!

第一Thetwins'motherwassurprisedtoseethedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontof

段梗概her.Shewasdeeplymovedbyherchildren.

Step4:吃透语言特点保持风格一致

为了使所写的内容和语言和原文保持连贯性和一致性.读后续写需要通过在理解原文的

基础上，巧妙利用啦平效应”，创造性地模仿和使用语言即继承原文语言表达方面的显著特征,

包括写作手法及语言表达技巧，从而一方面保证写作的效率和流畅度.另一方面保证写作在各

个语言层次和表达风格上和原文保持一致。

通过分析语篇，可以从五个方面理解原文的语言应用技巧:

1场景描写(Surroundings)

场景描写指的是描写人、物、事发生的时间、地点、自然环境及社会场景等。场景描写可以

充当背景信息,提供人、物、事发生的具体设定。其次场景描写可以表达角色的感情、情绪,

可以随着情节的发展有所变化，甚至可以提示、推动情节的发展,增强语篇的代入感。

2.动作描写(Actions)

动作描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的行为举止.是情节发展的具体体现。恰到好处的动作

描写不仅可以塑造生动形象的人物.还可以反映人物的情感态度及心理变化.并最终反映人物

的性格特点及思想品质。

3.心理描写(Feelings)

心理描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的看法、感受、情感及心理活动,并由此反映人物的性

格特点及思想品质。心理描写除了对心理的直接描写，还可以结合动作描写及场景描写，共同构

成有意义、紧凑的语篇。

4.有效对话(EffectiveDialogues)

有效对话是记叙语篇中塑造人物的一个重要手段。对话的有效性首先体现在符合人物设定，这

样不仅能够有效地推动情节的发展.更能够增加记叙的生动性。此外，对话语言也要符合记叙语

篇的语言特点.即生活化、简化及去书面化。

5.修辞(Figuresofspeech)

修辞是增加语言生动性的最佳手段。它可以弓I起共鸣，使抽象的情境具体化。常见的可以应用

的修辞有比喻、拟人、夸张和排比等。

考场满分作文1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①Father's

appearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.©Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytook

positiveactionandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncooking

porridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,③whichwasthekeytosuccess.ltwasallrightthis

timc.Dcliciousbreakfastwasrcady.@Howhappytheywere!

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.⑤Whentheirmothersaw

thedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.

@Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.The

twochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,⑦

“HappyMother'sDay!”©Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

评卷老师点评：

①过渡自然流畅。②时态、语境和前文相互照应。③使用高分句式。④使用高分句式。⑤使

用高分句式。⑥使用并列结构。⑦使用直接引语，生动真实。⑧动作及情感表达真实细腻。

考场满分作文2:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Facedwiththe

messthetwinshadmadeofthekitchen,Fatherfeltannoyedbuttriedtocontainhimself.Jennaran

uptohim,whisperinguWe...WejustwanttomakebreakfastfbrMomasMother'sDaygift."After

helearnedwhatallwasabout,hisannoyancegavewaytoreliefanddelight.Immediately,hejoined

themandtheystartedalloveragain.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.The

kitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Lookingatthework,the

threeexchangedanunderstandingsmile.Aftersignalingthemtokeepitasecret,Fa:herslipped

intothebedroom,pretendingtoknownothingaboutit.

Thetwinscaniedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Mother

failedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto.tfcHappyMother'sDay!”Thetwinscongratulated/'We

madebreakfastfbryouasyoudothatfbrus.Mom,weloveyou!”Thoughstillinherpajamas,

Mothertookabiteofthetoastandsippedthehotporridge.Lostinthedeliciousbreakfastandpure

lovefromhertwins,shesobbed,withdelightfultearsstreamingdownherface.Lovingly,she

pressedtwogentlekissesontheirforeheads,proudlyenjoyingtheirbestwishes.Theirfatherwas

standinginthedoorway,recordingthistouchingscene.Thewholeroomwasbathedinahappy

Mother\Dayatmosphere.

评卷老师点评:文章用词精准（whisper,understanding,signal,pretend,lostin,streamdown,

proudly等），句式高级（非谓语动词、独立主格和介词with的复合结构等），通过动作、对谢口心

理活动等描写，生动、形象地呈现了双胞胎孩子在母亲节为妈妈做早餐，献上一份特别的节日礼

物和惊喜。

考场满分作文3:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthe

mess,Fatherfrozewithshock,asifrootedontheground.Fromtheblackbreadandthespilled

poiTidge,hesuddenlyfiguredouttheirsecret.Asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface.He

realizedtheirintention.HejoinedtheminpreparingtheMother'sDaysurpriseimmediately.They

startedalloveragain.Everythingwentsmoothly.Thechickenandriceweredancing

harmoniouslyintheboilingwaterpotandbreadsliceswereshowingoffitsmosttremendous

goldencolonSoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththe

scentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafomily.Despitetheoilstainsonthetwins'aprons,nothing

seemedimperfect,andallwasinplaceexceptthemostimportantone.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Mother

failedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto,butthecheerful“HappyMother'sDay"fromthetwo

sweetiesbroughtherbacktorcality.Thebreakfastwithlovemadebyhertwinsreallystruckher

heartstrings.Motherkissedthemandgavethemeachabearhug,saying“Ohdear,thankyoumy

sweeties.Whatabigsurprise!,?Thenextmoment,shewokeupFather,eagertosharetheblessing

andtheinvitingbreakfastseasonedwithlove.Father,whohadbeenawake,cooperativelyrubbed

hiseyesandtookabigbite,winkingatthetwinssecretly.Afterall,thesurprisedidmakeasweet

surprise!

评卷老师点评:文章通过动作、对话和心理活动等描写,生动、形象地呈现了双胞胎孩子在母亲

节为妈妈做早餐，献上一份特别的节日礼物和惊喜。在故事情节推进的过程中，运用语篇分析的

主位推进理论、呼应和修辞等手法来揭示语篇的感恩、互爱的主题,让人豁然明白“我们平时

认为妈妈无条件的爱和支持是理所当然,没什么大不了的。等到自己回报母爱时，却发现并不轻

松”，反映内心触动和成长历程。

三、素材积累

1.人物的肖像描写

【语段1]MysisterhadavoicelikemusicandasmilelikeanangePs,soinnocentandpure.Her

sparklingwhiteteethshowedthroughherbeautifulsmile.Shehadbright,rosycheeks.Whenher

eyeslookedup,theywereverylarge,andattractive.

我妹妹有音乐般的嗓音和天使般的微笑.那么天真和纯洁。她美丽的微笑中露出了洁白闪亮的

牙齿。她的双颊红润明亮。当她抬起头来的时候，她的眼睛很大、很迷人。

【语段2】Theyoungwomanwastall,withgraceandelegance.Shehadagreatamountofdarkhair

thatwasbeautifullyshowninthesunlight,andafacemorebeautifulthananyother,with

dark,mystcriouseyes.Shewaspoliteandwcll-manncrcd,withatenderlook.这个年轻女子身材高

风度翩翩。她有一头浓密的黑发，在阳光下显得格夕晨丽,她的脸上有一双乌黑神秘的眼睛,

比任何人都漂亮。她彬彬有礼，举止得体.神情温柔。

【语段3]Heusedtobemiddle-sized,butwhenheisgettingold,heisbecomingshorter.Hcwasa

tinywishboneofanadult,withcroppedhairandenormousseriouseyes——alittlewhiteowl.

他过去是中等身高，但随着年龄的增长.他变得越来越矮了。他是一个瘦小的成年人，头发剪得

短短的，一双大眼睛看上去总是很严肃,俨然就是一只小小的白色猫头鹰。

【语段4】MrGraywasmyhistoryteacherintenthgrade.Icouldn'ttellwhatkindofhistoryhe

taughtfortworeasons:one,Ineverlikedhistory,andIwo,mybodywasinclass,butmymind

wasn't.MrGraywasn'ttheteacherwhoofferedretakesontests;hedidsomuchmoreformethan

that.Heofferedmeapairofcarsandashouldertocryon.

格雷先生是我十年级的历史老师。我不知道他教的是什么样的历史•原因有二:一，我从来不喜

欢历史.二,我的身体在课堂上，但我的心不在。格雷先生不是那种提供补考的老师;他为我做的

远不止那些。他给了我一双耳朵和一个可以依靠的肩膀。

【语段5]Inthemirror,MariamhadherfirstglimpseofRasheed:thebig,square,ruddyface;the

hookednose;theflushedcheeksthatgavetheimpressionofslycheerfulness;thewatery,bloodshot

eyes;thecrowdedteeth,thefronttwopushedtogetherlikeagabledroof;theimpossiblylow

hairline,barelytwofingerwidthsabovethebushyeyebrows;thewallofthick,coarse,

salt-and-pepperhair.

在镜子里，玛丽亚姆第一次看到了拉希德:那张又大又方又红的脸;鹰钩鼻;红润的双颊给人一种

狡猾快乐的印象;水汪汪、充血的眼睛:拥挤的牙齿，前面两颗挤在一起，像个山墙屋顶;难以置信

的低发际线，在浓密的眉毛上方只有两指宽;浓密的、粗糙的、花白的毛发。

【语段6]Theirnailswerelong,polishedpinkororange,theirlipsredastulips.Thcywalkedin

highheels,andquickly,asifonperpetuallyurgentbusiness.Theyworedarksunglasses,and,when

theybreezedby,Mariamcaughtawhiffoftheirperfume.

她们的指甲很长，涂着粉红色或橙色，嘴唇像郁金香一样红。她们穿着高跟鞋，走得很快，好像一

直在处理紧急的事情。她们戴着黑色的太阳镜，当她们轻轻走过时，玛丽亚姆闻到了她们身上的

香水味。

【语段7]AsNanatoldthestory,Mariamsalonherlapandpicturedhermotherbeingfittedfora

weddingdress.Sheimaginedheronhorseback,smilingshylybehindaveiledgreengown,her

palmspaintedredwithhenna,herhairpartedwithsilverdust,thebraidsheldtogetherbytree

sap.Shcsawmusiciansblowingthefluteandbangingondrums,streetchildrencryingandgiving

chase.

如P®讲这个故事的时候、玛丽亚姆坐在她的腿上，想象着母亲试穿婚纱的样子。她想象着她骑在

马背上，害羞地微笑着，披着一件蒙着面纱的绿色礼服.她的手掌上被红色的指甲花染成了红色,

她的头发用银粉分开，用树汁固定成辫子。她看到乐师们吹着笛子.敲着鼓，街上的孩子fl]哭着

追赶。

【语段8】Mariamsmelledhimbeforeshesawhim.Cigarettesmokeandthick,sweetcologne,not

faintlikeJaliTs.ThescentofitfloodedMariam'snostriIs.Throughtheveil,fromthecomerofher

eye,Mariamsawatallman,(hick-belliedandbroad-shouldered,stoopinginthedoorway.Thesize

ofhimalmostmadehergasp,andshehadtodrophergaze,herhearthammeringaway.Shesensed

himlingeringinthedoorway.Thcnhisslow,heavy-footedmovementacrosstheroom.

玛丽亚姆在看见他之前闻到了他的气味。香烟的味道.浓香的古龙水，不像贾利勒的那种淡淡的

气味。那种味道扑鼻而来。隔着面纱，玛丽亚姆从眼角看到一个高个子男人.大腹便便,肩膀宽

阔,正弯着腰站在门口。他的体型几乎使她喘不过气来，她不得不垂下目光，心怦怦直跳。她感

觉到他在门口徘徊。然后他缓慢而沉重地穿过房间。

【语段9】ThefirstdayImetBryceLoski,Iwasfascinated.Honestly,onelookathim

andIbecameacrazy.lt5shiseyes.Somethinginhiseyes.TheyVeblue,andframedintheblackness

ofhislashes,they7redazzling.Absolutelybreathtaking.lalsorememberthatBrycewaswearing

poloshirt,whichIthoughtwasreallycute.Reallynice.

第一天见到布莱斯・罗斯基.我就被迷住了。老实说.只看了他一眼我就失去了理智。是他的眼

睛。他的眼睛里有些难以形容的东西。它们是蓝色的，在他乌黑的睫毛衬托下，令人眼花缭乱。

绝对令人惊叹。我还记得布莱斯穿着pol。衫，我觉得很可爱。真的很不错。

【语段10】Harryhadathinface,knobblyknees,blackhair,andbrightgreeneyes.Heworeround

glassesheldtogetherwithalotofScotchtapebecauseallthetimesDudleyhadpunchedhimonthe

nose.TheonlythingHarrylikedabouthisownappearancewasaverythinscaronhisforehead

whichwasshapedlikeaboltoflightning.

哈利有一张瘦削的脸，凹凸不平的膝盖,乌黑的头发和明亮的绿眼睛。他戴着一副用透明胶带粘

在一起的圆眼镜,因为达力总是打他的鼻子。哈利唯一喜欢自己外表的是额头上一道很薄的伤

疤形状像一道闪电。

2.人物的心理描写

【语段1]Tom'smindwasmadeupnow.Hewasgloomyanddesperate.Hewasan

abandoned,friendlessboy,hesaid;nobodylovedhim;whentheyfoundoutwhattheyhaddrivenhim

to,perhapstheywouldbesorry.tearswouldbeshedandheartswouldbebroken.Althoughhehadno

friendtocomplainto,hehadtriedtodorightthingsandgetalongwithothers.

汤姆现在下定了决心。他阴郁而绝望。他说.他是一个被遗弃的、没有朋友的男孩:没有人爱他;

当他们发现自己把他逼到这个地步时也许他们会后悔会流泪，会心碎。虽然他没有朋友可以

抱怨，但他一直努力做正确的事情,与他人相处。

【语段2]Surprised,Ididn'tknowwhattosay,andIjustshookmyheadandwentintomyroom.I

thoughthardandrealizedthatnobodywasgoingtogivemeaspotonthatteam.Iwouldhaveto

earnit.Havingdecidedtoworktowardmygoalofmakingtheteam,Ibikedtothegymnearmy

schooleverydayafterschoolandtrainedfortwohours.

我很惊讶，不知道说什么好，我只是摇了摇头.走进了我的房间。我苦思冥想，意识到没有人会给

我在那支队伍中的位置。我必须自己去争取。我决定朝着进入球队的目标努力,每天放学后我

骑自行车去学校附近的健身房，训甑两个小时。

【语段3】Herepeatedtheprocessinthehopethatmorefishwouldbecaught.ltwasn'tlongbefore

thebucketwascrowdedwithfishaliveandkicking.Asenseofaccomplishmentcreptuponhim.

他重复了这个过程，希望能捕到更多的鱼。没过多久桶里就塞满了活蹦乱跳的鱼。一种成就感

悄悄涌上他的心头。

【语段4]Icouldn'tbelieveallthisjustcamefromtheordinary-lookingboywiththesmallfigure

andcasualT-shirt.Ievenfeltashamedtolearnthatheranawebsitetohelpchildrenwithhearing

problems,becauseIstupidlythoughtthathehadnooutstandingqualitiesandthatdisabledpeople

couldn'tbeintelligent.

我不敢相信这一切竟然来自一个长相普通、身材矮小、穿着休闲T恤的男孩。当我知道他办

了一个帮助听力障碍儿童的网站时，我甚至感到羞愧，因为我愚蠢地认为他没有什么突出的品

质,残疾人不可能聪明。

【语段5】Seeingtheboyregainconsciousness,thosearoundbrokeintocheers.

Exhausted,Isighedwithrelief.IthoughthadIacceptedthateasypositionjwouldhavebeen

nothingbutabystander.TmhappyIdidn'ttaketheeasywayout.

看到男孩恢复了知觉，周围的人都欢呼起来。我筋疲力尽，松了口气。我想，如果我接受了那个

轻松的位置，我就会成为一个旁观者。我很高兴我没有走捷径。

【语段6】Livingwiththegreenplanthadofferedmecomfort.Nowthatthetreewasstruggling,I

feltincreasinglyfearful.Igrewmoreandmorefrustratedanduneasy.Hearingmywords,Hannah

softlyremindedmeofthewrongconnectionbetweentheplantwithmyownsurvival.Withher

patience,IrealizedIhadwronglyconnectedmycareoftheplant-somethingoverwhichIhadat

leastsomecontrol—withmyownsurvival—somethingoverwhich1hadnocontrol.

和绿色的植物生活在一起给了我安慰。现在树在挣扎，我感到越来越害怕。我变得越来越沮丧

和不安。听了我的话，汉娜温柔地提醒我，这种植物与我的生存之间存在着错误的联系。在她的

耐心下，我意识到我错误地把我对植物的照顾——我至少还能控制的事情——和我自己的生

存一我无法控制的事情——联系在一起。

【语段7]Withtearsofgratituderollingdownhischeeks,Petersaidthankfully,"You'vesavedme

today.Icouldn'tthankyouenough.Itwasverymovingtoseehowmuchstrangerscouldcarefbr

eachother.Hesmiledwithgratitudeasheacceptedtheflowersgivenbyasmallboy.Toucheddeeply,

thecrowdclappedviolently.Later,knowingwhathadhappened,hismothershedtearsofjoyand

gralitude.感激的泪水顺着他的脸颊滚落破得感激地说:“你今天救了我。我怎么感谢你也不为

过。”看到陌生人如此关心彼此，真是令人感动。他感激地微笑着接受了一个小男孩送给他的

花。群众深受感动.热烈鼓掌,后来，他的母亲知道发生了什么事,流下了喜悦和感激的眼泪。

【语段8】Anairofsorrowandlonelinesssettledoverher.Feelingleftout,Janewasgetting

desperatewithloneliness.Sherodehomefromschoolslowly,numbwithsorrow.Thenshelocked

herselfinherroom,abandoningherselftogreatsadness.Shefeltsosadthatshefoundherselfcrying

unconsciously,unabletoholdbackhertears.Sheweptquietly,feelingitwasthesaddestmomentfor

heryounglife.

一种悲伤和孤独的气氛笼罩着她。简感到被冷落了，寂寞得绝望起来。她慢慢地从学校骑车回

家，悲伤得麻木了。然后她把自己锁在房间里,沉浸在极度的悲伤中。她感到很伤心，不由自主

地哭了起来，无法抑制自己的眼泪。她静静地哭了起来,觉得这是她年轻的生命中最悲伤的时刻。

【语段9]Iwenttoheroffice,askingshylywhetherIcouldattendthewritingcompetition.She

replied,“Ofcourse!Ihavefaithinyou."Seeinghershiningsmile,acurrentofhappinessswept

throughme.Atfirst,Ihadnoideawhatlowrite,butsuddenlyanideaflashedintomymind.Why

notsharemystorywithMrsWhite—MyBeautifulSnowWhite?

我去了她的办公室，害羞地问她我能不能参加写作比赛。她回答说:“当然!我对你有信心。”看

到她灿烂的笑容.一股幸福的暖流涌上心头。起初，我不知道该写什么，但突然一个想法在我脑

海中闪现。为什么不把我的故事告诉我美丽的白雪公主夫人呢？

【语段10】Mykneesstartedshaking,yetmybodyfroze.ltfeltasthoughmysoulleftmybodyand

Ihadnocontroloverit.Anxiously,Ilookedthroughtheannouncementpostedonthewallofthe

lockerroom;myheartwasbeatingharderandharderasIslowlysawallmyfriends5namesonthat

listbutcouldnotfindmine.Ijustcouldn'tacceptthatallmyfriendswereontheteambutIwasnot.

我的膝盖开始颤抖，但我的身体却僵住了。感觉好像我的灵魂离开了我的身体.我无法控制它。

我焦急地看了看贴在更衣室墙上的公告:当我慢慢地看到所有朋友的名字都在名单上,却找不

到我的名字时,我的心跳得越来越厉害。我只是无法接受我所有的朋友都在队里,而我却不在。

3.人物的动作描写

【语段1】TheEagles,captainknockedtheballtothegroundwithhishand,andthenkickeditand

scored.Therefereeblewthewhistle;thematchwasoverandtheEagleshadwon.

老鹰队的队长用手把球撞倒在地，然后踢了一脚彳导分了。裁判吹响了哨子上匕赛结束了,老鹰队

瞬了。

【语段2】Hearingthefamiliarvoice,Marystoppedherpace.Sheturnedaround,andstaggered

forwardafewsteps.Shefounditwasherelderbrothcr.Soexcited,shejumpedupandthrewherarms

aroundtheman'sneck.Sheburiedherfaceinhisshoulderandsobbedforafewmomcnts.Thenshe

saidinaloudandexcitedvoice.

听熟悉的声音，玛丽停下了脚步。她转过身来,摇摇晃晃地向前走了几步。她发现那是她哥哥。

她^常兴奋,跳起来，双臂搂住了那个男人的脖子。她把脸埋在他的肩膀上，抽泣了一会儿。然

后她激动地大声说。

【语段31Jackenjoyedwatchinghisluredanceinthewater.Holdinghisbreath,hewaswaitingfor

abitepatiently.AHofasudden,hefeltthepolemoving.Hequicklydraggedthepolewithallhis

might.Themomenthesawthebigfish,hewaswildwithjoy.

杰克喜欢看他的鱼饵在水里跳舞。他屏住呼吸，耐心地等着（鱼）咬钩。突然，他感到杆子在动。

他迅速地用尽全力拖着杆子。他一看到那条大鱼,就欣喜若狂。

【语段4]Withmyfaceburningandmyheadlowered,Icouldhearnothingbutmyheartbeating

faster.Suddenly,athunderousoutburstofapplausewokemeup.Feelingalumpinthethroat,I

clappedmyhandsasloudlyaspossible,determinednevertojudgeabookbyitscover.

我的脸发烫，低着头,什么也听不见，只听见我的心跳加快了。突然,一阵雷鸣般的掌声把我吵醒

To感觉喉咙哽住了,我尽可能大声地拍手，决心永远不要以貌取人。

【语段5】Sureenough,withacloserlook,Ifoundtheboywavinghishandsdesperately.Iquickly

divedintothewater,swimmingtowardstheboyatfullspeed.BythetimeIreachedhim,hehad

sunktothebottomofthepool,whichfilledmyheartwithfrightandconcern.Ipickedtheboyup

andheadedtothepoolside,keepinghisheadabovethewater.

果然.仔细一看，我发现那个男孩绝望地挥舞着双手。我迅速跳入水中，全速向那个男孩游去。

当我到达他身边时，他已经沉到池底了，这让我的内心充满了恐惧和担忧。我抱起男孩,朝池边

游去,让他的头露出水面。

【语段6]Onemorning,Maggieknockedatthewindowofthecar.Josewounddownthewindow

andapologizedtotheladystandingbyhiscar.Hesaidhewoulddriveawaysoontomakeroomfor

othercustomers.Tearsineyes,Maggieaskedhimwhetherhestillrememberedher.Josewaspuzzled

atfirstbutsoonrecognizedher.Embarrassed,hetoldMaggieabouthissituation.

一天早上，玛吉敲了敲车窗。约瑟摇下车窗.向站在他车旁的女士道歉。他说他很快就会开车离

开，为其他顾客腾出地方。玛吉含着汩问他是否还记得她。约瑟一开始很困惑，但很快就认出了

嫄他很尴尬才巴自己的处境告诉了玛吉。

【语段7]SoIrancloselybehindhim.Thecourseheadednorthforfivemiles,wanderedwestfora

mile,andthenturnedsouthagain.Theracewasgettingtougher.Withthreemilestogo,itwas

beginningtoberealhardwork.Mylungswereonfire,andlegsfeltlikestone.

所以我紧跟在他后面跑。航线向北走了五英里，向西走了一英里，然后又向南转弯。比赛越来越

激烈了。还有三英里,这开始成为一项真正的艰苦工作。我的肺像着火一样，腿像石头一样。

【语段8]Areportertookapictureofthismovingsceneandposteditonline.Itinstantlyreceived

thousandsofsharesandlikes.Peopleexpressedtheirrespectandadmirationformycourageand

selflessnesstogiveupwhatcouldbeaneasyvictory.Oneviewerevencommented,'Nowadays

peopletendtofbcustoomuchon'winorlose'.It'sagreatcomforttoseethattruesportsmanship

stillexists.”

T立记者拍下了这一动人的场景，并发布到了网上。它立即获得了成千上万的分享和点赞。人

们表达了他们对我的勇气和无私的尊重和钦佩因为我放弃了本来很容易取得的胜利。T立观

众甚至评论道:“现在人们往往过于关注，输赢看到真正的体育精神仍然存在,我感到非常欣

慰。”

【语段9]ThenitwasElizabeth'sturntoswim.SheseemedtoswimfasterintheT-shirtandsocks

thanshedidwhenshewasn'twearingthem.Approachingthehalfwaymark,Elizabethwasinthe

lead.Suddenly,somebodynoticedthatoneofElizabeth'ssockshadfallenoffandwasfloatinginthe

pool.

然后轮到伊丽莎白游泳了。她穿着T恤和袜子似乎比不穿的时候游得更快。快到半程时伊丽

莎白领先了。突然,有人注意到伊丽莎白的一只袜子掉了下来.浮在池中。

【语段10】Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame."Shh,"puttingmyfingertothelips,I

whispered,"It'smum'sturn.^^ThenIstoodup,leavingDennyinhisseat,andwalkedtowardsthe

piano.AsIsatdownatthepia