Unit2IconicAttractions话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版（2019）选择性

Unit2ICONICATTRACTIONS人教版2019选择性必修第四册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.Iwasalmostblownoverbythewind,andI_______________thepolebytheroadsidetostandfirm.我被风刮得快站不住了，只好紧紧抓住路边的杆子站稳脚跟。（hang）(读后续写动作描写)2.

Itiswhatyoulearninmiddleschoolthat______________________________yourfuturedevelopment.正是中学时代所学的知识为你未来的发展打下了坚实的基础。(foundation)3.Infact,heinspiresmeto________________incollege,tobeabridgebetweenChinaandtheworld.事实上，他鼓励我在大学主修英语，做沟通中国和世界的桥梁。(major)4.(2021·3月天津)Allapplicantsmusthave_________________andaccesstoacar.所有申请者必须有驾照才能使用汽车。(license)5.Facialrecognitiontechnology_________________________________________,hascomeintowidespreaduse.面部识别技术凭借其分析大量数据的能力，已得到广泛应用。(capacity)活用写作词汇hungonto/ontoprovides/laysasolidfoundationformajorinEnglishadriver'slicensewithitscapacitytoanalyseahugeamountofdata活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.我特别关注的是是否有足够的时间购物。____________________________iswhetherthereisenoughtimeforshopping.2.他努力往前跑，小小的身子随着奔跑的节奏摇晃着。Hestruggledtorunforward,___________________________.原：Personallyspeaking,whatIlikemostaboutAustraliaisthepeoplethemselves.对我个人来说，澳大利亚让我最喜欢的就是这里的人民。。原：Ourtopictodayis“CreaturesUniquetoAustralia”,withquestionsansweredbywildlifeexpert,DrJimSmith.我们今天的话题是“澳大利亚特有的生物”，由野生动物专家吉姆·史密斯博士回答问题。Whatdeservesmyspecialattentionwithhissmallbodyrockingwiththerhythmofhisrun细节描写3.虽然互联网对我们有很大的帮助，但我认为花太多时间在互联网

上不是一个好主意。__________________________________,Idon'tthinkitisagoodideatospendtoomuchtimeonit.4.因为大雨，飞机没有准时起飞。Theplanedidn'ttakeoffontime_____________________.原：Whileitmaylayeggsinanestlikeabird,it’sreallyaprimitivemammal,withauniquebiology.虽然鸭嘴兽可以像鸟一样在巢中产卵，但它实际上是一种原始的哺乳动物，具有罕见的生物特性。原：Theyarereallyquitecute,butthetruthis,koalasareverysensitivecreatureswhocaneasilypanicbecauseofevensmallchangesintheirenvironment.它们真的很可爱，但事实是考拉是非常敏感的生物，即使环境发生了微小的变化，它们也很容易惊慌失措。WhiletheInternetisofgreathelptousbecauseoftheheavyrain活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例动作描写1.SinceIarrived,myfriendhasbroughtmetomyfirstopen-airbarbecueandhasalsosharedmanydifferentbutyummymealswithme,somyfirstimpressionsofAustraliahavebeenallaboutfood!2.Tosurviveinthisvastlandontheocean,theAborigineshadtobeinclosecontactwithnature.3.Toplaythedidgeridoo,youputyourmouthononeendandblowwhilevibratingyourlips.4.Hedoesthisbycontinuallybreathinginthroughhisnosewhilebreathingoutthoughhismouthandintothedidgeridoo.5.Theywerealmosthuman,allthesebirds,andcompletelywithoutfear,sitting

inhundredsintreeslookingaboutwithbrightintelligenteyes,screaming,talking,laughing,imitatinganythingthatproducedasound.场景描写Sometimestheyspentdaysonendridinghorses,milesawayfromhomeandcampingatnightunderaskysovastandfilledwithstars.外貌描写Babykangaroosweighsonlytwogrammesatbirth.心理描写1.Ican’twaittoseeallofthem!2.This,thoughttheboysexcitedly,waslife.技法点拨：

以句扩句，构思微句02①Seeingtheirfavouritefootballteamwin,TomandPeterjumpedwithwildexcitement.【解析】该句的主句为TomandPeterjumped，但在添加Seeingtheirfavouritefootballteamwin、withwildexcitement状语成分后便能体现TomandPeterjumped的时间和心情。②Theoldmanwithawhitebeardseemstobeverykind.【解析】该句的主句为Themanseemstobeverykind。但在主语man前后分别添加了old和withawhitebeard作定语后便能形象地描写主语的特征。③ThedocumentaryfocusesonthelifeofErnestHemingway,thewriterwhowrotemanypopularnovelsinthe20thcentury.【解析】该句的主句为ThedocumentaryfocusesonthelifeofErnestHemingway。但在ErnestHemingway后添加thewriterwhowrotemanypopularnovelsinthe20thcentury便更具体地描写了ErnestHemingway。1.局部扩句，构思微句⑴顺承递进式扩句①MrsWangisverypatientwithhersonandshealwaysexplainsaproblemtohimseveraltimeswithoutcomplaining.【解析】前句描写MrsWang对她的儿子非常有耐心，增添explainsaproblemtohimseveraltimeswithoutcomplaining便更能说明MrsWang对她儿子耐心的表现形式，使得描写更具体。顺承关系续写方式主要有：and连接两个连贯动作；连词before或after表示动作先后关系；havingdonesth表示动作先后关系；withsthdone表示动作已完成。(2)转折关系式扩句②Mikehasagoodjob,yetheneverseemstohaveanymoney.【解析】前句讲述迈克有一份好工作，后面说他似乎从来都没钱，用yet来表示转折。此外，表示转折的词还有：but,however,although,though,while等。(3)因果关系式扩句③Theteamhasmadesomepositionalchangesbecausetwoplayersareinjured.【解析】该句主句讲述球队进行了一些位置上的调整，because引导的原因状语从句阐述了球队进行位置调整的原因，因而让内容表述更具体。因果扩句的方式有：①原因扩句：because,since,as,for,dueto,becauseof等；②结果扩句：so,sothat,onlytofind,-ing形式表示结果。2.整体扩句⑴非谓语动词作状语或者定语例1．Filledwithfright,Idraggedmyexhaustedbodyinchingforward．我充满了恐惧，拖着疲惫的身体向前挪动。例2．SensingthedesperategleaminHunter'seyes,Whistonbentovertogivehimatightembrace,comfortingthattheywouldbesafe.惠斯顿觉察到亨特眼中的绝望，弯下腰紧紧地拥抱了他一下，安慰他说他们会安全的。

⑵状语从句或者定语从句例1.Asastudent,thefirstthingthatyoushoulddoeverymorningistomakeaproperplan.作为一名学生，每天早晨你应当做的第一件事是制订适当的计划。例2.WheneverIrecallmyclassmatesandthosefunnythingsthatstillseemtobefreshinmymind,Ican'thelpsmiling.对于我的同班同学和那些好玩的事情，我似乎仍记忆犹新，每当想起我都会情不自禁地笑起来。3.扩句句式⑶名词性从句例1.Whatwelovemostisthetimeweenjoythefullmoontogether.我们最喜欢的是一起赏月的时光。例2.Janemovedaimlesslydownthetree-linedstreet,notknowingwhereshewasheading.简漫无目的地沿着绿树成荫的街道走着，不知道自己要去哪里。⑷形容词(短语)或者评注性副词作状语例1.Fortunately,everythingworkedoutallrightintheend.幸运的是，最后一切顺利。例2.Fullofexcitement,thechildrenlookedforwardtogoingonapicnic.孩子们充满兴奋，盼望着去野餐。⑸with复合结构作状语或定语例1.Holdingthenotetightly,Iwasonthevergeoftears,withastreamofwarmthspreadingacrossmybody.我紧紧地握着那张纸条，快要哭出来了，一股暖流涌上我的全身。例2.“Notimetomakemumabreakfastnow.”Jennacriedwithregretandguiltoverwhelmingherlikeendlesstides.“现在没时间给妈妈做早餐了。”珍娜哭了，悔恨和内疚像潮水一样涌上心头。3.扩句句式⑹it形式主语或者形式宾语句型例1.Itisreportedthatanothersatellitehasbeeninorbit.据报道又一颗人造卫星已经进入轨道了。例2.Itisimportantforadultstospeaktoyoungpeopleabouthowtheyusesocialmediaandchatonline.成年人要告诉年轻人如何使用社交媒体和在线聊天，这是很重要的。

⑺therebe存现句例1.Thereisnodenyingthefactthatenvironmentalpollutionisapressingissue.不可否认的事实是，环境污染是一个紧迫的问题。例2.Therehasbeenasignificantincreaseinthenumberofpeopleusingsocialmedia.使用社交媒体的人数显著增加。

⑻特殊句式(倒装、强调和省略句)例1.WhileinBeijing,IpaidavisittotheSummerPalace.在北京时，我参观了颐和园。例2.NotuntilIbegantoworkdidIrealizehowmuchtimeIhadwasted.直到我参加了工作我才意识到我浪费了多少时间。3.扩句句式⑼动作链例1.Jeanwalkedtowardherfather.→Jeansawherfatherinthedistance,soshejumpedupandmadeherwaythroughthecrowdtowardhim.珍远远地看见了她的父亲，于是她跳起来，穿过人群朝他走去。例2.AfterIfinishedpaintingwallsinthebedroomupstairs,Iwenttocleanthewindows.→AfterIfinishedpaintingwallsinthebedroomupstairs,Ibroughtupsomewaterandoldtowels,andthensteppedonabenchtocleanthewindows.我刷完楼上卧室的墙后，拿来一些水和旧毛巾，然后踩在长凳上擦窗户。

⑽修饰手法例1.Shefeltnervousandherfaceturnedpale.→Shefeltnervousandherfaceturnedpale,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.她感到紧张，脸色变得苍白，感觉如坐针毡。例2.Immediately,theforestbecameverydark.→Immediately,absolutedarknessruledtheforest.立刻，一片漆黑笼罩了整个森林。3.扩句句式1.被老师的话深深感动，苏珊决定更加努力学习。___________________________,Susanmadeuphermindtostudyharder.2.那位戴着一顶大花帽子的漂亮女士在剧院门口被警卫拦了下来。Thebeautifulladywith

wasstoppedatthegateofthetheatrebytheguard.3.这些年来，玛丽从父母那里听到了许多关于她出生的城市的故事。Overtheyears,Maryhasheardmanystoriesfromherparentsaboutthecity

.4.回国前，我爷爷给他在国内认识的每个人都打了电话。

,mygrandpaphonedeveryoneheknewathome.5.等了很长时间，他才被叫进办公室。Having

,hewasaskedintotheoffice.6.虽然阳光灿烂，但并不很暖和。Itwasn’tverywarm

.7.戴安娜由于身体不好而被迫早早地从教学岗位上退休。Dianawasforcedtoretireearlyfromteaching

.8.彼得匆匆赶回家，结果发现客人们已经走了。Peterhurriedhome,

.举一反三Deeplymovedbyherteacher’swordsalargefloweryhatwhere/inwhichshewasbornBeforereturning/hereturnedhomewaitedalongtimealthough/thoughthesunwasshiningbecauseof/duetoill/poorhealthonlytofindtheguestshadleft写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

MakeaNestforMyDovesIsatatthebreakfasttablewithmyfour-year-oldson,Matthew,tryingtoignoretheacheinmystomach.“Mama,wanttoplay?”“Nottoday,baby.”Ishookmyhead.ThesedaysIcouldbarelygetoutofbed.Iwasstillrecoveringfromanoperation.Ihopedforstrengthandhappiness,butthefutureseemedsohopeless.Suddenly,Matthewjumpedupfromhisspotonthekitchenfloor.“Bird!”heshouted,rushingtoourcourtyard.Sureenough,therewasawhitedoveseatedinarubbertree(橡胶树).Itsatthereforafewmoments,andthenflewaway.Strange,I’dneverseenoneinourneighborhoodbefore.WhenIdraggedmyselftothekitchenthenextmorning,thedovewasback.Thistimeitwaswithamatecarryingsticks.“LookMatthew,”Isaid,pointingtothetree.“They’regoingtomakeanest.”Thedovesflewinandoutofthecourtyardallweek,buildingontopoftherubbertree.Matthewcouldhardlycontainhisexcitement.Everymorning,he’drunintothekitchenandtakehisspotbytheslidingglassdoor(滑动玻璃门),talkingtothebirdswhiletheyworked.Hishappinesswasinfluential.AsmuchasIwassad,Icouldn’thelpbutlookforwardtothedoves’visitstoo.Thenitallwentwrong.Thecourtyardwasasafeenoughspotforanest,buttherubbertree’sbroad,thinleaveswerefarfromstable.Onenight,astrongwindblew,throwingthedoves’nesttotheground.Iheardthetwigs(细枝)breakapart.Isurveyedthedamage.Nothinggoodeverlasted.Iwouldn’tblamethedovesiftheynevercameback.Buttheyreturned.Andtheypaidnoattentiontothepileofsticksthathadoncebeentheirnest.Theystartedagainfromthebeginning.Again,though,thewinddestroyedalltheirhardwork.Thenextday,andthenext,theystartedagain,asifnothinghadhappened.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:IknewIhadtodosomething.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:“Itworks!Thebirdsareback!”Matthewannounced.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以故事发展顺序为线索展开，讲述了作者的儿子Matthen每天都看到一些鸽子来到自家的院子里，作者和儿子注意到鸽子要在橡胶树上筑巢。一天夜里，刮起了一阵大风，把鸽巢掀到地上。作者以为鸽子再也不回来，但他们又回来了，并且又在树上从零开始。然而，风又一次摧毁了他们所有的辛勤工作，但他们第二天又继续努力的故事。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenEverymorningwhereInthecourtyard;onarubbertreewhoMatthew;IWhatMatthewandIdecidedtohelpthedoveWhyThewinddestroyedthedove’snestagainandagain.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节

①由第一段首句内容“我知道我必须做到什么”可知，第一段可描写作者如何帮助鸽子们，并且等待鸽子的到来。

②由第二段首句内容“‘起作用了!鸟儿回来了!’Matthew宣布。”，可知本段应该写鸽了们回来后的情况。如鸽子筑巢给新家添加树枝、孵蛋等；以及作者的感悟：生活充满了无法想象的奇迹和惊喜。2.续写线索：决定帮助鸽子——帮助过程——焦急等待——鸽子回归——鸽子安家——小鸽子孵出——感悟思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点27

IknewIhadtodosomething.Thewhitedoveanditsmatehadprovidedbrightnessduringmydarkdays.Nowitwastimetohelptheminreturn(衔接句).Icutapieceofhardwarecloth,formingitintotheshapeofanestandthensecuringtheends(动作描写).Ithenhammereditintothewallnexttotherubbertree.AfterIhadfinishedallthework,therewasonlyanhourbeforethedovesusuallymadetheirvisit.MatthewandIstoodbytheslidingglassdoor,waitingandhoping(心理描写+衔接句).

“Itworks!Thebirdsareback!”Matthewannounced.Hearingmyson’sexcitedvoice,whichwasasclearasabell,Ilookedup(衔接句+神态描写).Theretheywere—swoopingandcirclingnearthenest,tryingtoaddsometwigstotheirnewhome(场景描写).Afewweekslater,threebabiesbrokefreefromtheirshells.“Chirp,chirp,”Matthewsang.Iheldhiminmyarmsandkissedhim,enjoyingthehappinessofthemoment(动作描写+场景描写).Lookingattheirflitteringshadowsandhearingthemchirp,Ifeltthedimgraynesswithinmyheartdisappeared,replacedbythestrengthoflife(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WheneverIspreadmarmalade(橘子酱),Ithinkofmymother.Shewasawonderfulwoman,afive-foot-tallangel.Sheevenbefriendedaskunk(臭鼬).Onedayshewasoutbackpickingbeanswhensheturnedtoseeaskunknomorethanayardaway.Theskunkhadamarmaladejarstuckonhisnose.Mothertookpityonhim.Stillonherknees,sheinchedacrossthegrass,reachedout,andturnedthejarverycarefully.Thejarslidoff.Theskunknoddedathank-you,thenturnedandslippedintothewoodsatthebackofthegarden.Noneofspraying(喷)business.Notonmywonderfulmother.Shetoldthatstoryoverandover.AndshealwayscalledtheskunkMarmalade.That’snotall.Therewasthetime,maybethreesummerslater,whenIwasabouttwelve.Itwasarainymorning.Dadwenttowork,andMotherwentshopping.MyfriendRobcameoversowecouldruntheelectrictraininmyroom.Allofasudden,ascratchingsoundcamefromtheattic(阁楼).“Soundslikesomekindofanimal,”Robsaid.“Yeah.Let’stakealook.”Outinthehall,Iopenedtheatticdoor—veryslowly.Thenoisestopped.Iclimbedafewsteps.Myeyeswereatfloorlevel.Isawnothingbutboxesandtrunksandanolddollhouse.IclimbedtothetopofthestairswithRobafterme.Silence.“Let’slookaround,”Isaid.Ifoundtheanimalbehindaboxnearthechimney.Youguessedit.Blackwithawhitestripedownitsback.Washescared?Youbet.Atleastthat’showIrememberit.Ibackedaway.Wouldhesprayme?Doskunksbite?“Hey,Rob.Ifoundhim.Let’sgotofigureoutaplantogethimoutofhere.”Weclimbeddownthestepsquietly.“It’saskunk,”Isaid.“ItmightevenbeMarmala