Unit3Festivalsandcustoms写作之读后续写课件译林版高中英语

Unit3Festivalsandcustoms译林版2020必修第二册读后续写：与节日风俗相关读话题写作文高一下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。12技法点拨

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如何高效阅读文本01①Readforcharacters(人物)：确定故事人物，分析人物的言行，判断人物性格和情感。②Readforplot(情节)：利用时间和地点的变化明确故事的开端、发展、高潮和结局，从而梳理情节的发展。③Readforemotionalchanges(情感变化)：通过情感形容词、副词、名词或介词短语等判断情感或通过动作、神态、心理或场景描写等推断人物情感。④Readforconflict(冲突)：留意原文结尾或续写第一段首句是否出现冲突或问题，在续写部分应解决该冲突或问题。⑤Readfortheme(主题)：通读原文，勾画有助于理清文章脉络的词汇或句子，弄清谁(who)、在什么时间(when)、什么地点(where)、通过什么方式(how)、做了什么事(what)，从而归纳主旨，推断主题。⑥Readforlanguage(语言)：判断原文语言特点，续写部分语言特点应与原文一致。1.审读文本，分析情节⑴两段首句定一框①根据所给的第一段首句和第二段首句确定续写部分第一段的主要内容。

首：第一段第二句衔接第一段已给句的关键信息。

中：描写故事发展过程。

尾：第二段的段首句暗示第一段的故事走向，第一段尾句应衔接第二段已给首句中的关键信息。⑵二框二首正能量

首：第二段第二句衔接呼应第二段已给句的关键信息。

中：描写故事发展过程。

尾：第二段尾句应体现正能量，结局应是正向的，如意外事件的续写结局应是事情得以解决，可呼应原文内容总结、感慨、点题或升华主旨。2.高效构思故事情节⑶前后衔接，合情合理①衔接原文主题：如原文有标题，则原文主题很明显，如无标题则需通读原文并提炼主题，续写情节围绕该主题展开，结尾呼应该主题或升华点题。②衔接原文首段：原文首段或直点主题，或交代故事背景，或抒情或描写，或设置悬念，应该注意捕捉作者设置的伏笔，在续写中或在尾句照应首段。③衔接续写首句：根据续写段首句合理预测接下来会发生什么。④衔接特定情节：原文有些特定的情节对续写有暗示作用，续写部分恰当回应，可使续写更合理。⑤衔接细节描写：原文会涉及很多诸如动作、情感的细节描写，续写中应灵活呼应。(如2022新高考Ⅰ卷中描写David跑步的动作)⑥衔接原文结尾：原文结尾可能会出现一个冲突或问题，续写部分应侧重给出该冲突或问题的解决办法2.高效构思故事情节写作实践：

节日风俗相关读后续写02（2021年1月浙江高考改编）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunately,weforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost(最上面),Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.Atfirst,Igotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween,anditquicklybecameasensationamongourfriendsandfamily.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析文章讲述了作者在万圣节与家人进行南瓜雕刻的传统活动，其中作者与兄弟竞争挑选最大的南瓜，并试图通过将头伸进南瓜里来证明自己的南瓜最大，但最终发现自己难以从南瓜中出来的尴尬经历。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenAtHalloweenwhereAtauthor’shomewhoAllofusinmyfamilyWhatIputmywholeheadintothePumpkin,butcouldn’tgetitout.WhyWeforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Ithoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①由第一段首句和第二段关键信息“Thatvideowasposted”可逆推出，作者的头从南瓜里弄出来了。第一段应叙述作者如何脱困，可描写作者害怕得哭了，引来父亲或兄弟姐妹帮助脱困。第一段尾句衔接第二段段首句中的“Thatvideowasposted”和原文信息“mymomfilmingtheannualevent”，可描述妈妈录视频。具体构思细节如下：衔接句1:HowdidIfeel?微场景1:WhatdidIdo?微场景2:Whatdidmyfamilydo?段尾句1:HowtoendPara.ltoensurethecoherencewithPara.2?思路点拨②根据第二段首句内容“Thatvideowasposted”，第二段可叙述录制的视频被发到网上后，网民的反应、作者的感悟。第二段尾句应体现正能量：吸取教训——三思而后行。具体构思细节如下：衔接句2:Whatwastheresult?微场景1:Howdiditdevelop?微场景2:Howdidwereacttotheresult?段尾句2:HowdidIfeelorlearnafterallthis?2.续写线索：头被南瓜卡住出不来哭泣→大家帮忙把头从南瓜中弄出来→上传视频→视频走红→回忆往事。续写部分情感线可以是：焦虑害怕→如释重负→尴尬难为情→开心。思路点拨注意：进行续写创作时，可以添加一些细节描写：①动作细节：在描写作者的家人帮助作者时，可描述作者家人在小心翼翼的施救过程中的一些细节;②情感细节：应刻画作者的头被卡在南瓜中时的焦虑恐惧、脱困时的如释重负，视频播出后走红时的兴奋和意外;③心理描写：作者的头被卡在南瓜中时应该很恐惧，但脱困后尤其是视频走红后，心理活动会有变化，也许会觉得尴尬或激动，可通过直接或间接的方式，体现人物的内心世界。思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点1822第三步：巧用话题词汇、句式完成句子1.___________________________(惊慌变成了绝望)asIstruggled,theweightofthepumpkinpressingdownonme,mybreathechoingintheconfinedspace.2.Myfamily'sinitiallaughterturnedintoconcern,andtheygatheredaround,____________________________(提供建议和鼓励).3.Mymom'svoicewassoothingasshetoldmetostaycalm,_______________________________________(而我的兄弟姐妹们则忧心忡忡地盯着我).4.___________________________(房间里爆发出欢呼声),andIwasmetwithhugsandrelievedsmiles.完成句子Panicturnedintodesperationofferingadviceandencouragementwhilemysiblings'worriedfacespeeredatmeTheroomeruptedincheers5._________________________________(一开始的尴尬时刻)turnedintoacherishedmemory,astorywewouldtellforyearstocome.6.Theimageofmewithapumpkinstuckonmyheadbecameasymbolofourfamily'sjoy,creativity,andabilityto_________________________________________________(把最尴尬的局面变成积极局面).7.__________________________(它提醒我们)thelove,laughter,andtogethernessthatdefinedourfamily.完成句子WhathadstartedasamomentofembarrassmentturneventhemostawkwardsituationsintosomethingpositiveItwasareminderofIwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.PanicturnedintodesperationasIstruggled,theweightofthepumpkinpressingdownonme,mybreathechoingintheconfinedspace(衔接句+心理描写).Myfamily'sinitiallaughterturnedintoconcern(情感描写),andtheygatheredaround,offeringadviceandencouragement.Mymom'svoicewassoothingasshetoldmetostaycalm,whilemysiblings'worriedfacespeeredatme(场景描写).Finally,withacombinationofgentletwistingandcarefulmaneuvering,myheadwasfree.Theroomeruptedincheers,andIwasmetwithhugsandrelievedsmiles(动作描写).Myfacewasred,andmyprideslightlybruised,butthewarmthofmyfamily'ssupportmadeitallworthwhile(衔接句+心理描写).ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween,anditquicklybecameasensationamongourfriendsandfamily.Whathadstartedasamomentofembarrassmentturnedintoacherishedmemory,astorywewouldtellforyearstocome(衔接句+情感描写).Theimageofmewithapumpkinstuckonmyheadbecameasymbolofourfamily'sjoy,creativity,andabilitytoturneventhemostawkwardsituationsintosomethingpositive(场景描写).Thatyear,thepumpkincarvingwasn'tjustaboutcompetition;itwasareminderofthelove,laughter,andtogethernessthatdefinedourfamily(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

LastyearatChristmastime,mywife,threechildrenandIwereonourwayfromParistoNice.Somehoweverythingwentwrong.Ourhotelswere“touristtraps”andourrentedcarbrokedown.OnChristmasEve,whenwecheckedintoadirtyhotelinNice,therewasnoChristmasspiritinourhearts.Itwasrainingandcoldwhenwewentouttoeat.Wefoundasmallrestaurantpoorlydecoratedfortheholiday.Onlyfivetablesintherestaurantweretaken.ThereweretwoGermancouples,twoFrenchfamilies,andanAmericansailor,byhimself.Theywereeatinginstonysilenceexceptthesailor.Hewaswritingaletter,andahalf-smilelightedhisface.Inthecornerapianoplayerwaslistlessly(无精打采地)playingChristmasmusic.AllofuswereinterruptedbyanoldFrenchflowerwomanthroughthefrontdoor.Shehadawornovercoatandheroldshoeswerewet.Carryingherbasketofflowers,shewentfromonetabletoanother.Nooneboughtany.Exhaustedandfrustrated,shesatdownatatable.Thesailorfinishedhismealandgotuptoleave.Puttingonhiscoat,hewalkedovertotheflowerwoman’stable.“MerryChristmas,”hesaid,smilingandpickingoutahandfulofflowers.“Howmucharethey?”“Twofrancs,sir.”Thesailorputatwentyfrancnoteinthewoman’shand.“Idon’thavechange,sir,”shesaid.“I'llgetsomefromthewaiter.”“No,ma’am,”saidthesailor,leaningoverandkissingtheancientcheek.“ThisismyChristmaspresentforyou.”实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Thenthesailorheadedforourtablewiththeflowersinhishand.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Thepianoplayercamealiveandpleasantmusicfilledthewholeroom._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________