Unit3EnvironmentalProtectionUsinglanguage话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版选择性

Unit3

ENVIRONMENTALPROTECTION人教版2019选择性必修第三册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.Pennilessandstarving,thechildstoodneartheroadandbeggedforameal,otherwisehewould________________.这个孩子身无分文又饥肠辘辘，站在路边要饭，否则就会饿死。(starve)(读后续写动作描写)2.____________________________________________________.Shakinglikealeaf,Ihadneverbeensoscaredinallmylife.一阵恐惧袭来。我吓得瑟瑟发抖，一辈子也没这么害怕过。(seize)(读后续写情感描写)3.Friendshavetolearnto_________________________________andtotoleratedifferencesofopinions.朋友之间应该学会忍耐对方恼人的小毛病，并允许意见出现分歧。(tolerate)((读后续写主旨升华)4.____________________________________________Ihadtherighttomanagemyearnings.我怀疑我父母是否同意我有权用我赚的钱。(doubt)(2021·浙江卷读后续写)活用写作词汇starvetodeathAwaveoffearseizedme/IwasseizedbyawaveoffeartolerateannoyinghabitsofeachotherIdoubtedwhether/ifmyparentswouldagreethat5.Mymotheroften____________________,whichmakesmeburnwithanger.我的母亲经常限制我的自由，这使我非常生气。(restrict)6.Asisknowntoall,_____________________________isimportanttostudentsandbenefitsallthemembers.众所周知，和谐的宿舍生活对学生来说很重要，并且对所有(宿舍)成员都有好处。(harmony)7.Nomatterwhatchallengehewasfacedwith,hewouldnever_______________________.无论面对什么挑战，他都不会屈服。(submit)活用写作词汇restrictsmyfreedomaharmoniousdormitorylifesubmithimselftoit活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.如果没有你的慷慨帮助，我不可能在英语演讲比赛中获得第一名。Withoutyourgenerousassistance,I__________________________intheEnglishSpeakingCompetition.2.这里总共有25户，所有人都在为保护长江而努力。Therearealtogether25householdshere,_____________________________.原：Withoutthisprocess,Earthcouldnotsustainlife.没有这个过程，地球就无法维持生命。原：Previously,waterqualityintheLiRiverhadsufferedgreatlyfromanincreasingvolumeoftourists,manyofwhomfrequentlythrewgarbageintotheriver.以往，漓江的水质因游客量的增长遭到了严重破坏，一些游客频繁将垃圾扔进江中。couldn’thavewonthefirstprizeallofwhomareworkinghardtoprotecttheYangtzeRiver细节描写3.他眼里含着感激的泪水，抓住我的胳膊，紧紧地拥抱着我。______________________________,heseizedmebythearmandthenhuggedmetightly.原：Waterpollutionlevelsincreased,withmorehouseholdandcommercialwasteendingupintheriver.更多的家庭和商业废物最终流入河中，加剧了水污染。Withtearsofgratitudeinhiseyes活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例动作描写1.1.Awarmingoceanandatmospherealongwithmeltingiceandrisingsealevelsprovideevidenceofadramaticchangeintheglobalclimate.2.Expertsclaimedthatlowsea-icelevelscausedbyclimatechangemeantthebearcouldnothuntsealsasbefore.3.Climatescientistsoftenmentionakeyclimateprocesscalledthe“greenhouseeffect”.4.Climatescientistshavewarnedthatifwedonottakeappropriateactions,thiswarmingtrendwillprobablycontinueandtherewillbeahigherpricetopay.5.Weasindividualscanalsoreduceour“carbonfootprint”byrestrictingtheamountofcarbondioxideourlifestylesproduce.

场景描写ThebeautifulLiRiveranditsamazingsurroundingsceneryisoneofthemostwell-knowntouristdestinationsinChina’sGuangxiZhuangAutonomousRegion.心理描写In2013,alotofpeoplewereshockedbyanewsphotoofadeadpolarbearthatwasfoundonNorway’sArcticislandofSvalbard.技法点拨：

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例1：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.【分析】用时间副词承接所给首句中的“itgettingdarkagain”，同时衔接后文的环境描写“thedarknessruledtheforest”。副词衔接自然、顺畅。例2：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.【分析】用形容词短语“Desperateandhopeless”凸显了人物的情绪状态，与后面的动作“kneltdown”一起再现了情境中的人物的精神状态。

例3：(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.【分析】用“状态形容词+as/though引导的倒装句”结构体现了人物早上起来后的精神状态。1.用副词显现出动作反应时的时间特征2.用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪

例4：(2018.06浙江卷)Para1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.【分析】用“情绪形容词+从句”结构阐释了人物见到兔子后的心理反应。例5：(2018.06浙江卷)Para2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.【分析】用并列的表示心理状态的形容词，体现了人物心力交瘁的状态。例6：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.【分析】用“现在分词+情绪形容词”结构体现了人物失望的心理状态。例7：(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.【分析】用“现在分词+状态形容词”结构传递了人物早上醒来后的精神状态。3.用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化例9：(2017.11浙江卷)Para2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.【分析】用“视觉+环境描写+拟人修辞”结构与首句提示语中的“lotsofgreatsights”遥相呼应，再现了美丽风景对视觉的冲击效果。4.添加背景描写以烘托场景1.Thenextmorning,Ipreparedandatebreakfastwithmythreewonderfulkids(段首句)._________________,aswesataroundthetable,Ilookedintotheireyesandsawtheirinnocenceandloveforme.尽管很疲惫，当我们围坐在桌子旁时，我看着他们的眼睛，看到了他们的天真和对我的爱。)【赏析：形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪。】2.Suddenly,alightofhopewasfueledwithinSarah(段首)._____________________________.Withreneweddetermination,Sarahdashedtothefoodtruck.“合作可能会拯救我的面包店，”她想。萨拉再次下定决心，冲向食品车。【赏析：直接引语增强情境效果。】3.Slowlybutsurely,morecustomersfloodedinaftertheyteamedup(段首句),_________________________________andsupportthetwowomenwhohadrefusedtogiveup,theycameintothebakery.渴望品尝新的美食，并支持两位拒绝放弃的女性，他们走进面包店。【赏析：形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪。】4.Icalledout,“Sally!Comedownimmediately!”(段首句)Theechoofmyvoice____________,causingthecuriouseyesoftheresidentstoturntowardsmeevenmoresharply.我的声音回荡在空中，让居民们好奇的目光更加敏锐地转向我。【赏析：借助声音效果增强描写功效。】举一反三TiredasIwas“Teamingupmightsavemybakery,”shethoughteagertotastethenewtreatsfilledtheair写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

OnahotSeptemberafternoon,PeterandhisfriendIsabelwereontheirwaytothelibrary.WhentheypassedbyTubmanpark,Isabelsuggestedcuttingthroughittogettothelibrary.Astheyenteredthepark,thesightoftheswings(秋千)andthemerry-go-roundbroughtbackafloodofmemoriesoftheirchildhoodspentthere.Butnoweverythinglookedsoold,sad,anddirty.Litterlayonthegroundnexttoanoverflowingtrashbin.Therewerestillyoungschoolchildrenplayingtherebuttheyhadtoavoidthetrashthatlitteredtheplayground.Alittleboytoldthemthatthecitytooktheothertrashcansawayandtheremainingonenevergotemptiedoften.Astheyheadedtowardthelibrary,thetwohighschoolstudentswrinkledtheirforehead.Inthelibrary,theyencounteredMrs.Evans,theirkind-heartedfifth-gradeteacher,retiredyetstillpassionate.MrsEvanslistenedasIsabelandPetereagerlyexplainedwhatthey’dseen.Finally,sherecommendedthemtogototheCityHalltovoicetheirconcerns.Thenextday,IsabelandPeterwentintothebuildingoftheCityHallbutweremetwithanimpatientofficer.Theywereinformedthatthecitycouldn’thelpwiththeirproblemduetoatightbudget.Discouraged,theyleftandturnedtoMrs.Evansforhelp.Underherguidance,theydecidedtoaskGoGreen,anon-profitorganizationwhosegoalistoprotecttheenvironment,forhelp.“Thisgroupisgoodatraisingmoneyforprojectsjustlikeyours,”saidMrsEvans.ShepromisedtoarrangethemtopresenttheirideastoGoGreen.Hearingthis,theirfacelitup.Twomaintasksremainedahead:researchingwaystocleanuptheparkandpreparingaconvincingpresentation.AsIsabelwasgoodatresearchingwhilePeteralwayshadatalentforspeaking,theycooperatedquitewell.Isabellearnedfromasciencemagazinethatanewtypeoftrashbincansqueezethetrashdownwithoutbeingemptiedoften,whichsavestime,money,andenergy.Basedonthis,Peterpracticedhispresentationoverandoveragain.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述Peter和Isabel经过儿时玩耍的Tubmanpark，发现公园破败不堪、垃圾满地，于是决定想办法改变其面貌。在埃文斯夫人的建议下，他们决定向环保组织GoGreen寻求帮助。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenonahotSeptemberafternoonwhereTubmanparkwhoPeter;Isabel;Mrs.EvansWhatInordertochangethecurrentsituationoftheparkwheretheyplayed,theydecidedtoseekhelpfromtheenvironmentalprotectionorganizationGoGreen.WhyWhenPeterandIsabelpassedbyTubmanPark,theydiscoveredthattheparkwasinastateofdisrepairandcoveredingarbage.Theydecidedtofindawaytochangeitsappearance.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①根据续写第一段首句“一周后，彼得紧张地站在大厅的后面，环境保护组织GoGreen正在那里开会。”可知，第一段可描写彼得向GoGreen作报告的情况。②根据续写第二段首句“会后，伊莎贝尔兴奋地把这个好消息告诉了彼得。”可知，第二段可描写得知GoGreen同意提供帮助后，Peter和Isabel接下来的打算。2.续写线索：看见破败不堪的公园——决定改变——寻求帮助——获得支持——改变计划。思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点25

Aweeklater,PeterstoodnervouslyatthebackofthehallwhereGoGreenwasmeeting.Finally,itwastimeforhimtodothepresentation(衔接句).StandinginfrontofseveralexpertsfromGoGreen,Peterwasnervousinfearofscrewingthingsup(心理描写).Butunbelievably,whenhebegantospeak,everythingwentsosmoothly(动作描写).Hisvoicewasclearandinfluential,andhisspeechwaslogicalandwell-organized.PeterendedhispresentationwithadeepbowandwentouttowaitforGoGreen’sdecision.

Afterthemeeting,IsabelexcitedlytoldPeterthegoodnews.TheirideaswereapprovedandGoGreenagreedtoprovidethemoneytheyneededtopurchasethetrashbin(动作描写).Petersmiled.Itmeantnotonlytheireffortspaidoff,butalsoTubmanparkwouldrestoreitscleannessandtidiness.PeterandIsabeldecidedtotellMrs.Evansthisgoodnewsfirstandthenworkedoutthenextsteptheyneededtotake(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

MelatiandIsabeldeeplylovetheirhomeontheisland,surroundedbytropicalrainforests,greenfields,andavastocean.Enjoyingaswimattheirlocalbeachwasonceadailypleasureforthem.ButwhenMelatiwasfifteen,andIsabeljustten,thesistersstartedtolosetheirenthusiasmforswimminginthewatersneartheirbeach.Moreoftenthannot,plasticbagswouldbearoundthemastheyswamandsomewerescatteredonthebeach.Theygotreallyupsetaboutthat.Melatididn’tthinkmuchaboutituntilonedayherteachergavealessononsomeworldheroes.Eachofthosepeoplehadsparkedmovementsofpositivechangesintheworld.Theybelievedintheimpacttheycouldhaveandtheydidinspiremorepeopletodosomethingmeaningful.Afterschool,Melatiwalkedhomeslowlyinsilence,concernedaboutthevastamountofplasticrubbishonthebeach.Theheroescrossedhermind.Iftheycoulddoit,wecoulddoittoo,shethought.Theidealitherup.Shecouldn’twaittosharewhatshethoughtwithIsabelandquickenedherpace.“Somanyplasticbagsaround!Thebeachisdirtyandmessy!It’ssoterrible!Wehavelostthecleanandbeautifulbeach.Can’twedosomethingtogetitback?”Melatisaidheartily.Isabelfeltabitpuzzledatwhattodo,butshealsohadastrongdesiretodosomething.Picturingabeachasfascinatingasbeforeinmind,thepairjumpedwithjoy.Theytalkedalot,anxioustoknowhowDadandMomwouldrespondtotheirideas.Thatnightwhenthefamilysatbythedinnertable,thesisterseagerlygottheirideasacross.WhileMomandDadlistenedtothegirlscarefully,theireyesshone.“Howamazingthatwouldbe!Wearesoproudofyou!”Dadexclaimed.Momcameup,gavethemathumbupandhuggedthesisters.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:MelatiandIsabeldecidedtomakeapositiveimpactstraightaway.____________________________________________________________________________