南京盐城一模读后续写课件高三英语二轮复习专项

读后续写：人际互助类LearningObjectives:Bytheendofthisclass,studentswillbeableto:1.Mastercorenewwordsandphrasesinthepassage,andunderstandandinitiallyusekeysentencepatterns2.Learntowriteasimplecontinuationorimitation,usingdetailstoshowemotionalchanges.问题：1.书写潦草，字数不够，卷面不美观2.审题有问题，缺少情节3.表述不清，难以推进情节4.单词、短语错误过多，情绪描写、动作描写不会写5.时态紊乱审题注意事项:一、核心要求该类写作要求为150字，大概10-14句。二、第一步：读（五要素）快速阅读短文和续写段首句，确定五要素，勾划表示重要情节或情感的词句。•人物（who）：圈出主要人物、次要人物。•时间（when）：勾划时间词，确定续写故事的时间。•地点（where）：勾划出主要地点，确定续写故事的地点。•

事件（what）：用中文概括故事主要情节（自己总结）。•主题（theme）：确定文章主题语境（人与自我、人与社会、人与自然）。Ilivedinanoldapartmentcomplex(公寓楼)wherethewallswerethin薄的.Forweeks,mynewneighbor(邻居)upstairswaskeepingmeawakeeverynightbetweentenandmidnight.WhatIheardwasslow,forcefuladj.强有力的,有说服力的,有效的,强劲

footstepsmixedwithcrying,asifsomeonewere

pacing踱步withtheweightoftheworldonshoulders肩负着整个世界的重担.

Tocopewith(应对)thenoise,Iwouldsinkinto陷入theoldrockingchair(摇椅)bythewindow.Therhythmsomehowquietedmymind.Buttonight,thenoisewasjustunbearable(难以忍受的).Iposted(发布)inthebuilding’sgroupchat,“Canthe3Cneighborkeepitdownafter10?”Almostimmediately,Lena,acashier(收银员)atalocalmarket,replied,“Samehere.Haven'tsleptwellforweeks.”AndTom,whoranthesecondhandshop(二手商店)onthecorner,added,“Don'ttheyrealizehowlouditis?”Afewothersresponded,but3Cneverdid.I'dhadenough.“That'sit,”Ithoughtaloud,pullingonmyslippers(拖鞋).“I'mgoingupthere!”Istormed(怒气冲冲地走)tothethirdfloor,playingmyangryspeechinmyhead,“Keepitdown!Someofusneedtoworktomorrow!”Themomentthedooropened,Iblurtedout(脱口而出),“Doyouhaveanyideahowmuchnoiseyou'remaking?”Buttherestofmypreparedspeechgotstuckin卡在mythroat.

Ayoungwomanstoodthere,eyesred,swaying(摇晃)gentlybackandforthinadesperateattempt(拼命尝试)tocomfortacryingbaby.Theapartmentbehindherwashumble简陋的、不起眼的—nodiningtable,nochairs,notevenalamp,onlyamattress(床垫)andafewemptybabyfoodpackets包装盒onthefloor.“I'msosorry,Madam,”shewhispered(低声说),managingaweaksmile,“I'mjusttryingtogethertosleep.”Thatwaswhenmyangerdisappeared.AfamiliarrhythmsurfacedinmymindasIsawherswaythebabytiredly.“Ihaveachairdownstairsthatmightcalmyourbaby,”Ismiledsoftly.Shelookedup,eyeswideningindisbelief(难以置信).、一、人物（who）•主要人物：thewriter（“我”）、neighbor（3C邻居，年轻母亲）•次要人物：otherneighbors（Lena超市收银员、Tom二手店主等）二、时间（when）•原文时间词：everynightbetweentenandmidnight（每晚10点到午夜）、tonight（今晚）三、地点（where）•原文主要地点：anoldapartmentcomplex（旧公寓楼）•续写地点：需围绕上述公寓楼及相关公寓展开，不可凭空出现公园、商店等无关地点。四、事件（what）旧公寓楼的“我”，连续几周被三楼3C邻居的噪音（脚步声+婴儿哭声）困扰，不堪其扰后在群聊吐槽、上门理论，却发现邻居Mia是独自带婴儿的柔弱母亲，公寓简陋，正拼命安抚哭闹的婴儿，“我”的怒气消散，主动提出把自家的摇椅搬上去帮忙。三、第二步：思•why（为什么）：根据关键词思考为什么故事人物会有这样的行为或心理。•how（怎么样）：用关键词和“→”推理故事接下来将怎样发展下去。•衔接：第一段的最后一句必须与第二段的why紧密衔接——确保不跑题！•升华：最后一句需要贴合文章的主题语境，展现正能量。“Letmefetchitforyou,”Isaidandrusheddownstairs.拿来摇篮椅之后，邻居什么反应？邻居的宝宝有没有停止哭闹？我发了什么帖子？为什么发帖子？邻居们为何聚集到三楼？

Theneighborsrespondedtomypostandagreedtogatherat3Cinstantly邻居们聚集到三楼具体干了什么事情？三楼邻居什么反应？主题如何升华？2.续写线索：P1:拿来摇篮椅——宝宝安睡—三楼感激——我发帖解释缘由并求助P2:邻居带来东西帮助——三楼感激——感悟邻里和睦“Letmefetchitforyou,”Isaidandrusheddownstairs.Tenminuteslater,Icameback,carryingtheoldrockingchaironmyshoulderwithsweatrollingdownmyforehead.（承接上文）MovedbywhatIhadbrought,shethankedmesoftlywithsinceregratitude.Withareassuring使人安心的smile,Icarriedthechairinsideandsetitsteadilybesidethethinmattress床垫onthefloor,thensignaledhertolaythebabyonitandrockhimgently.ShedidasIsuggested,andtoourgreatdelight,thebabythathadbeencryingnonstopsoonstoppedcryingandfellintoasweet,peacefulsleep.However,glancingaroundhershabbyroom,Irealizedmytinyhelpwasfarfromenoughandimmediatelytookoutmyphonetoinformtheneighborsofherdifficultsituationandcallonthemtogatherat3Ctoofferhelp.（开启下文）Theneighborsrespondedtomypostandagreedtogatherat3Cinstantly.Minuteslater,Lena,thelocalmarketcashier,andTom,thecornersecond-handshopowner,（呼应原文）arrivedwithotherneighbors.Lenaheldsoftblanketsandbagsofbabyfood,whileTomcarriedafoldingchairandasmalllampfromhisshop;othersbroughtdiapers尿布,formula配方奶andotherdailynecessities.Weworkedsilentlytoarrangethefurnitureandputallsuppliesinorder,transformingtheempty,plainroom（呼应原文）intoawarmspacefulloflife,carefulnottowakethesleepingbaby.Fromthenon,thepreviousnoisefrom3Cwasreplacedbythesoftcreakingoftherockingchair,（呼应原文）agentlesoundthatshowedthemutualunderstandingandselflesscarebetweenneighbors.Itwasthiswarmthandkindnessthatcalmedthetroubleandmadethewholebuildingfulloflove.（主旨升华）

WhatIheardwasslow,forcefuladj.强有力的,有说服力的,有效的,强劲

footstepsmixedwithcrying,asifsomeonewerepacing踱步withtheweightoftheworldonshoulders肩负着整个世界的重担.

asif虚拟语气1.主句

现在时从句用

一般过去时（be动词一律用were）表示与现在事实相反。Shelooksasifshewereill.她看起来好像生病了。（其实没病）2.主句

过去时从句用haddone（过去完成时）表示与过去事实相反。Hetalkedasifhehadseentheghost.他说得好像他见过鬼一样。（其实没见过）3.表示将来的假想从句用would/could+动词原形Itseemsasifitwouldrain.看起来好像要下雨了。特殊：不用虚拟，用陈述语气当很可能是真的，就不用虚拟，直接用正常时态。Itlooksasifitisgoingtorain.天看起来真的要下雨了。（很可能发生）独立主格结构Ayoungwomanstoodthere,eyesred,swaying(摇晃)gentlybackandforthinadesperateattempt(拼命尝试)tocomfortacryingbaby.（sb+V,独立主格，非谓语）Shelookedup,eyeswideningindisbelief(难以置信).核心：

有独立主语（与主句主语不同）无谓语动词、无连词作状语：表伴随、原因、条件、时间常用结构1.名词/代词+doing/done/todoWeatherpermitting,…Theworkfinished,…2.名词/代词+adj/adv/介词短语Hisfacepale,…Themeetingover,…3.with+宾语+宾补（with复合结构）仿写练习：WhatIheardwasslow,forcefuladj.强有