外研版英语必修第一册 第二部分　第15周　读后续写主题练 遇险脱困 教师用书

第15周读后续写主题练遇险脱困遇险脱困是读后续写中非常重要的一类故事，它并不只出现在“人与自然”主题语境中，在“人与社会”主题语境下，也会有火灾、洪水、溺水、迷路、交通事故、突发疾病等紧急情况。从最初当事人遇险的惊慌害怕，绝望无助，到救助者想办法救援，再到最后当事人获救的宽慰和感激，涉及一系列的表达。在往年高考真题中，就曾经考过多次：2016年浙江卷：夫妻吵架，森林迷路；2017年浙江卷：骑车旅行，中途遇狼；2018年浙江卷：农场度假，骑马迷路；2020年浙江卷：给北极熊拍照时遇险。“遇险脱困类”读后续写解题技巧：1．总的原则：最终一定脱险。2．三个鲜明的阶段：第一阶段：遭遇险境；第二阶段：出现转机；第三阶段：脱离危险。1．雪山脱险类Exhaustedaswewere，wedidn’tstop.Grittingourteeth，wekeptdiggingthetrench.尽管我们筋疲力尽，但是我们没有停下来，我们咬紧牙关继续挖沟槽。Inchbyinch，wedugthesnowout.Afterwhatseemedacentury，wemadeit.(夸张手法)我们一点一点地把雪挖出来，在经历了似乎一个世纪之后，我们终于成功了。2．冰上救援类Hepushedthebranchtowardme.IgrabbedimmediatelyandwasdraggedoutoftheicywaterbyHarry.Whatanarrowescape!他把树枝推向我。我立刻抓住它，被哈利从冰冷的水中拖了出来。真是死里逃生！3．困洞营救类Nosoonerhadwearrivedwherethechildwastrappedthanthemanstartedtoscanthesurroundings.Thenheinchedtowardtheholeandstretchedouttoseizethechild’shands，pullinghimoutwithoutreserve.(动作链)我们刚赶到孩子被困的地方，那名男子就开始观察周围环境。接着他慢慢挪到洞口，伸手抓住孩子的手，全力将孩子拉了出来。4．动物描写类Itexposeditssharpteeth，glaringatusasitranforward.它露出锋利的牙齿，一边朝我们猛冲过来，一边恶狠狠地瞪着我们。Hismouthseemedfullofbloodandwideopen，hiseyesredwithanger.他满嘴是血，还大张着，双眼因愤怒而通红。5．自救、他救类Ishoutedforhelpatthetopofmyvoice，butinvain.我声嘶力竭地呼喊求助，但都是徒劳。Ipickedupmycourageandtriedtofrightenhimawaywiththepepperspray.我鼓起勇气，试图用胡椒喷雾把他吓跑。Realizingshecouldn’tswimtoshore，shedesperatelygrabbedafloatingplank，pressedittightlyagainstherchest，andusedherlaststrengthtowhistleforhelp.意识到游不到岸边，她拼命抓住一块浮木，紧紧按在胸前，用最后一丝力气吹口哨求救。Nosoonerhadhespottedthechildtrappedintheburninghousethanhegrabbedawetblanket，dashedthroughthesmoke，andliftedthechildintohisarmsbeforerushingout.他一发现被困在着火的房子里的孩子，就抓起一条湿毯子，冲过浓烟，抱起孩子冲了出来。Thedoctorkneltbesidehim，poundedhischestwithoutcease，andafterafewtenseseconds，themancoughedandcametohimself.医生跪在他身边，不停地按压他的胸膛，几秒钟紧张的等待后，男人咳嗽了一声，醒了过来。6．情感描写类Seeingthis，shefeltterrorwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.当她看到这一幕时，她感到恐惧涌上心头并且贯穿全身。Whenshesawthebeast，soterrifiedwasshethatherthroattightenedandherkneesweakened.当她看到这只野兽的时候，她是如此害怕以至于喉咙发紧，膝盖发软。Extremelyfrightened，Ifeltmybodytremblingandmypalmssweating.我极度害怕，感觉身体在发抖，手心也在冒汗。Ibreathedasighofrelief，throwingmyarmsaroundhimandhugginghimtightly.(动作双连链)我如释重负地松了口气，伸出双臂紧紧地抱住了他。Laughtermixedwithsobsescapedherlipswhenshewaspulledintoahug—shehadneverfeltsogratefultobealive.被抱住的那一刻，她的笑声里夹杂着抽泣——她从未如此感激自己还活着。7．遇险脱困主题升华Whatanarrowescape!Itturnsoutthatthereisalwaysawayoutofanydifficultsituationsaslongaswestaycalm.真是九死一生啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，任何困境都有出路。OnlythendidIrealizethatactionscancurefearandbraverycanconquerdifficulties.直到那时，我才意识到行动可以治愈恐惧，勇敢可以战胜困难。Nevershouldwegiveupourhopewhateversetbackswearefacedwith.无论遇到什么挫折我们绝不该放弃希望。Thispainfuladventureteachesmenottodespaireveninthedarkesthour，becauseaftereverynightthereisaday.这次痛苦的冒险教会了我即使在最黑暗的时刻也不要绝望，因为黑夜之后就是黎明。Whatstayedwithmewasn’tthedanger，butthestranger’soutstretchedhand—kindnessisthemostpowerfulrescueintheworld.留在我记忆里的不是危险，而是陌生人伸出的手——善意才是世界上最有力的救援。对点练习根据汉语提示补全句子1．大雨倾盆而下，我们被困在了一条狭窄的岩石缝隙里。我极度害怕，感觉身体在发抖，手心也在冒汗。Therainpoureddownheavily，andweweretrappedinanarrowrockcrevice.Extremelyfrightened,Ifeltmybodytremblingandmypalmssweating.2．我的朋友试图先爬上岩壁，却脚下一滑，险些摔下去。尽管我们已经筋疲力尽，但并没有停下。我们咬紧牙关，继续寻找出路。Myfriendtriedtoclimbuptherockwallfirst，butheslippedandalmostfell.Exhaustedaswewere，wedidn’tstop.Grittingourteeth，wekeptlookingforawayout.3．就在我们快要放弃的时候，听到了救援人员的声音。我声嘶力竭地呼喊求助，很快就有一根绳子扔到了我们面前。Justwhenwewereabouttogiveup，weheardarescuer’svoice.Ishoutedforhelpatthetopofmyvoice，andsoonaropewasthrowndowntous.4．在救援人员的帮助下，我们一人接一人地爬出了缝隙。我如释重负地松了口气，伸出双臂紧紧抱住了我的朋友。Withtherescuers’help，weclimbedoutofthecreviceonebyone.Ibreathedasighofrelief，throwingmyarmsaroundmyfriendandhuggedhimtightly.5．真是九死一生啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静、不失去希望，任何困境都有出路。Whatanarrowescape!Itturnsoutthatthereisalwaysawayoutofanydifficultsituationsaslongaswestaycalmanddon’tlosehope.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Whenwewerefinallydismissedfromthelastclassoftheday，thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassrooms.Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool.IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday，Ithought.LittledidIknowthatthedaywouldtakeaturnfortheworse.Theliftlobby(电梯间)ofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls，whichwerepaintedwhite，hadbeendirtiedovermanyyears.Ireachedmyflat’slobby，andpressedtheliftbuttonandwentin.Justthen，MrsLim，myelderlyneighbour，hobbled(蹒跚)in.Iheldtheliftdooropen，flashingafriendlysmile，andpolitelygreetedher.Iaskedherhowshefeltthatdayandpressedthebuttons.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite，andthenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.Suddenly，theliftfelldownincreasinglyfast.Therewereloudclankingsoundshereandtherewhiletheliftgrewslowerandslower.Myheartbeathardandfastasmyhandsturnedcoldandwetwithsweat.Unfortunately，theliftcametoanabruptstopatthefifthfloor.Ipressedthebuttonshardseveraltimes，butitwasofnohelp.Thelightsonthebuttonshadgoneout.Itsoondawnedonmethatweweretrapped.Anicyfearcreptupmyspine.MrsLimwashysterical(歇斯底里的)．“Wewillnevergetout！”shecriedwithherfacepale.Ithadbecomeacolourlessmask.Ihadnotimetolose.Ipressedthebellintheliftimmediately.Thesoundwassurelydeafening，butwhatotherchoicedidIhave?MrsLimburstintotears.Itriedmyverybesttocomforther，tellingherthateverythingwouldbeallrightandthatweneededtofindouthowtogetoutsafely.MrsLimbeganhavingtroublebreathing，andIimmediatelyhelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。Severalminutespassed，butnohelpcame.Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.写作指导第一步厘清文本六要素WhoI，MrsLim(myelderlyneighbour)WhenafterthelastclassofthedayWheretheliftlobbyofmyflatWhatItooktheliftwithMrsLim，andtheliftbrokedown，trappingusinside.WhyThelifthadmechanicalproblems，causingittofallfast，makeloudsounds，andthenstopabruptly.How(1)Ipressedtheliftbuttonshard(whichdidn’twork)，andthenpressedthebellinthelift.(2)ItriedtocomfortthehystericalMrsLim，helpinghersitdownandlooseninghercollar.第二步了解文本故事概要Afterthelastclass，Ifeltboredanddraggedmyfeethome，thinkingitwouldbeanother1.uneventful(eventful)day.LittledidIknowthingswouldtakeabadturn.2．Theliftlobbyofmyflatwasoldanddirty.3.WhenIgotintothelift，myelderlyneighbourMrsLimhobbledin.Iheldthedooropen，greetedher4.politely(polite)，andaskedaboutherdaybeforepressingtheliftbuttons.Wethenremainedsilent.Suddenly，theliftfellfastwithloudclankingsoundsbeforestoppingabruptlyatthe5.fifth(five)floor.Ipressedthebuttonshard，buttheydidn’tworkandthelightswentout.Isoonrealizedwe6.weretrapped(trap)，andfeargrippedme.MrsLimbecamehysterical，cryingthatwe’dnevergetout7.withapaleface.Ihadnochoicebut8.topress(press)theliftbellatonce，thoughthesoundwasdeafening.WhenMrsLimburstintotearsandhadtrouble9.breathing(breathe)，Itriedmybesttocomforther，tellinghereverythingwouldbeokayandthatweneededtodosomethingtosave10.ourselves(we)．Ialsohelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.第三步把握文本双线和主题ThemeCalmresponse，Neighborhoodmutualassistance，CrisishandlingStoryMountainStagePlotLineEmotionLineBeginningAfterschool，Ifelt1.thedaywasboringanduneventfulasIheadedhome.2.Bored，IndifferentRisingMyelderlyneighbourMrsLimandI3.gottrappedinanold，faultyliftthatstoppedabruptlyatthefifthfloor.Scared，NervousClimaxMrsLimbecamehysterical，butI4.stayedcalm，pressedtheliftbell，andtriedto5.comfortandassisther.6.Fearfulbutdetermined，ResponsibleResolutionI7.pressedthebellwhilecontinuingtocomfortMrsLimandwaitforrescue，hopinghelpwouldarrivesoon.Anxiousbut8.calmandhopefulEnding？？第四步构建续写故事情节根据首句关键信息连环发问Paragraph1：Severalminutespassed，buteq\x(nohelp)came.1．衔接句1：(1)Asnohelparrived，howdidMrsLim’sstatechange?(2)DidItakefurtheractiontocalmherorcallforhelp?2．过渡情节：(1)Whatdetailsshowedthetensioninsidethelift(e.g.，sounds，air，myphysicalfeelings)?(2)DidIthinkofanyotherwaystogethelp?3．衔接句2：Whatsmallsignofhopeappeared?Paragraph2：Bang!Myeq\x(hopes)wereliftedwhenIheardeq\x(thefirefighters)oneq\x(theothersideoftheliftdoor).1．衔接句3：(1)WhatdidthefirefighterssayordofirsttoreassureMrsLimandme?(2)HowdidMrsLimrespondtothefirefighters’arrival?2．过渡情节：(1)Whatdidthefirefightersdotoopentheliftdoor?(2)Whentheliftdoorfinallyopened，whatdidMrsLimandIdofirst?(3)HowdidthefirefightershelpMrsLim(consideringherageandearlierpanic)?续写结尾：Afterbeingrescued，whatdidIsaytoMrsLimorthefirefighters?WhatsmalllessondidItakeawayfromthisexperience?3．主旨升华：Whatthemedoesthestoryconveythroughtherescue?第五步构思佳句润色语言1．时间仿佛凝固了，每一分钟都像一个世纪那么漫长。(使用夸张手法)Timeseemedtofreezeandeveryminutefeltlikeacentury.2．在绝望中，我用颤抖的手指再次拨打了急救电话。Indespair，Icalledtheemergencynumberonceagainwithmytremblingfingers.3．得知应急救援人员正朝我们赶来，我们感到安心了许多。(emergency)Wewerereassuredthatemergencyresponderswererushingtowardsus.4．得知救援队正在赶来，我感觉心中的一块大石头落了地。Learningtherescueteamwasontheway，Ifeltaheavyloadtakenoffmymind.5．既激动又充满希望，我拼命地砸着电梯门，并用尽全力大喊，只为吸引他们的注意。(形容词作状语)Thrilledandhopeful，Ibangedtheliftdoorlikecrazyandscreamedasloudaspossibleinordertoattracttheirattention.6．林太太的声音听起来比之前更虚弱了，对此我非常担心。(“介词＋which”引导定语从句)MrsLimsoundedweakerthanbefore，aboutwhichIwasreallyconcerned.7．鉴于林太太情况危急，她被立即送往医院。(given)GivenMrsLim’sterriblecondition，shewasrushedtohospitalimmediately.8．在向他们为我们所做的一切表达了真诚的谢意后，我回到了自己的公寓，心中满是感恩——这些充满爱心的“守护天使”一直陪伴在我们身边。Havingconveyedmysinceregratitudeforwhattheydidforus，Iwentbacktomyflat，feelingblessedthatthesecaring“guardianangels”werealwaysaroundus.范文赏读Severalminutespassed，butnohelpcame.Timeseemedtofreezeandeveryminutefeltlikeacentury.Withmyhelp，MrsLimmanagedtobreathesmoothlyandgraduallycontrolledheremotions.Indespair，Icalledtheemergencynumberonceagainwithmytremblingfingers.Andwewerereassuredthatemergencyresponderswererushingtowardsus.Learningtherescueteamwasontheway，Ifeltaheavyloadtakenoffmymind.Holdingherhandstightly，IcomfortedMrsLimconstantly，believingthatwewoulddefinitelygetout.However，wecoulddonothingbutwaitforprofessionalaidpatientlyandsilentlyintheliftcar.Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardfirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Thrilledandhopeful，Ibangedtheliftdoorlikecrazyandscreamedasloudaspossibleinordertoattracttheirattention.Anditworked！However，MrsLimsoundedweakerthanbefore，aboutwhichIwasreallyconcerned.Fortunately，theexperiencedandprofessionalrescueexpertssolvedthelife-or-deathcrisisandwewerereleasedfromtheliftcar.GivenMrsLim’sterriblecondition，shewasrushedtohospitalimmediately.Havingconveyedmysinceregratitudeforwhattheydidforus，Iwentbacktomyflat，feelingblessedthatthesecaring“guardianangels”werealwaysaroundus.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。OnesunnySaturdaymorning，Igotreadyforahikewithmyclassmates.Iwassoexcitedaboutitsinceitwasmyfirsttimetogohiking.Iatealightbreakfast—justafewslicesofbreadandanegg.AfterthatIgrabbedmybackpackandhurriedlyranoutofmyhouseandthenmetmyclassmatesattheschoolgate.AtthattimeIdidn’tthinkthattherewouldbeaterribledisasterahead.Thejunglethatwearegoingtowasfarfromourarea.ItsnamewasSalymbiaJungle.Thedrivewas3hourslongbutitwasnotadullrideaswewerealleageraboutthehikeandwehadeachother’scompany.WeappointedaguideandhisnamewasThomas.HesaidthathehadhikedintheSalymbiaJunglelotsoftimes，andhewasfamiliarwiththepathways.Whenwearrived，Thomasallowedustobegin.TherewereawidevarietyofplantswhichIhadneverseenbefore.Thesmellofthejunglewassoearthy.Allofuswereamazedbythebeautyofthesceneryandthesoundofthecreatures.AfterawhilewewerewalkingandthenIlookedatmywristtocheckthetimebutthenIrealizedmywatchhadfallenoff.ThenIwalkedbackwithouttellinganyone.IdidnotworryaboutgettinglostsincetherewereotherpersonsbehindandIthoughtIwouldhavebeenabletocatchupwithmyclassmates.IwentbacksearchingthepathwayandIlosttrackoftimeandlostsightofmyclassmates.IimmediatelyrealizedthatIwasalone.AfterIre