RevisionmoduleA.ppt

1、Better Your Writing,By Kathryn,book,a book,an interesting book,an interesting English book.,I read an interesting English book called Harry Potter yesterday.,an interesting English book called Harry Potter.,I read an interesting English book called Harry Potter at home yesterday.,Brainstorming,How t

2、o write good sentences?,How to write good sentences?,Who does what,when,whom,where,how,why.,In the flower way!,Try to make your sentences long/ beautiful/detailed/ interesting / moving .,environment,protect the environment,We need to protect the environment.,We need to protect the environment from n

3、ow on because it is becoming worse .,We need to protect the environment from now on because it is becoming worse and worse. Therefore, its our duty to do something for it.,We need to protect the environment from now on.,Brainstorming,Try to make your sentences long/ beautiful/detailed/ interesting /

4、 moving .,随着环境问题的日趋严重，我们每个人都有责任保护环境。你校编辑在校报上发出通知，请你仔细阅读并完成一篇习作，字数90-110词。,Writing task,NOTICE As we all know, we have only one earth. However, the environment is becoming worse. As students, what can we do to protect the environment? Tell your good ways to stop polluting the environment. Please writ

5、e a passage to call on more students to protect the environment.,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students, we should do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remembe

6、r not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Writing show,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we should do things to protec

7、t the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Bet

8、ter the layout,Construction,Beginning,Body,Ending,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we can do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste

9、 water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Construction, The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we can do things to protect the environment. We

10、 should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Construction,Better the

11、writing!,1.词汇过于普通,As students,we can try_ _ to do _ many things_ possible in environmental _.,Using impressive words & phrases, As students,we can do things to protect the environment.,句,We _ _ ride bikes, and even_ _ school_ _ taking cars.,句, We should go to school by bike or on foot.,句, we should

12、not throw rubbish around.,we should _ throw rubbish around.,our best,had better,walk to,instead of,never,Charm(美),protection,as as,Charm(美),语言上主要存在句式过于单一、词汇过于普通、语言缺乏亮点等问题。需要进一步美化。,2.句式过于单一,句 作为总起句，缺乏一定的气势。 The environment is becoming worse.,句 作为文章的观点，句子过于简单显然无法表明作者的态度。,还有很多含有“ we should ”的句子，句式明显过于单

13、一，因此也要想办法美化。,With the_ _ our society, the environment is becoming _ _ _nowadays.,It is _ and _ for us_ _ the environment., We need to protect the environment.,句 we should use fewer plastic bags.,The_ _ _ we use, the _ _ we will cause.,development of,worse and worse,necessary important,to protect,few

14、er plastic bags,less pollution,句 we should also save water and electricity.,_ water and electricity _ also important.,Saving,is,Expanding simple sentences!,3.语言缺乏亮点,As the old saying goes,“_ _ _ _ _” So take actions_ _!,在文章中恰当运用复合句，名言、谚语，可以起到画龙点睛的作用。, We should take actions now！,句,Actions speak loud

15、er than words.,right now,Charm(美),Using English sayings,A. No pains, no gains. B. Where there is a will, there is a way. C. Actions speak louder than words. D. Two heads are better than one.,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary an

16、d important for us to protect it.,As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into t

17、he river and never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause.,We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,Writing show,Connect (连),需要分析句子之间、段落之间的关系，在分析的基础上运用衔接手段，添加相应的关联词，使之成为关系

18、紧密的整体。,Make sentences with suitable conjunctions(连词) and expressions,表并列或递进：,and, as well as，besides, not only.but also, whats more, in addition.,表转折或让步：,but, however, although, even if/through.,表因果：,because, so, therefore, as a result.,表目的：,so that, in order that, in order to.,表强调或列举：,in fact, actu

19、ally, for example, such as, .,表时间关系：,first of all, second, third, finally, at last, before, after that, as soon as, .,表总结：,in a word, in short, generally speaking, .,Writing show,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary and important

20、for us to protect it.,As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river and

21、 never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause.,We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,Therefore,In my opinion,i,we,Besides,Whats more,we,At last,t,In short,we,s,Writing

22、show,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students, we should do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rub

23、bish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary and important for us to protect it. As students, we can try our best to do as many

24、things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river and never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less

25、pollution we will cause. We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays.Therefore,it is necessary and important for us to protect it.

26、As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection.In my opinion, we had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Besides, saving water and electricity is also important. Whats more, we should remember not to pour waste water into the river and never throw rubbish around. At last, the fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause. In short, we need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take ac