高三英语讲评开放式书面表达--三步作文法课件.ppt

1、书面表达： 古人云：“笑福开来”。微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证。微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以 请你以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文，题目自拟。 注意： 1. 对所提示内容不要简单翻译，可以适当发挥。 2. 词数150左右。 3. 文中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。,Before writing 审题 审主题： smile (微笑) 审人称： 要求以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文。Smiling is the beginning of harmony. (smiling causes harmony.) smiling reli

2、eves stress 故人称应为第三人称。 2. 审时态：smiling is smiling does 一般现在时,3. 审要点：微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证，微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以 4. 列提纲：三段法模式 第一段：Introduction: 主题句或背景导入或使用hook. 第二段：Body: 具体细节或具体论据既要点陈述。 第三段：Conclusion: 换种说法重申主题或提出倡议、号召。（目前大多数作文的要求是表达自己的观点）,While writing (注意书写) 表达要点：用动宾短语来表达。

3、make us attractive. cause harmony. change our mood. build up the bridge of communication. mean confidence. relieve stress. mean success make us seem successful help stay positive.,2. 扩展成句： Smiling makes us attractive. Smiling changes our mood. Smiling relieves stress. Smiling people appear more conf

4、ident. Smiling helps us stay positive.,连缀成文： 关联词的使用。 复杂句的使用。 高级词汇的使用。 Smiling makes us attractive. We are drawn to people who smile. Smiling changes our mood, as it can trick the body into feeling better. Smiling is infectious. When someone is smiling they lighten up the room, change the moods of ot

5、hers, and make them happier. Smiling relieves stress. It helps to prevent us from looking tired. Smiling people appear more confident, and are more likely to be approached. Smiling helps us stay positive. When we smile our body is sending the rest of us a message that “Life is Good!”,After writing 检

6、查单词拼写、标点符号等。 检查要点是否遗漏。 检查句子结构是否正确。 估计字数是否符合要求。,学生作文中错误的句子： Keep your smiles, you will healthier in the future. Smiling also contributes your selfconfident. Smile also can increase ours confident which has a good effect on ours work. A idiom goes that when you smiles, you will own happiness. Not only

7、 smiling can promote the development of nationships with others, but also it can make ourselves live better than before.,be,and,to,Self-confidence,our confidence,our,An,smile,can smiling,friendship,学生作文中较好的句子： While you are sad, a gentle smile from your friends or even strangers will cheer you up.(王

8、娟) As is known to us all, smiling is the beginning of harmony. （刘晓菲） Since smiling has many advantages, why dont you smile all the time? Laughter is a good medicine. If you really smile, you will live longer and lead a happy life.(吴晓远) For example, it is the beginning of harmony and it is also a goo

9、d way to communicate with others.(刘静),抄阅读文章中的句子; 不知所云.得分为0分,语言素质欠缺;基本功差;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得5分.,卷面不整洁; 涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得12分,语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得15分.,有少许语言错误; 得23分,范文： Why Do We Smile? Everybody likes smiling. But why do we smile? Smiling makes us attractive. We are drawn to people who smile.

10、Smiling changes our mood, as it can trick the body into feeling better. Smiling is infectious. When someone is smiling they lighten up the room, change the moods of others, and make them happier. Smiling relieves stress. It helps to prevent us from looking tired. Smiling people appear more confident, and are more likely to be approached. Smiling helps us stay positive. When we smile our body is sending the rest of us a message that “Life is Good!” So just try smiling our way through the day. Stay away fr