年12月英语六级写作.ppt

2011年12月份英语 六级考试真题（writing）,The Way to Success,Direction: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled The Way to Success by commenting on Abraham Lincolns famous remark, “Give me six hours to chop down a tree, and I will spend the first four sharpening the axe.” you should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.,此次作文操作和以前一样，原因现象类文章，以前的老套路也能套上。但不同在于，考生必须事先看懂考卷中的文字，林肯的那一段话。“工欲善其事，必先利其器。”简言之，良好的准备是成功的基础。如果能在文中体现preparation和success这两个关键词，要点就基本体现完整了。 从上午四级到下午六级，我们可以明确的发现，作文写作方法用老的套路和步骤完全可行。第一段，表述成功和准备的重要性；第二段，分析原因第一、第二、第三；第三段，总结。但如果考生读不懂提纲所示，那么就麻烦了。 所以，重点是看懂题目，并且能把题目解释成一到两个简单的关键词。中文理解力很重要。能理解，行文就是模板。不能理解，模板就是废物。就这次作文来看，四六级作文在借用国际知名考试的出题模式。也再次验证了其科学性。,Everyone tries to achieve success in his career. However, someone firmly attains his goal while another fails. Why? The one continues his cause to the end through long periods of hard struggling, but the other is easily disappointed or stops halfway. （对比提出问题）,范文1,Good preparation, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success (中心观点). A man of solid preparation and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit. He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be. Dr. Sun Yat-sen was such a man. Many of his attempts failed, but he held to his purpose with firmness and finally succeeded in overthrowing the Qing Dynasty(简练的语言概括举例).,Diligence means steadiness in ones work and study. Su Qin stabbed himself in order to keep himself attentive to studies. Marx often worked 15 hours a day. Life is short and we have many things to do. Without diligence no one can achieve anything. I believe that where there is a preparation there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can suffer long years of patient toil and constant efforts (照应上文).,范文2,Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for (排比句). But have you ever considered what success is? (提出问题) Some may hold that success means one has beautiful life, like pretty house, cool cars and great power. Its indeed one way to define success. But to me, success is doing something one really feels like doing (主旨句).,To achieve this kind of success, one has to bear in mind three essential prerequisites, namely knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream (主旨句，新颖). In other words,they are “what” “why” and “how” of success. Its really luckily good for one, especially for the younger generation of today to find their dreams, follow them and in the end, make them come true and become successful (论据). Although its never easy to succeed, progressing with the strong will and diligence towards the right direction, youll be the one (总结).,【作文解析】,这是一篇议论文。作者首先提出问题“what is success?”，但并没有在这个问题上着更多的笔墨，而是直接引出了自己的观点：success is doing something one really feels like doing. 立意较为新颖的地方。随后在第二段对这种成功背后的三种必要条件做出了阐述。整体看，行文流畅，用语规范地道。 本篇亮点： 1. 排比词组或句子的运用： Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for. namely, knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream. 2. bear in mind 3. lie in 4. strong will to pursue your interest ,本文有待提高之处： 1. 文中人称有些混乱。有些使用第二人称代指读者，有些又以第三人称指代，建议统一。 2. 结构上，一般情况下我们建议考生使用典型的“三段式”，即，提出问题、分析问题、解决问题。该作者基本上遵循了这个原则，但第三段更多的却是重复了第二段的中心思想，并没有起到很好的总结作用。如果第三段，作者可以与第一段的“成功定义”相呼应，例如：即使没有这些身外之物，但心灵上的满足，梦想的实现，才是我心中成功的本质。 整体看，文章在语言表达和立意上还不错。但在文章结构上有些松散，有待提高。,范文3,The famous American inventor Thomas Edison once said, “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.” (名言) And here comes our question, what is the way to success? (问题) A strong will and great efforts are the most essential two keys to the door of success (主旨句-中心观点). Why do people fail to achieve their goal? The reason is that most of them give up halfway due to their lack of a strong will once they encounter any difficulty (反面阐述). A man of a strong will always sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be (正面阐述).,Would Thomas Edison be such a great man in history if he had done nothing but possessing a strong will? We are all familiar with his story that he had tried one thousand kinds of materials before he finally made his great bulb light up. Without hard effort, Edison might have been a nobody. Without efforts, no one can succeed(排比句). To sum up, a strong will and great efforts can help one open up the way to success(总结全文,与第一段中心观点呼应). Where there is a will with efforts, there is a way (名言改变-亮点).,【作文解析】,此次六级考试作文的话题依然是老生常谈，即通往成功的道路，相信很多考生对此并不陌生，背过范文的同学写起来肯定也是得心应手。 该范文段落结构清晰，阐释说理也足以让人信服，是一篇不错的作文。开篇作者通过引用爱迪生关于天才的一句名言来引出问题，吸引读者注意，引起读者的思考。紧随其后，作者就开门见山地亮出了自己的观点：只有坚强的意志和不懈的努力才能打开成功的大门。 第二段，作者同样以一个问题来引领全段，引发思考。然后通过对比不成功和最终成功的人的不同表现，来阐释坚强的意志对获得成功的重要作用。,第三段，作者进一步阐释“仅有坚强的意志，没有实在的努力，也能成功吗？”同样是先发问，然后举了爱迪生的事例，来证明答案是否定的。举名人的例子，而非个人的实例来作为文章的论据才更有说服力，这也是这篇作文的高明之处。 最后一段，作者先以第一句话进行了总结，然后为了加强作文结尾的力度，作者还对名言“Where there is a will, there is way”进行了改编，换成了自己的观点，为我所用，这也是本篇范文的一个两点之处。注意，写作文时对名言进行恰当地改编，不仅能体现幽默创新的一面，同样也体现了作者不错的文字驾驭技巧，考官也是很欢迎这样的文章的。,2011年12月大学英语4级作文,本次四级作文探讨的话题是成功与毅力之间的关系，话题不算新，一般考生对此都比较熟悉，所以对考生来说难度不大。写好这篇作文，需要抓住两点，一是紧跟题目要求，即对上述幽默性的话语做出评论，二是在评论的基础上要亮出自己的观点。,范文开头第一句即一针见血地对上述幽默性话语做出总结性概括，即戒烟看似简单实则很难，随后指出该话语本质上是一个悖论，并且以一个“水滴石穿”的俗语来指出困难所在，这句也是本文的一个亮点，体现作者在西方俗语方面丰富的知识储备。 第二段作者则进一步深入分析该话语，指出做某事在短期看来很容易，长期来看，恰恰相反，人们做事的结果也因此总是失败，原因则在最后一句点出：缺乏毅力。 第三段作者进一步给出了自己的观点，告诉大家如何避免陷入这种两难境地：首要条件即需要坚强的意志和长期的坚持。最后再以艾默生的一句名言 “没人能够骗你远离你最终的成功，除非你自己承认失败”来总结全文，切中主题，铿锵有力。,Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will As we have read from above, quitting-smoking seems easy, but in reality it is rarely achieved. There is something provoking and interesting in this paradox, just because sword does not wear the stone as dripping water does. The ab