2019年6月浙江概要写作思路全展示(一线教师下水作文).doc

2019年6月浙江概要写作思路全展示（一线教师下水作文）题目：阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。1 Parents everywhere praise their kids. Jenn Berman, author ofThe A to Z Guide to Raising Happy and Confident Kids, says,Weve gone to the opposite extreme of a few decades agowhen parents tended to be more strict. By giving kids a lotof praise, parents think theyre building their childrensconfidence, when, in fact, it may be just the opposite. Toomuch praise can backfire and, when given in a way thatsinsincere, make kids afraid to try new things or take a risk forfear of not being able to stay on top where their parentspraise has put them.2 Still, dont go too far in the other direction. Not givingenough praise can be just as damaging as giving too muchKids will feel like theyre not good enough or that you dontcare and, as a result, may see no point in trying hard for theiraccomplishments.3 So what is the right amount of praise? Experts say that thequality of praise is more important than the quantity. Ifpraise is sincere and focused on the effort not the outcome,you can give it as often as your child does something thatdeserves a verbal reward. We should especially recognizeour childrens efforts to push themselves and work hard toachieve a goal, says Donahue, author of Parenting WithoutFear: Letting Go of Worry and Focusing on What ReallyMatters. One thing to remember is that its the process notthe end product that matters.4 Your son may not be the best basketball player on his team.But if hes out there every day and playing hard, you shouldpraise his effort regardless of whether his team wins or loses.Praising the effort and not the outcome can also meanrecognizing your child when she has worked hard to cleanthe yard, cook dinner, or finish a book report. But whatever itis, praise should be given on a case-by-case basis and beproportionate(相称的) to the amount of effort your child hasput into It. 本次概要写作文章脉络清晰，一段一要点，属于常规概要写作。以下提供的是小编的读写思路：在主题语境下，注重句与句之间的逻辑分析，注重慢读细读读透，以期写的时候水到渠成。本期侧重如何提取主题句（因为这个是首要的），提供了详细的解析与习作等，仅供参考。在写的环节，省去了同义替换等具体解说，请读者自行体会，最后还附上了Tom、陈圣林与李浩等老师的下水作文。感谢无私分享！由于时间仓促，如有疏漏，敬请批评指正。转载或引用请标明出处：私家英语资源库，谢谢！文章体裁：议论文文章大意：父母对孩子的表扬过多过少都会带来不好的后果，恰当的表扬应着重表扬孩子做事过程中的努力而非结果。每段大意：1. 现在的父母表扬孩子过多，会带来负面的影响，如孩子害怕尝试新事物或者害怕达不到父母的高期待等。2.过少的表扬也是有害的，会让孩子觉得自己不好，没有得到父母的关心或觉得自己的努力没有意义。3. 正确的方式应该是注重赞美的质量而不是数量，注重孩子努力的过程而非结果 。4.表扬要适当，要根据实际情况。写作的步骤与策略：第一步：通读全文通读全文，关注到文章的体裁；关注到不断反复出现的词：praise ，（主题）关注到文章的谋篇：先讲表扬过多不好，再讲表扬过少也不好，然后提出怎样表扬才算好，最后来一个总结。第二步：逐句逐段解读并用自己的话表达第一段Parents everywhere praise their kids. Jenn Berman, author ofThe A to Z Guide to Raising Happy and Confident Kids, says,“Weve gone to the opposite extreme of a few decades agowhen parents tended to be more strict. By giving kids a lotof praise, parents think theyre building their childrensconfidence, when, in fact, it may be just the opposite. Toomuch praise can backfire（事与愿违） and, when given in a way thatsinsincere, make kids afraid to try new things or take a risk forfear of not being able to stay on top where their parentspraise has put them.阅读策略：看完每个段落，问自己：这一段讲了什么呢？传递了什么主要信息，统领的信息是什么，支撑信息是哪些？然后暂定主题句，在之后的阅读中不断理解与修正（以下每一个段落都这样问问自己）逐句解析：第一句话表示了存在的社会现状：Parents everywhere praise their kids.第二句话：Jenn Berman提出了以前父母对孩子要求过于严格，但现在走到了反面。对于第一句传达的信息进行了修正。Jenn Berman, author of The A to Z Guide to Raising Happy and Confident Kids, says, “ Weve gone to the opposite extreme of a few decades ago when parents tended to be more strict. 第三句话给出了作者的观点：父母认为给孩子很多表扬是构建他们的自信，事实上可能情况相反: By giving kids a lot of praise, parents think theyre building their childrens confidence, when, in fact, it may be just the opposite.第四句话: 是对第三句话中the opposite的具体解析。为何情况相反呢？作者给出了假设与说明，作为支撑信息: Too much praise can backfire（事与愿违） and, when given in a way thats insincere, make kids afraid to try new things or take a risk for fear of not being able to stay on top where their parents praise has put them.由此，第一句与第二句可以看作是导入：父母到处表扬孩子，Jenn Berman提出了以前父母对孩子要求过于严格，但现在走到了反面。第三句作者提出了自己的观点：父母认为给孩子很多表扬是构建他们的自信，事实上可能情况相反。第四句对第三句再解释。太多的表扬会让孩子由于害怕不能与表扬相匹配，不敢尝试新事物。因此，暂定主题句第三句，可统领其他几句。自己的话表达：(叙述角度的不同会带来细微的差别)Nowadays, parents praise children too much, which may result in childrens lack of confidence in challenging.Parents believe praising can help boost childrens confidence while too much praise may result in opposite effects.第二段：2 Still, dont go too far in the other direction. Not givingenough praise can be just as damaging as giving too much.Kids will feel like theyre not good enough or that you dontcare and, as a result, may see no point in trying hard for theiraccomplishments.第一句：不要走另一个极端。Still, dont go too far in the other direction.第二句：不给足够的表扬与给的表扬太多同样有害。Not givingenough praise can be just as damaging as giving too much.第三句：孩子会认为他们不够优秀或者你不关心他们，他们看不到努力获取成就的意义。Kids will feel like theyre not good enough or that you dontcare and, as a result, may see no point in trying hard for theiraccomplishments.第一句给出观点，不要走另一个极端：表扬太少。第二句提出作者观点，表扬太少有害。第三句作为第二句的解释，说明具体是怎样的害处。自己的话表达：Kids may feel discouraged when not given enough praise.The shortage of praising will trigger negative effects.Inadequate praise can discourage them , and their endeavor is meaningless.第三段：3 So what is the right amount of praise? Experts say that thequality of praise is more important than the quantity. Ifpraise is sincere and focused on the effort not the outcome,you can give it as often as your child does something thatdeserves a verbal reward. We should especially recognizeour childrens efforts to push themselves and work hard toachieve a goal, says Donahue, author of Parenting WithoutFear: Letting Go of Worry and Focusing on What ReallyMatters. One thing to remember is that its the process notthe end product that matters.第一句：怎样的表扬才是合适的？So what is the right amount of praise?第二句：专家们说表扬的质量比数量更重要。Experts say that the quality of praise is more important than the quantity.第三句：假如表扬是真诚的，关注于努力而不是结果，在孩子做了值得表扬的事情的时候尽可能多地表扬。If praise is sincere and focused on the effort not the outcome,you can give it as often as your child does something thatdeserves a verbal reward.第四句：Donahue说，我们应该认可孩子尽力去达到目标所付出的努力。是过程而不是结果真正要紧。recognize our childrens efforts to push themselves and work hard to achieve a goal； its the process not the end product that matters.自己的话表达：According to experts, it is the quality of praise rather than quantity that matters, which shows parents sincerity and concentration on process instead of focusing on the outcome.Experts say the quality of praise outweighs the quantity, which means what should be stressed are the process and effort.第四段：4 Your son may not be the best basketball player on his team.But if hes out there every day and playing hard, you shouldpraise his effort regardless of whether his team wins or loses.Praising the effort and not the outcome can also meanrecognizing your child when she has worked hard to cleanthe yard, cook dinner, or finish a book report. But whatever itis, praise should be given on a case-by-case basis and beproportionate(相称的) to the amount of effort your child hasput into It.第一句：你儿子可能不是队里最好的篮球运动员。Your son may not be the best basketball player on his team.第二句：但是假如他每天在外打球很努力，不管他的团队输还是赢，都应该表扬他的努力。But if hes out there every day and playing hard, you should praise his effort regardless of whether his team wins or loses.第三句：表扬努力的过程而不是结果也意味着当他们在努力地清扫庭院、烧饭菜完成读书笔记的时候你都是认可你的孩子的。Praising the effort and not the outcome can also mean recognizing your child when she has worked hard to clean the yard, cook dinner, or finish a book report.第四句：不管是什么，表扬应该基于个案，与孩子投入的努力相称。But whatever it is, praise should be given on a case-by-case basis and be proportionate(相称的) to the amount of effort your child hasput into It.第一第二第三句的举例都为了表达我们要表扬孩子努力的过程而不是结果。第四句提出父母要怎样的表扬。自己的话表达：Parents are expected to praise kids on a reasonable basis in accordance with kids amount of effort.Praise is supposed to be in line with actual cases and proportional efforts your child has made.第三步:整合成文（请注意衔接等）下水作文一：Tom老师Parents believe praising can help boost childrens confidence while too much praise may result in opposite effects.However, inadequate praise can discourage them , and their endeavor is meaningless.According to experts, it is the quality of praise rather than quantity that matters, which shows parents sincerity and concentration on process instead of focusing on the outcome.In fact, praise is supposed to be in line with actual cases and proportional efforts the children have made. 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