书面表达练习2.ppt

PolishupYourcomposition,你的很多同学一直为他们的父母总是不经允许就翻看他们的日记而感到苦恼。请你根据以下提示，用英语给校英语报写一篇文章，帮助同学们解决这个苦恼。,Teachingaim:Improvestudentsabilityofwritingbypolishingupthesentences.,1.Parentssearchfortheirchildrensdiarieswithoutallowed.2.Theydontwanttoothersknowthem.3.Thereasonwhyparentsdoitproperlybecausetheywanttoknowwhetherwearehappyandcomfortableinschool.4.Theirparentsdothatcanmaketheirchildrennotbelievethem.5.Parentslookchildrensdiariesisalsoharmful.6.Ofcourse,harmisnotavoided.,词汇误用,句式错用,双谓语,汉式英语,Westudentsworryisthatparentsreadourdiarieswhentheyarenotallowedtodothis.Manyreasonsleadtoparentsdoingthis.Theyreadourdiariestounderstandusbetter.Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsinthediary,theycanhelpussolvemanytroublesindailylife.weshouldtakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,weshouldtalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,parentsshouldgainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,15-16,阅读评分(节选某同学首尾部分),高考英语作文第五档(很好)要求:(21-25分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。目的。5.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构(complexsentencestructures)或较高级词汇(advancedwords)所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。,Tip1Usingtheadvancedwords,Westudentsworryisthatparentsreadourdiarieswhentheyarenotallowedtodothis.Manyreasonsleadtoparentsdoingthis.Theyreadourdiariestounderstandusbetter.Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsinthediary,theycanhelpussolvemanytroublesindailylife.,Westudentsworryisthatparentslookthroughourdiarieswithoutpermission.Therearemanyreasonsleadingtoparentsdoingthis.Theyreadourdiariesforthepurposeofunderstandingusbetter.Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistustosolvemanytroublesindailylife.,weshouldtakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,weshouldtalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,parentsshouldgainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,Wedbettertakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,wearesupposedtotalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,theyareadvisedtogainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,阅读再评Westudentsworryisthatparentslookthroughourdiarieswithoutpermission.Manyreasonsleadtoparentsdoingthis.Theyreadourdiariesforthepurposeofunderstandingusbetter.Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistustosolvemanytroublesindailylife.,Wedbettertakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,wearesupposedtotalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,theyareadvisedtogainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,18-19,Tip2Usingcomplexsentencestructures(使用V.+ing形式、名词性从句、状语从句、定语从句、被动语态),Westudentsworryisthatparentslookthroughourdiarieswithoutpermission.,WhatmakesstudentsfeelworriedisthatParentslookthroughstudentsdiarieswithoutpermission,makingthemfeelworried./whichmakesthemfeelworried.,主语从句、定语从句、分词作状语,Manyreasonsleadtoparentsdoingthis.,ThereasonswhyparentsdosoarethatTherearemanygoodreasonsaccountingforparentsbehavior.ItismanyreasonsthatleadtoManygoodreasonscanaccountforparentsbehavior.,(Therebe、定语、表语从句、itisthat),Theyreadourdiariesforthepurposeofunderstandingusbetter.(从句、),Thereasonwhytheyreadourdiariesisthattheycanunderstandusbetter.Withtheintensionofunderstandingusbetter,theycanthelplookingthroughourdiaries.,Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistustosolvemanytroublesindailylife.,Havingknownourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistusinsolving/assistustosolvemany,Westudentsworryisthatparentsreadourdiarieswhentheyarenotallowedtodothis.Therearemanyreasonsleadingtoparentsdoingthis.Theyreadourdiariestounderstandusbetter.Aftertheyknowourthoughtsandfeelingsinthediary,theycanhelpussolvemanytroublesindailylife.,WhatmakesstudentsfeelworriedisthatParentslookthroughstudentsdiarieswithoutpermission.Therearemanyreasonsaccountingforthisbehavior.Withtheintensionofunderstandingusbetter,theycanthelplookingthroughourdiaries.Havingknownourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistusinsolving/assistustosolvemanytroublesindailylife.,对比,Wedbettertakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,wearesupposedtotalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,theyareadvisedtogainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,是某人该做某事的时候了2.做是很有必要的3.状语从句或省略形式4.分词作状语5.倒装结构,Discussandtrytorewritethepassageusingthegiveninformationasmuchaspossible,Wedbettertakemanymeasurestosolvetheproblem.Forus,wearesupposedtotalkwithourparentsaboutourthoughts.Forparents,theyareadvisedtogainchildrenspermissiontoreadthediaries.Itisthebestwaytoimproverelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,Itshightimethatwetookmeasurestosolvetheproblem.Ononehand,itisnecessaryforustohaveagoodcommunicationwithourparents,makingthemknowourthoughtsandfeelings.Ontheotherhand,forparents,theyarenotadvised/supposedtolookthroughchildrensdiariesunlesspermitted.Onlyinthiswaycanweimprovetherelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,终极打分：WhatmakesstudentsfeelworriedisthatParentslookthroughstudentsdiarieswithoutpermission.Therearemanyreasonsaccountingforthisbehavior.Withtheintensionofunderstandingusbetter,theycanthelplookingthroughourdiaries.Havingknownourthoughtsandfeelingsfromthediary,theycanassistusinsolving/assistustosolvemanytroublesindailylife,Itshightimethatwetookmeasurestosolvetheproblem.Ononehand,itisnecessaryforustohaveagoodcommunicationwithourparents,makingthemknowourthoughtsandfeelings.Ontheotherhand,forparents,theyarenotadvised/supposedtolookthroughchildrensdiariesunlesspermitted.Onlyinthiswaycanweimprovetherelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren.,22-23,Conclusion:1.Usingtheadvancedwordsandphrases2.Usingcomplexsentencestructures（使用V.+ing形式、名词性从句、状语从句、定语从句、被动语态）,Usingthetwotipstocompletethesecondparagraph父母如此做的危害侵犯（invade）我们的隐私（privacy）,伤害我们的情感2.导致关系恶劣，代沟加深,Practicemakesperfect,Suggestedexpressions:Itnotonlyinvadesourprivacy,butalsohurtsourfeelingsaswethinkourparentsdonttrustusanymore,whichwillresultinabadrelationshipandwiden/deepenthegenerationgapbetweenourparentsandus.,Asteenagers,wemaycomeacrossvarioustroublesintheprocessofgrowingup.WhatmakesstudentsfeelworriedisthatParentslookthroughstudentsdiarieswithoutpermission.Therearemanyreasonsaccountingforthisbehavior.Withtheintensionofunderstandingusbetter,theycanthelplookingthroughourdiaries.Havingknownourthoughtsandfeeli