2020届高考英语 考前冲刺精品复习讲义写作（二十一） 北师大版

2020;2020届高考英语考前冲刺精品复习讲义（北师大版）：写作（二十一）据报道，报考技校(vocational school)的人数比往年有显著的增长。试从社会需求、人才观念、待遇报酬等方面分析这一现象。学生习作外教批改It is reported that the number of students who enter1 are entering for vocational schools is larger than ever before.What has2 caused it this3 ?The main three reasons are as follows：4First，as great changes have taken place in our country since the entrance to WTO，more and more specialized personnel are needed.So5 the development of vocational school is very_fast_and_the_quality_of_it_has_increased_ a_lot6 vocational schools have developed quickly and training has increased in quality.Second，as the “knowledge economy” is rapidly taking shape，we need to learn modern science and technology，or we wont survive in the society.The_last Last but not least，7 the income of a8 specialized personnel is not bad.Thanks to the shortage of such personnel in our country，they can get_well_paid9 instead10 command a better salary.Because_of11 With such good conditions，why not being12 a_specialized_personnel learn a specialized skill?旁批1进行时强调动作还在继续。而一般现在时指一种习惯，这里使用不合适。2这里用现在完成时表示这种趋势现在仍然存在。3this把这个句子与前面的观点联系起来。4如果文章的思路和框架清晰，就不必这样表达。5要使文章更完美，可以用As a result。6这句写得很啰嗦，读起来也很别扭。参见改写后的句子。7正确的说法是last but not least，last前不要加the。8personnel是复数名词，不可与a连用。9口语中可以说某人can get well paid，书面语这样写就不太正式。参见改写后的句子。10没有引入另一种情况，所以没有必要说instead。11because of用来表示原因，而这里不是谈原因。12正确的句型是why not do something，动词要用原形。这是一篇较好的作文。论述有力，论据充分。然而作文中出现了多处错误，有些句子写得很不恰当，作文分数也因此降低了。改进建议：正确使用标点符号。不需要句号的地方，不要用句号。另外，要清楚什么时候该用现在进行时而不用一般现在时。高分作文秘诀之十四：尽量少使用直接引语，而多使用间接引语。例如：Instead of (不要说：)I believe that reading books is a waste of time because my Uncle Tom says so.He always tells me，“Reading books is a waste of time.”Use (要说：)My Uncle Tom often tells me that reading books is a waste of time.I believe that there is some truth in this.Instead of (不要说：)People say，“Internet cafs should be banned.”Use (要说：)People believe that Internet cafs should be banned.Instead of (不要说：)A person said to me，“Dont forget to bring enough food and water.”Use (要说：)I was reminded to bring enough food and water.近期，世界范围内粮食短缺，价格上涨。在你校开展的研究性学习中，你们小组以“The World Food Crisis”这一主题进行研究，现在请你代表你们小组用英语向全体同学简要介绍你们的研究成果。词数120左右。参考词汇：谷物产量grain output；城市化urbanization；生物燃料biofuel_参考范文：Hello，everyone!Now let me tell you something about our research project The World Food Crisis on behalf of our group.As we know，food shortage has hit many countries and even caused social unrest in some areas.But what has caused the current world food crisis？Firstly，annual world grain output had declined because of climate changes.Secondly，lots of farmland has given way to factories and buildings due to the rapid development of industry and urbanization.Besides，faced with the rising energy prices，some people use grain for biofuel，which has worsened the severe situation.How can we deal with the problem？On the one hand，we should focus on the environmental protection and improve the ecology.On the other hand，stri