广东省深圳市宝安区2020高考英语二轮复习 书面表达学生观摩选编（4）

学生观察和选择的书面表达(4)第一节(15分)假设红星中学2年级(1)班的学生李华。下个月英国Saint Gorge High School的交换生会来你学校学习。学校招聘接待员。请根据以下信息提交申请书，并说明原因。1.在家住宿条件好。英语听说能力强。理解英国人的文化习俗。注意：1 .字数在50个以上。为了使写作连贯，可以适当地添加细节。开头和结尾不包含在总字数中。Dear Sir or Madam，Yours，李华第一节应用写作(15分)一、评分原则：1.这个问题共分为15分，根据4等级划分。2.评分时，首先根据文章的内容和语言质量决定其等级，然后根据该等级的要求决定或调整等级，然后分发。3.评估时要考虑的事项：内容是否完整、条理是否清晰、沟通是否恰当、语言是否规范。4.拼写、标点或书写影响内容表达时，应根据影响程度进行考虑。允许使用英语、美国拼写和词汇。5.字数少于50，总分减去1分。二、范围和要求的各个等级：第一个文件完全完成了试题规定的任务。内容完整，条理分明。适当的沟通，充分考虑沟通对象的需要的表达；体现强大的语言使用能力。完全达到了预定的写作目的。13分-15分第二个文件考试题规定的任务基本完成了。内容、烹饪和沟通等基本满足要求。使用的语法和词汇基本符合工作要求。语法或单词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本上达到了预定的写作目的。9点-12点第三个文件考试题规定的任务没有正确完成。使用的词汇有限，语法或单词的错误影响对所写内容的理解，不是可以清楚地传达信息。4点-8点第四个文件考试题没有完成规定的任务。写了少量相关信息。语法或单词方面有很多错误，严重影响了对写作内容的理解。1点-3点零点没有传达任何信息。写的内容与要求无关。三、Possible versionsPossible version 1Dear Sir or Madam，I would like to host a student from saint George high school .my house is big enough to give him a room to live in。also，I am good at English listening and speaking . I have stud a lot about British culture and customs . I can create a welcomeing at mosphere for himThank you！Yours，李华(65 words)Possible version 2Dear Sir or Madam，I feel very exited to know that the exchange students from saint gorge high school will come and study at our school .I would like to be a host family。the reasons are as followws :First，My home is big with three bedroom and two bathrooms . this makes it possible for me to provide the exchange student with good living accommodedI would be able to communicate with the student easily。in addition，I have a good understanding of British customs and culture，allowing us to have a lot to talk about。because of the above mentioned reasons I am applying to be a host family。I sincerely hope I will be granted this great opportunity。Thank you very much！Yours，李华(136 words)基本写作1 - 2题研究探讨难句的表达谈谈基础作文的解题方法吧。基础作文的难点是难句的表现。每个题目的中文内容都有一些与英语表达略有不同，甚至很不同的表达形式。假设你是李华，按照你的学校清洁工计划，给美国的笔友彼得用英语写信，介绍这个计划。信的主要内容如下：写入要求1.必须包括所有给定的信息，开头和结尾已经给定，但不包括全部句子数；要构成连贯的散文，必须使用5个句子。德尔彼得，I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program。.welcome to our school if you have any chance。Yours，李华学生样本德尔彼得，I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program。in order to make our school beautful and clean the air，We plan to have more trees in our school now。in order to get good places to study and live，we have many plans。第一次，-是的，是的，最后一次的计划是.-是的-是的. 是的-是的.是-是-是-是-是-是.是吗？we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers。welcome to our school if you have any chance。Yours，李华让我们看看学生标本是如何改进的。句：“in order to make our school beautful and clean the air”更生硬，to make our school beautful to make our school more beautiful；在“we plan to have more trees in our school now”中，最好将have替换为plant。句子：不处理表格里的内容，是关门，也占据了后面信息的位置。句：“we plan to build a botanical garden and let studens visit and use。”“的火线部分没有“为同学们访问、练习”的意思。句子：“we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study。”必须从中删除up，并在study后添加in . second，we plan to build a small garden in which we can take a rest and do some reading。换成。句子：“we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers”必须将的effect更改为encourage。另外，这篇文章的主语都是web，虽然可以最小化英语表达失误，但相对单调，会影响高分。但是，只要把句子形式改为被动语态，就能得到好的结果。见扇门德尔彼得，I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program。the purposes of the program are To make our school more beautful，To make the air cleaner and fresher，and To turn our school into a better placeaccording to the program，will plant different kinds of trees，Flowers and grass in and around our school . a botanical garden will be built for usbesides，We are to build a small garden in which We can do some reading and take a rest。whats more、some statues of famous people will be set up to encourage us to work harter。welcome to our school if you have any chance。Yours，李华由于主语的灵活变化，摆脱了读文章的生硬状态，文章很烦。探讨点2文章的质量我们经常说某个句子是正统的，因为这个句子反映了英语民族的思维方式。在基础作文中要经常使用这种正统的文章。例子请比较以下句子。1.Clinton had wanted to collect a heavy tax on the middle class。修改后：a heavy tax on the middle class was Clinton s idea。2.the people who listen to the radio have a habit of getting up early，but those who watch TV usually go to bed late。修改后：radio listeners are early bird，but TV viewers are usually night ows。3.after the American farmers used the industrial methods into agriculture，they made great progress in agriculture。修改后：the use of industrial methods was the reason for America s great progress in agriculture。解说点第一句话首先表明信息的焦点是“对中产阶级征收重税”，然后说：“这是克林顿想做的事情。”句子的was是“曾经”的意思。第二句使用构词和修辞手法。The people who listen to the radio被合成词radio listeners取代，those who watch TV被合成词TV viewers取代，干净利落。Have a habit of getting up early读起来有点迟钝。用修辞法把早起的人比作early birds，把晚睡的人比作nightows，会很无聊。第三句使用名词化技术。名词化是把英语的动词变成名词，通过其他单词表示名词之