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Howtoimproveyourcomposition?,单词替换升级(用词考究)1.Hearingthatyoufeelnervouswheneveryouretakinganyimportantexam,Iamworried.（worried升级成concerned）2.Youcouldhelpthemwithdinner.(help升级成assist)3.Atpresent,therearemanyforeignerslearningChinese.(many升级成anumberof),4.Accordingtoourtradition,youshouldarriveearly.Accordingtoourtradition,youaresupposedtoarriveearly.5.Suddenly,Ihadanidea.Suddenly,Icameupwithanidea.,6.AlwaysrememberthatyourmaintaskistogetyourEnglishimproved.(remember升级成bearinmind)7.Iwouldbeverygratefulifyoucouldacceptmyinvitation.(very升级成morethan)8.ImdelightedtoknowthatyouhavedecidedtocometoChina.(decided升级成madeupyourmind),原则:初中词汇换成高中词汇单词换成短语,改写句式,焕然一新1.适度留白省略IfIamgiventhechance,Iwouldmakeeveryefforttodomyjobandoffermybestservice.If(Iam)giventhechance,Iwouldmakeeveryefforttodomyjobandoffermybestservice.2.突出重点强调句型Gettingenoughsleepcanmakeyouenergetic.Itisgettingenoughsleepthatcanmakeyouenergetic.,3.清新脱俗副词+句子，IhopeIcanbeacceptedasamemberofyourgroup.Hopefully,Icanbeacceptedasamemberofyourgroup.4.身临其境形容词作伴随状语，Theywerehungryandtired.Theyfellasleepquickly.Hungryandtired,theyfellasleepquickly.,5.跃然纸上非谓语Imexcitedaboutyourcoming,soIcanhardlywaittogiveyoumyrecommendation.Excitedaboutyourcoming,Icanhardlywaittogiveyoumyrecommendation.,6.大牌驾到非限制性定语从句(定语从句)Chinaissparingnoeffortstoprotecttraditionalculture.Thatishighlythoughtof.Chinaissparingnoeffortstoprotecttraditionalculture,whichishighlythoughtof.,7轻装上阵分词简化IwillneverforgettheexperienceofbeingavolunteerfortheNationalGamesthatwasheldinourcity.IwillneverforgettheexperienceofbeingavolunteerfortheNationalGames(thatwas)heldinourcity.8.独具一格倒装句式，Youcanpasstheexamonlyinthisway.Onlyinthiswaycanyoupasstheexam.,9.活灵活现现在分词做结果状语Shestruggledtocreateherownstyleofpainting,whichmakesherpaintingmoreattractive.Shestruggledtocreateherownstyleofpainting,makingherpaintingmoreattractive.10.叹为观止感叹句Theyareamazinghouseholds.Whatamazinghouseholdstheyare!,11.洋韵洋味IT句型(Itis+过去分词+that)Airpollutionisrecognizedtohavebecomeoneofthemostseriousproblems.Itisrecognizedthatairpollutionhasbecomeoneofthemostseriousproblems.12.娓娓道来同位语从句Itisacommonphenomenon.Manystudentsareaddictedtocellphones.Itisacommonphenomenonthatmanystudentsareaddictedtocellphones.,13.一反常态被动语态Wewillholdthesportsmeetingnextweek.Thesportsmeetingwillbeheldnextweek.14.如影随形with结构Thewomanismovedandtearsarerunningonhercheeks.Thewomanismovedwithtearsrunningonhercheeks.,15.柳暗花明be+of+名词ReadingthelocalpapersandwatchingTVprogrammeswillbebeneficialtoyou.ReadingthelocalpapersandwatchingTVprogrammeswillbeofbenefittoyou.,16.珠光宝气引经据典、名言谚语常言道,书山有路勤为径,苦海无涯苦作舟Asaproverbsays,thereisnoroyalroadtolearning.常言道,有志者事竟成Justasaproverbgoes,wherethereiswill,thereisaway.常言道,礼轻情意重(18年高考)Justasanoldproverbsays,thepresentislittleinsizebutrichinmeaning.常言道,入乡随俗(18年高考)Justasanoldsayinggoes,doinRomeastheRomansdo.,Practicemakesperfect.,前10题、6分钟可在原句中直接修改,如何增加细节,避免无话可说(2017高考真题)假定你是李华,正在教你的英国朋友Leslie学习汉语。请你写封邮件告知下次上课的计划。内容包括1.时间和地点2.内容:学习唐诗3课前准备:简要了解唐朝的历史IamLiHua.WewillhaveclassnextFridayintheclassroom.WewilllearnTangpoems.YoudbetterhaveabriefunderstandingofTangpoemsbeforeclass。,1.时间地点Thelessonwillbegivenat9oclockinthemorningonJune10thinclassroom201ofthethirdteachingbuilding.注意:越具体越好/时间地点不要乱(不分先后)、不宜过于简单注意介词平时积累好作文干货,2.内容:学习唐诗WearegoingtolearnTangPoemsnextclass.Withcatchyrhymeandbeautifulimagery,TangpoemsareeasytoreciteandarereallysuitableforChinesebeginners.Asanindispensibleaspectofourbrilliantculture,Tangpoemsenjoygreatpopularityinourdailylife.Therefore,aknowledgeofTangpoemsisamustforyoutotastethebeautyofChineselanguage.填充:唐诗和学习汉语的关系,3.课前准备:简要了解唐朝的历史TangpoemsaresetinTangDynasty.TheyarethereflectionofthehistoryofTangDynasty.ThehistoryofTangDynastyhasadeepinfluenceonTangPoems.AbriefunderstandingofhistoryofTangDynastybeforeClasswillhelpyoubetterlearnTangpoemswell.填充:由学习唐诗自然而然过渡到简要了解唐朝历史(两者相互影响)注意:是唐朝历史不是唐朝文化,如何增加细节,避免无话可说(2018高考真题)假定你是李华,你的新西兰朋友Terry将去中国朋友家做客,发邮件向你询问有关习俗。请你回复邮件,内容包括:1.到达时间2.合适的礼物3.餐桌礼仪,1.到达时间AccordingtoourtraditionalChinesecustoms,youhadbetterarrivethereabitearlierthantheappointedtimeforfearthattheywaitforyouwithanxiety.Foronething,youcouldassistthemwithdinner.Foranother,itisagoodopportunityforyoutotrulyexperiencetraditionalChineseculture.注意审题:到达时间并非你到达的具体时间。填充内容:提前到达的好处、意义。(递进)段落结构:主题句+支撑句,2.合适的礼物Istronglysuggestthatyoutakesomegiftswhichneednttobeexpensivebutspecialtothehost.Thegiftisnothingmuch,butitisthethoughtthatcounts.Justasanoldproverbsays,thepresentislittleinsizebutrichinmeaning.ItisdefinitelyagoodideatobringasouvenirormascotfromNewZealand.填充内容:礼物的类型、意义、礼物得体(新西兰的纪念品)提醒:视作文行数决定、提前草稿、注意取舍,3.餐桌礼仪Asfortablemanners,thereisafamousproverb“doinRomeastheRomansdo”.Firstandforemost,youdbetterlearnhowtousechopsticksproperly.Notuntiltheseniorstartusingchopstickscanyoubeginyoureating.Whatsmore,itisalsoacommongreetingwayforChinesehoststoputfoodontothebowlsoftheirguests.Lastbutnotleast,whilehavingmeals,Chinesepeopleareaccustomedtotalkingandlaughingloudlyaswellasfrequentlytoshowtheirwarmhospitality.Knowingsometablemannersabovewillhelpyouavoidculturalmisunderstandingandembarrassment.Hopeyouhaveawonderfulmeal.,填充内容:餐桌礼仪具体化(最好三点)、文章结尾处总结升华(中西方文化差异)、表达愿景(用餐愉快)注意连接词的使用(行文连贯),出彩微写作假定你是李华，你的新西兰朋友Terry发邮件向你询问如何学好汉语的建议。请你就“如何学好汉语”给他回复一封邮件。(最好三点、至少5句话)1.Twominutesfordiscussion2.Tenminutesforwriting,Tobeginwith,itisagoodideatomakemoreChinesefriendsinyourdailylife,withwhomyoucanpractiseyourspokenChinese.Whatsmore,italsohelpstolistentoChinesesongsandwatc