英语作文评析

1、 Directions:Directions: Youre allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will by commenting on the humorous saying, Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world. Ive done it hundreds of time. Youd write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.Out

2、lines:1.1.坚强的意志是成功的重要保证。坚强的意志是成功的重要保证。2.2.意志坚定的人才能完成伟大的使命意志坚定的人才能完成伟大的使命 3.3.学生也是这样，不刻苦学习，终究不会成为有用学生也是这样，不刻苦学习，终究不会成为有用之才之才 题目分析题目分析：这篇文章，需要抓住两点，一是紧跟题目要求，这篇文章，需要抓住两点，一是紧跟题目要求，即对上述幽默性的话题做出评论，二是在评论的基础上亮出即对上述幽默性的话题做出评论，二是在评论的基础上亮出自己的观点自己的观点 As we have read from above, quitting-smoking seems easy, but i

3、n reality it is rarely achieved. There is something provoking and interesting in this paradox, just because sword does not wear the stone as dripping water does. 范文开头第一句即一针见血范文开头第一句即一针见血地对上述幽默性话语做出总结地对上述幽默性话语做出总结性概括，即戒烟看似简单实则性概括，即戒烟看似简单实则很难，随后指出该话语本质上很难，随后指出该话语本质上是一个悖论，并且以一个是一个悖论，并且以一个“水水滴石穿滴石穿”的俗语来

4、指出困难所的俗语来指出困难所在，这句也是本文的一个亮点，在，这句也是本文的一个亮点，体现作者在西方俗语方面丰富体现作者在西方俗语方面丰富的知识储备。的知识储备。 provoking：刺激的；令刺激的；令人生气的，激怒的人生气的，激怒的 paradox悖论，自相矛盾的悖论，自相矛盾的人或事人或事 sword刀剑；武力战争刀剑；武力战争 The ability to do something over and over again in a short time may imply its easiness, but in a long run, a lifetime maybe, things

5、turn out to be quite the opposite. Also, as is often the case, one may have obtained all the tools and opportunities to achieve something, but in the end they still fail due to the will shortage. 第二段作者则进一步深入分析该第二段作者则进一步深入分析该话语，指出做某事在短期看来很容话语，指出做某事在短期看来很容易，长期来看，恰恰相反，人们做易，长期来看，恰恰相反，人们做事的结果也因此总是失败，原因则事

6、的结果也因此总是失败，原因则在最后一句点出：缺乏毅力。在最后一句点出：缺乏毅力。 obtain获得，流行获得，流行 获得获得 So how could we avoid the dilemma? Here is the prime condition of success: will and perseverance. Concentrate your energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you are engaged, hang on in there and be patient, for, as Em

7、erson put it, no one can cheat you out of your ultimate success but yourself. 第三段作者进一步给出了自己的第三段作者进一步给出了自己的观点，告诉大家如何避免陷入这种观点，告诉大家如何避免陷入这种两难境地：首要条件即需要坚强的两难境地：首要条件即需要坚强的意志和长期的坚持。最后再以艾默意志和长期的坚持。最后再以艾默生的一句名言生的一句名言“没人能够骗你远离没人能够骗你远离你最终的成功，除非你自己承认失你最终的成功，除非你自己承认失败败”来总结全文，切中主题，铿锵来总结全文，切中主题，铿锵有力。有力。 dilemma困境

8、，进退两难困境，进退两难 exclusive唯一的；专有的；唯一的；专有的；排他的排他的 engage吸引，占用；使参加；吸引，占用；使参加；雇佣；使订婚；预定雇佣；使订婚；预定 从事；答应；保证；从事；答应；保证；交战交战 文章亮点分析文章亮点分析1.词汇词汇高级词汇的使用：高级词汇的使用：provoking provoking ， paradox,paradox, perseverance perseverance ，exclusively engaged exclusively engaged 等等近义词的转换近义词的转换: :different = oppositedifferent

9、= opposite ( (Things turn out to be quite the opposite. ) realize,success = achieverealize,success = achieve (but in reality it is rarely achieved. ) have = obtainedhave = obtained (One may have obtained all the tools ) important = primeimportant = prime (Here is the prime condition of success) only

10、 = exclusivelyonly = exclusively interesting = engagedinteresting = engaged (Concentrate your energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you are engaged) final = ultimatefinal = ultimate （ultimate success）2.词组积累词组积累:over and over again （一次又一次）（一次又一次） imply its easiness（很容易）（很容易） i

11、n a long run （长期来看）（长期来看） turn out to be（结果是）（结果是） hang on （坚持下去，不挂断，握住不放）（坚持下去，不挂断，握住不放）连接词的使用：连接词的使用： Also,as is often the caseAlso,as is often the case，but,sobut,so 等等写作时还可以用到其他连接词：写作时还可以用到其他连接词： after all 毕毕竟竟 in fact/ as a matter of fact 事事实实上上 in addition 另外另外 besides/ whats more 另外另外 in other

12、 words 换换句句话说话说 for instance 例如例如 first of all 第一第一 generally speaking 一般地一般地说说 on the whole 总总的的说来说来 It is well understood that There goes a saying that ./ As the saying goes, for one thing for another/ also 首先首先其次其次 to begin with/ to start with 首先首先; 第一第一 in general 一般一般来说来说 on the one hand on the

13、 other hand 一方面一方面 另一方面另一方面 3.句式：句式：插入语的使用：插入语的使用： but in a long run, a lifetime maybe, things turn out to be quite the opposite. 从句的使用，使句式多变：从句的使用，使句式多变： Concentrate your energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you are engaged； but in the end they still fail due to the will shortage；等等等等引用名人名言：引用名人名言：as Emerson put it, no one can cheat you out of you