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1、临考写作临考写作主讲：（点睛）老师（包含英语一和英语二）欢迎使用说明：老师新书2014伟老师置顶。因涉及必背 20 篇已上市，详见英语作文问题，：朱中部分作文图画及题目未配送范文，没有范文的部分，请大家跟随课程 PPT 做好笔记，亦可自行老师新书2014英语作文必背 20 篇进行参考。所有范文中文翻译已发布在：老师2014必背 20 篇所有题范文建议参见物英语作文1 / 22临考写作高分作文两件事：句法，结构拉长句子（2-3 句）Case:我爱你中文表达法：一朵梨花压海棠、外形俊俏胜的我，深深地爱上了那个面如桃花、身若珠玉、令变憔悴、江眼镜片崩碎的你。英文表达法：我, who 一朵梨花压海棠、

2、外形俊俏胜，深深地爱上了那个你, who 面如桃花、身若珠玉、令如何加修饰？ 一句话，在后面做文章变憔悴、江眼镜片崩碎。1.（n.）+ which/who/tCase: 许多人很重视自己拥有多少奢侈品。素颜版：Many people may take luxuries seriously.一个妆真的可以改变一个人：那些把一个人拥有的生活方式。的数量当做评判其社会地位的唯一标准的人们，会很重视追逐奢侈品Many people who consider thety of ones belongings as a unique criterion to judgeones sol ring, thu

3、s, may take seriously the lifestyle of chasing after luxuries.(n.)/ 句子结尾 + V-ed、en( Case1:youngsters) / V-ingyoungsters, ranging from / who ranges from 20 to 30-year oldsCase2:研究发现，和十年前的 5%相比，现在有近 24%的年轻白领表示不清楚自己想要什么。A recent finding has provided theconcrete cluet 24 percent more or less of youngwhi

4、te collars，ranging from 25 to 30-year olds, are hardly sure of what to keep and what to get ridof, compared witht of 5 percent one decade ago.3（n.）+ with + (n.)Case:a pretty girl a girl wi，很多n angel-like face and a fairy-like figure喜欢通过买豪车来显示自己的成功和存在。素颜版：Nowadays, a lot of riches like buying luxurio

5、us autos to show their existence.变妆版：These days, an overwhelming number of people, with money bulging out of their pockets, areswitching their expenditurethe typical marks of ones attao purchasing limousines/luxurious vehicles, (which are) defined asent.（二）结构篇必背范文大作文（图表漫画类）图表作文（英语二、英语一）2 / 22（一）Warm

6、-up 句法篇临考写作200 字左右WhatWhy/effectWhat - 描写数据（先写总的趋势，再写细节）开头：In this chart, we can figure out display the proportion distribution/theyses - 分析规律，对比原因t / Elaboray and luminously, these two pie chartsties fluctuation of , which引句：Iend to make some furtheryses as follows.分析结论：Actually, it is hardly nesar

7、y for us to think twice before figuring out thistruth of mattert : 大胆下结论，趋势结尾：(1) As discussed above, it is not surprising to see.y opinion, this trendt the number of(n.) dramatically / steadily / slightly / gradually rise up / turn down / level off in 领域/地点 will continue for a whilehe foreseeable f

8、uture.: 大胆下结论，趋势(2) Considering these general illustrations / resolutions, we may reasonably arrive at at (句子). The tendency may be irreversible.t (n.) will continually play critical roles in 领域/地点Directions：1) The two pie charts below show (a) the three maypes of e-book readings, and(b)the proporti

9、ont each type of terminal handle in 2009 and 2010.Using the information from the charts, write a short report, which describes the situation in 2009 and compares it with the situation in 2010.Write about 160-180 words on your answer sheet.3 / 22临考写作重点：网上购物（）与实体店购物的销售额比较Shopon line (electronic readin

10、g) vs. shopin department store4 / 22临考写作审题：增长率有所放缓；虽网购市场趋于成熟，增长率放缓，但其占社会消费品零售的总额将稳步上升，交易规模增长迅猛；3，最后可以看到，网购占社会消费品零售总额的着人们生活条件以及教育水平、网络技术的进一步仍然偏低，发展空间巨大。随，必将有更好的发展。Simply and clearly, this single-series chart arranges the increasing rate and theturnovers of Chinas on-line shop, which displays a steady

11、 and sound develotrend over the period from 2006 to 2015.To begin with, the curve line on the top shows the increasing speed of virtualshopwill slow down, with the peak of 128.8% in 2008 and then sliding continually tothe valley bottom of 26.8% in 2015.While the maturity of on-line shopmarket trigge

12、rs the drop of increases, its sales, asthe bar chart below shows, enjoy great and constant risehe coming 10 years, with theumAlso, ithe coming 2015 nearly 100 times of RMB 26.31 billion in 2006.is hardly difficult to figure outt the share of virtual shopin totalconsuming market is still in a low lev

13、el. Even with one-decade boom, it can only reach8.6%he mid-2010s.Thus, we are suped to be optimistict it still has a big chance to keep goingwith the up of living standard, including better education and popularity of mobile-3Gtechnology to make shopon line much easier. Surely, the tendencyt the vir

14、tualshopwill continually play a critical role in our customers daily purchasing may beirreversible.5 / 22临考写作全球物价（对比）report:问卷/员工或消费者意见反馈This bar chart shows the number ofitive and negative responses given bycustomers in a market survey about serviat a leisure center.Asked about the parking faciliti

15、es at the leisure center, 700 cnts respondeditively, whereas 550 said something negative about it. Looking at the ticket costs, there were almost three times as many people responding negatively as those who6 / 22临考写作responditively, with only 350 satisfactory responses.Equally evaluated was the book

16、ing service, for which the survey counted 650itive and600 negative responses. In contrast to the ticket costs, the attitude of staff was consideredveryitively. Only one fourth of the 1250 asked customers complained about theattitude of staff. 950 people thoughtitively about the stat the leisure cent

17、er.Summarizing the results of this report, you can sayt there is need forimprovementhe fields of ticket costs, booking service and parking, espelly for theformer. Also, it will be highlymendedt we do everythingsible to increasethe parking plaand perfect our service.漫画作文：220-280 字WhatWhy/ effect HowW

18、hat(描述漫画句+引出1.描述漫画句句)（1）话题: When the ie of (n.) gains a series of concerns from the public, can we stillstand there, hesiing for what occurs? As we can see from the dction, （n.）如：plastic surgery/whether to provide strangers with favors readily or not/over-cutting down forests正面话题：When the importance

19、 of（n.） gains an overriding focus from the public, canwe still stand there detachedly for what kind of efforts we shall make? As we can see from thedction, (n.) 如：blended diverse cultures/cultural mixture/being alleged to your heart/credit/braveness（2） 通用型：直接描述法（素颜版）As can be seenhcture, an American

20、 girl is smiling beautifully/brilliantly in atraditional ChiMiao costume.(简妆版：只涂了霜)A pretty American girl , as can be seenhcture given above, st and graceful, is headingtowards us in a traditional Chi(浓妆版)Miao costume.St and graceful, a pretty American girl with an angel-like s, (as can be seen in t

21、hepicture given above), is heading towards us in a traditional Chi swinging locks.最懒人版：Miao costume, dancing withElaboray and luminously, the cartoon given above extend a vivid storyt / It is hardlydifficult for us to figure outhcture given abovet 2.引出句(1) Actually, these cartoon series/this vivid c

22、aricature appear(s) very urgent to remind us t(2) Actually, it is a morning call to send us a messaget the topic concerning (n.) hasbeenhe spotlight and aroused wide concern at any inch of sol space.7 / 22临考写作Why / Effect现象句(可省略) + 原因分析句(两点原因) + 举例子(一个例子)1. 现象句（1）It is hardly nesary for me to cite a

23、ll the evidence of (n.) which（2）话题：But my own worry today is lesst of the overwhelming problem of (n.1)n itis of the slightly more luxurious agony of the decline in (n.2) even of the educated teenagers/youths.特别说明：（n.1）(n.2)两个对立概念，不是（n.1）而是（n.2）如：科技对生活的影响。But my own worry today is lesst of the overw

24、helming problem of electronic trashesnit is of the slightly more luxurious agony of the decline in elemental lifestyle even of educatedyouths. We scarcely write a handwriting letter othern an, which displays fewertouching emotionsn the script, for instance.再如：人们不读书了But my own worry today is lesst of

25、 the overwhelming problem of elemental literacynit is of the slightly more luxurious agony of the declinehe reading skill even of the educatedteenagers, who should have made enough preparations for their future competition by absorbingnutrition from the book.正面话题：But my own excitement today is lesst

26、 of the overwhelming publicity of (n.1)n itis of the steadily more luxurious admiration of the reinforcement in (n.2) even of the youths.如：成功不是拥有多少，而是付出多少(n.1)the number of haves/the rich boom (n.2)charity performanceBut my own excitement today is lesst of the overwhelming publicity of the rich boom

27、 inChinan it is of the steadily more luxurious admiration of the reinforcement in charityperformance even of the youths.2. 原因分析句 + 两个原因（内外）(1)There seem to be two elements involved in （n.） which .ly, . Apart from theabove-mentioned aspect, another factor contributing to the tendency to deny the nesi

28、ty of(n.)/promote (n.) ist (2)Several factors could weigh heavily for (n.), yet, suspended at the top of the list are thefollowino aspects. To begin with, Furthermore, externally, (3) The reasons for a big rise/an appalling slump in （n.词 are complex. Some attribute it to（n.）which/who. Others may pla

29、ce high value on/blame on (n.) which/who . Still the rest attach importance to/make complains of (n.) which/who(4)（特别适合正反对立的作文）ysesIend to make some furtheras followings. Some people may attachimportance to / place a high value on(n.)词 owing to its (n.)优点.Yet, there are still some others who make a

30、lot of complas about the negativity of promoting(n.)词 due tot .ally, both vis go to their extremes and we need to makesome moderate如：网上购物yses as followings.8 / 22临考写作Iend to make some furtheryses as followings. Some people may attach importance toowing to its convenience and diverse alternatives.the

31、 merits brought by on-line shopYet, there are still some others who make a lot of complas about the negativity of promotingpurchasing on line due tot consumers may encounter a lot of deceptions in virtual stores.ally, both vi followings.3. 引出影响句：s go to their extremes and we need to make some modera

32、teyses as（1）It is hardly nesary for me to cite all the evidence of the revolutionary influen(t) the aesthetic operation / the negative mood gives rise to. To begin with, .Moreover, .(2) There seem to be two direct effects involved in (n.), which .ly, . A goodcase blowing my mind now is , which/who .

33、 Apart from the above-mentioned aspect, another impact spelled by the promotion of (n.) / the lack of (n.) / living in a (a.) way ist 4. 举例子：(1) If one exle is needed, I could not but mention the following , who/which(2) A good case attached to my mind now is , which/who(3) One of the most typical/s

34、tartling exis , who/whichles coming to/flowingo/blowing my mind now(4) 举数据：It is estimated by a recent survey I met with great coincidence in ContemporaryYouth three months agot * 特别提示：原因之后或者举例子之后都可以跟一句结论性的语言用于点评。句型：It goes with no exaggeration to sayt / It goes with no denyingt如：原因之后（社会道德和责任感下降）The

35、 reasons for an appalling slump in moral level are complex. Some attribute it to plainers themselves who heavily damn the universal indifference prevailing in ourdaily life and then, paradoxically, choose to stand out of the situation whenever it occurs.It goes with no exaggeration to sayt this kind

36、 of saying one thing butng the opiteplays a critical role in sol moral disaster. One of the most startling exles blowing my mindnow is the event of Xiao Yueyue, which infringed the bottom line of our conscienhockingly.How总结句 + 提建议句1. 总结句(1)Fortunay,话题：t is not the Day of Judgment.(2) 通用型：Takingo acc

37、ount all resolutions mentioned above, we may safely arriveonclut(3) 通用型：Under these circumstan, the question of what future there is for (n.) is a real one.(n.)如 the cosmetics industry9 / 22临考写作2. 提建议句(三个建议)：It is, undoubtedly, very timet we should take some available methods to /It is imperativetdr

38、astic/reliable measures should be taken to ()end up these inappropriatengs/( 正面)formulate sustainable anditive step-up of , such as/involving laying down the effective regulations/disciplines to (v.) sth., delivering the moderate life/fortune/ consuming / world/friendship / sucs-attaining outlook an

39、d guaranteeing more rational (n./a.) manners.3. 最结尾句：Takingo account all resolutions/yses mentioned above, we may safely arrive at at it is, unquestionably, benefireasonable to be (a.) in our work and daily life.So, a list involving some constructive and liberal mottos (to guarantee / restrict sth.)

40、 should beadhered to our dressing table as soon as组合的力量，sible.（至少 49 个字）接下来就是的时刻。话题组合示例一（类）：When the ie of （n.） gains a series of concerns from the public, can we still stand there,hesiing for what occurs? As we can see from the dction, . Actually, it is a morning call tosend us a messaget the topic

41、 concerning (n.) has been in the spotlight and aroused wideconcern at any inch of sol space.But my own worry today is lesst of the overwhelming problem of (n.1)n it is of theslightly more luxurious agony of the decline in (n.2) even of the educated teenagers/youths.Several factors could weigh heavil

42、y for (n.), yet, suspended at the top of the list are thefollowino aspects. To begin with, . One of the most startling exles blowing my mindnow is , who/which . Furthermore, externally, . It goes with no exaggeration to sayt .Fortunay,t is not the Day of Judgment. It is, undoubtedly, very timet we s

43、houldtake some available methods to end up these inappropriatengs, involving laying down the effective regulations to (v.) sth., delivering the moderate (n.) outlook and guaranteeing morerational (n./a.) manners.(200 个字)正面话题组合示例一(褒奖类)：When the importance of (n.) gains an overriding focus from the pu

44、blic, can we still standthere detachedly for what kind of efforts we shall make? As we can see from the dction, .Actually, it is a morning call to send us a messagespotlight and aroused wide concern at any inch of sot the topic concerning (n.) has beenl space.heIt is hardly nesary for me to cite all

45、 the evidence of (n.), which . There seem to betwo elements involved in （n.） which .ly, . If one exle is needed, I could not butmention the following , who / which . Apart from the above-mentioned aspect, another factorcontributing to the tendency to promote (n.) ist . It goes with no denyingt .Taki

46、ngo account all resolutions mentioned above, we may safely arriveonclut . It is imperativet reliable measures should be taken to formulate sustainable anditive step-up of , involving laying down the effective disciplines to (v.) sth., delivering themoderate (n.) outlook and guaranteeing more rationa

47、l (n./a.) manners.(194 个字)10 / 22临考写作同一话题两种态度组合示例一(正反两种反应)：It is hardly difficult for us to / We may figure outhe leflf of thcture /he tophalf of the cartoon given abovet However,he right one /he under one, . Actually,t .this cartoon / this vivid caricature appears very urgent to remind usIend to ma

48、ke some furtheryses as followings.ly, some people mayattach importance to building / setting a (n.) owing to its (n.)优点. Yet, there are still some others who make a lot of complas about the side effects of promoting / who arestepdue toon a totally different track as accustoming to putting themselves

49、 in a (a.) se t .ally, . It is unveiled by a recent survey I met with great coincidence in ReadersDigestthree months agot % more or less of investigated feel (a.) inthe face of .Takingo account all resolutions made above, we may firmly arrive at at it is, unquestionably, benefireasonable to be (a.)

50、in our work anddaily life. So, a list involving some conductive and liberal mottos (to guarantee/restrictsth.) should be adhered to our dressing table as soon assible. (186 个字)虚度光阴，人生遗憾11 / 22临考写作范文：(关键字：时间，生活方式，自我管理能力，电视低俗化)Para.1:(When the ie of wasting time gains a series of concerns from the pub

51、lic, can we still standthere, hesiing for what occurs?)As we can see from the dction, a single, sitting in front of aeviwhichbroadcasts some kinds of soap operas, is appreting every nut and bolt of these invariable plots.Actually, it is a morning call to send us a messaget we human beings always per

52、formsomething wasting much of precious time, thus spoiling youPara.2:s every second elapses.(But my own worry today is lesst of the overwhelming problem of common housewives orhousehusbandsn it is of the slightly more luxurious agony of the decline in time-managingability even of the educated teenag

53、ers.)Several factors could weigh heavily for this degeneration, yet, suspended at the top of the listare the followino aspects.To begin with, habit is habit. We are good at giving ourselvewhat we alwaysn our daily life.fficient excuses to supportIf one exle is needed, I could not but mention the fol

54、lowing well-known scientist, whosename is Andrew D.C, illuminatingt a kind of habit, representing a sense of spiritual existence,can never be changed as long as continuing for 47 days, nor is this kind of time-wasting practice.Furthermore, externally, our society is witnessing an overwhelming number

55、 of low-level TV programs, ranging from entertaining shows, TV talk shows and TV series to some other inferior products, which differentiate from forms as well as broadcasting time but never from their essential contents.Then, the consequence is distinct. It goes with no exaggeration to say t soap o

56、pera ruins the concept of cherishing time.Para.3:Fortunay,t is not the Day of Judgment. It is, undoubtedly, very timet we should takesome available methods to end up these inappropriatengs, involving laying down the effectiveregulations to restrict theties of entertaents, delivering the moderate tim

57、e outlook andguaranteeing more rational lifestyles.(331 个字-293 个字-270 个字)注：范文中打了括号的部分代表可以省略。大家会发现，好几篇范文字数都超了，但是，只要你写得顺畅，没人有空去数你的字数，当然，不能字数超得离谱！因此会被扣分的，只会是那种没有实质内容、只是机械套用模版的人！所以，请大家务必观察范文中除了前面所给句型之外的部分，那些才是得分的终结原因！12 / 22临考写作关键字： 梦想，抗挫折能力，充分准备，迎难而上An exciting story often goes like this: it is notsibl

58、e for anyone to go through theriver by a broken wood bridge. Then, a weak but brave snail is expected to fly like a bird and getto the other side of the river without any accident.Unfortunay, story is as story does. The truth is this little cute animal, even with ahistory thousands of years longern

59、human beings, would put its fate on the line anddrop to the rivrobably.The story, as the cartoon shows, is toideal and reality. Sometimes we may pal us to reconsider the relationship betnourselves a very brilliant blue prbeforetaking any investigationever imagined.o the situation, which is more ofte

60、n much fiercern we haveHence, when the real difficulty comes, we always appear anxious and even cannot bevewhat is happening in front of us. Actually, it is the lack of adequate preparations rathern the difficulty itselft results in a negativee.sibThus, it is essential to consider everythingefore in