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1、口语班写作课第1页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二 考试作文哈尔滨医科大学 瞿平第2页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二图画类（难度最大）1Write out the messages conveyed by the cartoon.2Give your comments.第3页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二第4页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二7、1997：第5页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二托福新题型新型的写作考试趋势听力+写作第6页，共130页，2022年，5月20日

2、，6点24分，星期二一、 书信类应用文2、2005真题：辞职信道歉信Directions: Two months ago, you got a job as an editor for the magazine Fashion & Design. But now you find that the work is not what you expected. You decide to quit. Write a letter to your boss Mr. Wang, telling him your decision, stating your reason(s), and making

3、 an apology.第7页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二国内作文的评分标准A节应用文的评分侧重点在于信息点的覆盖和内容的组织、语言的准确性、格式和语域（指在书面和口语表达中根据不同的交际对象，所采用的话语方式，即正式、一般、非正式的话语）的恰当。对语法结构和词汇多样性的要求将根据具体试题作调整。允许在作文中使用提示语中出现过的关键词，但使用提示语中出现过的词组或句子将被扣分。第8页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二B节B节作文的评分重点在于内容的完整性、文章的连贯组织性、语法结构和词汇的多样性及语言的准确性。2、评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言

4、确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来给分。评分人员在档内有13分的调节分。3、A节作文的字数要求是100词左右。B节作文的字数要求是160200词。文章长度不符合要求的，酌情扣分。4、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。5、如书写较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。第9页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二1结构2句子3词汇4内容第10页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二时间：30分钟字数：At least 300 words.An effective response is t

5、ypically about 300 words long. If you write fewer than 300 words, you may still receive a top score, but experience has shown that shorter response typically do not demonstrate the development of ideas needed to earn a score of 5. There is no maximum word limit. You may write as much as you wish in

6、the time allotted. But do not write just to be writing; Write to respond to the topic.托福作文 2022/9/511第11页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二 独立写作2022/9/512第12页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二奖励分给分原则书法笔迹 大字vs小字笔的选择第13页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二奖励分给分原则正确正规可读非正规标记：&, Vs, etc.简写的问题：WTO？World Trade Organization (

7、WTO)_共200字！第14页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二奖励分给分原则标点的问题随意点逗号的问题句号的问题省略号顿号书名号惊叹号和问号第15页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二奖励分给分原则修改的问题尽量不修改反对对于内容的修改正确的修改方法修正液第16页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二范文分析98.1母鸡下蛋，虚假承诺 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should:1 write out the message

8、s conveyed by the cartoon此提纲应分为两段写作）2 give your comments描述图画阐释寓意给出评论（解决方法）第17页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二范文分析The past several years have witnessed a phenomenon that a variety of promises have been arising from all walks of life. Regrettably, quite a lot of promises are sheer nonsense, just as the h

9、en in the given cartoon commits herself to lay eggs which are round without any angles and corners and have shells, egg whites and yolks.第18页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二范文分析Odds and funny as they sound, such false promises can be seen and heard everywhere in our country. Administration departments a

10、ssure to perform their tasks effectively and fairly without taking any bribes; manufacturing units guarantee to turn out products of good quality; commercial enterprises swear to provide genuine commodities and polite and enthusiastic services. 第19页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Can you find anything n

11、ew and substantial other than their obligations, duties and jobs in these so called promises? I guess your answer will be negative. As a matter of fact, their intention to make such commitments is nothing but to put on civilized outer clothing to please or deceive the public.第20页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6

12、点24分，星期二范文分析 I dare say that your society is suffering corruption and cheat which are causing damage to society both materially and morally. But the hen and her like should know that by dishonest words no one can survive the intense competition under market economy system. They should remember the o

13、ld saying, “Honesty is the best policy”.第21页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二范文分析总结段落安排合理聪明的学生举例子句式复杂多样用词有效替换语法错误较少我们的目标？第22页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二简单句子变复杂的法则1非谓语动词2插入语句式第23页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二1非谓语动词我是一名教师。我讲课。I am a teacher. I give classes.I am a teacher and I give classes.Because I am a t

14、eacher, I give classes.I am a teacher, so I give classes.Being a teacher, I give classes.I, being a teacher, give classes第24页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二2记者们听说刘若英要来哈尔滨要来哈尔滨，他们都出去找消息。Hearing that Miss Liu is coming to Harbin , journalists set to obtain news.第25页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二3 老板叫我见客户，我

15、去见他。The boss asks me to visit a consumer.I go to see him.Asked to see a consumer, I go to see him 第26页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二非谓语动词法则1 找到一个共同主语2 结果动词作为真正的谓语3 其余动词看与主语的关系，主动的变成doing，被动变成done。第27页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二My father was denied higher education for historical reasons. But by self

16、studies he became a technician in a factory.He never stopping studying .He took courses of law in his spare time.Later he became a lawyer.第28页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二My father , denied higher education for historical reasons, by self-study became a technician in a factory. Never stopping studyin

17、g and taking courses of law in his spare time, later he became a lawyer.第29页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二practice现在的年轻人没办法缓解压力，他们在朋友的唆使下，转而求助于吸烟。The youth nowadays have no way to relieve their pressure.They are instigated by their friends.They turn to smoking第30页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二The youth

18、nowadays , having no way to relieve their pressure and instigated by their friends, turn to smoking第31页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二天太热我不能学习It is too hot to study.It is so hot that I can not study.It being so hot ,I can not study.情况如此危急，解决这个事情刻不容缓。The situation being serious , it is high time that we

19、 solved it.第32页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二插入语2名词，插入小细节（意义，功能，相关的人等），大概念哈尔滨市一个具有悠久历史的美丽城市，是我的故乡。Haerbin, (which is )my hometown, is a beautiful city with a long history.第33页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二2 插入语1 主语+谓语+状语主语，状语，谓语老板正在和员工制定计划The boss is making plans with his workers.The boss, with his work

20、ers ,is making plans.不改变整个句式却显得句式有张力Eg: 第34页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二水是生命之源，现在被污染的很严重，覆盖面积越来越小。Water ,which is polluted seriously and covers decreasing areas, is source of life.Water ,which is polluted seriously and covers decreasing areas, is the source of life.第35页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Wa

21、ter is polluted seriously.Water covers decreasing areas.Water is source of life. 第36页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二网络Internet is a way of communication.Internet is one of the most efficient and convenient ways of communication.Internet , by which many young people make a fortune , is one of the most e

22、fficient and convenient ways of communication.第37页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Internet, which makes the world smaller and smaller, is one of the most efficient and convenient ways of communication.第38页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二八大亮点句式第39页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二1用否定句式表达肯定I am the best writing t

23、eacher in new oriental school .I, it has been said, am the best writing teacher in new oriental school .我不是别人，我是新东方最好的写作老师。I, rather than anyone else ,am the best writing teacher in new oriental school .第40页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Other thanI, other than anyone else ,am the best writing teacher

24、in new oriental school .Nobody , other than I ,is the best writing teacher in new oriental school .第41页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二中国正在面临非常严重的问题。A problem of is serious in china.In no country other than china, it has been said, is the problem serious.( the phenomenon popular）第42页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6

25、点24分，星期二notso muchas 与其说不如说生活中的成功与其说依靠起学校的成绩倒不如说依靠个人的能力和实践经验。Success in the life does not depend so much on ones school record as ones ability and practice. ( honesty, confidence, persistence) 第43页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二直到20世纪人们才开始重视环保问题It was not until the end of the 20th century that we attac

26、hed great importance to environment problems.第44页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二2强调句：It be + 强调部分+that(who)+ 简单句戒指是每个女孩都梦想得到的。It is the ring that every girl wants我不是用钱能买来的I am not for sale.It is I who am not for sale.原则：去头去尾现原形第45页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二在20世纪80是年代，由于中国的改革开放政策，很多外国人开始了解中国及中国的文化。It

27、was in 1980s that a number of foreigners began to learn China and Chinese culture owing to the reform and open door policy being carried out. 第46页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二时间状语的替代法则1 用强调句2 时间（主语），witness谓语，宾语In 2000， the number of college students increased sharply.2000 witnessed increase in the n

28、umber of 第47页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二1980s witnessed a fact that a number of foreigners began to learn China and Chinese culture owing to the reform and open door policy being carried out.第48页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二3 倒装句 ：only句，地点状语倒装句，让步状语从句的倒装 只有用这种办法，我们才能解决这个问题。Only in this way can we so

29、lve the problem在森林里有各种各样的小动物All kinds of animals are in the forest.In the forest are many valuable species of animals.第49页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二如图所示，一个年轻人在操场上奔跑，并且冲向终点。终点又是新的起点。As is shown in the cartoon, on the playground runs the young man, rushing to the final, which is defined as another s

30、tart one第50页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Although句型省略尽管她是个女孩，唱歌却像男人一样。Although she is a girl, she sings like a man.Girl as she is, she sings like a man.尽管漫画很简单，但是其寓意却非常深刻Simple as a picture is , the meaning behind it is as deep as the ocean.第51页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二4虚拟语气1）It is high time that+

31、 过去时It is high time that the authorities concerned took proper steps to solve the traffic problems (喊口号句式，用于最后一段) The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures .第52页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二2）It is important/ necessary/ imperative/ urgent +that +(should)+do政府有必要制

32、定法律法规来解决这个问题It is imperative that laws and regulations should be worked out to 第53页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二if 句式如果没有改革开放政策,我们可能根本吃不肯德鸡. If there were no the reform and open door policy, we would never taste KFC.第54页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二5 被动句Your baby was born.Measures should be takenAtten

33、tion should be paid to sthEmphasis should be placed uponGreat importance should be attached to 当文中的主语为人们，大家，社会等大词的时候用被动语气第55页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二6定语从句交通工具发出有毒气体，污染环境。 Automobile discharges lots of fumes which seriously pollute the air你穿牛仔裤还是套装对我来说无所谓。You can wear jeans or suit, which makes n

34、o difference to me. (matter a lot to sb) A majority of youth tend to smoke, which has a negative( positive , profound) influence in society.第56页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二运用定语从句法则1尽量找出句子相互重叠的部分，2把其中从句的重叠部分用关系代词which, that, who whose ，whom或关系副词where或者 介词+which ,whom 来连接两句话第57页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24

35、分，星期二我爱上一个让我奋不顾身的人。女生版：I fall in love with him at whom I throw my life 男生版：I fall in love with a girl for whom I can do everything.第58页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二If， 及because句式的替换I want to buy the cup because its color is special. I want to buy the cup whose color is special. If the students can ge

36、t a job in their area, they are gaining valuable experience and putting their knowledge to use immediately.The students ,who can get a job in their area , are gaining valuable experience and putting their knowledge to use immediately.第59页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二If the students can get a job in t

37、heir area, they are gaining valuable experience and putting their knowledge to use immediately.The students ,who can get a job in their area , are gaining valuable experience and putting their knowledge to use immediately.第60页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二if the hobby is stamp collecting, the person c

38、an learn about the countries of the world and even some of their history.The person， whose hobby is stamp collecting, can learn about the countries of the world and even some of their history.第61页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Our neighbor, learning about my familys condition and beginning to help us,

39、lent some money to my parents who used the money to open a shop and got through the hard life.第62页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二7 主语从句What makes the cartoon surprising (interesting ) is that +环境细节 What makes the cartoon surprising is that the old father is kicked off by his daughters and sons like a b

40、all.第63页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二8比较句式1与老一辈人相比，现在的年轻人在很小年纪就独立了。The youth nowadays are more independent at an early age than the old.Compared with the old generation, young people nowadays tend to be more independent at an early age.同级代替比较级；比较级代替最高级第64页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二2传统观念认为，素食主义者活的更长

41、，然而他们却因为营养不良而死的更早。Contrary to the thought（belief) that , 主句Contrary to the thought that vegetarians can live longer ,they die earlier for lack of nutrition.第65页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二The more we learn about the issue, the more we realize that it is of importance.Contrary to the thought (belief,

42、 conclusion )that , Contrary to the thought (belief, conclusion )that vegetarians could live longer, most of them die earlier for lack of nutrition.第66页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二词汇词汇的多样性词汇量的概念简单词复杂化的方法重复率高的词汇词汇的替换方法第67页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二实现词汇的降级替换EG：在当今社会In contemporary societyIn modern s

43、ociety/todays society /nowadays/at present/today/now第68页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二重复率高的词汇1 显示：图标图画中，show ,indicate, reveal, reflect, demonstrate, conveys the message that, imply, suggest, illustrate, depict 2重要：Be of importance, significant, vital, essentially , critically , crucial, play a role,

44、should be taken seriously, importance should be attached to 第69页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二veryof great importance, significantly important替换very的方法：将adj. 的同义词 变为adv. 即相当于very第70页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二4 极大的：great /sharp/ dramatic/ sizable/significant/ enormous/considerable/profound5 think: be

45、lieve, convince, suppose, assume, guess, reckon ,insist, maintain, argue, claim, in ones opinion, be of opinion/view that, hold the view that, as far as I am concerned, in my eyes第71页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二6 Different various, a variety of, vary from person to person， Peoples opinions are vario

46、us.7 more and more Students in growing numbers find learning English has become increasingly important.More and more teachers are demanded withWith the development of economy there is an increasing demand of teachers,第72页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二mostThe vast majority of students take a part time

47、job.The large (considerable) percentage of college students takes a negative attitude of smoking.第73页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二As is shown in the pictures, with the rampancy of commercial fishing, the number of fishes has dramatically decreased. In one picture, there were various kinds of fish and

48、 only fishing-boat in 1900.On the contrary, in 1995 there was only one fish, but many fishing-boats.Shown- described/ depictedPicturecartoon/ caricatureRampancydisorder/ immoderationDramaticallysharply/considerably/profoundly/rapidly/SignificantlyVariousall sorts of/ diverse kinds of/On the contrary

49、by contrast/ but on the other hand/Manyinnumerable/ countless/ a large number of第74页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二例文As is shown in the pictures, with the rampancy of commercial fishing, the number of fishes has dramatically decreased. In one picture, there were various kinds of fish and only fishing-b

50、oat in 1900.On the contrary, in 1995 there was only one fish, but many fishing-boats.第75页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二The purpose of the picture is to show us that due attention has to be paid to the decrease of ocean recourses. Owing to over-fishing, the number of fishes has obviously decreased .If

51、we let this situation go as it is, we do not know where fish will be in the future. By that time, our environment will suffer a great destruction.第76页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二The purpose of the picture is to show us that due attention has to be paid to the decrease of ocean recourses. Owing to ov

52、er-fishing, the number of fishes has obviously decreased .If we let this situation go as it is, we do not know where fish will be in the future. By that time, our environment will suffer a great destruction.Showwarn/sound an alarm toDue attention has to be paid toimportance should be attached toDecr

53、easedecline/reduction/shrinkOwing toas a result of/ on account of/ as a consequence of/Over-fishingexcessive/immoderate fishingObviouslyevidently/apparently/visibly第77页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Purposemoral(adj 道德的，n 寓意)/ motive/ theme (音乐)Showwarn/sound an alarm toDue attention has to be paid toi

54、mportance should be attached toDecreasedecline/reduction/shinkOwing toas a result of/ on account of/ as a consequence of/Over-fishingexcessive/immoderate fishingObviouslyevidently/apparently/visibly第78页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二 Therefore ,it is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one

55、thing, we should appeal to our authorities to make strict laws to control commercial fishing. For another, we should enhance peoples awareness that the ocean resources are vital to us. Only in this way can we protect our ocean resources. Also I believe that we humans can overcome this difficulty, an

56、d we will have a bright future.第79页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Therefore ,it is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one thing, we should appeal to our authorities to make strict laws to control commercial fishing. For another, we should enhance peoples awareness that the ocean resources

57、are vital to us. Only in this way can we protect our ocean resources. Also I believe that we humans can overcome this difficulty, and we will have a bright future.as a result, accordingly, in general, generally speaking, on he whole, in my opinion, in my eyesTakeadopt, carry out, Drasticfirm, severe

58、, effective, Measureaction, step, precaution, countermeasureMakewoke out, enact, Strictconcrete explicitLawrule ,regulation.EnhancecultivateVitalessential crucial, important, critical Believeinsist, maintain, Overcome: tackle, solve, surmount, pull throughDifficulty problem, crisis, disaster, traged

59、y Brightbrilliant, splendid, promising第80页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期二Thereforehence, thus, as a result, accordingly, in general, generally speaking, on the whole, in my opinion, in my eyesTakeadopt, carry out, Drasticfirm, severe, effective, Measureaction, step, precaution, countermeasureMakewoke o

60、ut, enact, Strictconcrete explicitLawrule ,regulation.EnhancecultivateVitalessential crucial, important, critical Believeinsist, maintain, Overcome: tackle, solve, surmount, pull throughDifficulty problem, crisis, disaster, tragedy Brightbrilliant, splendid, promising 第81页，共130页，2022年，5月20日，6点24分，星期