讲义toefl写作summer2016笔记252day3

1、A/D:We should never be impolite to anotherson.承合：反驳缺点：反驳绝对：A/D:teachers should give sol and political opinionshe classrooms.(TPO22)好处：了解政治（best）坏处：浪费时间Better way：小组A/D:To help childrene more finanlly responsible, parents should give children pocket money.好处(理论好处)：长经验坏处（现实缺陷）：乱花钱实现理论好处的 better way：打工

2、老房子拆不拆？拆双边：1.2. 改善市容3. 让步：诚然，有房子有价值，但是，照就好了。Agree or Disagree:给社会带来的正面影响 影响同意。1.Advertisement provides plentiful useful information to customers about products and servi.拆三个产品（有区分度、越具体越好）a.黑 白天吃白片，不瞌睡b.体育鞋 nothing is imsiblec.食物 德芙 纵享丝滑因为搬家会跟老友失去联络，所以搬家不好。驳因、驳果、驳因果关系即便搬家真的会失去老友，依然是好事。For another thi

3、ng, even old friends drift apart; it is still a good thing to move to a new place. ly, a new livingspace providesith great opportunities to make new friends from diverse sol background but sharingsameerest. Secondly, a new living environment also means a new way of living. It is nord to imagine aChi

4、immigrant would find it unfettable to taste curry or practice yoga. The exotic cultures andcustoms offer an individual great experiencet couldntsibly be available otherwise. Thirdly, a new workingenvironment helps an individual to discover their inner strengnd potential. Take my brother for instance

5、. Heused to work at a local factory wimodest salary and little chance of promotion. However, things began tochange when he moved to America. An advertising company offered him aitionhe arts department, whichstimulates hiserest in designing and gets him out of his s. So it seems clear to met it was t

6、he movetchanged his life pand poed himhe right direction.练P57A/D:Advertisements are the only cause for peoples unhealthy eating habits.承合：确实有部分影响反驳缺点：但也有正面影响，绿色健康养生公益反驳绝对：other factora.快、方便b.便宜c.爱吃d.传统ly, letting others participatehe pros creates stronger bonds and more trust betn the leader and the

7、 rest of the group.When othershe group are broughto the deci-making pros, they will feel more valued and moreessential to the groupcs. This will engender a stronger sense of camaraderie and belonging, andsubsequently, will lead them to work harder to see their group succeed. Also, they will gain som

8、e insighto howthe leader makes his or her deci. This will make the leaders deciseem less mysterious or arbitrary. The group will come to trust the leaders decis morehe future, even when they are not part of the deci-making pros.架桥展开：晒了解生活方式发现共同拉近距离更容易交朋友ting pictures online get to know your lifestyl

9、e figure out mutualerest/hobby bring us closer easier to make friendsly,ting pictures online makes it easier for people to get new friends.起始词：When, if, byng连接词：This will engender, as a result, consequently, 逗号+whichThis will engender us to find mutualerests.This will engender a closer friendship.Th

10、is will engender a chance/opportunity for us to find mutualerest.这个房间很热（展开到 100 字）因果、列举、对比、抒感列举：没有空调、50 人挤在 10 平米的房间里+没窗户没空调、室温 40 度、汗流浃背、光膀子还热、有人热晕、椅的烫、拿进房间一瓶冰水升华了、巧克力升华了对比：隔壁很凉。3 个人在 100 平的大房、10 个空调，16 度。冷的嘴唇发紫、穿三棉袄还冷、有人冻晕过去、椅子冷的坐上去就起不来了抒感：太 TM 热了。This movie is very touching. （展开到 200 字）The best w

11、ay to improve the quality of education is toincrease teachers salary.承合：老师动力更强反驳缺点：学费会变贵反驳绝对：给老师提供培训Working three days ak with longer hours is betternworking five days ak with shorter hours.三天 10 小时：诚然，五天 6 小时：轻松 / 累中间段结构：主旨句 + 适当解释 + 例证 + 总结多例展开结构：主旨句 + 例证 1 + 例子 2 + 例子 3分层解释结构：主旨句 + 解释 1（例子 1）+解释

12、2（例子 2）+解释 3（例子 3）多例展开：拆分主旨句中的实词。找到有区分度，并且具体化的细节。Agree or Disagree: 女想出名，形象很关键。同意。1.很美绝色倾城眼睛很大2.很美貌若天仙脸很尖3.也很美闭月羞花腿很长Only movies about real life are worth watching.Admittedly, movies about real life tend to be more educational and informative. Take aries for instance.Theythe natural world and captur

13、e living creatures in a realistic way. By watching _Animal World,kids gain some insighto _the law of jungleand the importance of wildlife preservation; by watching _A Biteof China, kids get better informed about _food culture about their motherlandin a moreeresting way;and by watching _The Life of S

14、teve Jobs , kids get a closer look at _role m_ and at _how to turn a garagestart-upo a big multinational corporation.不管做什么职业，教育都很重要。Great Writer / English Class PrInnovator, inventor / Project for Science ClassMayor, senator, supreme court justice / Studenternment, Debate Team、参议员、官首先，大城市当中，作为年轻人，以后

15、有着很多需要用钱的地方，应该从现在起就未雨绸缪。拿好朋友 Foosen 举例。他是一个乐天派，坚持活在当下。每个月的工资基本两天之内就全部花光，要么是买了奢侈品，要么就是到处旅游，才 22 岁的，已经游遍了全非洲。然而，天有不测风云。去年他在旅行中意外摔断了腿，不得不做手术。结果连手术费都掏不起，到处打借钱，耽搁了治疗，使得他恢复期比正常人长了两个月，还了并发症。Foosen 的例子还只是个案，还算是意外的支出。其实现在社会当中，计划内的大笔支出就已经够担忧了。，要买一个市中心的 30 平米的房子，就得花超过 300 万；结个婚，要想稍微有点体面，好歹请个二、三十个亲朋好友，节约开支也得花20

16、 万；更不用说有了孩子，连送他去每年都得至少花 5 万。看到这些可怕的数字，我就挠头。要是我现在不攒钱，以后根本不用活。To begin with, as a young man living in a big city, I need to start saving upfrom now on, because there are a lot of thingsmoney. Take my good friend Foosen for exhe future costing tons ofle. He is an optimistic guywho prefers to seize the

17、day. He can spend all his salary within just twodays either on luxuries or on trips. Before he was even 22, he already went around the whole Africa. Unfortunay, not everything goes according to plan. Last year during his trip to Soufrica, he accidentally broke his legand had to go through surgery. H

18、owever, since he could not cover theexpense, he had to call everybody to borrow money. It took so long forhim to collect the moneyt the surgery was delayed. As a result, therecovery period for him was 2 months longern everyone elses. Now, this exle might be a particular instance, and it is out of hi

19、s expecion.Nonetheless,odays society, even the potential spending within our expecion is already quite worrying. For instance, in Beijing, if I wish to purchase a 30-squaremeter apartment, it would cost me over 3 million yuan; if I want to invite, say, 20 friends to my wedding, I would have to payov

20、er 200,000 yuan; not to mention if I have a child and want to support hiseducation, it would cosleast 50,000 yuan per year just for him to go tokindergarten. It aches me just to look at these horrifying numbers. If I dontsave up for my future, there would be no future.诚然，有人会说旅行途中，能够增长很多见识，放松身心。遗憾的是，

21、上班这么忙，即便是旅游，也只能是在节假日。然而，节假日出门的人如此之多，以至于旅游不用带来任何爽快的感觉。对比：去之前的期望 攒了 3 月钱，人间仙境旅游去九寨沟 很多人 什么都没看到 不爽很多人：火车上、旅馆、排队、照相对比：假如在家 打 DotA 不花钱还开心诚然，有人会说旅行途中，能够增长很多见识，放松身心。遗憾的是，上班这么忙，即便是旅游，也只能是在节假日。然而，节假日出门的人如此之多，以至于旅游不用带来任何爽快的感觉。就拿的惨痛经历举例吧。前年暑假，我打算去九寨沟，一个中犹如人间仙境的地方。我早就在各种杂志上、电视上见到了九寨沟风景如画的景象，因此我对这次旅行有着极高的期望。结果，一

22、出门就诸事不顺。火车上，全世界的人感觉都在旅行，连厕所里都挤的是人（我不是在夸张，中国的火车就长这样）；到了九寨沟，旅店各种客满，我这样一个平时住惯 5 星级酒店的土豪，也只能和一群穷学生挤在青年旅舍当中；到了景点，以为一切都好说，结果排队买门票就花了 2 个小时，那在的大夏天啊，我整当中根本找不到个汗流浃背；进了景区，想要对着风景照个相，结果山水，只有各种形状的人头。天哪，这简直是场梦魇！我不能再更后悔这次出行了！假如我当时选择待在家里，吹着空调，和好友一起网上打DotA，不比这爽多了去了！Admittedly, some may arguet travelling can widen ou

23、r knowledge andrelax our body. Sadly, working in a company with such a tight schedule,even if I wish to travel, it can only happen during vacation. Yet since there are so many people out travelling during holiday, travelling is no longer enjoyable at all. Take my own sad experience for instance. Two

24、 years ago, Idecided to go to Jiuzhaigou during summer break. It is a place widelyknown as the heaven on earth. I had long seen its geous pictures onmagazines and TV shows, so I had my expecion for this trip heldextremely high. Unfortunay, the trip turned out to be a disaster. As soonas I got on the

25、 train, it felt like the whole world was on trip, and even thebathroom was filled with passengers (if yout I amexaggerating, you should really come to China); when I got to Jiuzhaigou,all the good hos were already full, so I had to be stuck wibunch ofcollege kids in a youth ho; when I got to the gat

26、e, it took me over 2hours just to get the ticket I was under the summer heat for a whole of 2hours and had sweat all over my body; finally I was in Jiuzhaigou and wasready to enjoy the view, yet when I took a picture, the frame was filled withno mountain, no stream, but all shnightmare!s of human he

27、ads. Dear lord, what aI could not regret my deciany more. Had I chosen to stay home,playing DotA with my pals in a well air-conditioned room, I would havehad a muore pleasant summer!1. Competition is often very stiff in big corporations.去年进了 XDF 竞争特别激烈 特别努力 吃不消竞争激烈：20 个实习生，各个都是 MIT 或 Harvard 之类的顶级名校

28、毕业生，我个 Iowa 的小喽喽超级没自尊；15 个人都会被淘汰都在竞争五个全职岗位，意味着特别努力：所有人每天 8 点到，10 点走，甚至有人住公司，牙刷来了；吃饭都不敢出去吃，都是提前买的 711 沙拉吃不消：有人精神压力过大抑郁了都带对比：之前我在新航道，特小的公司，每戏，优哉游哉九晚五，对着公司电脑打游Competition is often very stiff in big corporations. Two years ago, I was ina tiny education company called XHD, which had barely moren 20staff. Life was easy. I only need to work 6 hours a day, and half of the daywas spent in front of a computlaying Tetra. Then I decided to get amor