【高考英语专题】二轮复习英语通用版课件：步成文第（4）步 基本框架搭建好“美化词句”细推敲

1、“冤屈的”四档作文(得分19分)Dear Peter， I am very delighted to hear from you. In your last letter, you asked me about the physical exercise in our school and the following information may help you know more about it. To begin with, a new stadium has been built up, and it has become the new landmark in our schoo

2、l. Moreover, with the stadium set up, many kinds of sports events are able to be held, of which Pingpong, football and running competitions are very popular. As for me, Im interested in basketball since it has been giving me strength to face the challenges in my life. All in all, I sincerely invite

3、you to come to our school and see for yourself.Yours，Li Hua升格后的五档作文(得分24分)Dear Peter， I am more than delighted to hear from you. In your last letter, you asked me about the physical exercise in our school and, I think, the following information may help you have a better understanding of it. To begi

4、n with, a new stadium has been built up, which has become the new landmark in our school. Moreover, the stadium set up, a wide range of sports events are able to be held, of which Pingpong, football as well as running competitions enjoy great popularity. As for me, Im interested in basketball since

5、it has been giving me strength to bravely face the challenges in my life. All in all, I sincerely invite you to come to our school and see for yourself.Yours，Li Hua名师点评左栏作文用词准确，分段合理，而且使用了with复合结构和“of which”引导的非限制性定语从句等，总体来说是一篇相当不错的作文。但是看一下右栏提升后的作文，就会感叹其语言更地道、更自然流畅，可谓妙笔生花，技高一筹。词汇的提升有六处，特别是have a better understanding of, a wide range of及enjoy great popularity的使用会令人赞叹作者深厚的语言功底，同时也提升了得分档次；句式的提升有三处，插