读后续写练习写作讲义-高三英语二轮复习

读后续写精讲与欣赏

阅读下列材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Atnoonthatday,Idrovebacktomyhouseaftertheperformance.JustasIenteredthelivingroom,Iheardagentlesoundofmyfavoriteviolin."Thief?”Idashedupstairs.Sureenough,asexpected,aboyofabout12yearsoldwaspettingmyviolin.Theboyhadmessyhairandathinface,hisoversizedcoatseeminglyfilledwithsomething.Atfirstglance,Ifoundanewpairofshoesmissing.Itseemedthathewassurelyathief.Then,Isawhiseyesfulloffearanddespair.Myangerwasimmediatelyreplacedbyasmile.Iasked,“AreyouMr.Ram’snephew,Michael?I’mhishousekeeper.Twodaysago.Iheardhisnephewlivinginthecountrysidewillcome.Itmustbeyou.You’rereallylikehim!"Onhearingmywords,theboywasfirstastonished,butthenquicklysaid,“Hasmyunclegoneout?IthinkI’dbetterfirstgooutforawalkandvisithimagaininawhile.”Inoddedandaskedtheboywhowaspreparingtoputdowntheviolin,"Doyouliketoplaytheviolinsomuch?”"Yes,butI’msopoorthatIcan’taffordit.”theboyreplied."Then,Igivethisviolintoyou.”Theboylookedatmequestioningly,buthepickeduptheviolin.Goingouttothelivingroom,hesuddenlysawonthewallahugecolorphotoofmeplayingtheviolinintheSydneyOperaHouse.Heinvoluntarilytrembledforamomentandranoutwithoutlookingback.Iwassurethattheboyhadunderstoodwhathappenedbecausenoonewoulddecorate(装饰)thelivingroomwiththehousekeeper’sphoto.注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

A

fewyearslater,

I

wasinvitedtobeajudgeatamusiccompetitionofseniorhigh

schoolstudents.

____________________________________________________

Afterthecompetition,

Michael

rantome,holdingaviolinbox.

____________________________________________________________________________写作指导如何构思：1.缕清原文线索，规划续写情节。某天中午“我”演出回家，刚一走进客厅，就听见从楼上传来我心爱的小提琴的声音。难道家里进贼了？上楼一看，果不其然，一个12岁小男孩正在抚弄我的小提琴，而且我发现我的一双新鞋不见了。但我没有生气，而是骗他我只是这栋房子的管家，而且说听主人说他的侄儿这几天想必会到。后来，小男孩顺势准备放下小提琴说改天拜访他叔叔。“我”后面又与他聊了会天，并把他喜欢但却买不起的琴送给了他带走。但在头也不回地逃离房子前，他突然看到挂在客厅上“我”在悉尼歌剧院演奏的照片。他应该明白了一切。后续情节设想：他逃走后，会不会因为愧疚而半途返回退还我的小提琴？会不会向我表示道歉，并礼貌地借琴甚至向我拜师学琴？尽管这些设想听起来都可能成真，但是续写的关键是：必须在理解原文的前提下，仔细读懂续写部分所给的提示句。2.读续写段首句，构思续写内容。续写第一段首句提示是“几年后，我被邀请去做一个高中生音乐比赛的评委”。第二段首句提示是“比赛结束后，迈克尔拿着小提琴盒向我跑过来。”由此可见，我们续写第一段时，不能接着写他离开“我”家后的心理活动和向“我”道歉、跟“我”学练琴之类而是应该写他参加比赛时的优异表现和注意到“我”在场当任评委等。根据这二个提示句，我们可以大胆推断，当年的那个房东“侄儿”也参与了这次中学生小提琴演奏比赛并获得了好名次，这次过来，应该是感谢“我”这个评委当年不但没有当场揭穿他是小偷，反而赠琴给他。我们还可以推测，他下定决心好好练琴、将来还琴并当面致谢等等。注意事项：1.注意原文特点，保持风格不变。原文语言地道，用了一些丰富的动词，如：dashed,petting,trembled。形容词和副词的使用也非常多，如：messy；thin;surely;seemingly;immediately;quickly;questioningly;involuntarily。原文中还有神态描写和心理描写，我们也可以在续写中加以体现。，如：Isawhiseyesfulloffearanddespair./Myangerwasimmediatelyreplacedbyasmile./Itseemedthathewassurelyathief./Iwassurethattheboyhadunderstoodwhathappened...。另外，非谓语动词、从句、插入语、对话的使用也比较多。我们在续写时，也可以沿用作者的这一写作特点，保持风格不变。2.字数控制合理，书写工整美观。为了内容的完整性和表达的丰富性，续写部分字数控制在160-180为最好。书写力求工整、美观，字体大小适度，间距合理，移行正确，不随意涂抹改动，同时也要注意标点符号的正确使用。参考答案：

Afewyearslater,Iwasinvitedtobeajudgeatamusiccompetitionofseniorhighschoolstudents.

Fascinatedbythegentlesoundofoneparticipant,

Iwaswholeheartedlyimpressedbyhiswonderfulperformanceandsolidstrength.AsIflickedmyeyesuptoglanceattheperformer,

Iwassoastonishedtoseeathinface,

sofamiliar,

yetnowlitupwithjoyandconfidence.

The"thief"!

Foraninstant,

IwasamazedthatthekindnessIofferedtocovertheboy'smisconducthadmadesuchabigdifference!

Afterthecompetition,"Michael”rantome,holdingaviolinbox.

Heaskedwithatrembleinhisvoice,withhisthinfacereddeningwithexcitement,"Sir,doyourecognizeme?Thenephew!It'syourkindnessthatenlightensmylife,

sodoesyourviolin.Today,

Icangivebackthisviolintoyouwithoutregret...”Tearswelledupinmyeyes.NeverhadIanticipatedthatatinywhiteliewouldbreathesuchgreatpowerintosomeoneandchangehislife.下水文：

A

fewyearslater,

I

wasinvitedtobeajudgeatamusiccompetitionofseniorhigh

schoolstudents.

Itwasaclosecompetition.Noonewassurewho’dbethebestplayeruntilthepresenceofthelastone.Standingbeforethejudgeswasayoungmanwithathinfaceanddeterminedeyes.

ItremindedmeofsomeoneIhadseenbefore.Michael?Thethief?Lookingup,hesawme,too.Startled,hequicklycalmeddownandbeganplaying.Itwasthemostbeautiful

melodyIhadheard.Undoubtedly,

hebecamethechampion.Andthe

grand

prizewasabrandnewviolin!(85)

Afterthecompetition,

Michael

rantome,holdingaviolinbox.

Heopeneditup,andbeforemewastheexactviolinIhadsentto“Michael”

yearsbefore.Iwasastonished.BeforeIcouldsayanything,hetoldmethathewasthe

“thief”.Hethankedmeformysendinga“thief”

aviolininsteadofsendinghimtothepolicestation.HesaidthatthemomentheknewIwasthehouseowner,oneofthegreatestviolinists,hesworehewouldpracticeplayinghardtoreturnmeonelater.Ismiledandreplied,

“Youdeservetokeepit,myhonestboy.”

(96)学生靓句欣赏：1.Whatmadehimquitedifferentwasthejoyandconfidencethatlituphisface.Iwasamazedbythesparklingpointsinhim.2.Icouldn’thelplosingmymindintheseaofmusichecreated.3.“Itbelongstoyounow.Ihopeyoucanwalkfartherandhelpothers.”4.Thepiecewasfilledwithsorrowandstrugglewhichmovedallofthejudges.Withoutdoubt,Michaelwonthecompetition.5.Themagnificentmusicmademefeellikebeinginaprairieandbreezeblowingmyfacesoftly.6.Ithrewacuriousglance