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#10923，ThetableshowsthechangesinthepopulationsofAustraliaandMalaysiafrom1980toSummarizetheinformationbyselectingandreportingthemainfeatures,andmakecomparisonswhereTotalpopulationRateofbirth（perhundredMalepopulationFemalepopulationPopulationaged65+题题目分A时态：一般过B描述对象和对比对象：5个指标是描述对象，2个国家是对比对C对象词：5个指标的表D分段：可以按照人口的出生和老化写一段，然后男女写一E总结：有些趋势类似，有些趋势不思思路提动词，第二要点：的birthrate下降，但是更高龄化问题，高一点Therebe和第四要点：的总结人口和化的变化一WordWord翻译范申请批改（你可申请批改次数为0，点 翻译范ThetableillustratesthechangestothepopulationsofAustraliaand between1980and2002.或者ThetablecomparesAustraliaandMalaysiaindifferentdemographic featuresintwodifferentyears.或者ThetableillustrateshowthedemographicsofAustraliaand changedfrom1980-2002.ThepopulationofAustraliawasbigger to36.7million,andthatMalaysiaalsoincreasedtomillion.Australiahadabiggerpopulationwith risingfrom34.5milliontomillion,andMalaysiaalsosawarise populationto34.1Australiahadabiggerpopulationthan andbothcountriessawtheirpopulationincrease(36.7millionand millionrespectively).来西亚的birthrate下降，但ThebirthrateofMalaysiadroppedto althoughitwashigherthanthatofAustralia(10.2)in2002.Bycontrast,thesetwocountriessaw trendsinthebirthrate:whilethefigureforMalaysiadroppedto11.1, birthrateroseslightlytoTherewasanincreaseinbothcountriesin proportionofpeopleaged65orolder,andthefigureforMalaysiawas (24.9%in2002).Therewasasimilartrendinpopulation 65+inbothcountries,risingfrom17.1%to23.8%inAustraliaandfrom to24.9%inMalaysia.Therewasacleardifferencein disparityinthesetwoThesecountriesdifferedfromeachotherinthe ratioofmentowomen.来西亚的TheproportionofmeninMalaysiawashigherthan thatofwomeninbothyears,butitdroppedto52.5%.或者TheproportionofmeninMalaysiadroppedto thanthefigurefor ThepercentageofwomenwashigherAustralia, slightlytoOverall,Malaysiahadahigherbirthrate, biggerproportionofelderlypeopleandahigherratioofmalesto butasmallerpopulation Thesetwocountriessimilarchangesinthepopulationgrowth theproportionofelderlypeople,whiletheyhaddifferenttrendsin 7+7+范ThetableprovidesinformationaboutthedemographictrendsinAustraliaandMalaysiaoveraspanof22AustraliahadalargerpopulationthanMalaysiaandbothpopulationsgrew,reaching36.7millionand34.1millionrespectivelyin2002.contrast,thebirthrateinMalaysiawashigherhanthatinAustralia,althoughthegapnarrowed(11.1%forMalaysiaand10.2%AustraliainThereweresubstantialdifferencesbetweenthesetwocountriesinthesexratio.Menaccountedforalargerproportionofpopulation,despiteadropfrom54.1%to52.5%in2002.Bycomparison,womenoutnumberedmeninAustralia,buttheproportionwomenfellslightlytoBothcountriessawtheirpopulationageingduringthisperiod,andMalaysiahadalargerproportionofelderlypeoplethan(24.9%comparedwith23.8%inOverall,thesetwocountriessawsimilarchangesinthepopulationgrowthandtheproportionofolderpeople,whiletheyhadtrendsinotheraspects.Australianhadabiggerpopulationbutlowerbirthrates,alowerratioofmalestofemalesandapopulationofelderly学学生错学生的句子：TotalpopulationinAustraliaincreasefrom34.5millionto错误的原因：没有用过去提升的句子：ThepopulationofAustraliaincreasedfrom34.5millionto学生的句子：InconclusionbothAustraliaandMalaysia’stotalpopulationandsexualdistanceincreasedfrom1980to错误的原因：1小作文结尾不能说inconclusion2没有sexualdistance这个说提升的句子：overallbothcountrieshadalargerpopulaionandtheproportionofelderlypeoplealso学生的句子：Theproportionofpeopleabove65sawaincreaseinbothAustralia(23.8and错误的原因：1increase前面要写an2百分比要写符号%或者per提升的句子：Theproportionofpeopleabove65sawani