【市级公开课】高考英语读后续写课件27

ContinuationWritingContent?Language?Whatdifficultiesareyoufacedwithincontinuationwriting?评分时，应主要从内容、词汇和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：（1）续写内容的完整性,以及与原文情境的融洽度；（2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。（3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性；

Whatmakesagoodcontinuationwriting?Assessment

Criteria

coherent(wellconnected)

accurate/rich/vividlogicalandreasonableStep1

AnalyzethestoryHowtoplot?AnalysisofTeachoWhenWhatWReadfortheelementsandmainideaThefeelingofthemaincharacter.BeginningClimaxEndingPara1:Mariaknewherneighbor,Mrs.Hernandez'sroutineandtheyaregoodfriends.Para2:MariadidnotseeMrs.HernandezasusualPara3:Mariatoldthattoherfamily.Para4:ThenextMoring,Mariastilldidn’tseeMrs.Hernandez.Para1:Maria’smotheragreedtogowithworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouseworriedfriendlyalittleworriedmoreworried1.Readfortheplot&emotionalchangePara2:Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Mainideaofthestory

a（n）______,_______,schoolgirlMMMMariaMrs.Hernandez

a_________neighborneighbor&goodfriends2.ReadforCharactersalwaysenjoytheirsmalltalksandspecially-madecookiesfromherneighbor.Alwayssmiledandstoppedtochat,andgaveMairaaboxofherspecially-madecookieswithanote.warm-heartedcaringkindQuestion:

WhydidMrs.Hernandezandherdogfailtoshowupattheregulartime?Step1

Analyzethestory

Step2Frameyouressaywith2givensentences

Howtoplot?Para.1:Maria’smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor’shouse.①

HowdidMariamakesurewhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathomeornot?②

HowwasMrs.Hernandezandherdog?Whathappenedtothem?③whatdidMariaandhermotherdo?

Para.2:Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Momentslater,somedoctorsarrivedinanambulance.

①Whatdidthedoctorsdo?②Whatdidthedoctorssay?③What’sthereactionofMaria、hermotherandtheneighbor?④Theending.(Theyphonedthehospital)(details)knockthedoorbutnobodyanwsered(maybesomethingterriblehappenedtoher)(expressingherconcernforMrs.Hernandez)anydetailscanbereusedtothetextSinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”CoherenceBywritingthearticle,thewriterintendsto______describeaterribleexperienceofMrs.Hernandez

highlightanactofkindnessandthefriendshipbetweenneighbors

It'swiseandnecessarytoshareastorywithabrightandpositivetheme.3.Readforthetheme

thethemePrinciple:Positive1.Careisjustlikethequilt(被子)inthecoldnightthatcangivewarmth.2.Peoplecometotheirneighborsintrouble.人到难处邻里来。3.Loveandkindnesscanworkwonders.ContinuationWriting

Para.1:Maria'smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouse.

Mariacametothehouseandrangthebelltofind_outwhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathome.MariasawthedogMarisolandMrs.Hernandezlyingonthe___floor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.______________________________________________________________________________________________OrganizelanguagewithEASELinguisticdescription:Emotion,Action,Speech,EnvironmentHowtowrite?(EASE:emotion+actions+speech+environment

)MariacometothehouseandrangthebelltofindoutwhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathome.Peer：tolookcloselyorcarefullyatsth,especiallywhenyoucannotseeitclearlyUneasy,fearful,nervous,anxious,concerned,MariasawthedogMarisol，andMrs.Hernandezlyingonthefloor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.

JumpleaptoitsfeetwagthetailleanagainstthefloorSprawlonthebedlieflatonone'sback

AstheyapproachedMrs.Hernandez’shouse,Mariafeltuneasy,Sherangthedoorbellseveraltimes.Maria’smotherrepeatedlycalledouttoMrs.Hernandez.Inside,Marisolbegantobark.“somethingterriblemusthappentoMrs.Hernandez”,Mariaspoketohermother.Feelingextremelyfearful,Mariapushedasidethebushesbythefrontwindowandpeeredinside.Para.1:Maria'smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouse.2.MariasawthedogMarisolandMrs.Hernandezlyingonthefloor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.ThefirstthingshesawwasMarisol,jumpingexcitedlyandbarkingdesperately.ThenshesawMrs.Hernandez’smotionlessbodysprawledonthefloor.Mariafelthelpless.“Mom,”shescreamed,“gethelp!”Maria’smotherrushedtoaneighbor’shouseandtelephonedthehospital.1.Useenvironmentaldescriptionstoimpressreaders.2.Useactionstodevelopthestoryandshowfeelings.4.Userich/accuratelanguagetomakeitvividandauthentic.Writingguidelines3.Useinnerspeechanddialoguesto

illustratefeelingsandthreadeventHomework:FinishPara2.Para.2:

3.Mrs.Hernandezfelloverherselfandhurtherself.Mariaanhermothervisitedherinthehospital.

TheydiscoveredthatMrs.Hernandezhadslippedandbrokenherhip,andtheytookhertohospitalatonce.Thatafternoon,Mariaandhermotherdroppedbythehospital.

AnursesaidMaria’sconcernforherneighbor’ssafetyhadsavedMrs.Hernandez’slife.

ShesaidMrs.Hernandezwouldrecovercompletely.SinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”Slip，falloveroneselfhaveafallCoherenceAppreciationMaria’smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor’shouse.

AstheyapproachedMrs.Hernandez’shouse,Mariafeltuneasy.Sherangthedoorbellseveraltimes.Maria’smotherrepeatedlycalledouttoMrs.Hernandez.Inside,Marisolbegantobark.Nowextremelyfearful,Mariapushedasidethebushesbythefrontwindowandpeeredinside.ThefirstthingshesawwasMarisol,jumpingexcitedlyandbarkingdesperately.ThenshesawMrs.Hernandez’smotionlessbodysprawledonthefloor.Mariafelthelpless.“Mom,”shescreamed,“gethelp!”Maria’smotherrushedtoaneighbor’shouseandtelephonedthehospital.Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Momentslater,somedoctorsarrivedinanambulance.TheydiscoveredthatMrs.Hernandezhadslippedandbrokenherhip,andtheytookhertohospitalatonce.Thatafternoon,Mariaandhermotherdroppedbythehospital.AnursesaidMaria’sconcernforherneighbor’ssafetyhadsavedMrs.Hernandez’slife.ShesaidMrs.Hernandezwouldrecovercompletely.SinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”评分细则维度序号评价项目立意1紧扣主题、弘扬正能量2结尾、完整逻辑3逻辑清晰、顺承上文4与段首句衔接合理内容5适当的有效对话6场景描写7修辞手法8人物塑造外貌9心理10动作维度序号评价项目语言11时态正确12词汇准确、丰富、地道13有多种高级句式14有效使用语句连接15拼写、大小写、标点16150词17书写干净、整洁、美观7个不：一不增加新人物；二不增加旁支情节；三不用过多对话；四不能负能量结局；五不在文末设置悬念；六不偏高原文主题；七不违背逻辑常理Thanksforyourlistening！Mariaknewherneighbor'sroutine.Everyday,Mrs.HernandezwalkedherdogMarisolpastMaria’shouse,usuallyJustasMariawashurryingforschoolinthemorningandagainwhenMariawasreturningintheafternoon.Mrs.Hernandez,alwayssmiling,alwaysstoppedtochat.Mariaenjoyedtheirsmalltalks.ThenonedayMrs.HernandezdiscoveredthatMarialikehomemadecookies.Fromthenon,shegaveMariaaboxofherspecially-madecookieswithanotethatread,”ToMaria-mygoodfriend!”OnecoldNovembermorningwhenMarialeftforschool,shedidn’tseeMrs.HernandezandMarisol.Mariadidn'tknowwhy.Thatafternoonherneighboragainfailedtoappearattheregulartime.Mariabecamealittleworried.AsshewalkedbyMrs.Hernandez'shouse,shelookedatthehousecarefullyandsawnothingunusual."Mrs.Hernandezjustisn'thometoday,Iguess,"shespoketoherself.Laterthatnight,MariatoldherparentsandherbrotherRamonaboutnotseeingMrs.Hernandez.Sheaskedthemiftheyknewwheretheirneighborhadgone.WhileMariawasworriedRamonthoughtthatnothingwaswrong.Maria'smotheralsotriedtomakeMariafeelbetter:"Sheprobablywenttoseeadoctor.Ormaybeshesinanothercityvisitingherdaughter"Still,Mariawasnotsatisfied.SheaskedherparentsifperhapssheshouldknockonMrs.Hernandez'sdoor.Maria'sfatherwasnotworriedeither.Hethoughtthattheyshouldn'tbotherMrs.Hernandez.“Maria,honey,I'mcertainshesjustfine.Weneedn'tspendtimeworryingabouther.

Thenextmorning,Mariastilldidn'tseeMrs.Hernandez.MariabecameevenmoreworriedInsteadofwaitingfortheschoolbus,sherushedbackhome.Maria'smotherwaswashingthebreakfastdishes."Ididn'tseeMrs.Hernandezagainthismorning,andnowI'mterriblyworriedabouther."Mariasaid."Shedidn'ttalkaboutgoingaway,soIwanttocheckonherbeforegoingtoschool.Ihopeyou'llcomewithme.

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