读后续写之动作描写-高三英语写作专项

读后续写之动作描写简单有效的四个微技能本课目标1.复习读后续写”三原则四步骤”2.能够理解并使用固定句式进行动作描写3.能够根据短文细节,合理选用动作描写撰写与原文相呼应的细节,提升续文合理度,与原文融洽度及语言优美度.读后续写“三原则四步骤”“三原则”:_________________原则_________________原则_________________原则“四步骤”读懂大意,理清脉络细读首句,构思框架增加细节,开始写作修改润色,整洁誊写如何使动作描写更饱满？Skill1：ChooseAccurateVerbs用精准动词代替笼统动词generalwords（笼统词）concretewords(具体词）walk(蹑手蹑脚地走)run(猛冲)look(瞥见)(怒视)(凝视)

say/talk(闲聊)(耳语)

cry（啜泣)

eat(咬)（咀嚼)(吞下)

Skill2：Chooseproperphrases用恰当短语代替普通动词 start/begin_________________________________________ decide_________________________________________ cry_________________________________________ remember_________________________________________ tired_________________________________________ see_________________________________________ attract_________________________________________Skill3：Actionchains分解动作，形成动作链Shehuggedtheboy.(拥抱)She___________forward,_____________and__________theboytightly.（冲向前+跳起来+一把抱住）Sentencepattern动作链句型1：_________________________________________描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个______做了_____动作以上，可以用这样的结构，这可以进行大量的动作细节描写，完整的交代过程。我早上匆忙去上学。(穿外套+抓起书包+冲去学校）I_________mycoathurriedly,_________mybagand_________toschoolthismorning.Sentencepattern动作链句型2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________排了三个小时的队伍,他被告知票被卖完了._________________for3hours,he_________________thattheticketshadbeensoldout.Sentencepattern动作链句型3:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________受到老师的责难和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。________byhisteacherand__________byeveryone,he______ratherupsetanddepressed.Sentencepattern动作链句型4:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________女孩开始吹她的口哨，尝试去吸引其他人的注意力。Thegirl________blowingherwhistle,________togetother’sattention.Skill4：Creatingawholepicture构造动作面Sentencepattern:______________________________________________________________________________把动作和面部表情，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面。①______________bytheteacher'swords,LiHua______________hishandhigh,______________,“Ivolunteer.”②______________bytheteacher'swords,Tom_____________________hishand,______________,“ignoreme.”动作面句型1:doing+句子主干+doing他们站在空旷的路边，仰望着天空，感受着这份珍贵的宁静。__________besidetheemptyroad,they___________tothesky,_________thepreciouspeace.动作面句型2:with+逻辑主语+非谓.贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，眺望远方，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。Withhisarms________,Beibei_______besidethepool,_______whetherhewaswhiteorblack.Summary：howtodescribeanactionvividly?【HomeworkA】1.他拦下出租车，拿着箱子跳上去，告诉司机去警察局。He

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thetaxi,

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inwiththesuitcaseand

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thedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.”.2.被母亲误解后，她跑回房间，哭得很伤心。____________________hermother,she__________backtoherroom,__________sadly.3.被她的善良所感动，我决定把这份无私的爱传递下去，将来帮助更多的人。____________________herkindness,I__________topassontheselflesslove,__________morepeopleinthefuture.4.看到一辆车开过来，他猛烈地挥手，希望能搭车。__________acarapproaching,he__________violently,__________togetaride.【HomeworkB】2022年新高考I卷阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim”,heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide”.Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.请运用所学技巧续写故事：患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重