高中英语-Unit 3 Writing教学课件设计

Beanexcellent"writer"题目要求：假如你是李华，你的朋友Tom4月5日来信询问你前几天的一次旅游经历，请你根据以下提示给他回一封100-120字数的电子邮件。

1.由学生会组织，日期定在上个周末。

2.一部分学生喜欢骑自行车，另一部分同学喜欢步行。最后大家被说服骑自行车。

3.美丽的风景让人让人难以忘怀：湖水在阳光照射下波光粼粼，漫山遍野鲜花盛开，蝴蝶飞舞，空气呼吸起来让人感觉舒服···同学们迫不及待地投入到大自然的怀抱。搭建帐篷和户外野餐让我们更好的享受野外生活

4.感受：尽管很累，但这次经历增进了友谊，放松了心情，有益于我们的身心。

开头(beginning)正文(mainbody)结尾(ending)第一步审题:体裁：人称：时态：要求：E-mail结构字数内容本文是关于旅游经历，应主要用______Para.1Para.2Para.3抓要点,100-120个单词左右以第一人称为主(analyzethetopic)记叙文过去时4非常感谢收到你···号的来信/上次来信我很高兴告诉你Thankyouforyourletterof...I'mgladtoreceiveyourlastletterdaysago.Iammorethanpleasedtotell/informyouthat...1、非常正式的书信，开头句是很重要。2、内容中的每个段落，只能有一个中心思想3、为了表达的清楚，还要尽可能地用短句，少用长句、难句。4、段落宜短不宜长，开头和结尾更是要简洁。Takegoodcareofyourselfandwriteoften./I'mlookingforwardtoreceivingyourreply.Bestregards/wishesforyou.Yourssincerely,/Yoursfaithfully,liHua1.列提纲/要点2.连词成句3.连句成篇4.润色修正5.定稿写作步骤:游记第一步抓要点，找关键词要点一之关键词组织学生会organizeStudents'Union它由学生会组织要点二之关键词上个周末1lastweekend11日期定在上个周末愿意/喜欢somestudents...othersliketodo/lovetodo一部分学生···一部分学生1要点三之关键词一部分学生愿意乘坐公交车，一部分学生喜欢步行决定干···被说服干···bepersuadedtodo/intodoinggotherebybikebedeterminedtodocyclethere要点四之关键词骑自行车去那里最后大家被说服/决定骑自行车valleybutterflies蝴蝶山谷山野鲜花被覆盖mountainflowersbecoveredwith要点五之关键词鲜花漫山遍野，山谷中蝴蝶飞舞干···让人感到舒服Itiscomfortableto···

要点六之关键词呼吸breathe空气呼吸起来让人感觉舒服。要点四inthesunshinelikeglasses要点七之关键词波光粼粼在阳光照射下湖水在阳光照射下波光粼粼。迫不及待干···投入大自然怀抱explorenaturecannot/hardlywaittodo

要点八之关键词探索大自然同学们迫不及待地投入到大自然/探索大自然。gooutsideforapicnicputuptentsenjoyourlife搭建帐篷要点九之关键词户外野餐享受生活搭建帐篷、户外野餐使我们享受生活improveourfriendship

有益于身心relaxourselvesbebifit/dogoodtoourmentalandphysicalhealth要点十之关键词

放松了心情

增进了友谊这次旅行增进了友谊、放松了心情，有益于身心第二步连词成句要点一之连词成句组织学生会organizeStudents'UnionStudents'Unionorganizedthetrip./ThetripwasorganizedbyStudents'Union.它由学生会组织要点二之连词成句上个周末1lastweekend11日期定在上个周末我们上个周末去了那里Wewenttherelastweekend.愿意/喜欢somestudents...othersliketodo/lovetodo一部分学生···一部分学生111要点三之连词成句一部分学生愿意乘坐公交车，一部分学生喜欢步行Somestudentslikedtogotherebybus,otherslovedtowalkthere.决定干···被说服干···bepersuadedtodo/intodoinggotherebybikebedeterminedtodocyclethere要点四之连词成句骑自行车去那里最后大家被说服/决定骑自行车Finally/Atlast,weweredeterminedtocyclethere.valleybutterflies山谷中蝴蝶飞舞鲜花山野被覆盖mountainflowersbecoveredwith要点五之连词成句鲜花漫山遍野，山谷中蝴蝶飞舞Themountainwascoveredwithflowers

butterfliesflewinthevalley.

干···让人感到舒服Itiscomfortableto···

要点六之连词成句呼吸breathe空气呼吸起来让人感觉舒服。Itwascomfortabletobreathethefreshair.要点四inthesunshinelikeglasses要点七之连词成句波光粼粼在阳光照射下湖水在阳光照射下波光粼粼。Thewaterinthelakeshonelikeglassesinthesun.迫不及待干···explorethenaturecannot/hardlywaitto要点八之连词成句探索大自然同学们迫不及待地投入到大自然/探索大自然。Wecouldnot/hardlywaittoexplorethenature.gooutsideforapicnicputuptentsenjoyourlifeoutdoors搭建帐篷要点九之连词成句户外野餐享受生活Put

uptentsandgooutsideforapicnicmadeusenjoyourlifeoutdoorsPuttinggoing搭建帐篷，户外野餐让我们享受了生活。improveourfriendship

有益于身心relaxourselvesbebifit/dogoodto/isbeneficialtoourmentleandphysicalhealth要点十之连词成句

放松了心情

增进了友谊Thistripimprovedourfriendship,relaxedourselvesandbenefitedourmentalandphysicalhealth.旅行增进了友谊，放松了心情，有益于身心使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇⑴排序关系

⑵并列关系⑶举例关系⑷转折关系⑸因果关系⑹归纳总结⑺递进关系first;firstly;second;secondly;lastbutnotleast

and;too;aswellas;alongwith;togetherwithforexample;forinstance;like;suchas;asto

but;however;while;though;onthecontrarybecause;since;thanksto;asaresult/consequence(of);thus;therefore

inaword;inshort;tosumup;inconclusionwhat’smore;besides;inaddition;furthermore第四步.连句成篇

Wewenttherelastweekend./ThetripwasorganizedbyStudents'Union.Inthebeginning,some

studentslikedtogotherebybus,whileotherslovedtowalkthere.Finally/Atlast,weweredeterminedtocyclethere.

111Themountainwascoveredwithflowers,whilebutterfliesflewinthevalley.Itiscomfortabletobreathethefreshair.Thewaterinthelakeshonelikeglassesinthesun.111Sowecouldnot/hardlywaittoexplorenature.Puttinguptentsandgoingoutsideforapicnicmadeusenjoyourlifeoutdoors.Most

impotantly,thistripimprovedourfriendship,relaxedourselvesandbenefitedourmentalandphysicalhealth.

二.尝试多样化表达方式(variedsentencepatterns)第五步润色修正方式一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力(advancedvocabularies)①倒装句②定语从句③名词性从句④各种状语从句三.适当的连接词/过渡语（properlinkingwords)11润色修正之一1.使用较高级词汇增加文章吸引力Somestudentslikedtogotherebybus,whileothersloved

towalkthere.Some

studentswerefondofgoingtherebybus,whileotherspreferredtowalkthere.Puttinguptentsandgoingoutsideforapicnicmadeusenjoyourlifeoutdoors.Puttinguptentsaswellasgoingoutsideforapicnicmadeusenjoyourlifeoutdoors.润色修正之尝试多样化句式Thistripimprovedourfriendship,relaxedourselvesandbenefitedourmentalandphysicalhealth.

Notonlydidthistripimproveourfriendshipandrelaxourselves