高中英语《新题型-读后续写》公开课优秀课件(经典、完美、值得收藏)

Welcome!2021读后续写ContinuationWriting目录CONTENTES01.题型介绍

02.评分标准03.原则方法

04.

实战演练05.

写作过程◆评分标准阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性；

(细节描写：外貌、心理、语言、动作、表情、环境)（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性。

(与前文内容以及所给出句子的上下文连贯)打分主要从续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构三个方面考虑与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第五档（21-25分）01原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。02正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。03曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。三个原则ThreePrinciples◆解题步骤浅层信息获取when,where,who,what深层文本分析Actions动作的丰富性Feelings情感表达的多样性Surroundings恰当运用环境描写梳理主要情节品味写作风格Language语言的运用分析人物特点明确故事主题深度解读语篇合理构思情节生动编写故事ReadThinkWrite实战演练WritingPractice读后续写

An80-year-oldmanwassittingonthesofainhishousealongwithhis45-year-oldhighlyeducatedson.Suddenlyacrow(乌鸦)perchedontheirwindow.Thefatheraskedhisson,“Whatisthis?”Thesonreplied,“Itisacrow.”阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

Afterafewminutes,thefatheraskedhissonthesecondtime,

“Whatisthis?”Thesonsaid,“Father,Ihavejustnowtoldyou‘It'sacrow’”Afteralittlewhile,theoldfatheraskedhissonthethirdtime,“What'sthis?”Atthistimesomeexpressionofirritation(恼怒)wasfeltintheson'stonewhenhesaidtohisfather,“It'sacrow,acrow.”Alittlewhilelater,thefatheragainaskedhissonthefourthtime,“Whatisthis?”Thistimethesonshoutedathisfather,“Whydoyoukeepaskingmethesamequestionagainandagain,althoughIhavetoldyousomanytimes‘ITISACROW’?Areyounotabletounderstandthis?”

Alittlelaterthefatherwenttohisroomandcamebackwithanoldtorndiary,whichhehadkeptsincehissonwasborn.

Onopeningapage,heaskedhissontoreadthatpage.Whenthesonreadit,thefollowingwordswerewritteninthediary：“Todaymylittlesonagedthreewassittingwithmeonthesofa,whenacrowwassittingonthewindow.Mysonaskedme23timeswhatitwas,andIrepliedtohimall23timesthatitwasacrow.Ihuggedhimlovinglyeachtimeheaskedmethesamequestionagainandagainfor23times.IdidnotatallfeelirritatedbutIhadadeepaffectionformyinnocentchild.”Paragraph1：Afterreadingthediary,…Paragraph2：Feelingashamed,thesongotdownonhiskneesbeforehisfather.写作过程WritingProcess1.读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。人物时态和事件语言特色不要变1.浅层信息获取

when：__________________；where:____________________；

who：__________________;what:_______________________；tenseoneday

An80-year-oldman,45-year-oldhighlyeducatedson

Inthehouse

Askthesonthesamequestionseveraltimes

深度解读语篇simplepasttense

events(1)梳理主要情节●

An80-year-oldmanwassittingonthesofainhishousealongwithhis45-year-oldhighlyeducatedson.Suddenlyacrow(乌鸦)perchedontheirwindow.●Alittlewhilelater,thefatheragainaskedhissonthefourthtime,“Whatisthis?”●Thistimethesonshoutedathisfather,“Whydoyoukeepaskingmethesamequestionagainandagain,…●Alittlelaterthefatherwenttohisroomandcamebackwithanoldtorndiary.●

Onopeningapage,heaskedhissontoreadthatpage.深层文本分析

2.深层文本分析(2)分析人物特点(3)明确故事主题____________________________________________________________(4)品味写作风格何种细节描写为主：心理□；动作□；语言□；表情□√；环境□；外貌□

patientloved√√√Everybodyshouldrespecttheelderlyandtakecareofthemthefather:

,

_theson:_________impatient

深度解读语篇读后续写语言特色1.Afterafewminutes,thefatheraskedhissonthesecondtime,2.althoughIhavetoldyousomanytimes.(连接性副词)3.Alittlelaterthefatherwenttohisroomandcamebackwithanoldtorndiary,whichhehadkeptsincehissonwasborn.(定语从句)4.

Onopeningapage,heaskedhissontoreadthatpage.

(介词+V-ing)5.Whenthesonreadit,thefollowingwordswerewritten.(状语从句)6.IdidnotatallfeelirritatedbutIhadadeepaffectionformyinnocentchild.(连接性副词)两段首句定一框由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。

2.细读首句，构思框架

合理构思情节Para.1:Afterreadingthediary,…（在看完日记后……）从第一段首句和第二段首句预测：①Wouldtheson'sfeelingtowardsfatherchange?②Whatthingsdidthesonreflecton?③Whatdidhethinktohimself?

逆向思维预测内容，适当增加故事曲折性注意结尾要与下段语义衔接

Para.2:Feelingashamed,thesongotdownonhiskneesbeforehisfather.（儿子感到羞愧在父亲面前跪下。）从第二段首句和正能量结局预测：①howtoexpresshisapology②Whatpromisedidthesonmake?③thethemeofthestory3.增加细节，开始写作在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为叫“58细节添加法”。情感：thankful,grateful,moved动作：lowerhishead（低头);touchhishead(拍头)pathisshoulder（拍他的肩）说：say,speak,guess,ask,explain,argue,continue,add,deny(否认)，remark(议论)，add(接着说),murtur（低声说）

bemovedtotears

感动到落泪Toucheddeeply/immensely,thetearswelledupintheone'seyes.

深受感动，热泪盈眶。Tip:借助心理描写，有效对话，动作描写，场景描写让续写内容生动形象化。读后续写写作构思Paragraph1:Afterreadingthediary,所遇生气之后，阅读日记Paragraph1:从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，儿子在看完了这篇日记，从下段首句得知儿子对自己的不好态度感到羞愧。所以本段应是儿子通过日记反思自己。因此，本段可以这样构思：所想读完日记，热泪盈眶回忆过往，反思自己父亲耐心，儿子生气切换立场，感同身受Paragraph2:Feelingashamed,thesongotdownonhiskneesbeforehisfather.Paragraph1:Afterreadingthediary,所做反思自己，儿子跪下Paragraph2:从本段首句可知，儿子向父亲跪下道歉并求得原谅。从正能量原则可知，作者会意识到自己的错误行为，并告诉父亲自己会如他一样耐心对待父亲。因此，可以这样构思：所想跪下道歉，求父原谅告诉父亲，内心想法感谢父亲，无私的爱儿子承诺，照顾父亲Paragraph2:Feelingashamed,thesongotdownonhiskneesbeforehisfather.4.修改润色，整齐誊写审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。Summary:1.consistenceoftheme(主题)2.consistenceofplot（剧情）3.consistenceoflogic（逻辑）4.richnessoflangague（语言）四个步骤2.细读首句，构思框架仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。1.读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。4.修改润色，整洁誊写思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。3.增加细节，开始写作根据“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。新高考新题型新挑战

以高分作文为榜样

以考试评分标准为指导一鼓作气限定时间和内容，强化训练帮助学生赢得信心，赢得高分

ThankYou!参考范文ModelEssayParagraph1

Afterreadingthediary,thesonwasfilledwithtearsand

begantoreflectonthedayswhenheusedtosittogetherwithhisfather.Hisfatherwouldpatientlyanswerthesamequestionall23timeswithoutfeelingirritatedwhilehisfatheraskedhimthesamequestionjust4times!Thesonthoughttohimself：IfIattainoldage,howwillmysonlookatme?Willhethinkofmeasaburden?Willheshoutatmebecauseofmypoorsight,poorhearingorpoorunderstanding?参考范文Paragraph2

Feelingashamed,thesongotdownonhiskneesbeforehisfather.Hemadeanapologytohisfather,begginghisfathertoforgivehimforhisbadbehavior.Hesaidthisaloud,“Ipromisetoseeyouhappyforever,Dad.Itisyou