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读后续写ContinuationWriting经典续写案例红楼梦曹雪芹高鹗争论点：契合度高低文学家：情节发展是否和原八十回一致语言学家：用词用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度获取信息分析信息合理推断写作范文检查核实故事线索人物性格场景特点写作目的语篇结构语言风格主题语境故事要素主旨大意续写情节：逻辑合理思想、语言符合前文开头衔接合理内容完整语言表达（使用关键词、词汇、语法准确性和丰富性、连接词的使用）内容丰富，与原文的融洽度，词数、关键词、语法、拼写等有效使用连接成分读后续写解题步骤以2016年10月新高考首考试题为例阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.读写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。评分参考：阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性。1.What'sthestyleofthepassage?A.Narration(记叙文)B.Exposition(说明文)C.Argumentation(议论文)whowhenwherewhathowwhy2.Person(人称):Firstperson?Secondperson?Thirdperson?

3.Tense(时态):Pasttense?Thesimplepresenttense?ReadfortheclueofthestoryInterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatPara(

)Para()Para()Day2Day1Day31,2,3,45,6,78who

whenwherewhathow

ReadforComprehensionJane&Tom(acouple)OneweekendinJulyInaforestquarrelledwalkedawaygotlostheardahelicoptertakeoffyellowblouseInvain...?angry,scaredexcited,helpless…?DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)Mythemeforthestory:

Nomatterhowdifficultitwas,theirlovewouldleadthewayforthem.

PredicttheDevelopmentPara.7Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.Para.8It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

Time:thenightbeforesleptFeeling:disappointedFindaplacetosleeptrytogetoutseparatePara7:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para8:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…whowhenwherewhat/howJanenightintheforesthowJanefeltwhatJanediddarkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat/howJaneTomdayintheforestorotherplaceshowJanesurvivedhowtheyfeltreuniteddisappointedtiredwalk,find,climb,stop,sleepTom,helicopter,find,tell,love,hug…happy

DrawaMind-MapPlots:logicalmeaningfulpositive

ClassifythetenwordsintosixgroupsJane,Tom,lake,walked,climbed,atadistance,stream,

Tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouseChooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionslake,stream,helicopter,yellowblouseJane,Tom

walked,climbedtimelapse（时间推进）atadistanceTohergreatjoyanobject（物线）acharacter（人线）anevent（事线）spatialalternation（空间变换）author'sthoughts&emotions（作者的思想感情）SomestepstoanalyzebeforeContinuation:Findthestyle、person、tense、themeofthepassage

2.ReadforComprehension3.PredicttheDevelopment4.DrawaMind-Mapforthefollowingtwoparagraphs5.Chooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionsanobject、acharacter、anevent、timelapse、spatialalternation、author'sthoughts&emotions

GuidanceBewellconnectedtothegivenpassageandthebeginningsofthetwoparagraphs.Bewellorganizedwithatleast5ofthe10givenunderlinedwords.Makesurethestorydevelopslogicallyandreasonably.Neverignorethebasic

toneofthearticle.Writethecontinuation阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________EvaluationSummary

HowtocompleteanarrativearticleStepone:thoroughreading(who;when;where;what;why;how)Steptwo:logicalplotting(theplot,theunderlinedwords,thegiventwosentences,reasonableending)Stepthree:vividwriting(linkingwords,details,sente