读后续写师生关系类-热心的Mrs.Caruso老师讲义-高三英语写作专项复习

2023年7月昆明市高二年级统测读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Igrewupinalargefamilyoftwelvesiblings.Weweren'tpoorbymoststandards,butthingsweredefinitelyhardforus.Myparentsneversharedtheir

financialworries,choosinginsteadtoletushaveacarefreechildhood.ButIknew,aschildrenoftendo,thatthereweretimestheywentwithoutandthatcertainthingsmyfriendshadwouldn'tbeavailabletome.我在一个有十二个兄弟姐妹的大家庭长大。按照大多数标准，我们并不贫穷，但事情对我们来说确实很艰难。我的父母从不分担他们的经济担忧，而是选择让我们度过一个无忧无虑的童年。但我知道，就像孩子们经常做的那样，有时他们没有，我朋友们拥有的某些东西也不会给我。Backinthosedays,

hotlunch

wasaluxuryforthewealthierkids,andhotlunchbuyerssatseparatelyfromthestudentswhobrought

coldlunch.MysiblingsandIbroughtlunchfromhomeeveryday:thickslicesofhomemadebread,threecookiesandasmallapple.Wewouldlookonlonginglyasthe

richkids

proudlysatdownwiththeirsteamingplatesoffriedchicken,coldmilk,peachesandasliceofcake.在那些日子里，热午餐对富裕的孩子来说是一种奢侈，热午餐的购买者与带冷午餐的学生分开坐。我和我的兄弟姐妹每天从家里带来午餐：厚厚的自制面包片、三块饼干和一个小苹果。我们会热切地看着富有的孩子们自豪地坐下来，端着他们热气腾腾的炸鸡、冷牛奶、桃子和一片蛋糕。Ineversaidanything,butmyfirst-gradeteacher,

Mrs.Caruso,musthaveseenthedesireinmyeyes.Onedayshequietlypressedanoteintomyhandandwhispered,"Givethistoyourmother.”我什么也没说，但我一年级的老师，夫人。卡鲁索，一定看到了我眼中的欲望。有一天，她悄悄地把一张纸条压在我手里，低声说：“把这个给你妈妈。”Ihurriedhomeandgavemymomthenote.Shereaditandsmiled."Well,Mrs.Carusosaidbecauseofallyourhardwork,shewantstobuyyourlunchtomorrow."Thenextday.Iproudlycarriedmytrayofchickenacrossthecafeteriaandtookmyseatatthehot-lunchtable.Honestly,thefoodwasn'tasgreatasIhadimagined,butIwaspleasedtobethereandfelthonoredtobeapartofthegroup.我赶紧回家，把纸条给了妈妈。她读了之后笑了。“好吧，卡鲁索夫人说，由于你的辛勤工作，她想请你明天吃午饭。”第二天。我骄傲地端着一盘鸡肉穿过自助餐厅，坐在热腾腾的午餐桌旁。老实说，食物没有我想象的那么美味，但我很高兴能在那里，也很荣幸能成为团队的一员。Onerainyday,Mrs.Carusoaskedmetostayafterschool.Mystomachinstantlydroppedtothefloor.DidsheknowIhadn'tfinishedmymathsheet?Aftertheotherstudentshadleft,Mrs.Carusosaidshewasgoingtofinishherworkandthendrivemehome.Itwasraining,andsheknewIhadalongwalk.Wepulleduptomyhouseandshegotout,puttingafew

bags

onthe

porch

(门廊).“TellyourmomIhadafewextrathingsshemightwant,"shesaid.Thenshedroveaway.Insidethebagswere

clothes,toys,andbooks.一个下雨天，卡鲁索夫人让我放学后留下来。我的胃立刻掉到了地上。她知道我还没写完数学表吗？其他学生离开后，卡鲁索夫人说她要完成她的作业，然后开车送我回家。天在下雨，她知道我要走很长一段路。我们把车停在我家，她下车了，在门廊上放了几个袋子(门廊).“告诉你妈妈我还有一些她可能想要的额外东西，”她说。然后她开车离开了。袋子里有衣服、玩具和书。注：文中划线词是我们为了实现续写和原文高度互动而刻意划出的。试卷中并无这种标识。Paragraph1:Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

那年夏天，卡鲁索夫人邀请我和我的兄弟姐妹去她家。Paragraph2:Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

这些经历使我的生活大不相同。01故事梗概作者出生和成长在一个有十二个兄弟姐妹的并不富裕的家庭。由于经济拮据时有发生，作者和兄弟姐妹在学校只能吃冷午餐（coldlunch）。作者很羡慕那些家境好能够享受热午餐（hotlunch）的同学。有一天，为了让作者感受到温暖，Mrs.Caruso老师特意请他品尝了一次热午餐。为了关心作者家里的其他兄弟姐妹，一个雨天，Mrs.Caruso亲自开车送作者回家，并给作者家送去了一些衣物、玩具和书籍。

02写作策略分析分清主要人物和次要人物是读后续写在阅读环节的重要事项。原文中的主要人物只有2个：作者“我”和Mrs.Caruso。作者的妈妈和作者的兄弟姐妹（siblings）都是次要人物。题目需要考生续写的部分是Mrs.Caruso邀请作者和作者的兄弟姐妹们去她家作客后所获的感想。因此，续写部分的笔墨重点应该是Mrs.Caruso的举动和“我”的感受和感悟。

03写作示范Paragraph1:Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

Aswesteppedintohercozyhouse,thescentoffreshlybakedcookiesfilledtheair,instantlymakingusfeelathome.

Mrs.Caruso

welcomeduswithabeamingsmileandservedamouthwateringlunchthatwerelishedwithgratitude.Overthemeal,Mrs.Carusosharedheartwarmingstoriesofherchildhood,emphasizingtheimportanceofempathy,kindness,andreachingouttoothersinneed,especiallythosewhomightbelessfortunateandstrugglingwith

financialworries.Herwordsresonateddeeplywithme,andIrealizedthatshewasn'tjustateacher;shewasatruerolemodelandacaringmentor.Paragraph2:Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

Fromthatdayon,Ivowedtobethereforanyoneinneed,justasshehadbeenthereformyfamily.Fueledbyherbeliefinmypotential,Idedicatedmyselftoexcellinginmystudiesandpursuingmydreamswithdetermination.Evenuntiltoday,Ihaveneverforgottenthe

bag

of

clothes,toys,andbooks

sheleftonour

porch

thatrainyday,alongwiththe

hotlunch

sheboughtforme.Mrs.Caruso'slegacycontinuestoshinebrightly,illuminatingthepathformetomakeapositivedifferenceinthelivesofothers,justasshedidinmine.Ourbondhasbecomealifelongconnectionofrespect,guidance,andgratitude.

04写作细节分析Thatsummerday,Mrs.Carusoinvitedmeandmysiblingstoherhome.

Aswesteppedintohercozyhouse,thescentoffreshlybakedcookiesfilledtheair,instantlymakingusfeelathome（舒适温馨的环境和现烤糕点的香气增强了写作和读者的情感共鸣).

Mrs.Caruso

welcomeduswithabeamingsmileandservedamouthwateringlunch（和原文概念互动，Mrs.Caruso对我的帮助就是从lunch开始的）thatwerelishedwithgratitude.Overthemeal,Mrs.Carusosharedheartwarmingstoriesofherchildhood（分享故事是常见的教育手段）,emphasizingtheimportanceofempathy,kindness,andreachingouttoothersinneed,especiallythosewhomightbelessfortunateandstrugglingwith

financialworries.

Herwordsresonateddeeplywithme,andIrealizedthatshewasn'tjustateacher;shewasatruerolemodelandacaringmentor（榜样model和导师mentor是很高的评价）.Theexperiencesmadeagreatdifferenceinmylife.

Fromthatdayon,Ivowedtobethereforanyoneinneed,justasshehadbeenthereformyfamily(榜样的力量和对我的实际影响).Fueledbyherb