Module3Unit5Writing（2）课件牛津深圳版英语九年级上册

U5Writing（2）

写作讲评Getready:作文积累本，红笔，试卷Learninggoals1.通过小组合作学习，解决写作中的困惑并学习同组成员的写作亮点。2.了解本次写作中的错误并规避错误。3.学习推荐纪录片的理由拓写方法，通过举例和说明原因使要点更加清晰。4.讲评剩余学评练习错题。Personaltask:2mins1.请查看老师对作文的评改，思考你在这篇写作中遇到的困惑与疑难之处。

2.请找出你作文的亮点与组员分享，并说明你这么写的原因是什么。Groupsharing:

4minsShareyouproblemsinwritingandyourshiningpoint!Tip:Takedownthewonderfulphrasesandsentencesfromthesharingofyourgroupmembers.Mistakes1.manydifferentkindsofanimals→____________2.《AnimalWorld》→____________3.protecttheendangeranimal→___________4.Itletsmereflectourselvesthatweshouldkeepagoodrelationshipwithanimals.→___________________________________animalsAnimalWorldprotecttheendangeredanimalsItletsmereflectmyselfthatIshouldkeepagoodrelationshipwithanimals.Reason2拓写GreatbeginningBodypart!1.Ithinkwatchingthisprogramcanrelaxmyself.Wecanseemanyanimals’lovelyactions.(拓写是纪录片里的什么东西可以让我们放松)（梓心）2.Itcanbroadenmyhorizonsandmakemelearnmoreaboutdifferentkindsofanimals.Wecanlearnaboutmanyrareanimalswhichwecan’tseeinourdailylives.(拓写了解到哪些动物的知识)（部分改编，泽鸣）3.Thedocumentaryshowsusthedecreasingnumberofvaluablespecies(补充说明在纪录片里看到了什么).Itreflectsthesignificanceofprotectinganimalsallovertheworld.Meanwhile,itcanhelpusraiseourawarenessofprotectingtheanimals.（部分改编，浩铭）4.Finally,IcanwatchthisinterestingTVprogramwithmyfamilymemberswhichcanimproveourfamilyrelationshipatthesametime.(有改编，一昊)5.Ifindit

valuabletoraiseawarnessofsavinganimalsespeciallyendangeredanmails.(妤婷)Ending1.ThatiswhyIliketowatchAnimalWorld.Ihopeyoucanlikethisprogramtoofrommyintroduction.(智扬)2.Wacthingdocumentariesisnotonlyinterestingandrelaxing,butalsomeaningfulandmoving.Ifyouwouldliketolearnmoreaboutnatureandanimals,AnimalWorldmightbethefirstchoice.(唯思)Mistakes1.manydifferentkindsofanimals→____________2.《AnimalWorld》→____________3.Itcannotonlybrodenmyhorizonsbutalsoknowmoreaboutanimals.→___________________________________4.Intheend,wecancultivatehabitofprotectinganimalsinmymind.→___________________________________animalsAnimalWorldItnotonlyhelpsbrodenmyhorizonsbutalsotellsmealotaboutanimals.Intheend,itraisesmyawarenessofprotectinganimals.GoodbeginningBodypart1.First,itcanhelpusrelaxourselves.Itcanalsoreduceourpressure.Whenwefinishalotofhomework,itisagoodideatowatchit.(子恩)2.First,watchingAnimalWorldisagoodwaytorelaxmyself.Icanputdownmyworriestoknowabouttheanimals’livesandhabits.(芷晴)3.IamsointerestedinanimalsthatIlovethelovelyandlivelyanimalsintheprogramandseethemclearly.(润喆)4.Besides,itcanbroadenmyhorizons.IliketheTVprogramwhichcanteachmealotaboutanimals’knowledge.Fromit,Icanknowwheretheylive,whattheyeatandhowtheysleep.(拓写是纪录片里学到了什么知识)(芷晴）5.Lastbutnotleast,whenIseethedecreasingnumberofsomewildanimals,Ifeelupsetandsorrowed.(加上这个前提条件会