读后续写指导(二)读；关键细节课件高考英语作文复习专项

后续写读作文指导（二）读梳两线———抓主旨———找矛盾照前后文———抓关键———求方法思情节———虑衔接———绘细节（风格；模仿）plot&emotionthemeconflict/problemimportantdetailssolutioncohesion:4处与上段尾情节衔接与给出句句际衔接detailstofocusonclimax&ending读后续写三大步九抓手characters内容：梳两线，抓主旨，找矛盾，抓重点，解决问题涨智慧！

分析、

比较、识别、创新逻辑：思情节、虑衔接，绘细节，自然连贯情节自然、衔接连贯，逻辑连贯严谨

情节简、细节亮，绘声绘色拿高分！语言：准确、精炼、生动、多样化表达此次作文问题：主题与内容：主次不分。没有抓住主要问题、主要矛盾，没有合理解决问题，15以下。

没有抓住最主要的“买specialpaintsandbrushes”，

抓了“没钱吃饭，肚子饿。

第二段写妈妈生气，责备John（要正能量结尾）

主旨写成：everyonehastherighttopursueyourdream逻辑与衔接：情节大逻辑不合理：第一段末没有寄出画作、参赛等无法衔接第二段的比赛结果细节小逻辑不合理：还在思考买作画工具还是吃午餐

带着钱先去报名

买了作画工具还要放在家里藏好

接电话的无关细节妈妈抢着接电话

钱用来报名？？？花了2-3行写乘车去城里买东西，画画只有1句。

没有买specialpaintsandsomebrushes买paper？

画画之后买面包，面包丢，妈妈骂Whereisyourlunchmoney？获奖之后

妈妈还责备

天外来客：画品店的收银员

看出我的内心斗争

给我开导

细节描写：学会讲故事！情节简、细节亮，绘声绘色拿高分！

如何作画的过程？画了什么画？获奖之后的心理和行为

心理描写生搬硬套，不自然；获奖后妈妈责备？

Johnstoodinfrontofthematerials,withbutterfliesinhisstomach.语言：语法错误：

时态、语态拼写错误：although词性错误：feltsoconfusedHismothersaidshewouldnotagainsthisdreamanymore.

Inspiteofhisheartstillseemedtobetorn,heboughtthepaintingmaterialsholdingthemoneyinhishand，hisheartwasinatangle.语言风格不一致：第二段对话多王身颖，心理、情境细节描写自然、有画面感；一可语法错误多；梁欣、谢庭赫、王嘉仪书写，张子彧

曾馨完全偏题黄子芊生搬硬套Johnaskedinatreblingvoice.Whenreceivingconfirmation,伶慧在文本上作了标志

1.梳两线—抓主旨—找矛盾拉波夫（Labov,1927）叙事结构6要素completions进展orientation指向abstract点题evaluation评议resolution结局coda回应概要总结：讲一个什么故事;可有可无核心矛盾的解决可有可无;That'sit.That'ttheendofthestory.;故事对本人的影响;凸显主题5W1H:Whenwherewhowhathowwhy背景：时间地点、人物环境等故事发展核心关键精彩点叙述者看法态度;主人翁内心世界;出现在任何位置whenwherewhowhathowI&Mexicanfamilycarbrokedownnohelpfor3htheMexicanfamillyhelpedIgave$20&wasrefusedbythemangaveittoW;talkedwithGhelplessdisappointedhappyso?frommorningtonoonbytheroad也可以用不同符号在文中标出：_____

┄gratefulWhatisthemainproblem？why？

Attheendoftheclass,Mr.SmithannouncedourassignmentfbrthenextMondaywastotalkaboutsomeoneweweregratefultoinsteadofabookreport.Uponhearingit,Icouldn'thelpcomplainingtoMareyathatIwassonervousabouthavingtotalkinfrontofthewholeclass.“You'vebeeninatleastthreeplays,"Mareyapointedout."Ifyoudon'tgetstagefrightinfrontofthosebigaudiences,whyareyoubotheredbyafewkidsinourclass?”Itwastrue,butinaplayyouwerepartofagroup.Ishookmyhead.Plus,thereweresomanypeopleIwasgratefulto.TherewasnowayIcouldpossiblypickjustone.Plus,evenifIpickedoneI'dhavenoideawhattosay.Plus,evenifIfiguredoutwhattosay,Iwasamillion-percentpositivethatI'dmessupifItriedtosayitoutloud!I'dbestandingtherewitheveryonestaringatme,waitingforwordstocomeoutofmymouth."Oh,mygoodness!Ipulledmysweatshirthood（风帽）overmyface,putmyhandsovermycarsandsaid,"Idon'twanttotalkaboutit!"故事线task：

someonegratefulto情感、人设complainednervousfeltbotheredMcomfortedproblems：who？whattosay？messupifsayitoutloudupsetresisted抵制InahousefarfromthecitylivedJohnandhismother.John’sonlyhobbywaswanderinginthenearbypicturesqueforest.Initscenterwasashinyclearlakewithschoolsoffishdancinginit.Lovelyanimalssuchasdeerorrabbitswereplayingaroundandcutebirdsweresingingintrees.Fascinatedbythebeautyandlivelinessofnature,hedesiredtobecomeagreatartistandpresentallthebreath-takingscenestotheworld.Johnstudiedinthelocalprimaryschool.LifewasnoteasyforJohnandhismomafterhisfatherdied.Knowingwhathardworkhismotherdidtomakeendsmeet,Johnreallydidn’twanthismothertoworry.Hismotherknewthesignificanceofeducationinlifebutshewasagainsthisdreamofbecominganartist.“Theprofessionofartistcan’taidapersoninmeetinghisdailyexpenses,”shewouldsay.Butaseachdaypassed,John’sdreambecamemorepassionate.Duetothelivingcircumstances,evenbuyingsomenewcolorswouldbealuxury.Johnonlyusedtheworndrawingfileandlimitedcolorsforhisdailypractice.Thoughlackingfinepaintingmaterials,henevergaveupdrawing.Hespentasignificantamountoftimestayingintheforest,secretlyperfectinghiscraft.Withcontinuoushardworkandadistinctgiftforart,hedrewbeautifully.OnedayJohnreadaboutacompetitionbeingheldinthetown,whosedeadlinewasonlytwodaysaway.Hegottheperfectopportunitytofulfillhisdesirebuthewasinadilemmaasforthecompetitionheneededspecialpaintsandsomebrushes.Hedidn’thavethecouragetoaskhismotherformoneyasheknewherprejudiceagainstart.Thateveninghismomreturnedfromworkandhandedhimafewpapernotes,saying,“Thisisforyourlunchatschoolnextmonth.”Themoneywasenoughforhisdesiredmaterials!John’sfacelitup.

Earlythenextmorning,Johnsecretlylefthomewiththemoney.___________________

Aweeklater,aphonecallcametoJohn’shome._________________________________Plot:梳理写在卷子空白处或者草稿上

Jhasstrongpassionforpainting----Mwasagainstpoorfamily----paintingcomptetition-----nomoneytobuyspecialpaintsandsomebrushes----Mgavehimmoneyforlunchlitup

Para1:buyspecialpaintsandbrusheswiththemoney—paintthepicturessqueforestsubmitandenterthecompetitionPara2:answerthephonecallandlearnttheresultJohnexcitement---fulfillhisdream

motherhappy----changeopinionandsupport

Charactersandtheiremotions：用不同符号圈划在原文，关键细节打勾

John:picturesqueforestfascinateddesiretopresentthebreath-takingscenesthoughpoormorepassionate：lackingfinepaintingmaterialsnevergiveup

spenttimeperfectinghardworkdistinctgiftdrewbeatifullynomoneyforspecialpaintsandbrushesupsetmoneyforbreakfastlitupMother:hardworktomakeendsmeedwasagainsthisdream---won’thelpearnmoney---prejudice

Climax---solvethesecondproblem/conflictEnding---solvethefirstproblem/conflictstrongpassionforpaintinghardworkingpersistent/determinedtopursuehisdreamTheme：Follow/pursue/holdonto/stickto/workhardonyourdream,youwillmakeit/achieve/realize/fulfilP1P2S2S1

Para.1:Earlythenextmorning,Johnsecretlylefthomewiththemoney.Decidedly,heboughtpaperandpensforpainting,andthendashedtothecompetition.Aftersigningupforit,hewasgiventhetask.Havingcollectedhisthoughts,Johntookadeepbreathandgotdowntohispainting.Soabsorbedwashethatheignoredallthedistractionaroundhim.Onhispaperwasvisuallystrikingcolorandappealingpatterns.HardlyhadJohnfinishedthelaststrokewhenhesignedwithrelief,hislipscurvingintoasmile.Everyday,helookedforwardtotheresulthappilyandanxiously,thoughhefelthungry.(94words)

Para.2:Aweeklater,aphonecallcametoJohn’shome.Hearingwhatthemansaid,hismotherfeltpuzzled,notknowinghowhissonhaddoneit.WhenJohnreturned,hiswidenedeyesbetrayedhissurpriseashismotherrelayedthenews.Atthesametime,asenseofguiltflashedacrossJohn.Hethenexplainedthewholeprocessandaffirmedhisunwaveringdream.Understandingthetruth,John'smotherwasdeeplymoved,tearscloudinghervision.Sheunfoldedherarms,embracingJohntightly,murmuringapologies.Johnwashappy,becausehehadgottheperfectopportunitytofulfillhisdreamandshowcasehistalent.Besides,hewasawardedforhispainting!(100words)王身颖，心理、情境细节描写自然、有画面感；一可语法错误多；梁欣、谢庭赫、王嘉仪书写，张子彧Johnaskedinatreblingvoice.Whenreceivingconfirmation,伶慧在文本上作了标志

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Paragraph1:

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

Plot:梳理写在卷子空白处或者草稿上

Jhasstrongpassionforpainting----Mwasagainstpoorfamily----paintingcomptetition-----nomoneytobuyspecialpaintsandsomebrushes----Mgavehimmoneyforlunchlitup

Para1:buyspecialpaintsandbrusheswiththemoney—paintthepicturessqueforestsubmitandenterthecompetitionPara2:answerthephonecallandlearnttheresultJohnexcitement---fulfillhisdream

motherhappy----changeopinionandsupport

Charactersandtheiremotions：用不同符号圈划在原文，关键细节打勾

Twins:picturesqueforestfascinateddesiretopresentthebreath-takingscenesthoughpoormorepassionate：lackingfinepaintingmaterialsnevergiveup

spenttimeperfectinghardworkdistinctgiftdrewbeatifullynomoneyforspecialpaintsandbrushesupsetmoneyforbreakfastlitupFather：Mother:hardworktomakeendsmeedwasagainsthisdream---won’thelpearnmoney---prejudice

Climax---solvethesecondproblem/conflictEnding---solvethefistproblem/conflictstrongpassionforpaintinghardworkingpersistent/determinedtopursuehisdreamTheme：Follow/pursue/holdonto/stickto/workhardonyourdream,youwillmakeit/achieve/realize/fulfilP1P2S2S1读后续写Requirement：提供一篇350词以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的记叙文或者夹叙夹议文，要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节架构自然，且结构完整的短文。（教育部考试中心）评分角度Assessment：◆内容合理丰富：创造内容的质量，续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。◆语言自然精当：使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。◆逻辑衔接连贯：上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。素养要求competence：在具体的情境中，综合运用学科知识与学科思维方式，在一定价值观的引领下，分析问题、解决问题的能力。1.读懂：把握关键信息，理清故事情节（明线、暗线）归纳文本大意，预测故事主题分析语言特点，把握文本风格2.构思：合理情节，丰富想象，连贯细节，有效对话，精彩结尾3.创写：词汇、语法、修辞准确多样

细节描写塑造人物、推动情节（动作、场景、外貌、心理、语言）

衔接连贯，文风一致，浑然一体Evaluationcriteria评分标准第五档（21－25）1.创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整（有明显的结尾，体现一定的主题思想，如得到了大家的认可、重拾信心等等）,与原文融合度高。2.使用了多样并且恰当的词语和语法结构（如灵活使用非谓语、倒装句、强调句等结构，合理使用），可以有个别错误，但完全不影响理解。3.有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构清晰，意义连贯。第四档（16－20）1.创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写完整,与原文融合度较高。2.使用了比较多样并且恰当的词语和语法结构（如灵活使用非谓语、倒装句、强调句等结构，合理使用），可以有些许错误(如大小写、名词单复数、冠词、介词等），但完全不影响理解。3.比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。读后续写评分基本步骤：

1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。

4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：

1.内容的丰富性、合理；2.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；3.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；4.上下文的连贯性。

5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。

6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。（本学期

严格扣书写分，将书写问题在高二解决。）

字体丑、涂抹多、太大太小、超出书写框，超行太多，第五档：21-25高级表达第四档：16-20部分复杂句第三档：11-15简单句、错误较多第二档：6-10汉语思维句第一档：1-5不成句零分作文Assessyourclassmates’article.Whataretheproblem?Whataretheadvantages?明源、钰林、陈宁、爵昊、丽娟、盛隆、骏行、英茜、明聪、菲娅、珈伊、纯乐、紫嫣、Advantages：detailedandvividdescription细节生动

使用佳句correlatewithpriviousdetails回应前文goodsolutiontoproblem解决问题合理自然

endwithathemanticsentence以主旨句结尾Myfaceturnedredlikeabigripeapplejustlikehimonthebusthismorning.娟HesmiledatmejustlikeIhaddonetohimatlunchtime.博文Hesataloneintheclassroomjustlikehewasatthedinninghall.明源Intheend，weheldthethesameview：Trytocareaboutthepersonintroubleandfacethedifficultyconfidentlyatalltime.晨辉language：“Everyonewillhaveanembarassingtime.Butpeoplewillsoonforgetit.Justasyouwon’tremindmethethinghappentomethismorning”hesaid.Ifeltafeelingofwarmthraisingformmyheart.Iworethejeansandreadyforthecheer.“Becauseyousmileatmemademewarm.”IknewhowembarrasseditwassoIhelpyouinordertoavoidembarrassment.IcouldfeelthatRyanworriedabouttheothers'laughterhurtmyheart.关键单词错误：Hetookacost.coatMyheartwasfilledwithattitude.gratitude时态语态错误：IrunningtowardsRyan.ran词性错误：Ifeltembarrassment.Thisisreallyembarrassment.Heunderstoodmyconfused.confusion谓语动词缺失：Iverysorrythat....自编词语：Asenseofregretmentandthankmentheldmyheart.句子混杂：“Becauseyousmiledatmemademewarm.”anditmademefeelwarm从句缺主、谓：Hegotupsoearlythatfellasleepinclass.he佳句使用过度、不自然。Problem：1.不切要点：抓不住主要问题、主要矛盾、2.不抓主题：没有主题、主题不清3.异想天开：解决问题的方式不合理、不自然

（穿上大衣，拿出牛仔裤，当场换裤子，没有人注意你，赶别人走，）4.对话脚本：对话多，与原文文风不符，5.人设不对：人称不对：Ryan被写成女生6.衔接不当：与首句衔接不当。ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme.Asaresultofanaccident,Iwasthrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.7.天外来客：老师跟我带来了裤子，他人的出现8.节外生枝:

他跑过来，摔倒。第二段，他的衣服脏了，我帮他擦；我邀请他逛街。与主旨无关的细节。9.绵延不绝：故事持续发展，停不下来。10.添加段落：不能写第三段11.细节不足：心理、动作描写see？hear？feel?touch？think？did？感官、修辞梳两线———抓主旨———找矛盾照前后文———抓关键———求方法思情节———虑衔接———绘细节（风格；模仿）plot&emotionthemeconflict/problemimportantdetailssolutioncohesion:4处与上段尾情节衔接与给出句句际衔接detailstofocusonclimax&ending读后续写三大步九抓手Chapter2TheBigNightThenFoxbegantoskate.Foxskatedforwardsandbackwardsandsideways.Sheskatedinperfectcirclesandfiguresofeight.Shewaselegantandamazing!Walruswatchedandhelovedwhathesaw.Foxmadeitalllooksoeasy.Next,itwasPolarBear’sturn.Herolledoutacrosstheicelikeabigwhitesnowball.Everybodyclappedwildly.ThenPolarBearbegantotumble.Hedidjumpsandspinsandsomersaults,andstoodonhishead.ImproveyourlanguageexpressionUseofsimpleandconcisewords.平时积累，考前强化记忆好词好句。Hehung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowedhishead.Hesaid/whispered/shouted/cried/screamed/sighed/wailed.ImproveyourlanguageexpressionUseofthesenses（五种感官）ofsight，hearing，smelling，touch，tasteUseofrhetoricaldevices（修辞手法）:simile,metephor,personification,exaggeration,parallelsentences.Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme.SuddenlythescenestruckmewherehefellflatandIlaughedathimcrazily.Ithoughtthiswouldbehischancetoreturnthefavor.Iloweredmyhead,myfaceburningwithembarrassment.ButunexpectedlyRyandidn'tlaugh.Instead,heapproachedmefrombehind,tookoffhisjacketswiftlyandofferedittome,signalingtometocovermytornjeans.Withoutanydelay,Ididit.Strugglingagainstmytears,Ididwanttoexpressmygratitudetohimbutcouragefailedme.Intotalsilence,Ileftthecourtyard.Paragraph2:Thatnight,afterthecheeratthefootballgame,IfoundRyan.Ithankedhim,givingthejacketbacktohimandtellinghimthecheerwentgreat.Thengatheringmycourage,Isincerelyapologizedtohimformymisconductonthebusandthankedhimagainforhishelpingmeoutofthedesperatesituation.Ryan,withabroadsmile,pattedmeontheshoulderandtoldmetoforgetaboutthat,jokinghefelllikethatalot.Hearingthat,IwasamusedandconvincedthathewassomeoneIwouldbefriendswith.Honestly,Mondaywasagreatdayindeed!

Mondaystartedoutgreat.Iwokeupontime,atebreakfastanddidsomelastminutestudyingformyfirsthourmathtest.Iwasconfidentofgettinggoodgrades.ThenIleftmyhouse.Tenminuteslater,Iwassettledwithmyfriendsontheschoolbus.Wewerebusychattingabouthowwespentourweekend.Atonestop,FatRyangotonhurriedly.Hetrippedoversomeone'sfootaccidentallyandTHUMP!Hefellflatontothefloor.Everyoneofusonthebuslookedonandlaughedcrazily.Ryanstruggledtohisfeet,dustedthejacketandmadehiswaytoanemptyseat.Hetriedtolaughwithus,buthisfacewasburningwithembarrassment.Therestofthemorningflewby.Ididwellinmymathtest.IreadtwomorechaptersofToKillaMockingbirdinEnglishclass.Itwasn'tlongbeforetherewentthelunchbell.Imetmyfriendsfromthecheerleadingteaminthedininghall.ThenIcouldn'thelpbutnoticeRyanafewtablesaway,sittingallalone.Hecaughtmelooking.Ismiledathimquicklyandlookedaway.Whenwefinishedeating,weheadedouttothecourtyardtopracticeacheerwewoulddoatthatnight'sfootballgame.Afteralittlepractice,wenailedthecheer,sowedecidedweonlyneededtogothroughitonelasttime.Again,justliketherestofmydaysofar,thecheerwasgoinggreat.Iraisedmylegforonelasttoetouch.RIIPPP!Ifeltmyjeanssplitdownthemiddleofmybackside.Ifroze.Ihadnoideawhattodobutstandstill.ThenIheardpeopleburstoutlaughing,andIsawthempointingatmytornjeans.Tryingtocovermyselfwithmyhands,Itriedtolaughtoo,butIfelttearsbegantowellupinmyeyes.注意：1.续写词数应150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme.______________________________________________________Paragraph1:Thatnight,afterthecheeratthefootballgame,IfoundRyan.____________________________________Problemswithyourwriting：Notfitinwellwiththegivensentences.没有衔接段首句。2.Overimagined，notreasonableorlogical.过度想象，结局虚幻，不合实际或逻辑。3.Nopositiveending.没有彰显正能量主题。4.Nodetaileddescriptionofmovemets,conducts,speech,feelings,environment.动作、行为、言语、环境、情感描写不够细致。5.Nouseofrhetoricaldevicesorotherwritingtechniques.不会用各种修辞手法。Problemswithyourwriting：原文解读不到位，导致续写文不对题或主题不清，主题没有彰显正能量。情节不合逻辑，不符实际，或缺少创新，言之无物。与段首句不衔接，上下文细节缺少连贯和回应。文风不一致，描写与叙述、对话与描写比例失调。动作、行为、言语、环境、情感细节描写不细致。不善于运用各种修辞手法。语言错误。时态、语态、大小写、标点符号、从句、分词等使用不准确。StepsforcontiuationwritingGuess

猜读段首句，抓关键词，猜故事内容读6要素，梳理故事发展情节、人物情感、主题文风整合猜测与阅读所获，明确主题思想、构思高潮与结局衔接段首句:新旧信息衔接原则写故事的高潮结局:人物的所听、所看、所思、所想、所说、所做的关键细节。体现人物情感，彰显故事主题。Read读Imagine思Continue续Write写Igrewupinasmalltownwhereelementaryschoolwasaten-minutewalkfrommyhouseandinanage,notsolongago,whenwechildrencouldgohomeforlunchandfindourmotherswaiting.Atthetime,Ididn’tconsiderthistobesoimportant,althoughtodayitcertainlywouldbe.Actually,ourlunchtimetogetherinthepastyearshadhadagreatinfluenceonmylifebeforeIrealizedit.OurlunchtimewhenIwasinthethirdgradewillstaywithmealways.Ihadbeenpickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakinglypractisedmylineswithme.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside.Sheexplainedpatientlythatsheneededanarratorandhadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.Herwords,kindlydelivered,stillhurtme,especiallywhenIsawmypartgotoanothergirl.Ididn’ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeforlunchthatday.Butshesensedmyunease,andinsteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtowalkintheyard.Itwasalovelyspringdayandtherosevine(藤)wasturninggreen.Underthehugetrees,wecouldseeyellowdandelions(蒲公英)appearingunexpectedlythroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithsmallamountsofgold.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyoneofthebushes.“IthinkI'mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,pullingablossomupbyallitsroots.“Fromnowon,we’llhaverosesinthisgarden.”Iimmediatelyprotested,“ButIlikedandelions.Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”Whattoread?Whatinformationtofocuson?2.Read读拉波夫（Labov,1927）叙事结构6要点。completions进展orientation指向abstract点题evaluation评议resolution结局coda回应概要总结：讲一个什么故事;可有可无背景：时间地点、人物环境等故事发展核心关键精彩点叙述者看法态度;主人翁内心世界;出现在任何位置核心矛盾的解决可有可无;That'sit.That'ttheendofthestory.;故事对本人的影响;凸显主题2.Read读whenwherewhowhathow叙事结构6要点，把握篇章结构记叙文6要素：5w1H梳理情节发展与人物情感猜测主题、把握文风WhyIgrewupinasmalltownwhereelementaryschoolwasaten-minutewalkfrommyhouseandinanage,notsolongago,whenwechildrencouldgohomeforlunchandfindourmotherswaiting.Atthetime,Ididn’tconsiderthistobesoimportant,althoughtodayitcertainlywouldbe.Actually,ourlunchtimetogetherinthepastyearshadhadagreatinfluenceonmylifebeforeIrealizedit.OurlunchtimewhenIwasinthethirdgradewillstaywithmealways.Ihadbeenpickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakinglypractisedmylineswithme.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside.Sheexplainedpatientlythatsheneededanarratorandhadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.Herwords,kindlydelivered,stillhurtme,especiallywhenIsawmypartgotoanothergirl.Ididn’ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeforlunchthatday.Butshesensedmyunease,andinsteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtowalkintheyard.Itwasalovelyspringdayandtherosevine(藤)wasturninggreen.Underthehugetrees,wecouldseeyellowdandelions(蒲公英)appearingunexpectedlythroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithsmallamountsofgold.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyoneofthebushes.“IthinkI'mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,pullingablossomupbyallitsroots.“Fromnowon,we’llhaverosesinthisgarden.”Iimmediatelyprotested,“ButIlikedandelions.Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”orientation背景，abstract点题，evaluation评议completions进展，evaluation评议Paragraph1:“Doyoumeanthateveryflowerhasitsownbeauty?”askedmymotherthoughtfully.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”Momsaid.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________\__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Resolution结局-----coda回应

completions进展-----climax高潮

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