广东省深圳市二模英语读后续写个人成长类-解除同学间的误会+讲义

读后续写原题目呈现：Ididn'tlikeDelsomuch.Healwayscalledmethenickname“Germy”,whichmeant“dirty”,insteadofmyrealname“Jamie”.Besides,hewasknownasatrouble-makerinschool.SowhentheheadteacherMr.SmithaskedDeltocometohisoffice,InaturallythoughtthatDelhaddonesomethingmeantosomeone.Throughthewindow,Icaughtsightofasmallerboycrying.Delseemedunhappy,too.Hedidnotreturntoclassthatday.Allofuswerediscussingwhathadhappenedtohim.Whatelsecouldsuchanannoyingboydo?“Hemusthavehittheboyandwassenthome,”Iwhisperedtomyfriends.Theireyeswidened.ItfeltgoodtoseethemsointerestedinwhatIsaid.Thenextmorning,thewholeschoolwastalkingaboutDelbeingexpelled(开除)forbeatingupakid.Iwassurprisedthatmyassumptionswerepassedonsoquickly.SowhenDelwalkedintotheclassroom,allthekidswereshocked.Thekidsnexttohimshiftedtheirdesksaway.“What’syourproblem?”Delasked.“Idon'twantyoutoattackme,”onekidsaid.Somelaughed.“Yeah,Imight,”saidDel.Icouldtellhewasjoking,butmanykidsthoughtheadmittedhedidbeatupsomeone.Duringrecess(课间休息),Deltriedtojointhekickballgame.“Neitherteamwantsyou,”oneoftheplayerssaid.“Why?”Delasked,lookingconfused.“Ialwaysplaywithyouguys.”Theyignoredhimandwentonplaying.Delsatbyhimselfwhiletherestoftheschoolenjoyedtheirrecessawayfromhim.Dellookedlonelyandsad,muchdifferentfrombefore.Istartedtofeelsorryforhim.Laterthatday,Ilearnedwhatreallyhappened.ThekidwasDel'slittlebrotherandhewascryingbecausetheirmotherfellillandwassenttohospital.IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.Istartedarumor(谣言).Paragraph1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.Paragraph2:NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecess.故事大意概括：“我”不喜欢Del，因为Del总是用贬义的昵称“Germy”称呼“我”，而不是“我”的真名Jamie。当Del被老师叫去办公室，“我”误以为Del又做了坏事，并且在学校里传播了这个谣言，导致Del被同学们排斥。后来，“我”发现真相：Del的弟弟因为母亲生病住院而哭泣，Del并没有做错事从P2得知，续写第一段主要描写“我”向Del道歉，并得到了他的原谅续写第二段主要写“我”做了哪些事来化解谣言对Del的影响。续写第一段思路：P1:

我看到Del独自坐着。衔接部分可以继续对Del进行描写，突显出他的伤心难过。然后用角色互动的方式来推动情节展开我：看到Del的失落，“我”感到内疚（情绪），“于是，走向Del（动作），道歉”Del:

听到“我”的道歉后，他的反应“有些吃惊，片刻后，还是原谅了我”我：看到Del的情绪变化“失落的情绪得到了缓和”续写第二段思路P2：“我”决定多做一些事。衔接部分应该是“我”开始做什么。所谓“造谣一张嘴，辟谣跑断腿”“我”要辟谣，需要先…,

再…

然后…

最后…“先找几个朋友说明谣言”然后“朋友们再去跟他们的朋友澄清”最后，真相逐渐扩散到整个校园升华下水文1P1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.Hisshoulderswereslumped,hiskneesdrawnuptohischest,andhisarmswrappedaroundthem.（感官细节描写，突显Del

的失落）IfeltapangofguiltasIrememberedhowquicklyIhadjudgedhimandspreadthatharmfulrumor.

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看到Del的失落，“我”为自己之前所做感到内疚）Takingadeepbreath,Iwalkedoverandsatdownbesidehim.

（动作链的使用；套句做了一点修改）"Hey,Del,"Istarted,“I'msorryabouteverything.Ishouldn'thavespreadthoserumorswithoutknowingthetruth.Iknownowthatyouwerejustworriedaboutyourbrotherandyourmom."

（道歉的内容，协同阅读）Del'seyeswidenedslightly,andforamoment,hejuststaredatme,asiftryingtoprocessmywords.（听到“我”的道歉后,Del的反应：感官细节）"Thanks,Jamie,"hesaidquietly,hisvoicetingedwithsurprise."Iappreciateyoutellingmethat.Iforgiveyou."

（Del回应我的道歉。）Ashespoke,Icouldseethetensioninhisshoulderseaseslightly,andhiseyessoftened,thecloudofsadnessliftingjustabit.

（道歉让Del心情好了些，但是这还不够，衔接P2）P2：NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecessended.Igathered

afewofmyfriendsandexplainedthattherumorsaboutDelwereuntrue.

（第一步）Together,

weapproachedtheotherkidsandsharedwhatwehadlearnedaboutDel'sbrotherandtheirmom.

（第二步）Slowly,

thetruthbegantosinkin,andthehostilitytowardsDelstartedtodissipate.

（我的行动起了作用）Bytheendofrecess,somekidsevenapologizedtoDelandinvitedhimtojointhenextkickballgame.

（具体化作用）升华Reflectingonthisexperience,Irealizedhowdamagingrumorscanbeandhowimportanttoseekthetruthandunderstandsomeone'scircumstancesbeforepassingjudgment.使用了较多课上所讲的细节描写，所以字数远超要求。不过，Highlight部分的描写，算是常用套句，值得背诵。下水文2Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.

Thesightofhisisolatedfigure

tuggedatmyheartstrings.

Ashamedandembarrassed,Itookadeepbreath,

approachedhiminchbyinch

andsatbesidehim.Atthesightofme,

hiseyebrownarrowed,

withamixtureofsurpriseandconfusion.I

loweredmyhead,murmuring,“Sorry,Del.ItwasIwhospreadtherumorthatyouhitthelittleboy.”Hiseyeswidenedinsurprise,Icouldfeelsomethinginhisvoice

soundedmorehurtthanangry.Butamomentlater,hepattedmyshouldergentlyandrepliedinasoftvoice,“It’sokay,Jamie.I’malsosorryforcallingyournickname.”

Itwasthefirsttimehe’dusedmyrealname.IwasdelightedthatIgothisforgiveness.(125词)NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.

I

gatheredmycourage,walkedupintothefrontandbeganto

callforothers’attention.

Allthekidsstoppedkickingtheballandexchangedconfusedlookswitheachother.

I

clearedmythroatandexplainedwhatactuallyhappened.Ifeltasenseofreliefwellingupinmyheartandsurgingthroughmeaftermyconfession.Muc